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Title: Chapter 9

Bruna is a jealous ho whom Journdan put in her place!!  Neymar is so freaking stupid that he makes my left eye twitch! !  This will be fun with Neymar seeing Journdan everyday on his turf!  Journdan don't play with David because you are angry at Neymar. I ain't happy with her either!! Good times are about to be had!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2014 04:25 am

Title: Chapter 9

That was good chapter.  It was nice, no real drama though Bruna/Bruno etc is about to be real ticked that she will be next to Neymar all of the time.  She had her nerve trying to come at Jourdan that way.  All of them are immature at this point.  I hope their is a rule about dating amongst players so she can get out of a relationship with any of them.  Wouldn't that be great, both David and Neymar are shut out d/t team rules.  Wonder how this will play out between the three.  I hope she doesn't get trampled because no matter how much the guy deserves it or is the biggest D, it is always the girl that gets tarred with the feathers.  In her naivete hope that doesn't happen to her.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 06 2014 11:19 pm

Title: Chapter 9

I hate Bruna! Really!!! Please do keep posting stories!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 06 2014 11:16 pm

Title: Chapter 8

Neymar is too, but he ain't to bright.  Being seen with woman rhat Jourdan thinks you were seeingwhen you sexed her up after telling that you supposedly care for her.  Really?! Mas estupido! !!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 06 2014 05:34 am

Title: Chapter 8

Jourdan should be upfront with her feelings, and admit to herself that she likes him.  It's a bit obvious, especially given that she gave up her virginity to the guy. 

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 06 2014 01:43 am

Title: Characters

Why did Neymar tell he had had sex with Jourdain?

Seems to be all about what Neymar wants or needs and David is just smoother with what he wants.  Neymar is not the brightest bulb in the box taking advice to use someone else to make J jealous.

J is kind of dim, too.  She enjoyed David's kiss, but had the nerve to be hurt about Bruna and N.  Maybe she should keep the bird (David) in hand and not bother with the one that has been in her bush (Neymar).  

Although i look forward to the updates, I am finding Neymar to be too much into looks--if J was crippled, he wouldn't give her a 2nd glance.  



Author's Response:

Neymar doesn't know her enough to talk about her personality. All he can go on right now is the intense attraction he feels for her that yes comes from her looks but also the fact that she isn't all over him like most of the girls he meets.

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2014 11:58 pm

Title: Chapter 7

Why is Jourdan so stupid?  I am really starting not to like her at all. That child is makimg my teeth itch and my left eye twitch! !  Using David is wrong but she's too busy running from her feelings for Neymar to care about David' s feeling. Yep that little girl is tap dancing on my last nerve!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2014 03:21 am

Title: Characters

I don't know where these characters are going to lead in the story... but so far I'm liking what I'm reading right now! The characters seem pretty realistic to me so far. I think, once I've read further in the story maybe the story line would thicken if not as it is right now! But I would love that you would keep writing the story because so far, I love it! Great work!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2014 01:57 am

Title: Chapter 7

Okay, I think she needs to slow down.  She doesn't know David.  Just because he isn't flashy like Neymar doesn't mean he doesn't do his own dirt as well.  He went from shy boy to assertive man too quick for him not to be a player underneath.  I think she needs to tell David that I want to be friends right now and then as time goes maybe, maybe progess to something more.  She can't flip flop like that.  She needs to talk to someone, not Alessandra, someone with some common sense about this situation.  She had an instant dislike for Neymar based upon what she saw, not who she knows.  Now to push him away she is looking at David.  Unfortunately, girls who have been sheltered or focused on one thing to the point of all else goes thru this late stage of adolescence.  Instead of getting multiple crushes out of the way when she was 12 and would have never considered having sex, just possibly kissing, she is going thru this stage right now and with more freedom, comes more serious stuff like losing her virginity while drunk.  Hope she grows up and doesn't do anything with David at all.  Isn't she only here for the tournament anyway.  Doesn't she go back home soon.  How coud she think about liking any of them unless she is planning to relocate.  She is international :)

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2014 01:44 am

Title: Characters

Wonder what Neymar did not want Bruna to disclose?

Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 11:52 pm

Title: Chapter 7

First Neymar and then the next day she is into David---hope she is not leaning toward being the team groupie aka jump off.  IMO, she is moving too damn fast.  Perhaps she should come clean with David, bc giving up the V card wasn't done lightly, even though she was drunk.  If she doesn't tell him, Neymar will in his own spoiled way.  

I am confused on who this girl is interested in, but does she even know?  I see David getting hurt. 

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 11:50 pm

Title: Chapter 7

Please update soon!!!! I love this story!!!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 11:31 pm

Title: Chapter 7

Well she should have thought about it before she jumped in to bed with him. Virginity means something to fewer and fewer girls these days. People just sleep with anyone. LOL 

Too early for me to say too much about the characters. The personalities of the characters are a little annoying so it's hard for me to really like any of them but it's different from what I usually read and that is a good thing. It's the age that is annoying (that is just an excuse anyway, some people are mature and some people just aren't regardless of age) they act more like 13 and 14 than older than 18. 

Interested in seeing the progression.

 

Best

Reviewer: Chocolate1Lover Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 10:41 pm

Title: Chapter 6

I see a lot of assumptions and misunderstandings in their future. 

Reviewer: CrimsonBlaze Signed [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 06:28 am

Title: Chapter 6

Right now, Neymar's son is the most mature person in this story! I hope they all grow up and start talking things out instead of just running off every three seconds. 

Reviewer: Kellbell Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 06:21 am

Title: Chapter 6

They're all driving me crazy! Immature kids playing adult games. 

Reviewer: Veronik Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 05:24 am

Title: Chapter 6

Wow, Neymar that was not cool. Bruna is bitch besides being beautiful what does she offer him?  Who is his baby's momma? Cool beans!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 04:44 am

Title: Chapter 6

Thx for updating again!!!

Reviewer: Color_me_shaaeee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 02:45 am

Title: Chapter 5

Distractingly unrealistic. I need Jourdan to start acting like a balanced adult who is capable of expressing herself and her feelings. She's behaving like a child. Right now Neymar actually has very little reason to like her as a person. Plus, his behavior is over the top too. Where's the balance?



Author's Response:

Neymar is 22 and Jourdan is 19. They are both young adults who are trying to find themselves. Not every adult is perfectly balanced and acts rational. Where would be the fun in that? I think that the characters are acting realistically for this story. Neymar is a man who is used to people bowing down to him so he's a little cocky and Jourdan doesn't believe that someone like Neymar could actually have genuine feelings for her.

Reviewer: bruja Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 01 2014 04:59 am

Title: Chapter 5

She had better not hide in the closet!

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 01 2014 04:11 am

Title: Chapter 5

I do hope that he Neymar is breaking up with Bruna. He son is sweetie pie!! Journdan is really working my last nerve!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 01 2014 02:01 am

Title: Chapter 4

I thought it would be David, but Neymar will do.  Did Chris put something in her drink?  Wonder if she is on the pill, bc no condom was used.  Looking forward to more.  She may want to have a talk with her best bud on her disappearing act and who keeps a bed in a club?



Author's Response:

Cristiano didn't put anything in her drink, Jourdan was just a little drunk. Not enough that she didn't know what she was doing, but enough that she didn't think of the consequences. And the club that they went to is A-list so the club management put bedrooms on the second floor for people who are too drunk to make it home and for hook-ups. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2014 07:59 am

Title: Chapter 4

Journdan went dry hump Cristiano the dance floor fo over truly humping Neymar.  I hope that she doesn't regret how.she lost her virginity. Cristiano makes my mouth water! 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2014 11:45 pm

Title: Chapter 4

I just started reading this story and I really enjoyed it!!!! Plz keep the updates coming !!!!

Reviewer: Color_me_shaaeee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2014 10:51 pm

Title: Chapter 3

Lawd that  man is hot!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2014 03:07 am



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