Title: Anger * Shame

Geez! Caleb's gotta stop being so mean to Grey! Her hating him for being an asshole is not a good look 



Author's Response:

It'll get better! ;)

Reviewer: Khamalani Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 08 2014 01:47 pm

Title: Anger * Shame

Caleb is a real piece of work. All he has to do is say how he feel instead of pushing the woman he 'claims' to love AND fuck her best friend! WTF?!! I don't get him at all.. SMH!

Great update, please post again and get Caleb's head out of his ass soon, LOL!!! :D



Author's Response:

Haha lol! Funny!

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 08 2014 08:39 am

Title: Anger * Shame

The grammar may not be the best, but the story is very good! Caleb is very conflicted, but somehow I believe that Grey is also going thru something.

 

 

 

 



Author's Response:

When you say grammar im using British slang so arse in Britain is ass in America basically. ........im using the dialect of the UK...... No grammar seems to be off. But thank you for your concern!

Reviewer: Sandra Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 08 2014 07:51 am

Title: Anger * Shame

aware I was getting used to the story!!!! it's soo good!!!

Reviewer: Keyajackson Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 08 2014 06:45 am

Title: Anger * Shame

Wow, interesting story so far! Caleb definitely has some issues and he needs to sort through them. Hope he and Grey can work it out.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 08 2014 06:43 am

Title: Anger * Shame

I really feel for Caleb.  This chapter was so full of emotion that at the end all I could think was "Wow".  He is suffering alone.  There is no one he can talk to about his feelings so he is suffering in silence.  I find it hard to believe that no one can pick up on the reason for his mood.  I know they have been apart but his parent's can't figure out anything, his best friend, no one.  Unfortunately Jenna just got used but her dream came true to be with Caleb probably at least once.  Happy he wasn't drunk enough to not use a condom, but that can be some nasty business messing around with her best friend who is bound to tell Grey the details or at least hint to her.  Is there anyway to undo an adoption?  Is it final?  As far as I am aware when it comes to legalese, nothing is ever truly black and white and a done deal.  Heck if a woman can come and contest a prenup and win, heck there is a lot of possibilities.  Maybe her parents never gave up their parental rights for the adoption to be legal or something.  I really want Caleb to have a happy ever after.  Waiting anxiously for the next chapter. 



Author's Response:

THANKS FOR YOUR LOVELY COMMENT!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 08 2014 06:21 am

Title: Jealousy

Supreb

Reviewer: Bain Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 08 2014 02:21 am

Title: Sister

What I mean is, your story seems to be based in the UK, where the type of relationship he's hankering after, is in fact illegal. For the purposes of the law, they were raised as siblings regardless of the biological "truth" of them not being related... That's why I ask, where are you taking this story?



Author's Response:

Honestly , i dont know lol its a taboo story and it is illegal in the U.s and UK. Ill see as i get to this point. Its fiction, however stuff like this does go on in real life we just dont know about it. So as the story progresses Im basically using my imagination when stuff like this actually occur and how it usually ends or begins.

Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 08:55 pm

Title: Jealousy

Hmmm. Where are you going with this?

Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 08:47 pm

Title: Jealousy

Aww... That flashback was too cute. I do feel for Caleb, but he needs to stop being a jerk and tell her how he feels. I loved the new post, it was too short. Lol! Again, great job and keep going :)

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 03:31 pm

Title: Sister

Grey is an adopted sister not biological them loving each other wouldn't be a problem.  Jenna is kinda dense Caleb is not interesting in you but he will use you for sex. Just make that you use a condom Caleb as you don't want that Jenna to get pregnant.  Is Grey back for good? Does she have any feelings at all for Caleb? I am looking forward to finding out the answers to my questions. l give this this story concept two thumbs up!!  More please!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for giving me some ideas! :3

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 01:10 pm

Title: Jealousy

Okay, does no one see this?  Is Grey really clueless and only see him as a brother, because sometimes it seems like she is laying it on thick.  I don't recall my kids saying brother or sister every other sentence.  Hmmm.  Can't wait for more.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 09:44 am

Title: Jealousy

Oh dearrrrrr! How awkward but I love it!

Reviewer: PetitteBelle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 08:37 am

Title: Sister

Ohhh... I feel like this story is going to be very good. I really like the plot and this chapter has me wanting more. Please keep going and I hope you post again soon.

 

Good job!! :D



Author's Response:

Lol Thanks!

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 07:24 am

Title: Sister

Excellent beginning to this story, waiting for update.



Author's Response:

I do updates for my short stories pretty quickly than my longer ones so youre in the clear lol

Reviewer: Bain Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 05:25 am

Title: Sister

Promising. I am trying to wait patiently for the next update. I guess I don't have a choice.  Good start! 



Author's Response:

Dont worry its a short story i update those more quickly lol

Reviewer: Khamalani Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 05:24 am



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