Oh wow.!! Love this.
Want more. Hope it doesn't take too long
Reviewer: Sarai Anonymous
[Report This]Date: January 02 2015 06:05 am
I'm has glad Addy has found a friend in Sasha. Carla and her mom are a bitch. For all their family ties they have done nothing but wear her down emotionally.
Reviewer: juno Signed [Report This]Date: January 02 2015 04:03 am
Sasha being included is the only reason that I'm reading this story. It seems good, but I agree with some of the other readers about the similar storyline (that is if Adaline begins to let the harsh words of others effect the way she feels about herself more than she already does/has).
I don't care what anyone says. I don't think that stories featuring Black characters HAVE to involve 'real-life' issues regarding the Black community, because everyone is different and not everyone can relate to stories like that. I'm an example ('dark-skinned,' PROUD of it, 'coiled'-curly hair, dark brown eyes, round nose, thick lips, curvy body, etc. yet I've always loved each of those features, and until I turned 18 I didn't even know that there were actually people that didn't feel the same way).
Hopefully Sasha helps Adaline not just realize her own worth, but also encourages her to do as she did and discover the origin of any problem she has so that she can understand why she feels a certain way and prevent it from happening again. I liked that aspect of the other story, and I think that it would serve this story well!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. However, I would like to say that I never stated that stories featuring Black characters have to involve 'real-life' issues. However, I enjoy reading and writing stories that do and find that they are equally important to stories that don't have such issues as their main focus. I'm happy to hear that you are an example of a proud Black woman but at the same time, your experience is just that, your own and there are many women who have struggled with their identity and ignoring their struggle would be to ignore the larger system at work that has created their feelings of low self-worth (you should also acknowledge the privilege you have being an individual who supposedly has never doubted the beauty of her features because not everyone has been so lucky).
I don't know if you read my note to reviewers who complained about the similar plotline but I was very adamant that Adaline is not facing the same issues as Sasha. She does not have a self-esteem problem. She is proud of who she is, but having pride in yourself does not mean that you are impervious to the outside world. She faces doubts just like any other human being because she is not just struggling with her identity as a Black woman in a primarily White, upper-class community but as a disabled woman who was also a victim of sexual violence. I find that many of the reviewers who complained of a similar plotline failed to notice those nuances in Adaline's identity. They were very quick to see a light v. dark-skinned difference between Carla and Adaline that was never the focus of the chapters. Any struggle Adaline has with being a dark-skinned woman stems from how others perceive her, not how she sees herself. There is a difference between private and public esteem which is what many readers seem to be conflating.
However much our opinions may differ, I hope you continue reading and enjoy the story. Again, thank you for your review! I truly enjoy having these conversations with my readers! Happy New Year!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 02 2015 02:05 am
Carla is so nasty and rude. If she keeps up with her negative attitude her marriage won't last. She's already unsatisfied with her husband. It won't take long for him to figure out she thinks she settled and he'll leave her. I really hope Adaline moves out of that toxic household soon for the sake of her sanity. I'm glad that Sasha will be an ally because Adaline will need it. I have a feeling that with Sasha as a friend Victoria might actually approve but then again, maybe not. I can't wait for the romance to begin. Loved the update.
Reviewer: Happy2bNappy Signed [Report This]Date: January 02 2015 01:12 am
Thank you so much for thr update. I have been checking.
Because Carla is marrying for the wrong reasons, money and status, does not mean happiness. She believes she has her husband wrapped around her fingers. She is too selfish. I think Carla is going to be shocked and realize her marriage is not going to as SHE PLANNED. She is all about "me." What is her husband like? What does he see in Carla? Why did he marry Carla outside of her looks.nwhat did he ant in a wife?
I believe Dominic eyes are going to be open to see Adaline is the one for him when his eyes are open to see that Dina is not who and what he really is looking for. Who knows he may know already but is scared.
Sasha recognizes herself in Adaline. Sasha will be a good support to Adaline. Hopefully she will be that guide for Addy to direct her as to when to back off and when to pursue.
Hopefully you are close to completing you thesis, and ready to give us another update to ths wonder story.
Reviewer: Eyes to see Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 02 2015 01:06 am
I think it's marvelous. Great start. I am going to hold out on verdict for Carla and Victoria right now. I hope their attitudes will get better after the wedding.
Thank you for sharing Dom's story loving it already :)
Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]Date: January 01 2015 11:54 pm
Carla will always be unhappy--karma. Can't wait til Adaline tell Victoria she is outta there!
Dom doesn't want Carla, but he is still hung up on Dina and that is what is going to cause Ada more pain. Men can be so slow sometimes.
I think Ada feelings for Dom was brought to light by Carla to embarass her and Dom was not feeling Ada like that. Unless something changes Dom is still not feeling Ada in a romantic light--he has her in the friend zone. Something is going to have to happen for him to see her as a woman, a woman he would be interested in.
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: January 01 2015 10:24 pm
Carla needs to cstch a fatal disease and die! Looking forward to Adaline's metamorphosis, she deserves happiness and love.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: January 01 2015 09:34 pm
YAY! awesome way to start the new year! i LOVED Sashas story!
Reviewer: kaci Signed
[Report This]Date: January 01 2015 09:32 pm
Love the new chapter!!!! Can't wait for more!!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 01 2015 07:42 pm
Thanks for the update! I see the makings of a great friendship between Adaline and Sasha. Can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: Annienathanson Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 01 2015 07:06 pm
Maybe this is the beginning of something beautiful😍
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 29 2014 12:43 am
Please update soon. I can't wait to see what is going to come into Adaline's life. She deserves some happiness.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 28 2014 11:43 pm
Adaline is a wallflower as well. Hopefully she will be noticed as Sasha.
She has a lot to offer, honesty, love, passion, and trust.
I can see Dominic with Adaline. He was very insightful in his brother's Dmitri's situation.
Update soon!!!
Reviewer: Insight Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 10 2014 02:16 am
This story seems to be as intriguing as "Sasha." I can't wait for the events to unfold.
Reviewer: Good start Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 03 2014 06:44 pm
As usual loved the chapter. I can only speak for myself and say that I love reading about flawed characters because everyone on this entire planet is flawed and there's something or lots of something's about themselves they don't like and that's why plastic surgery is billion dollar industry. But to go deeper than that, colorism is a REAL serious issue and anyone who wants to pretend it doesn't exist, that there isn't a certain level of privilege that comes with having lighter skin and "good hair" (hate that phrase btw) then they must be living in a cave somewhere. And if we can't come to a place and read stories that deal with this issue and can't talk about it in social media without people trying to police what we can discuss and what's relevant, then where then are we supposed to shed some light on this topic that many folks don't even think is a problem?
So I commend you for weaving a tale about this. Sure it'd be nice to live in a world where all people saw were people and not colors, but that unfortunately isn't reality. Reality is, people don't see dark skinned black women as beautiful. The reality is there is anti-blackness everywhere you turn. The reality is a woman can see her flaws and love herself anyways, or see her flaws and feel bad about herself but continue on through life. If Adaline was already at a place of total acceptance then there wouldn't be much story to tell. Or the story would be about her regression into an insecure woman with a disability who has to find her way back to the top. In either case, I'm down for the ride because I can tell you, until your story I've NEVER come across a story of a dark skinned black woman with a hearing disability being in love with a white man, and him possibly loving her back. Never, and I thank you for writing it!
Reviewer: Lapis Love Signed [Report This]Date: December 02 2014 09:42 pm
I enjoyed the story Sasha." It seems I may enjoy this story as well.
Ms. Carla needs a realiy check somewhere in this story to let her know she is not all that. So does her aunt.
Hopefully Adaline will become all she wants to become and more, regardless of her so call handicap. Sometimes our pains/handicaps can take us to great places and bring great people in our lives.
Please complete this story and update soon!!!!
Reviewer: Growing pains Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 19 2014 09:34 pm
Happy to see this story and am looking forward to getting into it. I like that you gave the heroine so any issues, mentally and physically. Flawed characters have always been my favorite types of stories. I hate perfect people...in stories lol
Reviewer: got2luvmel Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 16 2014 01:55 pm
Seems my review for ch 2 got lost....
Author's Response:
I'm sorry to hear that. I haven't deleted any responses . If you like, you can write your comments again. I'm always open to any and all reviews! :-)
Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]Date: November 03 2014 05:15 pm
Great start, loving the character of the heroine!
Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]Date: October 30 2014 12:49 pm
The day when we as a community can stop this obsession over 'light' vs. 'dark' won't come soon enough. The fact that one of these reviewers has the nerve to refer to Adaline as 'imperfect' compared to the others is exactly why stories like this annoy me. They only promote this type of thinking by implying that if a girl looks a certain way she must think about herself a certain way. It's sad that on a website that is supposed to promote coming together as women of color, most of these authors focus on writing stuff like this. Smh. This is not the website I thought it was. No hate, because most of you are great authors, but I'm tired of the same ole same ole. That is all.
Reviewer: Guest Anonymous [Report This]Date: October 27 2014 03:19 pm
Good start. I'm interested...
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed [Report This]Date: October 27 2014 01:13 am