Interesting... I know this is going to be full of twists and turns.
Reviewer: KeiKei Signed [Report This]Date: July 22 2016 05:06 am
Good update...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: June 12 2016 06:54 am
Thank you for updating this chapter. Hoping Nina realized she needs help.
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous
[Report This]Date: March 17 2016 03:31 am
It's good to see Nina able to exact a little revenge on Yuri even a smail amount...how was she expected to do her job if she didn't get high...how would she avoid blowing her cover...Yuri didn't know she was an agent...to him she was just a prostitute and expected to do as he asked...Brandon definitely got high during the mission so it makes no sense that they expected different from Nina during her time with Yuri...somehow they expected her to balance getting high to keep her cover with staying clean enough to do her job...quite a hard feat to accomplish it seems...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: March 16 2016 06:24 am
Not a troll...I'm a member and a regular reader...I typically try to save my comments for authors that I really think are good and want to support them...just sayin'...and I was honestly trying to offer support...reviews should do just that offer support and constructive criticism to encourage you to hone your craft...even if you write for yourself, I would think it still helps to have an audience enjoy your work...but maybe that's just me...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: March 16 2016 05:23 am
Don't want your story...just telling you how I see it...who says I want puppies and kittens...it's just hard to read a story that is 100% dark without having some kind of payoff...the payoff coulb be nailbiting suspense or character growth or it could just be shock and horror...but it would make sense for the story to go somewhere...I'm only trying to offer constructive criticism so don't mind me...delete the story for all I care...just trying to help and support...
Author's Response:
Not sure if trolling or nah.......anyway, I hope you continue reading. :-)
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed
[Report This]Date: March 16 2016 04:47 am
Hey, I'm glad you finally responded to one of my reviews...you chose very dark and difficult subject matter...I think now that Yuri is neutralized you can spend time really focusing on the story as I originally thought it would be...Nina's descent further into darkness because I think with this mission over (Yuri is caught) that she won't be able to give up the drugs...she will use drugs to hide the pain from the scars she bears from the mission...Maxim and Brandon will help her deal with her pain...as Nina descends further into drug dependency, Maxim and Brandon try their best to pull her out, especially Maxim since he would feel so at fault for her condition...now you have the responsibility for how this plays out on the pages but you can do it...you started out with very good intentions to do an original piece of work...don't give up as I do like the story...but we need to see some light...in the process of watching Nina bring down Yuri, did either Maxim or Brandon (or both) develop feelings for her...what will they do as she spirals out of control...what about Nina's place in the agency...those are just a few suggestions...I'll be sad if you can't finish but I understand if you lost your muse...all the best...
Author's Response:
Hi
You know, before I saw this...I was considering giving the story to you...you know, maybe help you by giving you your first story on here, I don't know, maybe you have more time to write it than I do. But then I thought, nah. I'm gonna gonna continue this. It's a good stress reliever for me. Now, I realize that the subject matter may be dark, and I realize that's not everyone's cup of tea, but...maybe a story that's mostly "doom and gloom" isn't for you....and that's okay. It's a very triggering subject and if reading a story like this with only a little darkness mixed in with puppies and kittens and rainbows is your thing, do you. Maybe you can write a similar story and I'd be happy to review it, once it's on here.
Best, mocasoul
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: March 14 2016 07:28 pm
Powerful and moving. I hope Nina get help.
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: March 05 2016 05:24 pm
A sedative has to be given intravenously to have a more rapid effect...Nina should have know since she just hit Yuri with the syringe where she could that the effect would take longer to manifest...good story still...I'm happy that Yuri is neutralized but it would be good to see this story really mean something for Nina and the other characters instead of the constant abuse suffered over the past 16 chapters...will Nina be able to leave the agency now...will she still use drugs to numb her pain...and what of Nina and Maxim...I really hope you will delve further into the relationships between these characters...looking forward to more...
Author's Response:
Honestly...I'm thinking of deleting this story...I was trying to get some suggestions of how to handle the direction of this story by looking at examples in your stories, but...anyway, thanks for reading and I'll try fix the issues.
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: March 05 2016 01:25 pm
Amazing writing, I hope Nina will come out saftely, because I believe Yuri is playing with Maxism and Nina.
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: February 06 2016 05:54 pm
Nina kissed Maxim...the thin line between love and hate...it came out of nowhere, but she he's familiar and she knows his demons...resolve the Yuri case soon, because darkness without some light won't survive...good to see even a little progress...I still like the book as I want to see how you resolve the conflicts...will Nina survive...she could be killed trying to neutralize Yuri...looking forward to more...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: February 06 2016 03:03 pm
Looks as though Nina is getting a bit caught up in this lifestyle.. I also am starting to like Brandon, and it must've been pretty embarassing getting a hard on like that. Maybe there will be a triangle between Nina, Brandon, and Maxim in the future?
Reviewer: iswearimhot Signed [Report This]Date: December 15 2015 09:48 pm
I understand Nina's hatred for Maxim...Nina is really getting hooked...bug to what end...this story seems stuck but I am really interested because I see the conflict evolving to Maxim needing to.save Nina but somehow they will need each other...I am still reading to see where it goes...it's tough subject matter but original...good job with difficult material...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: December 14 2015 06:30 am
I hope Nina get out of this alive. Supreb story as usual.
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: September 26 2015 05:20 pm
The story did not progress in this chapter, though I'm glad Nina told Brandon about Maxim...dude has lost his way, I think...glad you are continuing the story...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: September 26 2015 06:30 am
So glad you updated this story. I must say I am excited that we saw anew dynamic with Nina and Maxim. Can't wait for the next update! Please let it not be for too long.
Reviewer: liltay550 Signed [Report This]Date: September 07 2015 06:18 pm
Brilliant story and some people may trouble dealing with the harsh reality of this novel. This is what writing is about. Please continue at your leisure.
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: September 07 2015 05:20 am
You don't have many reviews for this book, and I think the reader only getting doom and gloom with little hope of payoff steers readers away. If the reader is allowed some hope or a little light along the way, it would maybe keep us more invested. The story is written to seem as if Nina has no honest purpose or power in this mission other than what is between her legs. She doesn't seem to really have any training as an agent that will help her in this mission. Her colleagues are no different from Yuri and his thugs. They all play to win no matter the cost. So why do I read? Because I'm trusting you as a woman of intelligence and integrity to have a vision and purpose that will ultimately uplift Nina and maybe she will save Maxim. I just see an author dealing with deep, dark subjects to show that though tears come and pain endures for a time, joy can come...if not what really is the purpose...somehow the universe balances the perversion even if all don't see it...but that's me being hopeful...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: September 07 2015 04:32 am
Brillant writing!!!!
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 11 2015 07:29 pm
They don't seem to be making much progress but I would think such cases take a lot of time to build so criminals don't go free. I feel for Nina and understand her reasons for wanting to leave the agency. I'm thinking Maxim hit her to leave a visible mark to keep Nina from being sold...good thinking on his part...I'm glad Nina didn't have drugs, though escaping through them seems to make the pain of her situation bareable..an agent would need immense preparation for an assignment like Nina's...did she get it...somehow I don't think so...then again maybe there was no way to be fully prepared...I hope you hang in there with this book...you are doing a good job with very difficult subject matter...
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: August 11 2015 01:48 pm
To hell with Maxmim and Yuri; both are monsters, and Maxmim doesn't even know it. Exactly what has this team learned, other than Yuri is kidnapping, selling, raping and killing girls?
Screw the agency, I think Nina needs to get over expecting help from Max/Brandon and free those girls on her own. I also think she can torture Yuri and get the info she needs from him. Right now all Nina is becoming is an unpaid piece for Yuri and anybody else he wants to have her.
There is no chemistry between Nina and Max--he can't punch and kick her and then expect all is gravy. Nina needs to go rogue, and perhaps it is Max who will need rescuing from the Dangerous Descent.
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: July 17 2015 03:20 pm
This mission doesn't seem to be getting anywhere to me as Nina gets only more abused. Even Maxim abuses her to keep cover. That sucks for her. At least she acknowledged the threat the drug use is to her possibly blowing her cover. Do agents get counseling once an assignment is done? They need it! This story is only dark with no light. I hope at some point there is a payoff in stopping the monster that is Yuri.
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: July 17 2015 12:35 pm
I'm loving your story. I do feel sorry for her, but I just wish she would get it together before she ruins the mission and becomes a drug addic. She is an agent and a soldier; she should have more well power and be stronger than the other girls. Update soon thanks
Reviewer: Shanee Signed [Report This]Date: July 01 2015 07:30 am