I am actually ok with taking Walter and Wendy out becasue I didn't really like the idea of one of the main characters getting hurt due to pettieness. Also while the way you had wrote it that the abusive baby daddy was taken out early, it would cause that tension that would be removed from the removal of Wendy and Walter. Love that you are coming back to this story. I also saw that someone suggested that Wendy's little girl be adopted by Nate and Eden, I like that too so that Solomon could have a sibling and that little girl could be raised without hate.Reviewer: Alixermixer Signed [Report This]
Date: June 16 2016 01:55 am
What was wrong with the story line as is?
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Date: June 15 2016 10:57 pm
I think the story was going great before. Imo not really feeling the rewrite, but it's your story... look forward to reading either wayReviewer: Jordy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 15 2016 07:43 pm
I like your story as is, but our girl needs to stand up to Wendy at least once. Maybe Wendy and Walt can be taken out, leaving the little girl to be adopted by Nate and Eden.
If you do revise, perhaps Wendy should not be pregnant when she drowns--losing two children would totally devastate anybody. A pregnant woman running from an abuser would have to a lot of work bringing this guy back to wanting to live. Just take Wendy
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2016 04:38 pm
18 months is a bit old for first words, as babies begin babbling/cooing within the first few weeks of life.Reviewer: Lovely Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 15 2016 03:21 am
Love it and the upcoming changes. Just an FYI. Sailors are Navy. Marines. are Marines. My Marine friend would take offense to being called a Sailor.Reviewer: Ellie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 15 2016 12:22 am