Reviews For A Wrong Turn...
Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.2)

I have been following this story, because it is so well written.  Also, I like the way they are slowly finding out more and more about one another; it's like us outsiders are looking at a hidden society, that may not be so bad. 

Even though I didn't like her calling him daddy, the way you cleverly brought to light a way for her not to was pretty good.

Elias is not one to play with and he is just as lonely as Abby. I hate when she hurts his feeling.  Abby is lonely and I think this trip was her plan to see some of the world before accepting what she thinks is her fate...to just exist, not live.

I can't wait till she has a conversation with her grandma and I would not trust that librarian.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the in-depth feedback! This writing stuff is hard but I am really enjoying it and learning as I go. I know the material isn't everyone's cup of tea but I am trying to make the character reactions realistic-ish.  World-building has been hard as well but fun in the way that there is so many ways to take it. Pure fiction...sigh

Eli is definitely lonely and so is Abby.  He may have great feeelings for her but he is not one to play with as you mentioned.  She is still confused so she lashes out.  As far as the trip goes...have you been reading my notes?  lol... I am going to go more in-depth with the both of them... We will hear from her grandmother soon...

And never trust a librarian!  (a small joke from the tv show Parks and Recreation!)

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 14 2020 04:33 am

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.2)

Brillant!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading a leaving a review Bain!

Reviewer: Bain Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 14 2020 01:43 am

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.2)

I've been waiting patiently for an update and I LOVED this chapter! i want to learn more about these people.  I wonder what Abbys grandmother would think of Elias?



Author's Response:

Hey, thank you so much for reading!  You will definitely find out so stay tuned!

Reviewer: Halo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 14 2020 01:16 am

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.2)

It's a town full of crazy people .



Author's Response:

Haha...Yes...except Miss Seraphine!  She's only a little crazy... Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 13 2020 03:27 pm

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

Don't belittle your work. That's first and foremost. If you're enjoying the writing. I'm enjoying the reading. 

Girl! You dropped a bomb on us with Elias? Unit? Was he military? Is his potential other Jas...Jasmine(?) 

I need more stat!!! LOL! 



Author's Response:

Lol...Thank you so much! I've really appreciated your feed back and am taking it to heart.  Keep reading to find out... *cackles mischeviously*

Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed [Report This]
Date: June 04 2020 10:29 pm

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

All of these people are crazy.



Author's Response:

Oh yeah...lol. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 28 2020 12:55 am

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

I am loving the little snippets in to their backgrounds!  I think Abby is in trouble again lol  This story isn't trash at all please continue



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Reviewer: Halo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 27 2020 08:18 pm

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

This chapter hits home on so many levels.It's not how we came into this world, it's what we do when we are in it😀 Abby got to learn that everyone in that town is related in some way😂😂 I love her thinking though, the wheels are always turning...Elias too!

Author's Response:

THANK YOU!!!  Are you reading my ideas on my computer?  I plan on using that concept LOL!  The wheels are definitely turning and soon she'll HAVE to make a choice... Stay safe lady!

Reviewer: Blessed Soul Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 27 2020 12:35 pm

Title: Abby heads out...

This has got to be the most intriguing story I've read thus far. Please don't stop and continue the story . Give it an ending please.



Author's Response:

Oh my goodness! Thank you so much!  I actually got the original idea from reading GOT.  I am doing my best to be dilligent about updates.  Thank you for the review! Stay safe!

Reviewer: Diana Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 27 2020 04:51 am

Title: Abby heads out...

I cannot WAIT till the next chapter! This story is so good. I always thought the "daddy" term was weird, especially after seeing the rkelly documentaries. It in no way deters me from reading though. Stay encouraged and please keep up the great work! 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! And Yikes! RKelly huh?  That makes me see it a lot differently...lol... That gives me something to think about!

Reviewer: Ann Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 27 2020 04:17 am

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

Great chapter!!! Please update soon!!! I read your note and I would hope that by now people are reading the story that want too. Your warnings were posted day one. Please do not let anyone stop you from expressing your creativity!!! There are plenty of bubble gum stories for people to read if they want too!!!

Keep up the good work!

I am here for the ride!!!! I love this couple!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading!  I just don't want to offend anyone but it's...mildly frustrating.  I appreciate your review and I do plan to tell a happier story.  Stay tuned!

Reviewer: PurpleIsBest Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 25 2020 04:56 am

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

i think your story is great! I've been waiting for updates and checking back pretty frequently and you didn't disappoint. I can't wait to see how this is going to come together. Hope you stay safe!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I will try to be more dilligent about updating!  Stay safe and stay tuned!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 24 2020 08:21 pm

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

I was so happy to see the update. How did Abby think that lady wasn't going to know Eli? I thought it was smart and funny that she asked for the last name before asking for help. I wonder what's going to happen next. I hope she gets to talk to her grandma soon.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading!  I am trying to be somewhat disciplined with my updates.  We will hear from Gran soon!  Stay safe!

Reviewer: Drea Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 24 2020 06:04 pm

Title: Abby has a day out...(pt.1)

Abby! Girl you gotta be quicker than that !! Poor baby doesn't know how to feel. Honestly I don't even know how to feel for her. Another great chapter as always and the plot thickens even more. Can't wait for another update. 



Author's Response:

She is so torn!  Her whole life has been indecision.  She will be forced to make a decision soon! Thank you so much for reading and please stay safe! 

Reviewer: Indigo_bluee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 24 2020 06:01 pm

Title: Abby gets punished...

I can't wait for the next chapter! This is such a captivating story and you're an incredible writer! So excited for this to continue :)



Author's Response:

Hey! Thank you so much!  I know it's a little different and off-kilter so thanks for hanging! Stay safe!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 18 2020 06:27 am

Title: Abby runs...

This action sequence is so good and suspenseful! 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

Reviewer: Halo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 12 2020 01:01 pm

Title: Abby starts to suspect...

My heart clenched when reading this! I think deep down Abby knew but she was blinded by the charm of Elias and the town.

Reviewer: Halo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 12 2020 12:59 pm

Title: Abby gets punished...

Still reading, still hate the daddy bit it just throws me out of the story, but I can't wait for the next update.

I'm still not sure if I can root for this relationship. It's looking like some stockholm syndrome to me at this point. I would like to see more character development. We are getting it from Abby, but I'm not so sure I could say the same of Elias. 

I'm enjoying the introduction of new characters. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  I don't plan for the story to be too long but I wanted to be realistic-ish in the development of Elias.  I don't think he would be so quick to change just yet.  While I do think part of what Abby is experiencing is some Stockholm Syndrome, she also is afraid to admit latent feelings for him that she had for him before.  I believe he represents an order and structure she has never had before.

 

Thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12 2020 12:58 pm

Title: Abby gets picked up...

I think these two have good chemistry here! 

Reviewer: Halo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 12 2020 12:57 pm

Title: Abby makes her first stop...

Had to come back and read through again! Very good!

Reviewer: Halo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 12 2020 12:55 pm

Title: Abby gets punished...

This is different, but I am liking it.  I don't know if I want Abby to stay or go ol



Author's Response:

Thanks for the read and review.  Yeah I promise it won't get too dark...

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 08 2020 09:31 pm

Title: Abby gets punished...

Abby's not fighting it anymore. This is the most excitement she had in all her life. Nice😀

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the review!  She still has some fight left but she is definitely overwhelmed...

Reviewer: Blessed Soul Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 07 2020 03:58 pm

Title: Abby gets punished...

Wow!!! Really loving this!



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: Halo_ Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 06 2020 10:55 am

Title: Abby heads out...

great start

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 06 2020 05:03 am

Title: Abby gets punished...

I feel so bad!! I want to like this story so much but the forcing her to call him daddy all the time no matter what is a bit offputting and her all of a sudden wanting to be there with him even though theres really not been any emotional connection/growth with them just makes it feel very stockholm-ish and not in a good way. 

Still here to see it through though. The writing itself is great, just not really sure about this plot...



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  This is a dark story with dark thems but I do plan on giving them sometime to develop their relationship.

Reviewer: s_k689 Signed star [Report This]
Date: May 05 2020 07:48 pm



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