I'm really liking Sunshine in this story. She's backed into a corner against her will, but she's going to live with it on her terms. That girl has a great head on her shoulders (must get that from her mother). Great idea getting her brother away from her father. She may have to make a deal with the devil to do it, but at least her brother won't get much of a chance to absorb his father's maturity (or lack thereof).
As for her father...*sigh* i see he's adding alcoholism to his list of addictions. Sunshine made her demands at the right time.
Reviewer: Leo Princess Signed [Report This]Date: 07/12/09 04:13 am
Hey, I came here on a rec from karynthia, and this was really good. My only niggle is the fact that you keep changing tenses (from present to past) and it throws me out a bit. But I liked it, the Russian mobster, and Sunshine being good, but not a Sue if it makes sense.
Reviewer: jazzypom Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/12/09 03:54 am
i like sergei
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[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 01:48 am
Wow I don't know who I'm cheering for. Sergei is young and unknowledgable, but also sweet. Then there is Nikolai, the mob boss himself. He shows the ablity to be loving. Oh who am I shitting, I'm rooting for Nikolai. Keep up the good work and just don't kill Sergei or Nikolai.


[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 01:29 am
I like the way this story is developing. Sunshine is learning to stand up for herself, even to Nikolai. A strong-minded heroine. Sergei is still a sweetheart. And though Nikolai can be a bad ass, I like him so far. Anatoly is trying to put Darla in his pocket or vice versa. Will that effect Nikolai and Sunshine's relationship? And I also like how Sunshine thinks of her brother's future. Is there anything she can do for dad. She will be gone and so will Benji. Her father is already drinking. If she doesn't think of something, he may drink himself to death.
Good story...great Update. Can't wait for more....
Nyeesha
Reviewer: Nyeesha Signed



[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 01:17 am
I am so loving this story. I love Sunny she is so smart, witty, and a take charge kind of girl.
I like that she went in and made her demands for herself and her brother. I seriously think that Nikolai could fall in love with her not just want to own and possess her but I also think that Sergei is falling for her and therefore lies a problem it would seem.
I see that Nikolai has good qualities and I am drawn to his strongness...his Alpha but Sergei is so sweet and observous and would be a very attenative boyfriend not saying that Nikolai would but then again maybe he would because he is a busy man.
I know that Priscilla is going to love Sunny and I love that Sunny asked for her own room, asked for him to take her on a date to the opera and asked the any gifts that come from him come from him truly and not his flunkies. I like that she demands her props she is doing this for her family well her brother and her future why not do it on her "FEET" I love how smart and determined she is for such a young age but she has had to be with the kind of father she has.
I hope that she gets to see her brother on a regular base like for x-mas and during other holidays and if things turn out better at the fortress Nikolai calls home.
Thank you for the update I so need another one please.
Reviewer: Thundakat Signed



[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 01:01 am
ok i'm glad she stand her ground with him most girl like me proably skaing in her boots but she let him know who she is and what she expects. very well written now i see hot mobster can be sweet when he wanted to be i think she brings that out on him and it nice to see that. it just sad what she going thu with her father you think he wise up a little but then bam he does something crazy. thanks for the updated. love the story i'm adddicted to it lol.
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed



[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 12:43 am
I liked that she set the terms for their arrangement, and she's making him work for her. LOL I'm so confused as to what is going to happen. It's clear that Sergei is going to fall for her, but unclear as to whether it will be reciprocated. I get the feeling that there's a part of Sunny that likes Nikolai, then again she could also fall for Sergei, since they will be spending lots of time together in the future.
I'm 99.9% sure that Nikolai's going to fall in love with her, and if that happens things will get truly interesting. Although, maybe if she does fall in love with Sergei and Nik finds out, he may just let them go. I only say that, because he's a man who's never been in love and if he learns to love, then maybe he will stick to his word leave the light in Sunny's life. If kills Sergei then he will kill Sunny.
This story is all kinds of interesting, and I really like the pace. Although if you're not going to update everyday, youy may not want to give every miniscule detail.
Thanks for updating.
Reviewer: Cholyn Signed



[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 12:20 am
I love this story soo much so far. I do not want Sunny to lose the attitude that she has. I love how you did something different with this story. I love how you took the main character and made them use the power that they normally have over the person who wants them, instead of making Sunny bend to his will, you let her see the light at the end of the tunnel.
I was wondering if Nikolai is her lover or Sergei? The person who she is going to fall in love with?
Reviewer: Rapture Anonymous



[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 12:17 am
I like it and I love how she looks out for her brother first!!
Reviewer: indycoolchick Signed



[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 12:15 am
Wonderful update. Seems Nicolai may already be a little in love with Sunny. Already he is making concessing for her that he has not made with his other women.
As for Anatoly, I don't trust me.I feel like he's plotting and waiting for Nicolai to slip up.
Reviewer: juno Signed



[Report This]Date: 07/12/09 12:14 am
Just read all of the chapters and I have to say for you first time all were very good and highly entertaining. Loved what Pirsical said to Darla and her slapping Darla!! Loved What Sunny said to her father, when he said how long instead of dont go. Sunny has spunk and so smart for someone so young. I see the short time she had her mother that she taugh Sunny a lot!! I want to hate Sunny's dad but I think he is doing enough of that himself.So far you are doing an oustanding job and I have a feeling it will continue to be a very good read.
Reviewer: Paw Anonymous



[Report This]Date: 06/12/09 11:41 pm
Sunny is such a strong girl. More important, her mother who is no longer alive, gave her daughter alot of wisdom in the short time she had with her. I love that knowing she could not avoid going to Nikolai she decided that she would go on her terms. The terms were so smart. It looks like Pop is taking up the bottle full time and getting Benji out of the house as much as possible was awesome. I thought Nik was falling for her in earlier chapters, but I'm sure is is now. I love this story. Nice update.
Reviewer: Lovelybears Signed [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 11:29 pm
Love the story. Looking forward to reading more. I love the character development. Great job.
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[Report This]Date: 06/12/09 10:54 pm
Ms. Sunshine is no push over weakling..I like that very much. She may be 18 but she is more mature than may 30yr olds. She knows he wil take her and it will either be on her terms or his..I like that she is making it on her terms.
I think Nik is so going to fall in love with our Sunshine but I also think Segei will also..it will be interesting to see who will win her heart and what they will be willing to do to capture it!
I love how you are weaving this story sweetie...it is excellent!!I can barely wait for more!!
Reviewer: neneburge Signed



[Report This]Date: 06/12/09 10:41 pm
Awesome update. Wow, Sunny sure making some demands. I think Nikolai likes her more than he's admitting to himself, seeing that he gave into them. Sergei also seems to like her but I'm hoping only as a friend for now as he seems innocent himself. Sunny sure is standing up for herself and making sure her brother is taken care of. Hope Nikolai can appreciate that. Who knows??? Maybe Sunny can make a positive influence on Nikolai's life and show him how to love deeply.
Reviewer: baha_malo Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 10:38 pm
This has become one of my all time TC favorites.
I think Sunshine is such a likeable character, and Nikolai loves her already, despite the fact that he doesn't realize it. Darla is such a bucket, and I can't wait until she finds out that she's not only been replaced by a much younger woman, but also one that is so different from her.
Fantastic job, and keep up the great work.
Reviewer: Delaney Jacobs Signed [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 09:45 pm
That was an excellent chapter!
I felt so sorry for Sunny when her dad didn't try to stop her from making the arrangement with Nikolai. Sunny has bounced back to make this work for her and still keep her dignity. I hope Sergei doesn't fall for Sunny as Nikolai would kill him.
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Reviewer: bookacholic247 Anonymous



[Report This]Date: 06/12/09 09:43 pm
XLNT update! I'm intrigued, definitely....I think Sunny is trying to make this as much as a normal relationship as she can to take away the feeling of beeing Nikos involuntary conkubine. I think this is very smartly done by her. I also think she would never have agreed if she thought she'd have to sleep with someone she wasn't attracted to. She does not have this problem I think. I'm curious about the rest of their terms and conditions though. Keep 'em coming!
Reviewer: Baby a.k.a. Dexxi Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 09:37 pm
I really dislike her father, but he's part of the reason Sunshine is who she is. Even with all of his mistakes (and just down right stupidity) she's willing to trade herself to protect her family, him included. That speaks volumes about her character.
I'm waiting on Darla and Anatoly to start some trouble. Because you just know they will. Darla's spiteful and Anatoly's probably harboring some sort of jealousy towards Nikolai. Why else would he sleep with Darla?
I love this story. ;) Keep up the good work!
Reviewer: Giselle Simone Signed [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 09:35 pm
awesome story. i really like it and where it's going. but i feel bad for sergei. he just seems so sad. i know sunshine isn't supposed to end up with him, but it would be nice if he found love or some sort of happiness. update soon
Reviewer: rissaspieces Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 09:33 pm
He wants her, he gaveher everything she asked for. Antoly and Darla they are going to give them trouble. I like how she is trying to protect her brother. Great update!!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed



[Report This]Date: 06/12/09 09:26 pm
This story is the bomb! I love it. I'm a bit worried for Sergei's sake. He may end up falling for Sunshine and get himself killed. Or maybe if Nikolai casts Sunshine aside, Sergei will be there to 'comfort' her. I hope your muse continues to kick your butt because this is definitely one of the best stories on the Chamber.
Reviewer: Happy2bNappy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 09:18 pm
I am in love with the set up for this story. There are places I think you could use a good beta, but overall this is excellent.
Reviewer: Karnythia Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/12/09 08:44 pm
Darla's a mess. I feel that she will cause problems for Sunny down the road.
But what really had me grinning was the maid. When she said--
“Something I learned from Mr. Andreovich: The feet you step on on your way up belong to the asses you kiss on your way down.” Priscilla slapped her and Darla fell hard to the ground. She held her cheek in shock. “You should have acted like a lady and maybe you’d still be here.” Priscilla turned on her heel and led her army away.
Those words are so true. What attracts Nikolai to Sunny is her humaness. There a sparkle in her her eye that Darla lacks. Sunny ia also compassinate, something Darla lacked. Although Nikolai doesn't know it yet, I feel Sunny has the upperhand.
I can't wait to see what happens next.
Reviewer: juno Signed



[Report This]Date: 06/12/09 05:39 pm