Constructive cristism/tough love: It is really insulting as a reader for writers not to take the time to proofread their stories and at least attempt to properly punctuate. I was turned off by the first edition of this story rendering me unable to to get passed the third chapter, and I honestly hoped that this edition would be better. The concept sounds so promising, but the first story was rushed and all over the place and I can't get into this one because there are so many errors. I'm sure there are people who would love to proofread your stories before you post them; all you have to do is ask.
Reviewer: Lita Anonymous [Report This]Date: 22/07/16 01:14 am
I'm glad I found these stories!
Reviewer: Jujubee50 Signed
[Report This]Date: 05/07/11 04:32 pm
Awww..poor Chelsy. She was with the bloke for a long time. But Tina did handle thst well.
Reviewer: Vita Consuelo Signed [Report This]Date: 04/07/11 07:06 am
Oooh.. I love the royals. I am a die hard anglophile and royal watcher. The Royal Forums is a great place if you are looking for any research in current events, family history about the roayls from Britian and every royal house reigning and non-regning in the world.
Honestly, I love the conept. And on the royal forums there was a heated debate about what woud happen were Harry to marry someone black and let me tell you a lot of true colors came out on that one. A lot of white Anglos in Britian do not lik the idea of their royal family mixing. They'd rather the BRF marry each other. Ew. Even Kate and is a blood cousin to the princes despite her commoner status before the marriage.
Anyway, I think it's great that you are putting you wiork out there. It's really scarey. I think the sory has a lot of potential, but I would love to see a little more authenticity with the Royal Family and their speech. I know you're probably not British and therefore it's hard to write in a style you're not familiar with, but it really goes a long way in the credibility of the story. If you need any help with Beta work or whatever I'd love to chat with you, because I cold not stop reading this. I was really intrigued with the series.
Author's Response:
I will contact you when I begin to write the fourth and last installment tomorrow, thank you for the kind review.
Reviewer: Vita Consuelo Signed [Report This]Date: 04/07/11 06:56 am
Oh, Marco! I knew he would return. Can't wait to read the next part
Reviewer: fhjl88 Signed [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 06:22 am
I have been reading this series from the first story, and I have to say that it is very good! Keep up the good work!
Reviewer: fhjl88 Signed [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 06:13 am
I love your story!!! Their relationship is so sweet and real with their ups and downs. Now I'm even more fastenated with the royal family and Prince Henry especially. Keep up the good work and keep updating.
BTW Prince William and Kate were married on my birthday :)
Author's Response:
aw that's sweet. My chemistry teacher was married the same day, surprisingly she actually looks like Kate. We thought it was cute
Reviewer: crazykeely429 Signed [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 04:43 am
Great update and I like the little twist.
Reviewer: Cherry Signed [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 03:28 am
Wow i wasn't expecting that at all I thought it was something like Harry had to serve again or the queen died. That was a good one . I am really looking forward to see what they going to do.
Reviewer: Cherry Signed [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 03:24 am
Tina is a natural with the press and I like the way that Harry and Tina relationship is progressing. There always a snag somewhere or some dirty laundry that always wants to show it head.
Reviewer: Cherry Signed [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 03:19 am
I don't know what to say. The fact that Kate is barren makes it a little unrealistic for me. This is the royal house we are taking about. They would have never let William marry Kate if she was barren. Trust me, they always let the brides make a lot of test first to see if they are able to have children or not. Its their future heir we are talking about, so they want to be sure. I know this is just fiction and all, but it felt like I was reading about the real William and Harry especially with all the real situation you had put about William and Harry's life. But this just makes it less believable.
Author's Response:
shhh don't ruin the story!!
You can interpret that however you like
Reviewer: Anon Anonymous [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 02:18 am
WTH just happened??? You are so wrong for leaving us hanging like that.. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Reviewer: ReneeK Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 03/07/11 12:52 am
You left us hanging! A very good chapter. Glad Tina is more comfortable with the paps. I need to know what happened!
Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed [Report This]Date: 03/07/11 12:25 am
great
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 07:22 pm
Your new story is moving along nicely. I hope they don't get married too soon. I want her to experience life more. Also I sort of admire Harry for wanting to wait but I don't find it realistic. Sex at their age is natural and as long as they are safe what's the harm? I am really enjoying your story and I love the humor in it.
Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 07:07 pm
Your stories are the best funy and romantic yet realistic keep it coming you had me laughing me head off .Hope you write about other IR couples
Reviewer: jadadominique Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 04:05 pm
That old lady was rude and cruel, but at least whe was honest. I however still don't like her. But I like Harry, great story. You rock!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 05:28 am
Well, nice job.
Saying don't let her steal anything is neg. sterotype on Blacks.
Harry a spare and their kids will never touch the throne. Well...I declare. LOL
Reviewer: Moni Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 04:57 am
That Queen is certainly something. Just like when you walk in a store and you the only black person and the guard following ypu ever move. What a shame. so ignorant.
Reviewer: Cherry Signed [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 04:49 am
Great update. Tina and Harry and so cute. That little tap was hillarious.
Reviewer: Cherry Signed [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 04:44 am
I am addicted to this story love it
Reviewer: IzzyLove Signed [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 04:38 am
Just this and I like it. Thanks for sharing. I like Harry and Tina hope they can make it through.
Reviewer: Cherry Signed [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 04:36 am
I love your imagination and your story.
Great!
Reviewer: Moni Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 04:03 am
Yep, I can see the Queen in full Gulch mode. SWBL was funny. Don't burn yourself out.
Author's Response:
I wont i have so much on my mind, don't be surprised if i stay up till 2 completing this one. It's just rolling out
Reviewer: Luciana Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 03:43 am
ha i love this story
Reviewer: nikki Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/07/11 03:37 am