It is starting out pretty good, I see the wheels turning and I am going to go along for the ride. I will withhold my judgement until after the next chapter. Then I will rate. But for right now my review is.....this story looks very promising!Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/11/11 09:00 am
no fair!!!! i only get one chapter???!!!! :) breathlessly waiting on the next one. :)Reviewer: nsimone Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 25/08/11 02:33 am
Excellent, first chapter. Great description of the main characters and their past. Now that you set up that great background, can't wait to see what the future of this couple will be...I believe in strong women, mentally challenging their male counterpart. Kayla will do well. Please update soon.Reviewer: VAL1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 04:50 pm
Good writing. I enjoyed your style and the details in the description of your characters. Great emotional description of the William and have opened the door to the mystery behind this obsession. I can't wait to read Kayla's views of how she sees William and if she accepts the invitation. It would be an absolutley great oppotunity for her and I am sure she will see it that way sometimes a good opportunity can came in a nasty packaging. Great job!!!Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 04:30 pm
im interested to meet this kayla, please post soon!Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 01:39 pm
This guy is fucking crazy! He's hot but gwad is he crazy! kayla better run a mile if she know what's good for her!
Hahaha! Everyone loves crazy guys! LOL!Reviewer: Jellybeans211 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 12:26 pm
I like the story. Please update soon!
Thanks Kaye_kaye77 I'm writing chapter 2! It'll be up soon! Promise!Reviewer: Kaye_kaye77 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 09:52 am
The only thing that I am confused about is their first meeting. Its not quiet clear why they were in the same room, what started the argumenr and so on.
This a very intereting story and a very good story
Thank you Breadreaway! Sooo glad you're still interested in the story! I'll have more soon! Promise!!Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 07:59 am
this is delectably creepy! i'm enjoying it so far. my only suggestion is to watch for your grammar. you write incredibly well and seem to have a great concept of your characters, so minute things like that can take away from what you're trying to create. we're all guilty of it though. i know my stories can be rank with little mistakes like that. lol other than that, wonderful job.
Thank you soooo much intellectual titmouse! I'm such a huuggee fan of your stories! You really inspire me! K- I'll stop gushing like a teenybopper! I agree with watchin the ol grammer- I just had to get this chapter out- I think I may need to get a beta cause I miss stuff and I have a hard time spotting the mistakes within the chaos. I just don't know where to find one. But yeah- Thank you ever so much! I really appreciate your comments! XReviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 05:45 am
I like the summary of the story, please update soon.
Awwww thanks Bain Anonymous!!Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/07/11 04:40 am