Good job. More please.
Reviewer: guest Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 27/08/11 05:12 am
I like what I'm reading so far. The way you developed the pov's of the two main players had me thinking as if was me sitting the diner reading the newspaper or it was me coming in from the rain. Totally dig. Thanks for sharing!! Now I going to find your other work. Great start!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and giving me some feedback. I looking forward to developing these characters.
Reviewer: Elizablu Signed [Report This]Date: 14/08/11 01:14 am
Hey, I really like this a lot. I like that it's in first person narrative (gotta get back into writing in the first person) and how it shifted from POVs. I think you made the transition very well and it flowed together. Looking forward for more
Author's Response:
Thanks Jleshay for the feed back. I m looking forward to developing this story. i just posted chapter 2.
Reviewer: JLeshay Signed [Report This]Date: 13/08/11 05:10 pm
I m looking forward to how this story develops. I loved your other story,
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. This is a great website full of awesome stories. you should become a member.
Reviewer: guest Anonymous [Report This]Date: 13/08/11 03:41 pm