Great chapter. I agree. She needs to look at whats under her nose.
Author's Response: Thanks Kelleyli! She's definitely taking a second look but it's not easy for her and even though you kind of know the end result she definitely has a lot of internal conflict about it for a variety of reasons.
[Report This]Date: 05/11/08 04:39 am
I must tell you. You are awesome. I read this last night and child, had to hold to the edge of the table as I read because that opening scene? Cooper holding to the edge of the dashboard before settling in and really going at it....mmmm. Delish. I was even more invested at that point. LOL.
Anyhoo, first off. Love the locale (go Texas! LOL). Love the 'Ewing'ness of this family. Cooper, I love; love his relationship with Lucas and Christina. Loved the background you gave on Cooper...heartbreaking really, but I'm glad he has Linda in his life; glad they could get over that hump of stepmom vs. stepchild. And his cousin Wayne....LOL. The text message was funny and subsequent call was funny. Love their rapport. Love also how Wayne yet teases him about Veronica.
And Veronica....again, heartbreaking, but Cooper's infatuation with her since such a young age makes me smile. She's almost a surrogate mom to him......or was, but that will all change (flashes to car scene and Coop's hand gripping the dashboard). LOL.
And the poem? Love it and incredibly appropriate; your story will fulfill its meaning and guess what I'm looking forward to more and more and more. No seriously, Jared has a special place in my *cough* heart and yeah, he's just....gotta have him....want him....*dashboard* YES! You get lots of shiny gold stars! Update soon! :)
Author's Response:
Oh Madame Z you made my morning with this review! I could literally visualize the scene in the car and loved writing it. Cooper is definitely a boy with some. . .gifts hahaha. I have to say I was dying to do a Texas story and a sprawling family drama I was definitely taping into my Dallas tv watching memories. I enjoy Cooper's relationship with Christina and there are more layers that will be added to it. I also love his relationship with Linda and showing a family where kids went through a difficult divorce but still managed to have a good relationship with the step mom. Wy is crazy, I was totally channeling Stiffler from American Pie hahaha.
It is this interesting dynamic with Veronica and Cooper, she's been through so much and even though she's a strong mother figure there is also a fragileness about her. And Coop it's hard for me to know even know the true source of his feelings, whether it's a game, if he sees her as fulfilling something his mother couldn't, or if he truly loves her in the way that a man loves a woman. I struggle with that even as I write which you will probably see.
Sonia Sanchez is the truth isn't she? When I read this poem I was just like how could something so simple convey so much, there was truly so much to draw from with this poem and I'm happy to know you think my story is appropriate with the poem.
Reviewer: madame z Signed [Report This]Date: 04/11/08 02:04 pm
Girl this is sooo good. I am loving it. I love the family dynamics and the background on everyone. This is an excellent read. Cooper is not playing. Who stays infatuated with someone from 12 years old? The scene in the car was HOT. I loved how you set that up and then went back a few days. It definitely build up to the moment. Can't wait for the next update. Great job.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you like it Harlan! I love the Delaney family, I've never really written what I picture to be the kind of all American good ole boy family so I'm enjoying it. Cooper is definitely an interesting character, he's kind of a wild card in my head because I'm not sure if it's an ideal he's chasing or if he likes the game or if he truly does love Veronica. Even as I know the ending I'm still not 100% sure so I look forward to hearing ya'lls thoughts on it. I thoroughly enjoyed the car scene too hehehe.
Date: 03/11/08 07:51 pm
This is really good, I can't wait for the update.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading Bella! I'm glad you like it.
Date: 03/11/08 06:45 pm
*squeals*!!! Just wanted to chime in and say I cannot wait to read this! Hopefully at lunch today ;) Great looking cast! Beautiful poem. You get stars, chica ;)
Author's Response: Hahaha thanks girlie. The cast is pretty beautiful, the poem I love so I'm really feeling this story and glad that you are as well!
[Report This]Date: 03/11/08 01:52 pm
Very nice start. Your characterization of Cooper is almost painfully realistic--particularly his friendship with Wy. Good lord, with the fat booty. And this..
"Your soul. . .and a blow job from your step mom."
*cringes* Having undergrad flashbacks.
Great backstory for Veronica. Very tragic. Nice constrast with that history and the flash foward you did at the start. Looking forward to the next part. Loving it so far.
Author's Response:
Thanks BlackMamba! That's what I was going for, funny I went to undergrad at a women's college so my major point of reference were the guys in grad school who were in their mid to late 20s and the American Pie movies hahaha. Wy is definitely that guy that makes you wonder "how the hell does he get laid" and yet just when you think you have him pegged he surprises you! Veronica is quite a character for me to write, she's so closed off and I find writing her and Cooper's dynamic given the history has been interesting.
Reviewer: BlackMamba Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/11/08 08:59 pm
Okay, so the cast is awesome. You know I'm geeking over Patrick Duffy. And off course the sexiness of Jared. So much pretty...
Author's Response: Yes, I have to say I love this cast as well, I really could picture each character in these roles!
[Report This]Date: 02/11/08 08:56 pm
Excellent start, loved the backstory on Coop and Veronica, especially Veronica. Seems like she'd had a rough time of it, can't wait to learn more about her. That opening scene was sexy as hell by the way. Very much looking forward to the next chapter. Soon you say? :)
Author's Response: Thanks TBG, I really got into creating their backstory. I like Veronica as a character and I wanted her to be different from your typical cougar archetype. You liked that first scene did ya hahaha, had lot's of fun writing it especially with the JP visual. . .
[Report This]Date: 02/11/08 02:48 am
Awesome cast, Cooper is dreamy. And adding the Duffy is pretty damn cool, I'm in. :)
Author's Response: *Sigh* yes. Sam- I mean Cooper- is one of these guys for me that I'm just like how did I miss all the sexy?! But I'm trying to make up for it. Come on what's a good ole boy Texas story without Bobby, that's like cornflakes without the milk.
[Report This]Date: 02/11/08 02:39 am
ooooo Andre Lawson! Mercy!!!
Author's Response: Yes yes, Henry Simmons is my all day all night fantasy boy. I keep casting him in stories but I need to quite playing and make him a lead because he needs his own story me thinks!
Date: 01/11/08 09:55 pm
Very good start so far, the beginnng was HOT.... Glad Cooper gets along with his stepmother... Can't wait to read when he and Veronica see each other.
Author's Response: Thanks Lady Liberty! Yeah I thought it was too easy and cliche to have the step mom at odds with the son, there are so many step families that get a long brillantly and I wanted to show that. Even Cooper and Christina though they get on each other's nerves its in a brother/sister type of way. Reviewer: Lady Liberty Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 01/11/08 07:44 pm
GreatO, you got all of this out of a four stanza poem 'cause you're deep like that. LOL
The story's off to a great start.
Author's Response: Hahaha, thanks lovemboth! Is it depth or boredom I'm not sure but I like the depth explanation better! Thanks for reading and the review and stars, I'm going to try to close the story out quickly I not you hate my long lags between updates! Reviewer: lovemboth Signed
[Report This]Date: 01/11/08 03:54 pm
Wow. A cougar story. I love it so far. A great update.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and the review and stars! Yeah I've been kicking around the idea of cougar story for a while now and when I came across the S. Sanchez poem it was just perfect and story just almost developed itself.
[Report This]Date: 01/11/08 04:39 am
Great cast.
Author's Response: Thanks Kelleyli!
[Report This]Date: 01/11/08 04:18 am
Excellent start. I'll wait until we get farther into the story to ask questions right now you've done a good job in introducing the characters.
Author's Response: Thanks Erica! I'm curious about your questions but hopefully they will all be answered as the story moves forward. Reviewer: Erica Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/11/08 04:04 am
I'm excited about this book. I'm already rooting for Wyatt and Monica to hookup.
Author's Response: Thanks Erica! I'm curious as to whether you'll still be rooting for Wyatt and Monica after the next couple of chapters, we'll see!
Date: 01/11/08 03:30 am
looking forward to more!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it and I am going to try to close it out pretty fast (at least for me hahaha).
[Report This]Date: 01/11/08 02:09 am