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Title: Little Goodbyes

Great job so far Jamey. I'm really enjoying the relationship between Rayne and Adam. Looking forward to the leaving party, I have a feeling it will explosive :)

Reviewer: Valhalla Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/03/09 03:14 am

Title: Little Goodbyes

Your summary caught my eye........Chapter 1 got my interest.........

Love it..........so much emotion.......

Please update soon.

Reviewer: Lykeroses Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/02/09 06:40 pm

Title: Little Goodbyes

Adam is something of a hot-head, isn't he? I'm intrigued about their past relationship.

As he passed various tables, he caught the attention of other patrons seated. For some it was the rugged handsomeness of his features, others were overwhelmed by the size of his frame. Rayne had long passed admiring the physical of him. For her it was the confidence that radiated from him, the intelligence in his eyes, and his dominating disposition that made it difficult to break her gaze from him in the past but tonight after a brief smile, she looked down at the cover of the menu. If her thoughts continued along those lines she'd never get the truth out and they'd remain as they been for far too long. Reminding herself that there was steel in her spine, closed her eyes and hardened herself against the rush. 

I know that's a lot to copy and paste, lol, but I loved that paragraph. Loved the flow of it. Great update; can't wait to read more :)

Reviewer: madame z Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 25/01/09 07:52 pm

Title: Little Goodbyes

It needed to be spaced out more. Spacing making it a lot easier to read, and helps with the flow of the story.

I enjoyed reading this piece about a couple 'finally' letting go. It's never easy to truly let go, but sometimes it's the best option.

Reviewer: Sweet Pea Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 23/01/09 02:22 pm

Title: Little Goodbyes

You've done a wonderful job of painting your characters. I felt the passion and pain greatly in this first chpt. I hope you continue on this way.

Reviewer: cccH Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 23/01/09 12:22 pm

Title: Little Goodbyes

Good start to the story but you should break it up into smaller paragraphs to make it easier to read.

Reviewer: Flikchick Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 23/01/09 07:39 am

Title: Little Goodbyes

That was interesting, I hope you continue the story. I wonder if she is really leaving. Not saying goodbye is major.. not even a see you later?

Reviewer: zeta Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 23/01/09 05:09 am

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