Okay...you ain't right!!! You ain't right, you do know that??? How are you gonna cut it off right there??? At least allow them to GET BUSY....roflol

Author's Response: lol. I'm sorry.  It's only a one-shot.  I just can't make promises that aren't in the near future.  I'd loved to say that it has a continuation, but there are far too many stories incomplete for me to extend this one any further at this point.  However, if there is any consulation, it's a thought that just may come to fruition.

Oh no you didn't end it like that. Now I  want more.

Author's Response: Sorry Karen...but there's still a chance to add the bread to this meat.  Thanks for reading.

I can see the triangle, but I trying to figure out where Andie fits into this story. Can't wait for the series to start.

Author's Response: Wha?? LMAO...what series SweetPea? Gurl...ur too funny! Give me a moment and I'll see what I can do.

P.S. I want to direct this toward Nakia (if you read reviews from others, as I sometimes do.) How could you NOT get that? I don't wanna be rude or anthing but SPAC is my girl and she's top-notch when it comes to writing. This was where she was taking the story, at least, where I took the story.

Two very attractive successful people (Dereon & Jamieson) were in a passionless relationship, at least, the woman counterpart found it passionless and wanted to see if trying to change things up would make the relationship work because she was in a rut. For her, the relationship was stagnant and going nowhere but Dereon truly cared about Jamieson so she said nothing...even about the brand of condoms he used. She cared enough not to make him feel bad over something she thought was unimportant. Then you have Mario--the third party outsider throwing vibes toward the female character, though she's trying to resist him at every turn but the sexual tension between these two is undeniable. But leave it to a stubborn protaginist to deny it. He's got all the right moves (pun intended) before you find out he's Italian Ice--the man with the gyratting hips whose lible to make all Dereons sexual fantasies come true. Having had enough of the dodging attraction, Mario takes matters into his own hands. This is the climax point of the story where Dereon realizes that she can no longer deny her attraction to Mario, especially being in a committed relationship with his good friend Jamieson. So, she calls it quits. She's determined to forget all about Mario and move on with her life until her friend's bachelorette party, where a stripper is booked. Tad-da! You have Mario and the relization that you can't escape unrequited lust.

THE END.

How you missed ALL that...I'll never know.

One shot my butt-butt! :0

Okay, I'm big on chemistry myself. How-ev-er, Jamison was damn-near perfect on all the points. I deducted for too much of a "yes" man. I like a little protest, panic sweating, a few "hell,  no, woman!" now and again.

Instead D falls for Mario the pseudo-friend. He moved in on another man's woman, a friend, no less, then tried to screw her in the dude's home... kitchen then bed?? Nah. And he strips for money and thrills? Hell, nah. No redeaming qualities there.

A one shot? "Lucie, you gots som 'splainin' to do!!" ;) 

Seriously, I enjoyed it as a one shot, but there is great potential if you decide to expand it. Also, you do a very nice job of background and character development weaving it through your story-telling.

I see potential to explore why D is unfulfilled by what most women would give their eye teeth to have in a man. And Jamison needs a good woman. Poor baby.

LMAO! He's a male stripper!  Too bad this is it.  Excellent!

Author's Response: TY Jujubee for reading and reviewing. Stripper indeed. LOL.

Oaky as a one shot that is pretty good.  But c'mon now The man who was willing to give her what she needed is a stripper? There is so much more to this story and I would love to see where you take it.

I love the twist of him being the stripper. It adds so much to the imagination.

Thanks for putting it up.

Oooh, I like.  Man they almost got caught.  Whoo wee... not good, I can't wait to see where if, you go any further with this!

Author's Response: LOL DSM, yes they were nearly caught! I'm considering moving it on. We'll see. ;-)