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Title: Chapter 11

argh! why'd you leave it there! Is it Mod??? LOL Lady I LOVE LOVE LOVE this story!!!

I simply cannot wait for an update. I'm beginning to like Leo though I feel I shouldn't. I feel like he isn't 'the one' but he's definitely buttering me up. He's so sexy and such a cad and just arrogant as the dickens but he's kind, too and at least he's HONEST with her. He didn't promise that he wouldn't hurt her at some point. Honesty goes a long way with me, even if it comes from a murderer.

Thank you so much for this story!!! More please!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you like the story so much! At least I'm not boring anyone. Lol

Honestly, I luvs Leo too. He's my favorite character. That's why he gets so much 'play' but not much 'win', if you know what I mean. I don't know if that's backwards or not...

Anyways, thank you very much for reviewing! I will definitely keep the story rolling!

Reviewer: madame z Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 01/06/10 10:34 pm

Title: Chapter 11

Second time trying to review...first one went down in a flame of glory...anywho...okay, Darling...I've just have to make a case for my boy Leo here to win Roxi's heart...I know he isn't even supposed to be in the running...but I absolutely heart him...so what...he made her his blood slave...hello, he's a vampire...a man has needs and all, lol...but anyway...he could have done worse...but could it be...is it even possible...but methinks Leo is falling in love with Roxi...I loved how he told her he never wanted to hurt her...and he showed true integrity when he didn't make that stupid promise of 'never' hurting her...because it's true....'tis a fact of life that sometimes we hurt the ones we love the most...could that be a bit of foreshadowing that I'm reading here...I know Mod hasn't had a real chance to get 'in the game' so the speak...but I'm rooting for my boy anyway...even though I know he 'isn't the one for Roxi'...I think Leo admires Roxi's moxie...hey, I made a funny didn't I...so sad that he wasn't her first...but hope reigns supreme...I know I'm being obstinate about this...but I want what I want...Leo and Roxi, lol...

Hmmm, wondering who that could be...was it Mod that Roxi heard when Leo left her in the middle of nowhere...couldn't think of anyone else besides maybe Melissa's mother than would garner such a reaction from Roxi that would leave her wanting to give the business to Leo when she gets home...

I'm hoping for another update this weekend...hope you have a wonderful Memorial Day Weekend too...love this story...can't wait to see what happens next...



Author's Response:

Long review! I like these!

About Leo: I totally know what you mean. Honestly, Leo is my favorite character so I have a soft spot for him too. You just won't be able to tell for a long, long time. And, yes, the fact that he won't promise not to hurt her is a bit of foreshadowing so stay tuned!

About Mod: You'll be seeing more of him. I promise.

About updating again Memorial Day weekend: ...my calendar broke? Seriously, I felt kind of guilty about that but I was really caught up hanging with friends and family.

Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm really glad you like the story!

Reviewer: attheritz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30/05/10 02:27 am

Title: Chapter 11

Is Leo match making..I am pretty sure I know who that is and I think that is why Leo did not take her sexually because he knows she belongs to someone else.

I wonder will he biting her regulary make her a vamp eventually or does she have to take in his blood!!

There are still lots of questions..but I will patiently wait for your revealing of each layer...

Good job sweetie!!



Author's Response:

Yay! You're right on with Leo's involvement in all of this!

I pick and choose what vampire folklore I want to use. For this story, Leo would have to give her some of his blood for her to become a vampire.

Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoy the story!

Reviewer: neneburge Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 10:24 pm

Title: Chapter 11

Mod! He is the only person, who could bring about that last reaction from Roxanne.

Leo is all kinds of confusing, but I was glad that he didn't promise not the hurt her. I don't believe that he would ever intentionally hurt her physically, but who knows he could do that would cause her emotional pain.

I'm happy Roxanne is fianlly getting some clothes. It's past time that she got out of the castle, and introduced to her new world. 



Author's Response:

I agree with you 100% on all points. You're right on. 

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 11:18 am

Title: Chapter 11

It was good. I think you "to" instead of "of" in one sentence. It was one near the end about conflicting emotions. Other than that. It was good.

I'm guessing it's Mod.



Author's Response: Thanks for that! By the way, if you ever want to beta for anyone, I could really use it. I try to do the editing myself, but obviously I miss some things. Thank you for reading, reviewing and proofreading! Lol

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 05:59 am

Title: Chapter 10

Interesting...

Author's Response: I'm glad you think so! Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 04:49 am

Title: Chapter 11

I say it's Mod, but she  suppose to go shopping so maybe Melissa, I'm not sure. Love the update Can't wait to see who it is.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the chapter. Please stay tuned! Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: Chell Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 03:35 am

Title: Chapter 11

Loved the update. Is it Mod?? Can't wait to find out who it is.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the update. Things get more interesting in the next few chapters. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 02:29 am

Title: Chapter 11

Mod is the person that is at the mall.  Thanks for the update.

Author's Response:

You got me. Lol

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 02:21 am

Title: Chapter 11

I knew that Leonardo wanted her.  Why would he leave her with money in the shopping district if he wanted her to buy clothes?  Who is calling her name?  How could leave it like that?  Great update

Author's Response:

Questions, questions... Stay tuned!

I'm glad you liked the chapter! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: pmgayles Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 29/05/10 01:49 am

Title: Chapter 1

new reader--great sory..sorry really busy right now,will write more later

Author's Response: No problem! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: OKcitygurl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26/05/10 09:12 pm

Title: Chapter 10

This chapter wasn't bad at all. I think it gives a better view of the world around the character. It gives more insight, if anything. I'm curious as to what happened at the end. Did he bite her?

Also just checking my "vampire myths", but I thought that they didn't have reflections. Or did you kind of change it a bit. If you did, it's fine.

Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked this chapter. About the reflection thing: I got lazy but it's not very important to the story. LOL

Thanks for reading and reviewing! Stay tuned!

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25/05/10 08:06 am

Title: Chapter 10

Roxi and Leo's relationship is strange to say the least...I know you keep reminding us that she is for Mod...that I still don't 'get'...but anywho...I was secretly rooting for her and Leo to hook up...but is it going to be Leo who 'deflowers' her...and if so...why isn't Mod objecting...and what exactly was Mod and Leo discussing in that hushed whisper as Roxi was dressing...and Roxi...seems she runs hot and cold for Leo...yes, I understand she's justifiably angry at her forced captivity by Leo...but she really did like him kissing her if she was truly honest with herself...she seems to be both repulsed and excited by Leo...strange indeed...I didn't want this chapter to end here...it was just starting to get very interesting...and then bam...it ends...oh please hurry up and update soon...still liking this story alot.

Author's Response:

All I can say is 'yeah'. You're pretty much right on the money about Roxi when it comes to Leo. I'm glad that you still like this story even when it gets weird.  

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: attheritz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 02:43 pm

Title: Chapter 10

Hmm, I'm guessing that he bit her, which would be interesting since she went to sleep. Vampire bites don't usually put people to sleep, unless their draining them of life, but then again every legend is different.

I want to know what Leo and Mod are always arguing about?

I think the Anita Black series is the only one I know of, where the lead actually thinks about the vampire she's about to sleep with as being dead. This was back in...I think book three or four, when the series was actually good.  



Author's Response:

About vampire lore: Between my lil' sis and I, we are folklore encyclopedias but I tend to trim the edges in my stories. I never went as far as making anyone sparkle though. Lol

What are Leo and Mod so worked up about...? That will be answered later. Soon. I promise. Stay tuned.

I've never read the Anita Black series but I have heard about it. I've been meaning to read it. When does it start going downhill?

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 09:20 am

Title: Chapter 9

I enjoyed the girl talk, there was a nice flow to it. I like Melissa it seems that Parker just sort of claimed her. "I have plans for you" what the heck is that? She has a right to be upset with him.  

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 08:49 am

Title: Chapter 10

Did Leonardo and Mod have words about Roxanne?  It is obvious that Leonardo feels something for her, but I am not quite sure if it's love that a pet owner has for it's pet or human love?  Great update!!!

Author's Response:

You're getting warmer...

I'm glad you liked the chapter! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: pmgayles Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 08:38 am

Title: Chapter 10

Ok somehow I got really behind in this wonderful little fic but I am all caught up now!

I love Melissa and her relatonship with Parker seems a little strange..she is his true mate but does not love him..very strange but cannot wait to read more on them!

If Leo takes Roxanne's virgnity how will she mate with mod or is that what is suppose to happen between the two of them!!

The fact that she is so sleepy leds me too believe he changed her to vamp not had sex with her..but I guess we will have to wait and see..

great job sweetie..I cannot wait for more!



Author's Response:

I'm glad I've been able to hold your attention with this story!

Melissa and Parker do have a strange relationship but there will be more about them later.

Roxi's relationships with Leonardo and Mod only get more complicated from here on. I can promise you that. Lol

And you'll see what happened between Leo and Roxi in the next chapter. I promise!

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: neneburge Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 07:52 am

Title: Chapter 10

Loved the update. Leonardo is snacking on Roxy???!!! WTH???? What's the deal between Mod and Roxy???

Author's Response: You'll have to stay tuned! Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you liked this chapter!

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 06:44 am

Title: Chapter 10

Who is in the bed with her?  I don't think that it is Leonardo.

Author's Response:

It's Leo. I'm sorry if I didn't make that clear. You expect too many twists from me! That would have been a good one! Lol! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 06:38 am

Title: Chapter 1

You cannot leave us hanging like this. Please post another chapter and quick. I love this story! I know that Roxanne is Mod's but I like Leonardo too.

Author's Response: I'm still working on the next chapter. I'm glad you like the story! Please keep reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 03:18 am

Title: Chapter 10

Just started reading this today and i really enjoyed it. Hope the wait for the next update isn't too long :) im not sure who i want Roxanne to be with to tell you the truth, i guess ill just have to wait and see.

Author's Response: Yay! New reader! I'm glad you liked this story enough to review. Please keep reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Sums Anonymous starstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 02:19 am

Title: Chapter 10

What happened did he bite her? did stick her with a needle? Loving this story.Please update soon.

Author's Response: Stay tuned! I'm glad you like the story! Please keep reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Chell Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 01:48 am

Title: Chapter 10

OMG I love this story SO MUCH!!! Sorry for the brief review. Know that I"m lreading and loving it. Can't wait for an update! 

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm glad you like it! I hope I don't disappoint! By the way, I love My Last and Recapitulation!

Reviewer: madame z Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 23/05/10 12:28 am

Title: Chapter 10

What the hell?! You left a nasty cliffhanger there, girl. I wonder what's going on.

Author's Response:

I like cliffhangers. *evil grin*

Stay tuned. Thank you for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: nikki Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/05/10 10:23 pm

Title: Chapter 9

I liked Melissa.  I understand why she is angry with Parker but come one she was sleeping with him...I think that she is in love with him but is being stubborn.  I enjoyed the conversation between Melissa and Roxi.  Glad that you survived your freshman year of college.  Congrats on being a sophomore.  Take care.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much for the review and the well-wishing! I can guarantee that you'll be seeing more of Melissa.

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/05/10 01:20 pm

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