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Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

so i think you should continue this.

i completely understand as a writer how something can feel completely out of your grasp. i write in these forums to free up myself from my more serious projects (my major one dealing with a couple that are former addicts, one for heroin, the other for sex) and even those kinda of stump me at times.

but i think you should challenge yourself to continue this. don't give up on yourself so early! lol i've read your other work and you are brilliant. much, much more skilled than you are obviously giving yourself credit for.

please, please continue.

with a cherry on top. and not those marchino or whatever-the-hell-they're-called ones, cuz those taste like chemistry and death. and maybe some sprinkles. aight, sprinkles too if it'll get you to reconsider this story.

Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/10/10 03:45 am

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

This is really interesting. I hope you update soon. 

Reviewer: copper oxidase Signed [Report This]
Date: 15/09/10 10:31 pm

Title: "I'm so much older than I can take..."

I like the way this story is starting out. Please update soon. Do not leave us hanging. I can not wait to read more.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/05/10 06:55 am

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

Please write more!!!

Reviewer: Bella Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/05/10 12:41 am

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

Now this is interesting:  a celibate man of three years?!  Wow. Not saying it’s impossible it’s just rare (his decision based on reckless behavior is very plausible and so him). I really like Pete’s persona:

It was his way: quiet, unobtrusive, and completely pulled in within himself, to the point that a person could forget that he was even present.

People like that – quiet and mysterious – are much more interesting to observe and when they speak, they something to say, not frivolous chatter just to hear themselves talk.

Madeline was gutsy with her audition selections yet smart b/c of the range in her voice. Go girl!

I’m looking forward their first meeting.

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/03/10 05:19 am

Title: "I'm so much older than I can take..."

I’m digging Fatima and Madeline’s friendship. Fatima won’t let her wallow in pity parties or self-doubt.  They have each other’s back.

Great start.

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 10/03/10 05:17 am

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

i am really loving this story so far. the characters are adorable and funny. the storyline is just great!! and i really love your writing style. i hope you update soon. i can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: bea Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 09/03/10 05:47 am

Title: "I'm so much older than I can take..."

A whole new world to explore.  I like.  Please continue.

Reviewer: Realstone Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 08/03/10 06:21 pm

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

A very interesting start. You seem to promise unusual and complex characters. I am taking the bait. I am looking forward to see what happens next.

Reviewer: islandlass Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/03/10 02:13 pm

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

Nice start.

So, she probably got the job. What next?

Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: Bluegardenia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 11:39 pm

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

A great start - I'm really looking forward to this one.

Reviewer: cdb Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 04:42 pm

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

Interesting start...and extremely well-written...I'm already intrigued by Pete's deeply troubled soul...wonder what he was trying to forget...looking forward to how the story develops between he and Maddie...

Reviewer: attheritz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 04:23 pm

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

Hey, great start! Can't wait to see what's gonna happend next!

Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 02:47 pm

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

Wow, Cillian and Shingai, I like the casting.  Can't wait to read how you bring them together.

Thanks

Reviewer: Meg Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 11:42 am

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

Hmmm, can't wait to see how this story develops.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 07:55 am

Title: "I'm so much older than I can take..."

Interesting start.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 07:50 am

Title: "I'm not like them, but I can pretend..."

I am so glad you are back.  I really like this chapter because you really showed us who these characters are and a little history.  I love the description of Madeline.  I love her look and that she wear her hair natural.  I love her outgoing style too, she seems shy, but yet sure of herself, yet still insecure about certain things.  Pete obviously has/had issues, but I like that he's quiet.  I can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: Gypsi Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/03/10 07:32 am

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