Interesting start! I wonder what Jason needs to see Keesha for? It must be important by the sound of it by the way he's just turned up unannounced. Keesha doesn't seem too happy to see him for some reason, which is also intriguing but she's being very kind and gracious. Look forward to reading the next chapter.

Author's Response:

Thanks again for you review!!!

I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

It's about time that Jason was the one that went looking for Her :) 

I'm sure Keesha is happy to see him. She just can't let him know that. ;) 

Writers of this stupid stupid show, take heed. THIS is how you write. God, I haven’t seen Days of Our Lives since 2004/2005 after Jensen Ackles left. I would love to see this get made into an episode, not the shit they spill out. My grandma used to watch Days since before I was born and even she has stopped watching this mess. To walk away from something that you were a fan of for 20 years says something else.

This was really good! I would have never considered these two to be a pair but goddamn it was sexy. Felt bad that her husband died even though I think he’s an old fogey. No doubt in the real show he would come back to life somehow.

Anyway, this was fun! EJ made me go eww, but it also made me laugh. I mean yes I think incest sorta happens on that show, what with all the affairs and DNA result swapping the citizens of Salem Falls get upto but he just openly put it out there. Made me LMAO!

Again, well done, this was awesome! You gave Days more kudos than it deserves, made it look decent J If someone were to read this and then watch the show, they’d be in for a bit of a shock, I think.

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Shit....

I’ve heard of the legendary movie that is Secretary but have never seen it after my friend said it was sexist. I mean, that’s not the reason I didn’t watch the movie, I was just told it was crap and then I was too lazy to make an effort to check it out.

I’m going to get that movie first thing next weekend.

Either my friend is being oversensitive or your short one fic story did the movie justice. I mean yes, Alice may have been dominated by her boss but only cause she wanted to. That’s a big difference for me.

Overall, very sexy story! That was hot, Angel!

Wow, this is one of your best stories. I was thinking that the things they do for each other straight away is something more than what best friends do.

It’s very touching how much they’ve been through and all they’ve done for each other, most people fall apart at that and relationships break apart, they’re together and that says something.

At first I was quite surprised that she lies to get him there, a bit disappointed actually that she has to be deceitful but on the other hand he knows and still goes, which means she is more than a best friend to him! I reckon they should get together and soon, well written, great job!

Oh, god this was awesome! I read the entire series in one sitting! After this, I moved straight onto the next one! This was funny as hell and I loved the pairing of both! Great tribute to the original Evil Dead, and I loved Shelby. Only wish she was real, that would be awesome.

Overall, just fun! Could not stop laughing through this, it was fantastic. Off to review the next one now, great work!

Great coupling!! And it could be the start of a very good story, the way it's being written. Leaves room for potential, well done!

I've always thought these two would make a great couple, great to see it written.

Wow!!  This story was amazing! You’re an awesome writer; I went for a trip back in time as I read this!

What can I say? Age is nothing but a number, for one. Harry and Eva make a gorgeous couple despite the huge age gap. I am so glad both got a better life together in the end (would love to be back in Paris around that time, so romantic).

Rhonda was an A grade bitch, a bit psychotic too but the sounds of things. So I didn’t feel much sympathy when she put the barrel of the gun against her head.

Again, great work and I look forward to reading more wonderful stories from you!

Shit man! I was going to write wow but I guess you must be sick of me writing that over and over. But what can you say really? I mean having to articulate awe is kinda hard for me…I don’t know, when I read any of your stories I feel very quiet after the end, just awash with emotion. It stays with me afterwards. I guess that’s the best way for me to explain it.

But onto the story. This one was awesome cause Simone is someone that you can relate to so well. Her feelings, her emotions and her tribulations. What I liked even more of how hopeful and optimistic she is and how open minded she is.

She doesn’t waste time with if’s and why’s and buts. She doesn’t regret or procrastinate or get bitter. I really admired her for resolve and for the fact she’s so openhearted.

Shameful as this sounds when I was her age (lol I make it sound like it was ages ago) I would have resented my sister, I would not have had sex with Reese all because of the fact he’s a geek. Don’t get me wrong, I like him in this story, and I was especially touched by how sweet he was but when you’re 18, you do care about what other people think.

This was fantastic, and I hope you keep writing about Simone Russell. I like her too much for this to be the end. Greak work.

I’m really enjoying your stories. The plots are simple yet very poignant. This one was one of the most intriguing so far. I think it could be turned into a bigger story. I was so intrigued by the characters. I really wanted to know more.

I enjoy how you write the love stories that we experience more and  more often in reality. There’s no big drama or necessary any happy endings, which is just like real life! Well done!

Hey, interesting start. I wonder how her mom left her so much money when Sienna was estranged. And wow, her step brother is flirting with her, lol. I wonder how his father will feel about that. Damn, he is cute though!

Great start!

This is such a fantastic story! Wonderful story line and a terrific cast!

Aggh! I relate to Ciel so much!! I pretty much AM him! I was known as the amazon in fifth grade then the dwarf in the tenth. Didn’t have acne but I was really heavy around the same years he suffered too. Like him, I was an ugly duckling who has just become the average duck. Most people in life are like that and so it’s awesome the hero is a normal standard guy and isn’t some stud bull with a telescope sized genetilia.

Reading those first lines pulled me in, not just because he’s a protagonist that I relate to but because it’s a story that’s not written that often from the male’s perspective. It’s usually the girls we hear about, who have the insecurities and the frustrations and just want someone to love.

As for Jade…I wanna shake her. I guess her situation is not one you can understand unless you’ve been in her shoes. Like Ciel, I found her behavior perplexing. Iwanted to reach in and just slap her until my hands were sore.

Then again, I think we’ve all had our share of shit boyfriends though and it is quite amazing how much you put up with until you realize you shouldn’t. I mean some of the stuff I took from one of my serious boyfriends shocked my friends. I drew the line at physical violence though and walked out.

But still, we all have our levels and we shouldn’t judge someone who is in that sort of relationship. The emotional manipulation is huge in that kind of relationship and your sense of worth, zero.

So, I liked how Ceil didn’t just constantly say “I told you so” because even though you feel it’s the right thing to do, (believe me, I know) compassion wins over judgment.

I felt kinda angry on behalf of Ciel. I mean, he got the girl but at what price? He’s never going to walk again! All just for her. I don’t know whether to be furious at her or to be deeply touched by how much he cares for her.

But that’s an awesome element of your writing in both stories I’ve read so far. The flaws that are so prominent in the characters but are loved nonetheless and also the fact that in the endings, things aren’t all resolved and it’s not a happy ever after. It’s just like real life.

Wonderful job, bleedingpen! Keep it up!!

This story is fantastic! Love the characters and you’ve done a fantastic job modernizing it!

I’m enjoying this more than the original movie so far, cause you’re providing an awesome glimpse into the characters out of the detention room, so I feel like that gap has been filled!

I hope you keep writing, Monique has me intrigued. I’m wondering what’s going to happen to Andrew and there seems to be a bit of a love triangle between Claire, Carmine and Kenny. I like all of the characters, and I usually hate guys like Carmine and spoilt princess girls like Claire.

I’m surprised more people haven’t reviewed this, it’s fantastically written. And I cannot wait to read more. More of this and more stories from you, that is.

What an awesome sequel! Cheered when I read this! I’m really glad both her and Reese are a couple. Quite similar to the themes covered in “where is it I’m going”, only more hopeful, the future looks bright and promising.

Loved Reese’s parents, I think everyone knows a couple like them, I think they’re awesome, great parents judging from how Reese turned out.

I felt kinda sad though, cause I know from experience that when you go to different colleges, 90% of the time, long distance relationships do not work, and that made me feel bad cause I really enjoy these two as a couple.

Again, I would love to read more about them one day, later on in the future, so I hope you continue to write about Simone and Reese!