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[Reviews - 28]
Summary: Alana O’Conner is a former super spy who was scheduled for termination at the completion of her last mission. Over a year later she is alive and assigned to protect her former lover. Alana is more interested in discovering way she was alive and protecting her family from a mysterious stalker.Nathan loves Alana. He has since her first laid eyes on her ten years ago. He is determined to make her his lover again.

Alec has been on the side line too long. is reintroduction back into section is for one purpose…protect Alana and make sure this time she gets out alive; even if it cost him his own life.

This is totally my original work, thanks to Pamela for beta reading these first two chapters. You’re awesome.

Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Mystery, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 21209
Read Count: 4479
Published: 22/07/10
Updated: 07/11/11


Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Characters have a lot of deeply buried psychological stuff which makes for intrigue that I like.  The most intriguing for me is why did Alana want to die, even orchestrated her own death and is quite dissappointed the organization, her employer, revived her.  Actually, it seems from her present state which is greatly deficient from her previous perfection, I agree with her that she would have been better off remaining dead. Anyway, this story promises a lot and seems to be very well written.  Also, the cast of characters is interesting, not the usual glamour types. 












Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 10/01/11

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 7]
Summary:

 

               Ghosts

A Supernatural Story

He wondered if he loved her, if he was even capable of loving her.



Table of Contents
Categories: Primetime Television, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Challenges: The "Less is More" Challenge
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 1028
Read Count: 3263
Published: 02/08/10
Updated: 02/08/10


Title: Chapter 1: Ghosts

Really weird sort of "vacant" story but, that is also the intent,  "supernatural".  So okay!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 05/02/11

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 82]
Summary:

The Continuation of Possession  

Olivia is in love with a man that belongs to another. Sounds simple right? Well, he enjoys taking her to the height of lust, but can never remember a thing the next day. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Mystery, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 10
Completed:No
Word count: 8814
Read Count: 17753
Published: 07/09/10
Updated: 03/10/11


Title: Chapter 7: The Breaking Point

AH!  That was good, Olivia I think may just go after her man, even though he is an alter ego;  HELL! figure it out later!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/02/11

Title: Chapter 8: Love and other drugs

I feel sorry for Olivia she's almost in love with a ghost since Ian is Ethan's alter, he's not real.

And Ian is in love with Olivia and fears losing her, probably because he knows his existence is rather temporary, since its dependent on Ethan.

What a perilous romance for these two!

Great story, I LOVE IT!  Anxious for next update!  

Thank you Thespiandiva 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/02/11

Title: Chapter 5: Distractions

This is crazy, Ethan wants amnesiac sex with Olivia again; and if I were her I probably would start being afraid of Ethan.  

 

I am so glad you have finally given the main two characters of this story names; Ethan and Olivia.  It was really irritating, they had no identity, constantly referring to them as he and her, I was getting a little dizzy!  I even started wondering if Jean was the "her" referred to.

 

Not good to keep the reader in that confusion for nearly 5 chapters.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 08/02/11

Title: Chapter 4: Alive

So Ethan suffers from childhood abuse and it was then his black out of memory began?  This story is very intriguing but from pictures given are any of them Ethan or the girl roommate that is his friend whom he has un-remembered sex with?  I wish this was not in question for me.

That was so HOT in a weird way that he could not climax with his girlfriend because he wants to have sex with his friend/roommate so he goes into bathroom and fantasizes about sex with her and has his huge climax.  But, doesn't know his fantasies are real. 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/02/11

Title: Chapter 1: Possession

That was REALLY HOT!!!  Also, loved the mystery of it, how this guy who was just her, I presume longtime friend and roommate, just comes out of nowhere with this heavy, sweet lovemaking!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/02/11

Title: Chapter 3: It all leads to this

DAMN!  What's going on that Ethan does not remember his love fests with her and they are GREAT!

Why does she accept his lack of memort? 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/02/11

Title: Chapter 6: Head Games

OH!  So Ethan has a split personality and his alter's name is Ian and Ian is doing all this other sex life with Olivia but also wants OLivia romantically but he interferes with Ethan's ability to really be into his own girlfriend!  Yeah, this is mysteriously weird and HOT!

This also reminds me of that old 1960's song:  "He's got a split personality!  Oh, I've got two lovers and I ain't ashamed, love them both the same, cause both of them are you."

 

Yeah!  Mary Wells sang that and it was called "Two Lovers"

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/02/11

Title: Chapter 9: Confessions part 1

So, this mental illness split-personality that Ethan has, unbeknownst to himself, he's had since he was a child.  But, Ian is not just a very affectionate cool lover he is also cruelly destructive to others, Ethan needs help because what further destruction will Ian do?  

 

Olivia loves both Ian and Ethan, but now her love must also also be a helpmate!  However, now is not the time to tell on Ian because, Ethan is in emotional turmoil at this knowledge coupled with the emotional onslaught of being unexpectedly in the presence of his worst enemy, his vicious mother.  He's probably in fearful panic and strongly needs to depend that he has one friend there with him, Olivia; if she now tells on Ian, Ethan will feel betrayed and surrounded by enemies.   Olivia should delay her answer until she can privately talk to Ethan and possibly also the Doctor in private.  

 

She can pretend confusion at the Doctor's question and this "surprising" news about Ethan, to the extent that she wants time to really review his actions to determine if there was anything abnormal, as opposed to just eccentric.  Also, cause further delay by questioning the Doctor as to why he wants this review of Ethan, especially since his mentally ill mother is not a reliable witness and what will be his therapeutic actions.

 

After, both mother and Doctor are gone talk to Ethan and tell him about Ian.  Acknowledge him about his need for help, then he will also see that in her he has a dependable friend to give him support along the way.  

 

Thank you Thespiandiva for this very interesting update.  I greatly enjoy this story and have much affection for Ian/Olivia/Ethan.  So glad this story is continuing!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/02/11

Title: Chapter 10: Confessions Part 2

I'm surprised that Ethan's mother sustains a picture on her apartment wall of her father who sexually abused her and indicates she still loves him.  That does not speak well for her own state of wellness, not that she should be steeped under the burden of hate and resentment, however???

Anyway, Oliva needs to careful in reveailing any truths about Ethan's mental problem to his mother, I'd rather she reveal it to the psychiatrist because mom may not be really stable and trustworthy.

Also, although Ethan/Olivia sexing was brief it was still HOT!  

Thank you for this Update!

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 01/02/12

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 12]
Summary:

A Covenant ficlet. The sometimes sometimes messy but sweet journey of Pogue and Kate. 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Movies
Characters: None
Classification: Cannon, Drabbles , Supernatural
Genre: Erotica, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2874
Read Count: 1257
Published: 08/09/10
Updated: 08/09/10


Title: Chapter 1: one

I enjoyed this short tale but there seems to be a history of Kate and Pogue which I have no knowledge and that lack of knowledge weakened my better appreciation of the story.

Nevertheless, this tale was interesting. 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/01/11

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 247]
Summary:

Lay Me Down

 

Life is hard. James knows this for a fact in which she picked a bad time to quit smoking. Working long days as a housekeeper and taking online college classes just adds more stress. With a troubled childhood and a dark past looming over her shoulder, James is untrusting of others therefore lets very few people into her life.

That is until she stumbles -- literally -- into Tristen, a computer software engineer who won't take 'no' for an answer. He's different, kind, and fun. And French. He wants to get to know her, but will her past drive him away like the others and if he does stay, can he endure damage of her skeletons tumbling out of the closet?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content
Series: City of Lights
Chapters: 15
Completed:Yes
Word count: 63166
Read Count: 67184
Published: 22/09/10
Updated: 06/08/11


Title: Chapter 8: Caught Red Handed

The sex scene was good except the following disturbed me so diminished the pleasure I could have found in it because my believability of the characters was weakened, hence authors intent for erotic effect was more apparent to me then my involvement in Tristen/James:   In the pool James takes off her shirt and skirt, how she managed that in water is also weird but she would have to be steaming HOT and just after a few kisses from Tristen to change to this behavior; whereas, in her immediate prior moment there was no indication of a strong passionate arousal!  After Tristen lifts her out of water and sits her on edge of pool wall and pulls down her bra a little.  James shields her breast with her arm and anxiously looks around worrying someone might see them.  This makes no since because, why did she go through all that trouble to so brazenly take off her shirt if she's shy about him seeing her breast,  voluntarily taking off her shirt (and skirt/slip) was clear indication she wants him to see and touch her breast. James is a young woman not a fickled 14year old girl.  So all these actions appeared as writer's gimmicks to affect me the reader; which would normally be okay except the writer gimmickry was obvious, so instead I became irritated, because the writing had fallen to such amateur ploys.    

Also, what happened to Tristen since the last time we saw him in the hospital all broken up and in excruciating pain.  There is no buildup to this sex scene, last time they were together was in the hospital and even as a extremely sick/broken man she wanted nothing to do with him sensually nor romantically.  So for me I needed to see an interim relationship (even of just close friendship) to accept this sex scene.  Also, James did not strike me as the kind of person who would condone to making out sitting on the edge of the pool wall of a strange public pool, which is probably also dirty and very late at night.  This whole scene just didn't add up.  So although the sex was written erotically well to evoke sensual effect of the reader I was turned off due to the lack of believability of characters. It felt more like a cut and past from any of the strictly erotica literature I have read and enjoyed, which do not seek to tell a story.  So I'm not a prude nor overly critical.  Its just that Missus James, your writing of this story had been exceptional in skill until you got to this sex scene, which appeared almost like a cut and paste from the basic sex erotic literature.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: 07/02/11

Title: Chapter 7: Just A Fool

James should have given Tristen the few kisses he requested, what's wrong with her?... it would have been medicinal for his poor broken and pained filled body!

Missus James, thank you for this great story that I am so involved in.  You have captured a huge hunk of life and with your evident talent and superb writing skills, put that life to paper for all to enjoy.

I also learn from this story, about how some people like, James are living such destroyed lives since her birth that it is a nightmare, that she has survived is to her credit and that she is still able to have a small amount even of romantic feelings toward a man, in this case Tristen but, it is also logical that she would have a great amount of thick protective walls to her heart and her general well being. James also still strives to better herself, that she can maintain this hope with all the brutality to her humanity she has sufferd is another credit.

I look forward to seeing what relationship will develop between Tristen and James. 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/02/11

Title: Chapter 6: Monsters, Songbirds, and Weaves

All the violence on Tristen was so unexpected; that Trigger/Pearl would act so soon and so greatly; it scared me a lot and made me feel a little nausea.  I FEEL SO SORRY FOR TRISTEN.  My God, he's a really nice guy who just showed a decent interest in a girl; to receive such painful brutality.  However, there are many police on the payroll of well organized Black drug gangsters so James will have to be careful in contacting them for help.

The personal approach James has done was needed but she will have to come stronger, so some police involvement is needed.  James indication that she possibly has evidence about their organization she could use to pull them down would be a major weapon of help.

I jumped for joy when James whipped Pearl's ass and also loved her scorching her skin.  Finally, to give her just a little of the pain she has inflicted on James all her life! 

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/02/11

Title: Chapter 5: Lesson Learned

Its evident that Pearl hates James, maybe Pearl also came from a severely abused background.  Anyway, James should discontinue seeing Tristen but I dont think she will because so far he treats her like a decent person of human value and he himself appears to be a normal wholesome person, a rarity in James life that she would not want to give up.  Also the romantic or just sensual feelings he raises in her.

Since, James wants to continue removing Pearl's shackles from her, this is actually another reason she should not give up Tristen but she should explain the dangers of the situation to him and let him make the decision. 

I wish James could kill Pearl, she is a very vicious and evil person to have done all the horror to her defenseless daughter's life, especially when she was young.  James is probably emotionally crippled now and I'm amazed she has the little bit of self esteem left that she does have.  

As for Pearl hating the church, I think that may be because in the Black communities too many Churches are just pimps, just a business preying on the sadness and fear of destroyed persons, not giving any real guidance, just profiting by taking their money.  Too often the Church is just another rip off and the worst because it does it under the mantle of God, thus taking away a desperate person's last belief that something good still exists in life.  Accordingly, as I said why Pearl may hate the Church. 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/02/11

Title: Chapter 2: Life is hard

I like this; it's lively and Real.  That turtle under the bed really made me laugh and definitely would have scared me a little as it did the girls.

 

I hope this story eventually tells me why a girl would have a boys name of James.  Anyway, so far I like James's mother Pearl...Yeah!  She was "real" in her confrontation with her daughter.  Definitely reminds me of a few sistas I know.  Pearl takes no prisoner's, she's real, life is indeed hard, no joke!

 

Quinn had a lot of nerve giving out James name and phone number to Tristen, a stranger. I don't like so called friends like that but evidently that's how James and Quinn roll.

 

I liked the bar scene and James response to the guy who came on so liberal and hip, she showed him up as not being as far out as he wanted to impersonate.  Yeah!  You've got to be ready to back up what image your putting down because you might meet someone like James and get called on it!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/02/11

Title: Chapter 3: Snowball's Chance in Hell

Yvonne, the receptionist sure has a filthy disrespectful mouth, maybe she's the office slut.  Anyway, lots of hostility between her and Mark.

 

I like that river song James was sing and yeah so true, often time you don't commit suicide only cause you don't really know what's on the other side!

 

I liked James and Tristen's communication, no pretensions to romance, just responding to human sensuality but thankfully not straight to the bed.  Also, like the lively tempo of the writing here.  I like Tristen took her on a ice cream date instead of a liquor and that he behaved as a gentlemen!

 

Good chapter and characters well drawn, very realistic. 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/02/11

Title: Chapter 4: Why a Songbird Sings

Enjoyed the club scene and the biological information about Melvin and Charles (Trigger) was dynamic.  Also, the no-good character of Pearl, James's mother was very interesting.  All of their histories certainly indicate why there is such a break down of values in many of our Black communities.  Myself being a Black woman years of age beyond the present generations, I have continually been astonished by this break down, so unusual from the generation of the 1960's in which I was raised.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/02/11

Rated: All Ages
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[Reviews - 12]
Summary:

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Two troubled souls meet on a long stretch of highway and discover the road less traveled will lead them back to love.

A one shot for anyone brave enough to take a chance in life

Disclaimer: All characters and original storyline are the property of Renee Banks. I am in no way associated with the creators of any media franchise included in the story. No copyright infringement is intended. 

Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2693
Read Count: 2871
Published: 09/11/10
Updated: 09/11/10


Title: Chapter 1: The Road Traveled

Very nice, I enjoyed this simple delicate tale. Thanks 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/02/11

Rated: Members ONLY: 17 and Older
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[Reviews - 37]
Summary:

Everyone in South Creek, Arkansas knows to stay away from the Dixon farm. No matter how tattered and worn the property may be, no matter how long its been since the true owner was shot dead on his own door step, no one dares to step on that land.

Some say a fierce heathen spirit watches over that plot and not a soul can pass its gates without being known.

Sadly, for Elwyn Connor, he has no choice.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Erotica, Mystery, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:No
Word count: 6914
Read Count: 8127
Published: 24/12/10
Updated: 26/02/11


Title: Chapter 3: Eagle Eye

I was only able to get 3/4 through this chapter, just getting more ridiculous like the previous chapter; giving me a headache, reads like a cartoon but not because its funny.

I don't know why the author bothered to just throw down stuff when for the same amount of time could have wrote some background, plot develoment and character relationship development, to give reason for events and character actions.  I won't continue with this story and hope there will be no updates, this tale needs to terminate. 



Author's Response:

well, harsh but honest. i understand that it's not your cup of tea, but i fully intend to round out these characters. you're right; it is highly unlikely that a Black independent woman in a soveriegn that can barely tolerate her and her kind would not only aide but protect a strange White man that brought drama to her front doorstep. but i was hoping to build the mystery from there. why does she do it? especially after isolating herself for so long.

i do not plan to stop writing this story. that's fine if you don't like it, but i'm writing moreso for me and the handful of others that may enjoy the story. i'm sure there are other authors, professional authors that you don't enjoy reading. do you ask them to stop as well? your critisms have minimal merit and i respect your honesty, but do not ask me to not write on this or terminate my story because you don't care for it and have judged it within the first three chapters.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed half-star
Date: 10/01/11

Title: Chapter 2: Second Chances

Well, looks like this story will not be the good realistic tale I assumed it to be.  Because, its seems quite absurd that a Black woman living alone, isolated on her farm in a racist locale would get involved in fighting the battle of some strange White man who runs onto her property.  And she has now killed other White men and risked her own life in doing so.  Realistically in the very short situation of knowing him, given that she is represented as a hard woman, maybe she could have hidden him ,since he was injured but then ordered him to leave her property.  But, definitely not get in  his gun battle as she did.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstar
Date: 10/01/11

Title: Chapter 1: Have a Little Mercy

Damn!  So far I'm lovin this story, I like it REAL.  And this western that seems post slavery era with an independent Black woman holding to her self respect and independence against the odd's in this town, seems like.  Well, I'm anxious to get to the next chapter and see what happens to this White man done ran onto her property.  I'm glad she shot him, another thing I like about this story, that's realistic, because, he's a stranger and trespasser, I can't understand why he ran up on her property with her holding the gun on him!

 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 10/01/11

Rated: 17 and older
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Summary: Drabble. 

Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: None
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 100
Read Count: 593
Published: 04/01/11
Updated: 04/01/11


Title: Chapter 1: Nothing Else

WOW!  This is the shortest drabble I've ever read, and no character development, more like a short verse.  Interesting, this could also be a description of an LSD trip or hallucination.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarhalf-star
Date: 10/01/11

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 19]
Summary:

A Oneshot by Thespiandiva

Those innocent eyes,

That smile on your face makes it easy to trust you,

If they only knew, the girl with the tattoo, like i do....



Table of Contents
Categories: Music, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2798
Read Count: 2793
Published: 17/01/11
Updated: 17/01/11


Title: Chapter 2: Oh yeah i knew...

Great tantalizing writing, nicely done, not vile.

I really enjoyed it and I liked the realism.  For a short story the characters of Benjamin and Alisa were well drawn, a capsule view of completeness.  

Benjamin made me really smile, he got an unexpected turn on; seems his brother correctly knew what he needed.  That sex with Alisa was really HOT! 

This could be extended I think into a nice story about Benjamin, but not including Alisa as a major character. 

Alisa, is racially a Black Russian, that's interesting, I was not aware of such existed. 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/02/11