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[Reviews - 51]
Summary:

Keny is the lead singer of Fear of Self, and she's in love with her long time friend, Kirk. She wants to tell Kirk everything. Every feeling she has for him, but she's afraid of heartbreak and rejection. As Fear of Self goes to tour, she's glad she left everything behind. Until they come back to their hometown after a two month tour, she sees the former love of her life with another woman.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 22
Completed:No
Word count: 35340
Read Count: 17370
Published: July 18 2014
Updated: December 28 2017


Title: Chapter 14: Pettiness

Really, Really.  Ooooh, I hope his wife isn't sleep and she catches his behind having sex with Harley and then leaves him and takes his money with him along with Harley's father cutting her off and leaving this partnership with Richard.  I hope his son left and told his mom that Harley is at her house.  Please let them get caught and shit hit the fan.  I hope he is left with nothing.  Kirk sister and spouse takes over the business leaving him virtually begging for scraps.  Not only are you cheating on your wife but you are trying to pass your hoe off on your son to keep sexing her up.  Aww Hell Nawl.  That is an incident that his wife needs to come up out of her purse on. 

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Date: August 06 2014

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Summary:

Zoey Vance woke up in the hospital with no memory of her life before that moment. She doesn't even know her own name. Now she has to try and put the pieces of her life back together with the help of the man who hit her with his car that fateful night. As her memories start to return she wonders if she is better off not knowing who she really is. 

Brian Preston is consumed with guilt, the woman just ran out into the street with no warning. He coudln't avoid hitting her. He feels it is his personal responsibility to care for her until she can care for herself and moves her in with him and his fiance, Macy. As time wears on he starts to wonder if he wants her around to ease his guilt or if there aren't bigger emotions at play.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 33
Completed:Yes
Word count: 77720
Read Count: 103524
Published: July 19 2014
Updated: October 14 2018


Title: Memories Lost

I wonder if Derek is going to be in her corner though when the news hits.  He seems like a guy that likes clean cut and Brian is more the ride or die guy.  He will be by your side through anything.  I want to see how that plays out.



Author's Response:

Hmmm...interesting assessment. Thanks for reading!

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Date: April 10 2015

Title: Chapter 20: Jealous

Adam is a distraction from Brian.  Brian does need some time not in a relationship before pursuing Zoey.  Dang Danica, hot pants.  Everybody doesn't want to just sleep or date everyone.  She's trying to get her life together again.  Give the child a moment.  Once she feels established then she can rock the boat with Adam or Brian.

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Date: February 17 2017

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[Reviews - 149]
Summary:

 

 

Neymar Jr was used to getting everything he wanted and he had everything...except Jourdan Morris



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: BDSM, Character Death, Crackfic, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Femdom, Femslash, Fluff, Gimp, Graphic Violence, Homosexuality, Incest , Kink, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Sexual Content , Spritualism, Strong Sexual Content , Teacher/Student, Threesome+, Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 19
Completed:No
Word count: 34990
Read Count: 30340
Published: July 27 2014
Updated: October 13 2014


Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

That was good chapter.  It was nice, no real drama though Bruna/Bruno etc is about to be real ticked that she will be next to Neymar all of the time.  She had her nerve trying to come at Jourdan that way.  All of them are immature at this point.  I hope their is a rule about dating amongst players so she can get out of a relationship with any of them.  Wouldn't that be great, both David and Neymar are shut out d/t team rules.  Wonder how this will play out between the three.  I hope she doesn't get trampled because no matter how much the guy deserves it or is the biggest D, it is always the girl that gets tarred with the feathers.  In her naivete hope that doesn't happen to her.

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Date: August 06 2014

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

Okay, I think she needs to slow down.  She doesn't know David.  Just because he isn't flashy like Neymar doesn't mean he doesn't do his own dirt as well.  He went from shy boy to assertive man too quick for him not to be a player underneath.  I think she needs to tell David that I want to be friends right now and then as time goes maybe, maybe progess to something more.  She can't flip flop like that.  She needs to talk to someone, not Alessandra, someone with some common sense about this situation.  She had an instant dislike for Neymar based upon what she saw, not who she knows.  Now to push him away she is looking at David.  Unfortunately, girls who have been sheltered or focused on one thing to the point of all else goes thru this late stage of adolescence.  Instead of getting multiple crushes out of the way when she was 12 and would have never considered having sex, just possibly kissing, she is going thru this stage right now and with more freedom, comes more serious stuff like losing her virginity while drunk.  Hope she grows up and doesn't do anything with David at all.  Isn't she only here for the tournament anyway.  Doesn't she go back home soon.  How coud she think about liking any of them unless she is planning to relocate.  She is international :)

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: August 05 2014

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 22]
Summary:

This story takes place after the Winchester brothers stopped the trials to close the gates of Heaven and angels have fallen to earth. Unsure of what is to happen next they do as they have always done and search for supernatural crimes.

Sam and Garth come across a heart attack victim with evidence of electrocution. While Dean isn't convinced that the incident is a case, he goes along for the famous Texas barbecue.

What he gets is an encounter with his lost love, Cassie Robinson, and a chance at a new meaning of forever.



Table of Contents
Categories: Primetime Television
Characters: Cassie Robinson
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Cassie/Dean (Supernatural)
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 5
Completed:No
Word count: 13184
Read Count: 20371
Published: July 29 2014
Updated: October 07 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - The Love Bug

I am so happy to see this.  I always thought their relationship wasn't explored to it's fullest.  They always gave him I felt the women who couldn't  handle the job vs the one who would be able to stand by his side.  They would be so explosive together.  Supernatural had teased me when they made this a temp couple in the beginning of the show and no one has compared since.  Hope she makes a reappearance but I am probably wasting my breath.  This is so realistic of Dean's character and how he would do a relationship now that I applaud your writing.



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 30 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 115]
Summary:

tbk


Camille Jones accepted society's problem with her body long ago. Yet, she can't help the insecurity felt when approached by gym owner Ryan Kahuna, he was most women's wet dream. He could have any woman he wanted. 


Including her.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Erotica, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Extreme Language, Fluff, Kink, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 5
Completed:No
Word count: 11368
Read Count: 16318
Published: July 30 2014
Updated: August 28 2014


Title: Chapter 2: Gym Rat

I like it.  Just saw the crossfit 2014 competitions over the past wknd and these girls are strong and the men are hot.  Which one is married to a black girl?  Wonder if he was in the competition.  Was actually thinking about getting into that myself next year maybe.  The length felt good.  It wasn't too much.  I like the fact you are also including how we can stereotype others who are in "shape" according to society.  You choose for you what you want and there is guaranteed someone out there who will bite.  Confidence is the key but it is also the hardest to obtain.  Good job.



Author's Response:

I've never watched the competition, but I think I've seen pictures. I know that the man who is married to a black woman (i think his instagram name is motivation88 or something) has a youtube channel with his wife and thats how I found them! You should totally compete and let us all know your progress it's such an amazing journey that takes a great amount of dedication and physical/mental determination. I think it's awesome! Go for it:)

 

I've always felt that in the stories I read we kind of place fit people on a pedestal and they're sort of kept there while heavier individuals have to climb mountains to sort of deserve them, I didn't want that for Ryan and Camille, but they still have their own personal biases to get over in the end. 

 

Thank you lajack1. I don't know how you fit such a wonderful review in such a condensed space, but it literally made me feel like poking my chest and wagging my tail in pride!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: July 30 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 4]
Summary:

In this flash fiction piece, a straight laced career woman aims to surprise the more than adventorous love of her life with a special Christmas toy. In the end, she gets more than she bargained for.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Kink, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 3270
Read Count: 1088
Published: August 07 2014
Updated: August 07 2014


Title: Chapter 1: A Miller Tradition

Lovely story, wish there was more.



Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm working on a follow up for these two.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 07 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 17]
Summary:

"I want you to teach me everything you know about sex..."



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Kink, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Teacher/Student, Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 4890
Read Count: 2580
Published: August 30 2014
Updated: October 14 2014


Title: Chapter 1: First Days, Meeting the Boys, and Unwanted Exercise

Hmmm, I am intrigued, curious and lost all in one.  Good Job. 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: August 31 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 13]
Summary:

 

 

One night of passion. That all started with a grapefruit.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Drabbles
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2527
Read Count: 1254
Published: September 25 2014
Updated: September 25 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Play

Really good!!  I enjoyed it.



Author's Response:

Well, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading & reviewing lajack1.

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 26 2014

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[Reviews - 29]
Summary:

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Joshua just wanted to help out his band's singer get over the blues with a little drinking and a little loving- that's all.

Right?

 

****Sexy banner by the one and only Elizablu****



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: Of Steel and Silt
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2939
Read Count: 2714
Published: September 28 2014
Updated: September 28 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Her

Expand, Expand, Expand!!!!   That was freakin' hot.  Whew, time for me a shower.



Author's Response:

I think I shall, lajack1! Did the shower help? :-)

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 28 2014

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[Reviews - 116]
Summary:


   Caleb Garrison has been in love with Grey ever since they were children. He even told his parents while a child that someday he would marry her. However, there was one problem...although adopted, she was legally his sister.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 13
Completed:Yes
Word count: 29115
Read Count: 36926
Published: October 07 2014
Updated: November 05 2017


Title: Chapter 3: Anger * Shame

I really feel for Caleb.  This chapter was so full of emotion that at the end all I could think was "Wow".  He is suffering alone.  There is no one he can talk to about his feelings so he is suffering in silence.  I find it hard to believe that no one can pick up on the reason for his mood.  I know they have been apart but his parent's can't figure out anything, his best friend, no one.  Unfortunately Jenna just got used but her dream came true to be with Caleb probably at least once.  Happy he wasn't drunk enough to not use a condom, but that can be some nasty business messing around with her best friend who is bound to tell Grey the details or at least hint to her.  Is there anyway to undo an adoption?  Is it final?  As far as I am aware when it comes to legalese, nothing is ever truly black and white and a done deal.  Heck if a woman can come and contest a prenup and win, heck there is a lot of possibilities.  Maybe her parents never gave up their parental rights for the adoption to be legal or something.  I really want Caleb to have a happy ever after.  Waiting anxiously for the next chapter. 



Author's Response:

THANKS FOR YOUR LOVELY COMMENT!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 08 2014

Title: Chapter 2: Jealousy

Okay, does no one see this?  Is Grey really clueless and only see him as a brother, because sometimes it seems like she is laying it on thick.  I don't recall my kids saying brother or sister every other sentence.  Hmmm.  Can't wait for more.

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Date: October 07 2014

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[Reviews - 857]
Summary:

 Camille Jackson was rejected since birth over her dark skin complexion. She has grown a tough skin and doesn’t get attached to anyone because of how some people have viewed her without even getting to know her. However Camille opens her heart to a baby in need and for the first six months Camille has grown to love the baby as if she were her own. That is until the baby's biological father comes into the picture.

Hiram Whitfield Jr was brought up in one of the most well known Ku Klux Klan families in the south and as the only son he feels the pressure to carry on his family's tradition. After finishing his prison sentence all Hiram wants to do is change his life for the better and be a good father to his child. If that means being disowned by his bigoted family then so be it. Ironically enough Hiram would have never thought that Camille would be the one to be his rock and strength to do so.

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Inspirational
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters
Series: None
Chapters: 51
Completed:Yes
Word count: 107887
Read Count: 215321
Published: October 09 2014
Updated: October 25 2015


Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 30

I like the pace of your story.  It is realistic and by proceeding this way, we don't have any dips in action really.  Each chapter has provided us insight into them as people.  I know I feel like everyone is a breathing, living person whether good or bad.  This allows us to feel the characters emotions even more if it was simply fast paced and no background.  This is a great story.

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Date: January 14 2015

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 6

Poor Hiriam,  I see so much trouble coming his way.  Now some new thot is coming into the picture who will try twice as hard to get with him especially because she fet rejected before when he wanted to date a Jew but now a dark black chick.  Oh hell nawl, she is going to throw the biggest bitchfest ever.   We always think about how minorities can't get away from their pasts in trying to make a new start, this is a different view.  He can't seem to get away from Klan to make a new beginning that doesn't include hate.  I felt it was very key how the nephew wanted to take his son to a klan rally.  I always believed hate, prejudices etc is a learned behavior, we are not born with hate in our hearts. 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 16 2014

Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 9

well it looks like Debbie psycho cake is about to be let loose.  She really think her birthday cake is soo good that he will be blown away.  Hoe, the reason he don't want you is because your vajayjay is floppy.  He knows others have been there, many others.  That is not attractive.  If he went his own way before what makes you think he will succomb to you now.  He's not even talking to his momma because of her racist viewpoints about his child.  She is seriously delusional if she thinks harming his child will bring him closer to her.  If I knew how to do gifs I would so have Kat Williams WTF face right now.  Matter of fact, it would be a billboard size sign above the whole klan meeting.  Looking forward to more Camille and Hiram.  I would hope Hiram finds himself somewhere decent to stay, food, clothing so he can feel more accomplished.  I would expect they would hit at his pride to try to bring him into the fold once again.  Just writing out loud.  Want to see how you develop their relationship in this racially divided town. 

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 22 2014

Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 12

Awww, darnit, ish about to hit the fan.  This bish can't accept the word no.  So freakin' self-entitled.  Debbie you do not have the personality or anything that Hiram wants in his woman.  Camille is kind, caring, compassionate, a good mother in Hiram's eyes and when he finds out she is a virgin.  That he would be the only one to touch and feel the vajayjay!!! Bish you REALLY don't have a chance.  I hope Camille and Hiram can stand the heat that is about to be thrown at them.  Camille is so innocent when it comes to men and it is ashamed that her own race has made her feel vulnerable and unbeautiful for being a dark complexioned beauty, when she should have been uplifted for these same traits.  So much more to find out about these two.   Their journey will be interesting. 

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Date: October 27 2014

Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 20

Always love a little self exploration.  Nice to know she knows what an orgasm feels like.  Now I can't wait for the moment when their feelings culminate one night.  Anyway, does anyone else remembers the hunting lodge.  I question their safety so far away from town.  It feels like this move is bringing them closer to Hiram's dream.  Hiram needs to teach Camille how to shoot first and ask questions later after they are wounded.  Love the story and progress between Hiram and Camille.  Hope our girl is strong enough to weather the storm still heading their way because I know Debbie has not given up.  Now it is really about pride.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 20 2014

Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 24

Her family is trifling, sad, low down ridiculous.  I honestly can't blame the kids so much because hell look at the mother and father of them.  I think the best thing for Camille was being put up for adoption because if she would have lived with them, they would have made her miserable every day of her life and she wouldn't be the Camille we love now.  Everybody is in our life for a purpose, we just need to figure out what it is God is trying to teach us.  That isn't always easy but it is a necessity.  The best comeuppance for her family is to realize, no matter how "light" you are, you are still a black person in America.  Now there are many ways that can be shed onto this family from being addressed as the N word or being harrassed but they need a wake up call.  But Camille and Hiram, love it.  Now the question becomes what the hell are those witches up to now in Hiram's family.  Oh, would love if Hiram was awarded custody of his nephew.  People never have a mind of their own these days.

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Date: December 07 2014

Title: Chapter 29: Secound Act

Sounds like a good second act to me.

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Date: December 18 2014

Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 33

Actually, I wish they could move now.  Have Hiram take over the deli business and Camille find her a position as a nurse somewhere in NY so they can leave before these punk behinds attempt to mess up their joy.  They have to go thru the courts to get Stevie though during this time, it probably wouldn't be too hard to take him and disappear as no one but her family knows where the Keller's are now.  I keep reading the next chapter thinking soon the confrontation will come and I hope with everything that they make it past it and go on to live a great life. 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 03 2015

Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 36

Now I am waiting for that confrontation with Ruth and his sisters to realize they have black blood running thru their veins and she slept with a black man and bore him children.  Please let me be a bee buzzing around that.  I hope Abrams wife leaves him to wallow in his soon to be self-pity and anguish because this could have been avoided if she would have just left him alone, instead of Abrams or his wife sitting her down and disciplining this girl they let her run amuck.  How did Abrams not know his girl was a ho?  He had to have heard snippets of conversation.  I hope they are brought up on federal charges of hate crimes and then local charges of assault and battery, intent to kill, burglary and anything else they can get so they can all go away for a long time.  Let the rest of the town grow and prosper so no more Klan mentality is welcomed into the town.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 09 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 12]
Summary:



Summary: Modern Love Story
Zane was just hitting his stride in the modeling world. He had good friends and family and he enjoyed being able to support himself. However he didn't have one inkling of how hard it was to maintain happiness and good fortune in a world of sycophants and envious frenemies until that fateful night. Yet on that same night he discovered that there were still good people in the world, one person in particular in whom he may have found paradise. Although both of them have their struggles they will soon discover through passion and turmoil how to make love thrive in a modern world.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Action-Adventure , Comedy , Erotica, Mystery, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:No
Word count: 9914
Read Count: 4148
Published: October 14 2014
Updated: October 29 2014


Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Aww, hell nawl.  LOL, he fainted with a hard on.  ROFLMAO.  Whew, that right there brought tears to my eyes.

Thank you for that.  Can't wait for the lessons to start.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you. 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 17 2014

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[Reviews - 298]
Summary:

 

Elle always played it safe. She was used to being in control. Every accomplishment in her life was meticulously planned. The only thing she didn't have reign over was her stale love life. When an old flame from a past complicated relationship comes back into her life, she soon finds out everything doesn't go as planned---and that secrets will always come to light.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 28
Completed:No
Word count: 78339
Read Count: 69608
Published: November 03 2014
Updated: March 09 2015


Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19

That was sooo dirty Elle, but I like!!  Good chap and I see Randall is going to be a problem.  When big money is involved, everyone likes to pretend they don't see anything happening.  She need to set Randall straight from the beginning.  This is my job, I don't date clients and i definitely don't date anyone who interferes with my money.  Let's move on now....

Great chapter.  Elle is really discovering some sexuality there.



Author's Response:

Elle was a bit deviant this chapter. I thought it was about time for her to show another side of herself, so I’m glad you like. I also like your take on how she should handle the Randall situation, you make an excellent point. Thanks for reviewing lajack1!

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 14 2015

Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21

Dang I love me some Dean!!!!  I love me some him (in my Toni Braxton voice).  He most definitely got skills and had her forgetting everything.  If that darn alarm didn't ring, he would be ringing dem bells all night long :).  So let's see what pervy randy will be up to at this meeting in the morning.  I still wonder why Elle is so hesistant to claim Dean.  I mean you cooking for the man and you can't say he's mine.  I might be offended if I was him and aware of these conversations.  Once he sexes that up, let's see what tune she singing then.  Otherwise she saw how he could get someone else, who was typically a gold digger but liked the loving and stayed.  Hmmm, I think if he had ole girl hooked with lackluster performance, once he gets with Elle, she will be walking bowlegged, sitting on a donut at the office and needing an epsom salt bath.  Just sayin'



Author's Response:

When I got this review, I was in the dentist office hollering.

Walking bowlegged? Sitting on donuts? Epsom salt baths?

I. Can’t.

I agree. Elle is definitely schleep on Dean’s skills. Hopefully she’ll open up a little more to let him show her what he’s clearly capable of. Thanks so much for reviewing lajack1!

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 23 2015

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