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[Reviews - 279]
Summary:

 

Elle always played it safe. She was used to being in control. Every accomplishment in her life was meticulously planned. The only thing she didn't have reign over was her stale love life. When an old flame from a past complicated relationship comes back into her life, she soon finds out everything doesn't go as planned---and that secrets will always come to light.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 28
Completed:No
Word count: 78339
Read Count: 64612
Published: November 03 2014
Updated: March 09 2015


Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21

Dang I love me some Dean!!!!  I love me some him (in my Toni Braxton voice).  He most definitely got skills and had her forgetting everything.  If that darn alarm didn't ring, he would be ringing dem bells all night long :).  So let's see what pervy randy will be up to at this meeting in the morning.  I still wonder why Elle is so hesistant to claim Dean.  I mean you cooking for the man and you can't say he's mine.  I might be offended if I was him and aware of these conversations.  Once he sexes that up, let's see what tune she singing then.  Otherwise she saw how he could get someone else, who was typically a gold digger but liked the loving and stayed.  Hmmm, I think if he had ole girl hooked with lackluster performance, once he gets with Elle, she will be walking bowlegged, sitting on a donut at the office and needing an epsom salt bath.  Just sayin'



Author's Response:

When I got this review, I was in the dentist office hollering.

Walking bowlegged? Sitting on donuts? Epsom salt baths?

I. Can’t.

I agree. Elle is definitely schleep on Dean’s skills. Hopefully she’ll open up a little more to let him show her what he’s clearly capable of. Thanks so much for reviewing lajack1!

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 23 2015

Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

Elle, Elle, Elle, Elle.  What more is there to say.  It has been two freakin' weeks and you still haven't talked to Dean but want to stalk his house like he stole you momma's wedding dress.   What do you expect?  You weren't official in the first place so he can do what he damn well please.  Second, you still haven't apologized for the bitchy behavior you have displayed years ago and even more recently.  C'mon now.  You are a professional, an executive, bring it baby.  It is time to transfer some of them balls you have at work to your personal life.  Call the man, set up a date b/c he is foine and if you don't obviously as you don't understand the whole story, someone one will realize he is a catch.  You betta move it, move it.  You betta move it, move it.  You betta move it, move it.  You betta MOVE YOUR ASS!!  Out here trying to play Nancy Drew.  Shame, shame on you.



Author's Response:

By all means, read her. It’s necessary.  Elle definitely needs to assert her career savviness into her love life before she loses her chance at companionship. Thanks for reading, reviewing and going off on Ms. Foster.

SN: Was that a Dreamgirls reference? Cause if so, I’m here for it.

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 07 2014

Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13

She betta come with her A game because right now, she is batting 0 for real.  I can't believe her sometimes and Tracie, regardless, if she has never had weed before any decisions she make are impaired.  Also she was feeling bad/low after seeing Josie leave Dean's house in provocative clothing so of course she is going to want something to help her feel better.  Elle, get your stuff together.  As they say it is time to either piss or get off the pot.  She is out opportunities if whatever her plan is fails.  Hope she can be mature and simply tell Dean the truth.



Author's Response:

The prior incidents leading up to showing up drunk at Dean’s definitely fueled her actions.  But that’s not making her look any better and she’ll have to make up for that in the near future. As always, thanks for giving it to Elle straight no chaser, reading and reviewing lajack1.

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 12 2014

Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14

Oh Elle, that ache isn't going anywhere honey.  It is there to stay until you husband that man and then it turns into another feeling.  Goodness, she threw me too Dean with the friend zone pass.  Maybe it is best that she gets her stuff together so when she is ready she will go in and knock b*tch out like fight night.

 



Author's Response:

You've been scouting Dean for a minute, Elle better watch her back lol. Yeah, she does have some loose ends in her life that need tying before stepping into something else. As always, thanks for your Migos reference, reading and reviewing lajack1.

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 18 2014

Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

Hmmm.  So Dean I would say you were getting some stress relief but how you described that last encounter with Katie, it sounds like you would've done better working out then jacking off.  I wonder what the text said so I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter plus what has Elle really been doing.  Is she trying to fix herself for a relationship with Dean or is her head still in the sand.  I think Katie might be a catalyst but I don't know in which direction Elle would go.  She is your girlfriend that you love, but look her like 😒😔😞😩.  Again I am curious to how you are going mature Elle in the relationship department.  I like Dean's character.  He is the strong silent type sometimes but also the sweet, shy guy.  I just think Elle throws him completely off balance and don't worry Dean I am on the same boat as you.  



Author's Response:

So you caught the dissatisfaction? Yeah, he might've been better off with some lotion and imagination in that department. More details on the texts & Elle’s emotional state will be revealed next chapter.  And Katie is strictly a stress relief---for now *manically laughs*. Yeah, I think Dean’s character is what has everybody ready to kick some sense into Elle. There’s just something about him. Thanks for reading and reviewing lajack1.

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 20 2014

Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 16

This girl.  Well she is about to see he is moving on or at least what it appears to be and will be all in her feelings despite being the one to push him away.  She still can't call and leave a voicemail at least.  The text at this time is so impersonal.  *sigh*  about to be an entertaining event.



Author's Response:

Oh, it’ll be interesting for sure. Thanks for reading and reviewing lajack1.

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 24 2014

Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 24

Awww, Elle letting her feelings come out now.  I am so happy.  Now all we need is for a**face to leave her the heck alone.  I would tell that secretary he is to always be announced and waiting for me in the conference room with plenty of camera's and hell I'll have the secretary in there too to take notes on the meeting , in case he forgets anything and she can send him a write-up later.  Bish please, this is a workplace, not a club or something.  I would also prep the resume and think about starting my own business, taking their clients with me. 

 



Author's Response:

Apparently, A**face would get everybody’s hands judging by a few of these reviews. Great points about how to handle the situation. Let’s hope Elle implements further action in keeping him in check. Thanks for reviewing lajack1!

CG

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 08 2015

Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27

Is it just me or do I see a swing somewhere in their future.  IJS they have obviously found a position that takes them past the mortal plane.  I love Dean's character because like many men, he is versatile and has many different sides.  Love how he is quietly confident.  Then in the bedroom, takes control.  Elle betta hold on tight to him in more ways than one and keep getting the lady lovebug stroked right. 

Now RP needs to RIP b/c he just like ignorant females who doesn't understand that no means no.  No doesn't mean for you to try harder especially when you are a douche.  Go back to them gold digging tricks you have been around and leave Elle alone.  Part of me thinks RP just wants to have sex with her 1) because she isn't interested in him at all 2) because she is with Dean and I feel there is some competition going on with him 3) and of course I think he finds her attractive or "exotic" as they say.  He wants to know what she has that has made Dean pant after her.  Classic case of my penis is larger than yours BS.

Keep them coming and happy you are doing better now.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: March 10 2015

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Summary:

Ezekiel's parents took extreme measures to keep him hidden from his controling racist grandfather.  Ezekiel was adopted and raised by Rosa a black woman and his life is now about to take a drastic change.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 11832
Read Count: 39377
Published: November 06 2014
Updated: June 17 2015


Title: Ezekiel Black

Loved the conversation with the good reverend.  Rosa must also stop name calling because only God can judge when we are true Christians but I know that little devil on your shoulder is ready to hog tie Grandpa and put him in a tub of Holy Water while performing an exorcism.  I am really waiting to see how you endear Grandpa to us and loved how LapDonna wasn't anyone's fool in this by maneuvering Mrs Greene to be present.  Just wish she wasn't in a rush for Zeke to have sex with her as a way to validate her worth to him and her own ideas of attractiveness.  Him wanting to wait before sex shows just how much he loves you than just freakin' you down.  She need to pray.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 17 2014

Title: Ezekiel Black

I am a little disappointed in Zeke in this chapter.  He wasn't receiving good information from his friend or Willoughby.  I hope he can stay strong and honestly he needs to set boundaries on where he is willing to go with Willoughby.    I hope LaDonna and Rosa are not hurt by these two. Zeke is a man now and he wanted to step into a man's territory in dealing with his granddad so he has to either put his will in motion or let his grandfather corrupt him and everything good in his life. Can't say sorry and feel remorse when LaDonna is married with kids to another man or Rosa no longer welcomes his visits like she used to.  Hope Zeke can regain his center before heading back to the Lion's den. He needs these weekends to regroup and be normal. Great story. Trials and Tribulations.



Author's Response:

A lot of times our closest friends don't give good information.  Zeke has been celebate for a reason.  That reason slipped from his mind because of all the unexpected stimulation that Willoughby threw at him.  He will regroup.  One stumble is not a fall and Zeke is stronger than that.  Willoughby may have won a small battle, but not the war. 
Stay tuned!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 14 2014

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1-2

So he still hasn't learned his lesson.  You just drove your son away and practically killed him with your bullshit and now you are about to do it again.  He knew Zeke knows all about him but Ladonna doesn't.  LaDonna, you better tell Zeke so he can handle this.  Whatever plans you have you betta keep and forget this mofo.  Another winner here Brenda1257.  This man got my BP rising.  I'm gonna have to look at pictures of Dwayne Johnson to bring it down.

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Date: November 07 2014

Title: Ezekiel Black


I may be in the minority here but I loved Grandpa in this chapter.  He was so quintessentially flustered and bewildered it was too funny.  I was ROFLMAO at him. When he kept asking Frank question after question during the service, whew tears in my eyes by the end. He has ran into something he truly doesn't understand and therefore can't manipulate it.



Author's Response:

LOL  I love grandpa too.  He doesn't have a clue beyond his own little world.  More is coming!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 13 2014

Title: Ezekiel Black

Now that is just Nasty.  He should have known Zeke would never want a trick that has been with his grandad.  Does his grandfather have any morals.  You want a woman who is okay with you sleeping with both her and her daughter.   Ridiculous!!!



Author's Response:

Grandpa doesn't have a clue.  These are some of the 'finer things in life' he wants to expose Zeke to.  LOL

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: November 13 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 95]
Summary:

 

 

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Joss just knows this summer will change her life... If she can manage to tolerate her bunk leader 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Fluff, Original Characters, Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 14449
Read Count: 15845
Published: November 08 2014
Updated: May 06 2016


Title: Chapter 10: Secrets Out

How many more weeks of summer left before they can be open?  I don't want Obie to lose his job but hey something's are worth it to the person and I always believe, if one door closes, God has another one opened that is probably better for you anyway.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 15 2015

Title: Chapter 4: Swim Test

I am interested to see how you plan on having Tobias help her overcome her inhibitions and become more confident.  I understand we want her to have an honest reflection and assessment of her body, values and goals but what will push her to that point.  Right now she is so entrenched in this altered view of herself that I am not sure even Tobias is enough to give her 20/20 eyesight, despite how drool worthy he looks and sounds (picturing Barry White voice when he speaks).  Great chapter.  I wonder if it is required of all campers to see a psychologist as part of their program?  I feel like their is one specific event in her life that really gave her this viewpoint that she can't shake right now.  Sorry, don't live in Portland but I can be a great pen pal ;).  Keep these chapters coming.

 



Author's Response:

As I said before I'm still figuring it out but reviews like this point me in a good direction. You've given me some things to think about for upcoming chapters.

All the campers do see Tobias but only as a nutritionist. Joss is the only one he's giving unrequested doc time to. Although if I ran a camp like this, all the campers would be seeing a psychologist.

I'm gonna be the loneliest kid in Portland so I might take you up on that penpal offer

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 03 2014

Title: Chapter 7: First Things First

Go Rosie,  teach ole girl some moves.  Tobias won't know what hit him.  I absolutely love Tobias.  He is what she needs.  He understands her issues and will probably be one of the few boys who would have patience with her.  Can't wait to see how they progress in future chapters. 



Author's Response:

Tobias is perfect for her. I think she's gonna learn a lot about herself this summer.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 31 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 10]
Summary:

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Tara's got her bottle of gin but she needs guy advice from Joshua, her bandmate and friend. She may get more than she bargained for...

 

Banner by Elizablu (of course!)



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: Of Steel and Silt
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 4470
Read Count: 1457
Published: November 12 2014
Updated: November 12 2014


Title: Chapter 1: Lock Haven, PA

Hot!!  Did she say his name while she was dreaming or having an alcohol induced vision.  Whew, there is most definitely something there.  Nice to see a little backstory about them.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you, lajack1. There will be more backstory to come!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: November 12 2014

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Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 128]
Summary:

There is such structure in life. But what happens when you break free? What exists beyond that prison?

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Accordance is a original work by CM and is intended for publication so please do not upload, distort, edit, or remove and place on any other site. Respectfully yours, thank you. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: None
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:Yes
Word count: 2400
Read Count: 97160
Published: November 23 2014
Updated: June 24 2019


Title: Accordance

I have just read the last three Hanami parts and I have to admit, I just didn't know what emotion to hold onto.  I was pissed and wanted to slap the hell outta his momma asking dumb ass questions.  Bish YOU and my freakin' sperm donor are the reason why I hate YOU. I am totally confused on how she thinks that Rae has anything to do with why he singing IDFWY as a reincarnated Big Sean.  Then this new chick trying to play the innocent role.  Bish, you don't force your way into his circle and then claim you just wanna be friends.  I've known you for 2 minutes and you already trying to be real familiar.  Sounds like a set up if I ever heard one.  Yes Roto, keep your eyes and ears open.  Don't trust the chick, don't trust the chick.  His parents, mostly his momma can see how Rae is innocent and think it is the innocence that Emi didn't have that attracts Roto when no Bish, it is her personality and the fact she doesn't WANT anything from him but him.   Ya know, being real, keeping it 100.  Instead you sending people who have hidden agenda's, he can see thru that.

And when I got to the last one and he shared just how low down dirty SOB's his parents actually are.  12, 12, seriously 12 and to send him to be violated like that.  I was wishing for an Oz remake with the house falling on that witch.  OOOO, my BP went sky high.  Lawd, I wanna whoop some ass and use that darn Kendo sword to do it.

Great writing.



Author's Response:

*falls off bed laughing* lajack1, you had me on the floor. I AM SO DONE. DONEEE I TELL YOU. BWAHAHAHAHAHAHHA. WOOO GIRL. YOU HAD ME FLAT OUT lol!!!! BWAHAAAA! Your review is like... everything like.... stop it lol!!! I love how real you keepin it~ <3 I agree with everything you've stated hehe. And girl I'd get me a bokken and join you too! BAM! Hiro was a baby and they made him do such disgusting things... UGH.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 13 2015

Title: Accordance

 I love this story and the teasers :).  I am just curious to Hiroto parent's goals?  I mean you want him to have sex with this girl for what?  Is this to marry her, then why not wait til marriage?  Doesn't she come across as a thot, sexing him for some money or position?  I mean did they expect for him to be happy with this?  Is this what happened between his mother and father and why continue the torture?  I really feel for Hiroto because yes, Rae was sent away by herself but it was out of protection and love while Hiroto has his parents presence in his life but he is subjected to greed, lies and poison.  I hope one day he can break free and your teaser gives me hope but I feel bad for the amount of heartbreak these two will endure.  

Ughh, they sold him for a month of the summer.  Really, really.  Ridiculous.



Author's Response:

hehe thank you lajack1 <3 You pose really good questions! What exactly is their gain and purpose for forcing his son to have sex with so many women??! Yes one day Hiroto shall be free but the cost for freedom in his life will be hard. Yeah his parents are disgusting. ABSOLUTE. 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: March 15 2015

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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 136]
Summary:

Dig

 

Avery "Hades" Jones is the number one producer in the metal and hardcore music game. She's more talented with any instrument she lays her hands on than most of the popular bands and every record she touches turns to gold.

Then why doesn't she have the respect she so rightfully deserves?

When her good friend Adam Nuro invites her to tour with his number one band to play with his band while featuring some of her songs, she hops at the chance.

But the opportunity presents more challenges than she was ready for, obstacles that threaten to break her.

Will Avery make her dreams come true? Will her adoptive band support her?

And what has been following them since day one?

 

Shout Out to Elizablu for the Banner



Table of Contents
Categories: Music, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe, General, Supernatural
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Horror, Mystery, Psychological, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Crackfic, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Kink, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Threesome+, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 10
Completed:No
Word count: 23829
Read Count: 17613
Published: November 30 2014
Updated: February 14 2016


Title: Chapter 8: Old Black Crow

Whew, my mind is blown.  You have just turned this story up a notch and I can't wait to see what happens now. 

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Date: February 27 2015

Title: Chapter 4: Butterflies of Steel

Ohhh, so they have never, ever took it past a look.  Hmmm, things just got more interesting. 

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Date: December 03 2014

Title: Chapter 6: Only in Dreams

One word, Intense!

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Date: January 12 2015

Title: Chapter 5: Rumours of War

Wow, so she knew Adam was sleeping with other women but now it was in her face that it happened.  It is no longer over there, gray, it's Black and white.  I would sue Fader for assault and battery bitch and see how well you do on the inside for a month.  Happy they got their ass handed to them by the other members.  What the hell is Adam protecting her from.  He can't get mad when she turns to C.J. for comfort.  Wonder what went thru his mind to see them snuggled together, probably the same stuff that went thru her mind with him and the blond.  Think she may give into temptation one of these days with C.J.   

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 18 2014

Title: Chapter 2: Shut Up and Metal

Okay, it is interesting that they are each other's heart but yet they are not together.  I am not a metal head so this story will take me on an interesting and new journey.   Why do I think that CJ will become an issue as well as one of the women he may make love to will come to light.  I actually like to think that one of the other women will be someone Adam has seen consistently for needs met.  This will also hinder their relationship.  Why do I feel this tour will put their relationship thru some strain and if their feelings and hearts will survive.  This is me with evening imagination.  Looking forward to you expanding my horizons.



Author's Response:

Welcome to the ride! This is definitely going to be a huge test for Adam and Avery and it may push them into certain actions they may not like. We shall see what being on the road for two and a half months does for them. Thanks so much for reading!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 01 2014

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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 53]
Summary:

He was a bad boy who was used to getting whatever he wanted.

She was the good girl who refused to bow down to his ways.

Together they clashed.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Dark Fic
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:No
Word count: 9292
Read Count: 10607
Published: December 01 2014
Updated: March 16 2015


Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: The argument

Darren and Natasha can get the deuces.  They both on some BS.  Darren wasn't giving Natasha the time of day until Callie said something and now he acting like she can do no wrong.  Please Darren get your life together.  She a bully because she won't let you nor Natasha disrespect her in any way.  Please let her go back to her gorgeous self, get her education and let them wallow in their own stupidity and let her start talking to another popular guy.  Let's see what Darren and Natasha say about that.  Please don't have her at the party and how the heck can she avoid Darren when they are in detention together.  Dumbass chick.  Ooooohhhh Darren and Natasha ticked me off this chapter.  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 17 2015

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.