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Summary:

Lia Mariani and Dominic MacCleod were two up and coming leading actors who'd met on set and immediately struck up a friendship.  As the friendship blossomed, they both realized they'd fallen in love with each other.  They were just two chickenshit to admit it because of the differences in their races and his families outdated ideas about black people.  HER parents were afraid of their daughter getting hurt if Dominic decided to bow to the pressure of his families disdain for Lia.  

And hiding in the shadows is a man obsessed with possessing Lia.  Will these outside forces bond them together or tear them apart?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 24
Completed:No
Word count: 40900
Read Count: 138736
Published: April 01 2015
Updated: May 26 2015


Title: Chapter 12: Four Angry Men

Yesss, Mimi, thank you.  Recognizing this dude is coocoo for a cocoa woman.  Call the police, get a restraining order, keep seamus nearby and again some mace, taser etc on hand.  Never get into an elevator alone with him, check the peephole in the door before opening it for anyone and before leaving your apartment.  Again:  Warning should be plastered across his door: This dude is crazy, stay away.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 13 2015

Title: Chapter 11: Shaking Hands with the Devil

If that didn't wake her up to have this guy investigated and to never, eva, be around him alone, I don't know what it.  Who gets mad at an engagement ring and darn near stop all circulation in her hand. 

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Date: April 13 2015

Title: Chapter 23: Mending Fences Part 1

Donal need to divorce her ass.  He deserves someone who loves him and is only using him as a stand in for his brother.  What kind of BS is Irene smoking.  There was something more in her Irish Coffee than whiskey.  He didn't want you, get over it.

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Date: May 24 2015

Title: Chapter 24: A Reprieve From the Insanity

Now I actually feel doubly bad because Donal is or I can at least hope WAS in love with this chick and she prayed on that.  My goodness, does Donal have self esteem issues since his brother seems to be the good looking guy or something?  Does he think he isn't worthy of someone loving ONLY him?  Whew, a mess is exactly right and she has brought children into this sordid BS.  Can I be in the line to whoop Irene's a** behind the other four.  So they don't go to jail, I'll just hop into the story as a non-descript character, whoop her behind and then leave...no one will ever have to know it was me.

I think I would love a conversation between Donal and Dom about their wives and everything that has happened.  They're brothers, aren't they close like Gio is with his fam?

Great update again.

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Date: May 26 2015

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Summary:

 

 

 

 

 

Zaira Jacobs and Eli Jacobs (her son) runs away from their past, from the pain, and from a 6 foot 4 German (Adrian Hitzag).

 

However, Adrian is not too eager to let his beloved mate escape from his grasp.

 

Follow the story of a determine mother, a curious son, and a possessive German.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: BDSM, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 8
Completed:No
Word count: 24066
Read Count: 43520
Published: April 01 2015
Updated: January 07 2016


Title: Chapter 5: The Calm before the Storm [4]

Why do men think that crap is sexy?  Do not come at me and touch me without my expressed wishes.  Zaira trying to keep herself safe has just ran into the hands of the enemy and I hope Colin retains enough sense not to touch her himself.  How would he feel if it was his made in Hitzag hands? 

Good chapter.  Can't wait until they reunite.

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Date: April 22 2015

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Summary:

Her mistake was underestimating his obsession with her.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Dark Fic
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 24639
Read Count: 40295
Published: April 23 2015
Updated: July 14 2016


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter two

And why do I feel that after he drops her off at home he will return for blond chick for the evening.  If I was Maya, I would have to put on the breaks because 1) he invited you and some chick is hugging up on him and he didn't have a problem with it 2) You've known him for 2 minutes with a general background check and he is already going past first base 3) He is just too plain mature, on a whole nother level than Ms. Maya and I think she will be swimming with the sharks when she should stay with the dolphins.

Let's see how he goes from a gorgeous, sweet God to an avenging angel.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 25 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter one

great start!

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Date: April 23 2015

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Summary:

Despite the absurdity of bargaining with the Almighty while topless and bound in the bedroom of a man whose last name she can’t remember, Diya De la Roy gives God an ultimatum:  Send her a man and a love worth having by next Valentine's Day, or she would give up on both.  Forever.  

Unbeknownst to Diya, she'll get that and more, along with a lesson in how perfectly wicked divine humor can be.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 5
Completed:Yes
Word count: 13212
Read Count: 11185
Published: May 02 2015
Updated: May 02 2015


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - All a Part of His Plan

Hahaha, that was a great read.   Boy, oh boy, them dates she had with the bachelors was too much.  When that man said recycled water, I was like oh no.  I would have ran out the door as well.  I kept thinking of all the women he kissed.  Ewwww.   If I ever get a divorce, I will be alone for the rest of my life, too afraid to even think about dating in this world right now.

Whew.  God doesn't send you what you want, He sends you what you need and He doesn't care about the outside packages.

 



Author's Response:

Exactly.  Thanks Lajack1!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 03 2015

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Summary:

Working as a Home Health Aide and struggling to make ends meet. All Aries Washington wanted to do was prove the child she had three years ago, was in fact the son of Cameron Marino. She didn't have any delusions about them putting their differences aside and falling madly in love. Why would she? Cameron was engaged to her ex best friend Ambrosia, A.K.A Ms. Perfect. So imagine her surprise when he not only demands she moves in with him, but marry him too.

Aries had no idea that once she gave birth to her own little Marino, that, that meant she automatically belonged to the whole Marino family. With a group of people who take their strong family ties seriously, she's about to find out that once your in, there's no out. 

 



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: Marino Family
Chapters: 12
Completed:No
Word count: 19092
Read Count: 53248
Published: May 14 2015
Updated: June 01 2015


Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

As I read this chapter all I could think of is, What kind of mom does Ambrosia have?  Why didn't her mom say anything to her when she dropped out of college?  Isn't her mom a doctor?  Goodness, Ambrosia, you never give up your opportunity to be independent based upon trying to trap a man.  That in and of itself is a plan for potential failure and pitfalls.  Realized, she cant' cut her losses because she put all of her eggs into the Marino basket.  What can she do but go psycho like she is about to.  This man you have slept with since you were 16 is a pedo and needs his behind beat and you know he isn't leaving his wife.  You are the side chick like your dad messes with.  She made my head hurt.

Now I am not too fond of Cameron either.  He knew the torture and hell Aries was going thru and didn't defend her at all when he was just as much a part of the "mistake" and slept with her.  A grown ass man and you couldn't stand up to Ambrosia.  Hell nawl, he would have some begging to do before I even consider him as anything other than this dude who happens to be my son's father.  So you know what, this is karma for him too, that Ambrosia was cheating on him b/c if that is indeed what he did, then hey, you deserve it also to be willfully blind to her mayhem that affected an innocent person.

Great story though and can't wait to read more.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: May 17 2015

Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 10

This chick is straight loco.  Can we say coo coo, coo coo.  My God, the man nor his family members are not responding to your repeated calls.  He didn't leave you for Aries, he left you because he found out you were cheating and that all the miscarriages he mourned for may not have been his.  Girl, get your life together.  Aries just said, she didn't want any drama but I also believe Ambrosia doesn't realize the Aries from before is not the same Aries as now.  She has a child to protect and she will put those paws on you and have you laid out.  I soo hope she does.  Cameron still has some work to do.  I am not sure he is as over Ambrosia as he seems right now.  This is all hurt feelings, ego and pride right now.  What will he do when the dust settles?

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Date: June 01 2015

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Summary:

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Chance Gyllenborgh seems to have it all. A pregnant, loving girlfriend, a close knit family, and great life.

 

Angelina Walker is running. She's a top chef and restaurantuer and a workaholic. She throws herself into work to avoid her personal life. Needing a break, she settles down in a town and meet a variety of different people, including Chance.

 

Things seem great at first glance but Below The Surface is where monsters lie and sociopaths dwell.



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 14
Completed:Yes
Word count: 58269
Read Count: 48920
Published: May 21 2015
Updated: January 22 2016


Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

I'm a little iffy about Asgar and Denise.  I don't know.  If he wasn't a priest, I would feel differently but knowing about what he chose to do when he was an adult, I feel bad he is being tempted by Denise and honestly she appears flighty to me.  I love Chance and Angelina though.  I guess I am also sad her boy toy will be very hurt and that could weigh on Asgar as a Priest.  Hmmm, I'm waitng to see how you set their relationship if they do have one.....as grandma said, don't go putting the cart before the horse now.  LOL.  For a taste, it was very delicious.

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Date: January 18 2016

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Summary:

Appearances can be deceiving



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 20
Completed:No
Word count: 26983
Read Count: 37195
Published: May 30 2015
Updated: June 13 2015


Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I'm really interested in Adele's next move at this point.  I had to delete my previous review and still give it some more thought after reading this story.  Will Adele be moved by his sweetly spoken words, begging when he really has taken the time to think about how his words from before affected her.  How will she analyze the meeting when he kinda kicked her to the curb for his position and now how she will be humiliated in a meeting with clients because she was purposefully not given all of the information.  There are so many other nuances than him liking her and her liking him.  It is also about how he views her as an exception vs the norm.  He had no problem downgrading he when he wasn't attracted to her and that is a problem.  Honestly, anything Gabe says or do will be looked at with a side eye if I was Adele.  You claim one thing but do another repeatedly.  I would also not stay in an environment and waste my talents and hardwork somewhere that will never give me the recognition I rightly deserve.  Why put myself thru that stress?  I would finish out my training and take my expertise to the competition and shine.  The best way to make these individuals take notice is to hit their pocketbooks.

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Date: May 31 2015

Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

This story has me continuously thinking about these two. 

First Adele:  I am soooo happy she is not staying at this firm.  Humphrey's words conveyed exactly what they thought of her and how she would be treated at the firm.  Go to another firm where she has a clear slate and her actions/knowledge/abilities can shine without any additional preconceived notions based upon past looks and commentary.  She was right to leave Gabe standing there looking dumbfounded. 

Second Gabe:  WTH!!  She was being nice to your behind and you just had to open your big ass entitled/white privilege mouth and inserted (I hope for future purposes) big foot right in.  Did you not hear anything she said to you in the car that night?  Did you not hear how dismissive Humphrey was about her skills?  Are you seriously telling me he would stay in a position with a company that he would not get the respect he has earned or deserved?  I don't believe that BS for one minute.  If the shoe was on the other foot, he would be talking to Mommy and Daddy trying to start him up with his own firm.  He has yet to wake up, understand and acknowledge how the commentary he made helped shape her experience with the firm.  Lo and behold, it was ALL ABOUT GABE AND THE PERCEPTIONS HE WANTS TO PORTRAY to the management team versus ANY CARE ABOUT HER SPIRIT/EMOTION/JOY.  He gonna have to get it together and have a coming to Jesus moment before I begin to like him. 

Third Max:  Please don't let him be gay because I will take him in a heartbeat.  Just write me on in to the story and I will befriend Adele, we can hang out together as long as we was going home together.  :)

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: June 04 2015

Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

I keep reflecting on your title Good Fit? and I wonder how will Gabriel become a good fit for her because at this stage he needs improvement.  Adele has gone thru her metamorphosis earlier than expected maybe but she has grown and is very realistic in her view of life and what she wants to accomplish and Gabe seems still viewing things thru entitlement glasses.  Some of the glare has been erased but he still has so much more to go before removing those glasses and having Lasix eye surgery to see things a lot clearer.  I really want to see you take us on his journey to becoming a good fit for Adele if he ever does.  Curious if he will speak with his father or mother about his feelings and relationship with Adele and if they can enlighten him anymore.  Also, why hasn't he spoken to Max?

Oh, thank you for sharing a cultural tradition.  That was a wonderful ceremony.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 06 2015

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Summary:

Rick and Michonne venture out together on a seemingly simple supply run. A one-shot filled with surprises for all Richonne fans. Rating M . WARNING: Heavy sexual content. Make sure to leave your kids.

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Table of Contents
Categories: Primetime Television
Characters: Michonne
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 3125
Read Count: 3233
Published: June 04 2015
Updated: June 04 2015


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was good.  I liked it



Author's Response:

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: June 04 2015

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[Reviews - 225]
Summary:

Part 2



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 11288
Read Count: 22094
Published: June 09 2015
Updated: October 05 2015


Title: Lovers' Dance Part 2

Yay!!! It is back, I am sooo happy they are back.  I really am rooting for a HEA between these two but at this time I don't think Madi has the backbone to deal with Matt's family and honestly I don't think Madi is ready for marriage.  She needs plenty of counseling because her need to be loved has stemmed from her parent's death and the horrible treatment from her relatives that she is emotionally stunted to some degree.  I hope Matt understands that and allows her time to grow while in their relationship. 

Ooooohhhh I hope whatever plans Matt's parents have in store backfire.  How utter ridiculous that they concern more about their status than their son's happiness and the person who brings them joy.  I could understand if Maddie had been disrepectful, loud, obnoxious etc but she hasn't been any of those things.  You can tell she is kind, caring and a sweetheart which tells me that his mom whole statement about not being racist was BS.  You dismissed her qualities because she is black. 

Wonder what rollercoaster ride you will take us on during this sequel.



Author's Response:

Hi Lajack1,

You are so right with Madi being emotionally stunted, but she tries. God love her, she tries. I hope part 2 is just as enjoyable as part 1 was. Fingers crossed I don't lose my mind and assinate all my characters in a tube accident :) 

Thanks for reviewing.

K.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 09 2015

Title: Lovers' Dance Part 2

Wow, Dante, you don't have to date someone for 5 years to know if they are the one for you.  I think this ceremony was great and it will always be remembered because it was just them.  When you love someone and care about their well-being everything else can be worked out and you LEARN how to compromise.  It doesn't happen overnight.  I actually think Matt will calm down now that Maddie has moved in and they are married.  I also hope Maddie talks to her counselor about her feelings of losing herself in Matt's life and maybe they should also do couples' counseling since Matt hasn't had any good role models regarding healthy, mutual loving relationships.  

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Date: September 03 2015

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For all Richonne fans who are looking to work Jessie out of their sytem.  At the end of season 5 when Rick planted a peck on Jessie's cheek, I almost threw my TV out the window. Yeah, I didn't take it well. LoL! Anway, thank goodness for ValentChamber where I can work out my frustrations. Here is my way of erasing that imagery from my mind.  There is some Dasha too. Hope you all will like it and leave comments.

Thank you.



Table of Contents
Categories: Primetime Television
Characters: Michonne
Classification: Off Cannon
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:Yes
Word count: 6393
Read Count: 9934
Published: June 13 2015
Updated: July 05 2015


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: No One Gives a Fuck About You Jessie

Oooohhhh girrrllll, this was a 10 based upon the description alone.  I was soo pissed with that as well.  As I've stated before on another site, if Rick can't see the awesomeness of Michonne then they need to bring in a character for her to get close to.  Rick would lose his everlovin' mind if Michonne isn't there 100% for his damn kids and his ass.  How in da hell are you going to chose this weak, wounded ass chick who would get you and your kids killed versus the sexy woman who has had your back and kept your crazy ass from going off the deep end.   Whew don't get me started about that mess.



Author's Response:

I feel cheated. I so get what you are saying. I keep asking myself the same thing

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 14 2015

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Summary:

Nathaniel Hendricks lived alone in his lakehouse on Lake Michigan spending his days remebering the young son he tracgically lost and the wife who left him when he needed her the most. The only thing that kept him remotely happy was the lake he lived by boating and fishing. He already failed as a father and a husband so why would God give him another chance?

Eden Wilson spent most of her life running from abuse and now as a young adult she finds herself running from an obsessive abusive ex-boyfriend. Not wanting the child she's carrying to be in danger she spends most of her pregancy running until she tries to get in contact with her uncle for help. Eden finds herself with her uncle's friend a lonely handsome man Nathaniel who gives her shelter in a snowstorm. 

Little did either of them know how close the baby would bring them together or how much this little bundle of joy would help them learn about secound chances.



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: On hiatus indefinitely
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 15
Completed:No
Word count: 28561
Read Count: 37464
Published: June 16 2015
Updated: June 14 2016


Title: Chapter 7: JANUARY 29TH 1990

I truly hope Solomon can bring peace, possibly by helping to remove all obstacles in the way of his happiness like Walter, Curtis and Wendy.  I really do not understand Wendy.  Why ask for your dead child's things when you have so called moved on.  Why can't your rich, have it all husband buy new items.  Walter, why do you want your son to have hand me downs with your snobbish behind.  This is just another way to attempt to hurt Nathaniel who has done nothing wrong to either of you.  Karma will definitely, I hope be a bish to all of them, I hope.

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Date: July 12 2015

Title: Chapter 9: CAST

Dang, Nathaniel looks fine...forget Walter scrawny looking self...LOL

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Date: July 21 2015

Title: Chapter 10: FEBRUARY 10TH 1990

How did Curtis find her so quickly with the snow just now melting?  Did someone point him in her direction?  What is Wendy about to do as she see's Nathaniel getting over her and getting close to Eden b/c regardless of how she left him, she doesn't want to see him with another woman and ol' boy just wants Nathaniel to suffer b/c he knew he was second best.  Wendy chose Nathaniel first.  Wonder how he is about to impact her uncle's job. 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: July 21 2015

Title: Chapter 11: FEBRUARY 23RD 1990

No Wendy, it's called " God doesn't like ugly". Which you have been displaying for a long time while Nathaniel has been treated unnecessarily harsh by everyone and when she gets put into her place, the rest of these wishy washy townies should get it too.  How do you believe negative of Nathaniel when Wendy cheated on him, divorced him and had a kid before any papers were signed who was clearly not Nathaniel's, how is he the bad guy again?  Ignorant folks just like my grandma would say.

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Date: July 25 2015

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Summary:

Athena works for an undercover agency, but all she does is sit behind a desk and hack into people's accounts. So when Archie, an agent who loses his brother in a shootout askes Athena to go undercover with him to find his brother's killer, she's a bit hesitant.

How will Athena survive going undercover and "befriending" some of the most dangerous criminals in the city?



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 2265
Read Count: 579
Published: June 18 2015
Updated: June 18 2015


Title: Chapter 1: Operation: Find Andy

Happy Birthday!!!  I wondered if Archie is crushing on Athena then I thought would he want to put the girl he is crushing on out in the field with no experience to possibly get killed.  I mean him and his brother were skilled people and they got hurt.  I won't say his brother is killed until you produce a body.  So I would like to hear from Archie's perspective on why he wants Athena. What can she do for him?  Feel kinda sad for Tasha when a man who is severely injured still tries to get away from you.

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Date: June 18 2015

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[Reviews - 45]
Summary:

Who knew Montana had so many temptations?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Threesome+, Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:No
Word count: 5577
Read Count: 5083
Published: June 21 2015
Updated: June 23 2015


Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2

Yasss!!! Get it Camille.  I say the more the merrier.  Why does a woman in a book only  have to have one man. Let her get her lovin' on.  I can't wait to see how Adam will handle her.  Whoooo, I need a shower from all of my imagining's.  LOL.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 23 2015

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Summary:

Sequel to "Love, God & Ultimatums"



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 38
Completed:No
Word count: 227600
Read Count: 78662
Published: July 03 2015
Updated: May 09 2021


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - T.M.I. (Revised)

I don't know where I have been and why I haven't read this so far but I have to say I think Brandon was unfair to ask Diya about Marisol calling him at that time of night.  You are in a relationship and understand you wouldn't want a man regardless of friend to call her during a time that's reserved for you two.  So hell yeah, tell Marisol to stop calling and break that chain she is attempting to wrap you up in.  She can go to the store and purchase some Melatonin, benadryl to get her behind to sleep.  Hell go the aromatherapy route with some lavender, chamomile, bish you can even do sleepytime tea...you do not need to hear the sound of his voice to get your ass to sleep.  That is done for and she should have known better and been respectful of the relationship.  Obviously from the previous chapter, she is aware he really likes her if he introducing her as his Girlfriend....the former hit it and quit it king.

Now who is this woman that is still causing him so much anguish and if I was Diya, we gonna need some counseling b/c I don't have time to put effort into this relationship and this chick reappears then you waltzing away with her.  That much anguish still present, feels like strong feelings are still involved.  I understand the reticence in speaking about it to her this early in the relationship but the voice.  Hmmmm.



Author's Response:

Lol @ your extensive list of insomnia remedies.  Brandon wasn't asking for Diya's permission to continue the late night calls so much as he was "asking" Diya to trust him.  Now, whether Marisol is an innocent just doing the same thing as she and Brandon have always done remains to be seen.  And yes, Brandon's feelings are still very much affected by what happened with his ex.  Whether that's the extent of it will become clearer as the story progress.  Thanks Lajack1!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: September 17 2015

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.