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Summary:

 

haunted

Her eyes closed and she could see his face behind her eyelids. He was there smirking at her. He was in her blood, in her psyche taunting her and haunting her with every memory of every touch, every look.

The sound of his voice distorted, memories shifting and changing as they often do. Her hero, her love now her enemy and the one she loathes. He was out in the world while she was stuck in place.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Drama, Erotica
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 1518
Read Count: 1017
Published: December 06 2014
Updated: December 06 2014


Title: Chapter 1: ghost.

Liked it.

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Date: December 06 2014

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 63]
Summary:

Felicia Adams doesn't have a regular life. She's a single mother working two jobs trying to keep a roof over her and her son's heads. One of those jobs includes being a webcam girl. She does it all for guys who are too shy to meet girls in reality, from harmless flirting to sexual acts. She then meets Andrew Harper, the sexy mysterious billionaire. Andrew just can't keep a girlfriend. His dates are selfish gold diggers, and all they want is to shine in the spotlight. All he wants is a girl to one day marry, he can't possibly find a wife on Virtualdates.com, right?




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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 5
Completed:No
Word count: 9176
Read Count: 18575
Published: December 21 2014
Updated: April 08 2015


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Bish please, he don't want you.  IDFWY theme song playing.  You'll probably try to bankrupt him in less than a year asking for stuff over and over again. 

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Date: April 10 2015

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Andrew gets a side eye for this chapter.  He was so protective of her with his assistant but pretty much sat on his hunches while this old pervert called her a whore.  Only a sex buddy and he condoned that crap b/c he didn't say anything.  He wouldn't of had to be forceful but say I am most definitely attracted to her but for more than the possibilities in the bedroom though we are in the beginning stages right now.  Now if she was to go anywhere with him, she will only be looked at like she is only a diversion before he settles down with the right one.  He just made his life that much harder and now she runs into assholy and bitchy after a brief interlude with madame bitchy.  She is going to leave Andrew in the dust and keep it moving.   When does she get her degree.  She was in her last year so she shouldn't have that many credits to complete and graduate.  Let her graduate and find a good job away from Andrew and his ilk. 



Author's Response:

Yep, Andrew isn't really a saint when it comes to money and business. But we'll see what happens in the next chapters.

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Date: March 07 2015

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Summary: Ginger Ross is a woman with a plan and that plan doesn't include any room for romantic entanglements. However, her plan undergoes some unique alterations when a fender bender causes her to cross paths with Jerry Medina, a widower who is trying to piece together a future vastly different than the one he had planned.

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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 1092
Read Count: 1988
Published: January 17 2015
Updated: January 23 2015


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Shop Talk

That felt like a teaser.  Want more?  What regrets?  He has 2 daughters, can't wait to meet them.



Author's Response: Thanks for reading and more is coming. I finally figured out that the number of pages typed in my word processor is much less when posted online. That darn 16 point font fooled me good!

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Date: January 23 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Fender Bender

Hmmm, let's see what he wants for reimbursement.

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Date: January 17 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 44]
Summary:

Daniel has always been late for everything in his life. He's been late for puberty, dating girls, and even the "monkey in the bush". When he discovers his new neighbor next door is a woman, a very pretty woman, will he take a chance and ask her out? Or will his former bully, Nick Young, beat him to it?



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 8
Completed:No
Word count: 7978
Read Count: 10276
Published: January 23 2015
Updated: May 12 2015


Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay, so Meela's mom is completely overbearing. She is talking to a gentlemen and you bring another man over.  I hope Meela doesn't just give in to her mother's pressures, especially after Daniel brought the courage and asked her out.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 10 2015

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay, so Meela's mom is completely overbearing. She is talking to a gentlemen and you bring another man over.  I hope Meela doesn't just give in to her mother's pressures, especially after Daniel brought the courage and asked her out.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 10 2015

Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay, so Meela's mom is completely overbearing. She is talking to a gentlemen and you bring another man over.  I hope Meela doesn't just give in to her mother's pressures, especially after Daniel brought the courage and asked her out.

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Date: February 10 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

sorry for the triplicate, had some trouble with computer and it decided to repeat the comment

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: February 10 2015

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[Reviews - 205]
Summary:

Not everyone gets a happy ending...

Hey guys,

Heart of Lies Book 1&2 have now been published under one of my pennames Alma Muerte.

FB Author page: Alma Muerte.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: None
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 2951
Read Count: 32294
Published: January 27 2015
Updated: September 10 2015


Title: Heart of Lies

Arric is appearing very selfish right now.  His mating and having a son with another is doing nothing but causing her pain.  He doesn't want to listen to Thaddeus or anyone.  HE wants her home so she should be there.  I wish she would find someone to make love to and let her shields down so he can feel how she felt.  I hope there is someone who is truly 100% hers.  Hate that she doesn't have any options while he has many.  To feel an outcast in a place you thought was home, to feel loved and connected to someone who marries another and you FEEL them loving another and their happiness with the union directly.  I can't imagine Lyssa's pain.  Arric right now can go jump in a lake and drown for all I care at this point.  If he doesn't let her go, she will not be the person he remembers.

Now that you have mentioned one of my absolute favorite stories on here, please bring Maddy back.  Want to know if they make it for the long haul.

But back to the program at hand.  I am loving this and fascinated with how Arric thinks this is ok.  Lyssa is like I could give a damn about mating and wolves right now.  Bish I am a vampire.  Kiss my ass.

 



Author's Response:

Loved your review and I am working through the love-hate thing with Lovers' Dance at the moment, so hopefully I'll be back updating that story soon.

K.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 28 2015

Title: Heart of Lies

I literally felt chills when I saw you updated because this story has me in a tight grip and I don't want it to let me go.  Goodness, if Soraya is his true mate why can't her wolf soothe him as it did before.  My question may be crazy but has he made love to Soraya since Lyssa has gone? If so, how come those times haven't soothed his beast to allow Lyssa to go free.  It seems something else is going on and Uncle knows.  I hope her uncle is okay traveling to these lands with this powerful coven.  I think if anything happens to her uncle is the day she might just die b/c so far he is her only solace.  By the way, how the heck old is her uncle?  Part of me wants Arric to suffer even more and part of me just wants Lyssa to have a HEA.  I don't know if that is Arric or not but if it isn't, I would be upset.

Thanks for the update.

 



Author's Response:

Hi Lajack1,

Can I just say I enjoyed the way you're thinking and the valid questions you asked. I understand your desire to see Arric suffer, considering the pain he has put Lyssa through. Chills? Gosh you made me smile with that. Thanks for reviewing.

K.

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Date: January 29 2015

Title: Heart of Lies

Oh no, please don't do it.  Don't let his actions dictate your life like this even though you are hurting.  Please bring Lyssa some peace.  So if Soraya isn't laying beside him, where is she?  What, now that he had a pup, is the wolf now wanting Lyssa again?  I am really curious to what the pack, his parents etc are saying about his behavior and Lyssa.  I know he stated "we miss you" speaking of the pack, do they really?  Shock to see he impregnated her first.  Sad that the baby didn't make it which makes it now triplely horrible for her.  I kinda hope she meets a decent vampire (if possible) and able to carry her own child.  i have no clue what direction you are going with this story but that makes it fascinating.  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 31 2015

Title: Heart of Lies

Hahaha, the joke is on Arric and his wolf.  Punk wolf fell for the oldest trick in the book instead of remaining steadfast to his "true love" and now your behind is mated to the wicked witch.  Yes, you have a son but have lost your heart and soul.  Hmmm, was it worth it?  Hell nawl, Lyssa isn't coming back.  You have broken her down and she no longer wants to be associated with a beast who cannot control his urges b/c that is what it sounded like to me.  That euphoric feeling you described was felt by her and I can't get over that and I'm only reading it.  

Now I loved her uncle in this chapter because he was like "yeah, I appreciate all of your help but I'll be damned even more if I bring her home to this bullshit 3 ring circus y'all got going on here.   Boy, man up or sit your ass down somewhere."  They are concerned for their people and son and not for Lyssa despite calling her "our".  Lyssa and Arric was Odin's true wish and he went against it so now Arric you must reap what you sow and handle being in pain and misery.  Go back and screw Soraya for you have probably lost Lyssa.

Still funny how his wolf was like "noooo, I want the other one.  Bish get back, step away from the cage."

As always a wonderful chapter full of emotion and angst.  I did feel a smidgen bad for Arric but then it went away.  a86;a039;

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 03 2015

Title: Heart of Lies

My girl was like "thanks for helping me but dude be gone now, your services are no longer needed."  This was an opening he was waiting for and he is not about to let her go.  I do think she needs to return to the pack but I am unsure about her position as well.  She is not Lupa and will never be so what is there for her.  Is there a vampire male who she can mate with and give her the proper position.  We all know, once she returns she will be subjected to Soraya attempting to exert her authority over her every day.  Part of me could understand Soraya's jealousy but honestly she knew from the beginning that he was Lyssa's and she thought her seductive wiles and wolf would bring him to heel at her feet but it didn't so a part of it is, you reap what you sowed.  Eventually Lyssa and Soraya will have to fight and I am not thinking Soraya would be a winner unless Lyssa doesn't want to end her b/c of the pup.

Can't wait until he catches her. ;)

 

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Date: March 04 2015

Title: Heart of Lies

You know what I find interesting about your story is the parallels to real life in because he is a Lycan and she is a Vampire they are NOT suppose to be together and he should be with his kind and her with her kind but not taking into the fact that they LOVE each other despite those differences.  That is like saying a black woman and an asian man can't be together or any different races, we must stick with our own kind despite the love they could share.  Arric and Lyssa communicate, they teach each other, they are there for each other no matter what (thick and thin), they touch each other souls and not just the body, it isn't JUST sex.  Everyone has messed with their love for their own selfish reasons and then want them to be HAPPY about it.  His so called wolf queen manipulated his wolf to get a child and then expect him to be happy to be with her.  Eros and Annabelle USED her love of Arric to get her to agree to be a receptacle for Eros and now he wants her to SMILE at being used.  Like are you for real.  No, everyone is using their love for each other (Arric and Lyssa) in selfish ways and 2 people are hurting to the high heavens because of it.  So no, Eros doesn't get to be a love interest just like Arric's wolf queen doesn't either.  Why should they receive the love that they so callously hurt and tossed aside.  I hope that she doesn't fall in love with Eros and I hope Arric doesn't sleep with his wolf queen and have any more children and somehow they do end up together, even if it is in the afterlife because after all of this, THEY DESERVE IT! Everyone else and that includes her uncle can go jump in the lake as they say.

Sorry I just got real emotional about this.  Great story.j

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 21 2015

Title: Heart of Lies

It's kinda sad that for her entire existence she is to trust no one.  That feels like a lonely existence and this is what her sire wanted for her.  It was okay when the wolves protected his behind but now, no.  I don't understand her uncle and honestly I don't see her and Arric returning to anything close to what they were.  This new dark side and need for treachery and deceit it seems will place a wedge between them.  I am still not a fan of Eros because at this point, he is forcing her to his bed.  She has conceived and that was the true intent of the covenant so I wouldn't fall for him regardless that I carried his child.  I'll be that cold blooded bish.  At this point, she doesn't have anyone to trust only the Arric's beta who hasn't done anything to her.  We gotta go to the bottom of the barrel...hahaha

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Date: August 13 2015

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[Reviews - 15]
Summary:

He wasn't Romeo and She wasn't Juliet. However it was a Love Story Nonetheless.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 8126
Read Count: 1373
Published: February 23 2015
Updated: February 23 2015


Title: Chapter 1: Beau Ryan

This just brought me to tears.  I was not imagining that end.  Heck, I loved Beau Ryan myself.  I'm bawling.  Wonderful short story.

Wonderful, touching story.

 

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Date: February 25 2015

Rated: Mature Content
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Summary:

 

He was always known as "Just Iwase Hiroto's friend." But if you dug deeper, you'd find that he was much more than that. 

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Erotica, Inspirational, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 2439
Read Count: 2131
Published: March 16 2015
Updated: March 16 2015


Title: Chapter 1: introduction.

sounds like it will be an interesting ride.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 16 2015

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Summary:

Lynne and Saul had been married for 25 years when he committed the ultimate betrayal. Lynne attempts forgiveness, but memories from her past make it hard to do that.  She loves Saul, but will she ever be able to trust him enough to take him back?  And when a new man enters her life, will she even WANT to?

 

This is a new version of the story I started earlier this month. In a comedy of errors I deleted the original version from my hard drive AND The Chamber.  I was depressed for a minute, but took it as an opportunity to re-work the story.  So here is the new, and hopefully improved, story.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 17
Completed:Yes
Word count: 17066
Read Count: 47337
Published: March 19 2015
Updated: April 05 2015


Title: Chapter 8: The kids are NOT alright

Wow, that was some heartfelt, strong, emotional daggers his kids threw at him?  Cam asked some tough questions?  What was so special about Alicia that you threw away 25yrs of marriage, your family away for?  I'm interested in that answer myself.  A true, honest internal reflection from Saul on really, why did he continue to do it after the conference.  Loved Mal's words to him.  He basically called his dad selfish and that he never considered how anyone else would be impacted by this until now because stuff went to hell in a hand basket.  Part of me want Lynne to divorce Saul because I think for him to truly get it, he has to really lose her,  I feel like Saul is banking on the woman that Lynne was before this and the love she has for him to pave his way to forgiveness vs putting in work, true honest to goodness we down on the railroad tracks for 14 hr days work.  Working to get her back when she isn't tethered to you and others recognize her worth is different than attempting to get her to forgive when you know as long as she is "married" to you, she won't actively be with someone else.  Did Saul not think, what would I feel like if the shoe was on the other foot?

Oh and Saul the crying right now feels like a little to late to make a difference in any of your families lives.  Matter of fact where is Saul's family?  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 29 2015

Title: Chapter 15: Cause and Effect

Hold up, wait a minute, dumbass Saul about to put his foot in it.  He sitting here thinking "may have, may have" been behind Lynne's attack, nah dude, she WAS behind Lynne's attack.  This isn't conjecture, the perp spilled the beans.  How many dudes would attack your ex-wife at her place of employment for how many years all of a sudden with no attempt at robbing or sexual aggression and know the name of your fuck buddy.  He need to wake up and smell the Folgers in his cup because this chick is crazy and at this point you have lost any chance of Lynne taking you back.  Maybe in 60 yrs when you both old and gray, and your little wiener can't get it up no more.  

I enjoyed Malcolm's character in these last two chapters because it reflected his maturity level and about focusing on whose the most important.  Lynne which should have been at the forefront of Saul's thoughts from the beginning and this wouldn't be happening because he would have never slept with said chick and gotten her hopes up.  

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 04 2015

Title: Chapter 2: The Call

Well S-H-I-T just hit the fan.  Wow, just wow.  Sorry about your story being deleted from the hard drive and on valentchamber but I must say your muse came out swinging in these first 2 chapters that I am hooked and will be checking daily for any and all updates.

Well Saul, you reap what you sow.  I love the fact that he has to not only face his wife after this betrayal but also his children and watch the disillusionment in their eyes about their father and that can be the worst for any parent who cares about their children to see.  Does Saul really think he can SAY anything that will improve this situation.  That he can TALK his way out of this.  Seriously Saul, saying sorry isn't going to cut it.  As the infamous line by Halle Berry " Love, should've brought your ass home".  I hope in this story line they still get a divorce because at this time, I don't feel he is sorry.  If he was, he would've told her what happened after the first time instead he was NEVER going to say anything.  

Can I say I loved how Lynne gave him the hands and how she shut Alicia down quick.  Oooohhhh Saul, you just lost a real woman for a thot.   "shakes head while sticking tongue out saying oooooooo, you in trouble".

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 20 2015

Title: Chapter 2: The Call

Well S-H-I-T just hit the fan.  Wow, just wow.  Sorry about your story being deleted from the hard drive and on valentchamber but I must say your muse came out swinging in these first 2 chapters that I am hooked and will be checking daily for any and all updates.

Well Saul, you reap what you sow.  I love the fact that he has to not only face his wife after this betrayal but also his children and watch the disillusionment in their eyes about their father and that can be the worst for any parent who cares about their children to see.  Does Saul really think he can SAY anything that will improve this situation.  That he can TALK his way out of this.  Seriously Saul, saying sorry isn't going to cut it.  As the infamous line by Halle Berry " Love, should've brought your ass home".  I hope in this story line they still get a divorce because at this time, I don't feel he is sorry.  If he was, he would've told her what happened after the first time instead he was NEVER going to say anything.  

Can I say I loved how Lynne gave him the hands and how she shut Alicia down quick.  Oooohhhh Saul, you just lost a real woman for a thot.   "shakes head while sticking tongue out saying oooooooo, you in trouble".

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 20 2015

Title: Chapter 6: Mama Say

I am having a hard time feeling anything for Saul because I actually don't feel like he really regrets having sex with Alicia.  Idk, I feel like it was great sex and therefore that was why he did it but I still love you Lynne.  Like he compartmentalized his actions and can't grasp the severity of the situation.  As Lynne feels, this wasn't a one off thing, he continued and that showed lack of respect and love for his marriage, wife and family.  I loved her friend saying, Saul threw the love away when he slept with that other woman.  Yesss, Lynne don't feel obligated to stay because it wasn't you, it was Saul and he has to live with the consequences.  A lost wife, lost love of his life and a crazy stalker chick.  

I really want him to see the disillusionment in Mal's eyes and hear his son tell him that he doesn't want to be the man that his father is.  Wonder how he will feel hearing that.

so happy it's back and can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

I think you said it just right.  Saul compartmentalized the sex with Alicia and his feelings for his wife and family in order to give himself permission to continue to have sex with Alicia.  The evidence of that is that he keeps saying "it was just sex".  I think a lot of men can separate sex and love quite easily.  It's why the "it was just sex" or "she didn't mean anything" excuse is always used when men cheat. The problem is that a lot of women DON'T separate sex and love.  It's a package deal, so when their men cheat it means something more to the women they cheat on.  That's the type of woman Lynne is...she doesn't separate sex and love.  Because of this, Saul is going to have long, rocky road to forgiveness.  And even if he GETS forgiveness, it doesn't mean he's going to get his wife back.

As far as Saul and his kids?  The way they feel about him now is going to lay him LOW...especially after a confrontation with Mal.  That's coming up soon.  Thanks for reading.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: March 28 2015

Title: Chapter 13: The Age of the Cougar?

I feel bad that whatever is happening inside of Saul, that he has yet to truly delve into or address has caused him to lose his happiness.  Unfortunately he has been the cause of his own misery.  I still do not feel that bad that I want Lynne to take him back just yet.  I have a hard time with him sleeping with Alicia after the conversation with Lynne and she brought up a divorce.  If Lynne finds that out, I think it will really be no way to come back from that for Lynne.  Malcolm seems cool but Lynne seems very mature and Malcolm appears a little young in his actions so it would be interesting to see how the romance plays out.  Plus Malcolm doesn't have any children and does he want any?  I like the pace of Malcolm and Lynne being friends first.

I feel like we are going to learn something in Saul's past that has caused him to self-destruct after 25yrs.  You don't go from being happily married to cheating overnight.  I sense a trigger somewhere that we don't know about yet.  Looking forward to how you redeem Saul's character.  He might be the more interesting of the two to read about actually (Shhh, keep that on the DL).



Author's Response:

Malcolm is little boyish, but I don't think he's immature.  I think he's intimidated by Lynne.  She makes him nervous, and that might explain some of his actions.  I think Saul having something in his past that triggered his current behavior is an interesting one.  Once he gets serious about therapy, we'll learn more about his past and how it affected his present.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 02 2015

Title: Chapter 14: Blood and Tears

betcha that bish ass Alicia had something to do with this.  Even more reason why Saul will feel guilty as hell for bringing this cray cray chick into Lynne and his kids life.  If he would have kept his little penis in his pants versus trying to get it inside a chick, this would not be happening but ya know what, God always has a plan and this happened for a reason.

 

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 03 2015

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