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Summary:

Sequel to "Love, God & Ultimatums"



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 38
Completed:No
Word count: 227600
Read Count: 78662
Published: July 03 2015
Updated: May 09 2021


Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Missing Pieces

So it is looking like it was his brother who impregnated the girl he was in love with and the way Tyler acted, it appears it was done maliciously and intentionally.  What kind of family does he belong to.  Whew girl you about to take us on a bumpy road, you can't deny it, I already called Ms. Cleo and she told me I better take my heart medicine for this one.



Author's Response:

Lol! Brandon's burdened by some very interesting family dynamics.  They are...let's just say Ms. Cleo didn't steer you wrong.  Thanks Lajack1!

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Date: September 17 2015

Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Slippery When Wet

These two are entirely too much, gotta love them.



Author's Response:

Lol.  Thanks Lajack.

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Date: September 17 2015

Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - Surprise, Surprise

At this point, Diya need to pull up her big girl panties, heck even if they are granny panties and get prepared for the war.  If she loves Brandon as much as she thinks then she cannot roll over and play dead like she's done so much before.  You can love and respect your parents and family but you cannot live FOR them.  If your family loves and respects you then they will abide by your decisions.  I remember some quote or statement that mentions love doesn't come with conditions, restrictions etc and that should be true of a parents love for their children.  I am waiting to hear her woman up but I haven't forgotten about Maria Thoteria and Bryan's need to set parameters with her behind also.



Author's Response:

I agree: You can't live for your family.  But in Diya's case, you can't discount their ability to make life and carrying on a healthy relationship very difficult.  The De la Roys don't just criticize and ostracize.  They plot and sabotage.  That's her concern.  She can make whatever declarations and set whatever boundaries she likes, but she can't make them do or not do anything, as you will soon find out.  Marisol is another matter all together.  Thanks lajack1

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Date: June 16 2016

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Summary:

While returning home to Chicago from a business trip Anika Wallace and Hunter Sterling IV find themselves the only surviors of a plane crash on a South Pacific island. There's no telling when they'll make it back home or if they ever will make it back home for that matter. One thing is for sure they're going to have to learn how to get along their survival is depending on it.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: On hiatus indefinitely
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 36
Completed:No
Word count: 54201
Read Count: 121644
Published: August 12 2015
Updated: March 02 2017


Title: Chapter 11: DAY 12

I am addicted to this story MP.

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Date: September 04 2015

Title: Chapter 13: DAY 14

Hmm, Hunter being away from all the trappings and expectations bestowed upon him by his mother and society may actually be a decent individual.  I am curious as they continue to be stranded on this island and get to know each other how Hunter will act once they return to civilization and those expectations are present again.  Will he return to the Good Ole Boy club or actually start to stand up to his overbearing mother and the village idiots.  For me that will be the true test of Hunter's personality and being a man.

Honestly felt a little sad for Hunter because his mother was actually a horrible mom that showed him his simplest desires were unworthy.  He took pride in building that treehouse with his dad, a memory more than the tree house itself and she ruined that for him.  I wonder if she has something over his father's head for him to have remained silent.  At this time his father seems like a punk ass bish for letting this woman have this much control over his SON, who has to grow into a MAN.  Unlike
Anika, Hunter did not have any good role models for adulthood and being a man.  Can he recover from that at this late stage?  I am waiting to see.

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Date: September 11 2015

Title: Chapter 19: TIMELINE CHECKPOINT

you read my mind, I was just thinking about this story literally a minute ago

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Date: December 19 2015

Title: Chapter 29: DAY 49

Once Hunter gets a taste and understands he was her first, he will be on lockdown as well.  Hmmm, wonder if he will become slightly possessive.  Can't wait til they hit the banana leaves.

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Date: May 03 2016

Title: Chapter 34: THE TRIP 3

That is absolutely the one thing I hate is that "angry black woman" theme everytime you attempt to assert yourself to keep from being run over.  It is purposely put in place in an attempt to keep you quiet.  Now you just have to be real slick and keep it calm while going off on people.  In my imagination I am going to pretend that Hunter knew it was Anika he saved vs that Giselle chick because Anika's body/hair etc doesn't feel like Giselle's.  I actually think subconsciously Hunter may have been attracted to Anika from the get go but with his mother's brainwashing was fighting it.  I don't know, that's my theory.

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Date: June 28 2016

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Summary:

Bağlılık, the gem of southeast Europe. At its center is Putra a city as bright as the sun with secrets as dark as its shadows. Daniel Winters comes to study and finds herself linked to one of Putras most distinguished families. A link that will challenge her beliefs, shatter her dreams and give her insurmountable hope.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Action-Adventure , Comedy , Drama, Fantasy, Friendship, Mystery, Psychological, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 10
Completed:No
Word count: 25007
Read Count: 39171
Published: August 31 2015
Updated: October 06 2015


Title: Chapter 5: Young wolf

I'm curious to where are the other princes and what is Kurt.  Why has this family really taken her into their fold.  Faza is also an interesting character.  Can't wait for more to be revealed.



Author's Response:

Very good thinking Lajacks. While they may have cameo appearances, I'll be focusing on the Okuz for now. You will learn about Kurt though. I like Faza's character as well and he only grows on me.

Thank you for coming this far with me. I hope you continue to enjoy It! ;)

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Date: September 10 2015

Rated: Mature Content
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Summary:

The prison had been confined within their hearts but when... when would they truly be set free?

 

 

 

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Transcendence is a original work by CM and is intended for publication so please do not upload, distort, edit, or remove and place on any other site. Respectfully yours, thank you. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Inspirational, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Spritualism, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 49
Completed:Yes
Word count: 291391
Read Count: 259739
Published: September 13 2015
Updated: May 01 2020


Title: Transcendence

I absolutely hate when people try that "if you truly want to be with me...." well bish I guess I didn't because i do my own stuff in my own time.  I'll find someone else.  That there is the psychological BS.  She keep the ring because she know what it is like to be treated better than by your stanky behind.  I hope she keeps it moving because anytime he wants to downgrade you because of an argument about the stuff he didn't do, he ain't the one.

 

 

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Date: October 08 2015

Title: Chapter 5: Black Coffee

Okay, I can understand his sentiments but I don't like how he took it off her finger while she slept.  That's sneaky maneuvers to me.  I felt he should have stated how he felt first and then asked her to remove it because of how it made him feel and let that be her decision.  It seems like he made it for her and then kinda guilted her into keeping it off versus her coming to that decision.  She has to close that chapter, no one can do it for her.  I hope she puts it back on and tell him, I will take it off when I feel ready and then see how he reacts.  I'm all for testing someone and waiting for an honest response.  

Was it me but some spidey senses were tingling when her sister was talking about her boyfriend.  I'll wait and see what you will write.

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Date: October 04 2015

Title: Transcendence

Kiko, Kiko, Kiko.....must you watch a subtitled version of "He's just not that into you" and did you really think after he informed you that he couldn't provide the affection and love you were looking for that touching him without his permission would somehow endear him to you.  Do you think once you put it on him he will bow down and worship at your feet....did you forget who he is...Bish you'll be the one bowing down.  Now you have been kicked out and any affection he did feel for you just went up in flames hibachi style.  If she would have showed some heart and not been a puppet to his mother he would've had more respect for her and she may have garnered his true affection but she behaved like a pawn and therefore got kicked off the board, now he has to checkmate his momma and get his queen.

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Date: October 04 2015

Title: Chapter 13: Visor

As always a pleasure reading about Hiroto and Ebere.  Happy New Year!



Author's Response:

Aww Happy New year to you as well! I pray many blessings and joy to come to you and your house this year! God bless you!

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Date: January 01 2016

Rated: All Ages
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Summary:

From the heart.



Table of Contents
Categories: Poetry
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Poetry
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Original
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 375
Read Count: 3440
Published: September 21 2015
Updated: September 21 2015


Title: Chapter 1: BLACK FEMALES

How did I miss this.  So much has to be said about this topic and we need honest conversation to let our black females (redbone; dark and lovely and so on) to not use media as the ruler for beauty.  Plus most women who they betray as Black are in essence Latina women who have been marginalized and informed they can't portray a Latina women because it doesn't conform to the stereotype they percieve.  I have two young girls who are different from hair texture to body type and I constantly reinforce they are beautiful and unique, inform them it is great to be black women.  I hope and pray I portray what they need for self-love, confidence and most definitely, don't take no BS from a guy about your worth.  You define that.  I also encourage my son to look at black women as beautiful in all of our shades and not rely on straight hair as the mark of beauty, especially as mom has locs.  I could go on and on but will end it here and if you read this review, great post.



Author's Response:

Better late than ever :-) And I'm glad your children have a mother like you who encourages them to embrace their African beauty. We need more mothers like you.

 

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Date: March 10 2016

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[Reviews - 24]
Summary:

Finding love the second time around



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 10289
Read Count: 5001
Published: September 25 2015
Updated: September 28 2015


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 9

Whew, we got some powerful emotions here.  I can't wait for more.  I wanna know is Delaney his daughter and if so, he has a lot of making up to do but I can't get behind Simone sleeping with someone else either especially if she didn't offically call the relationship off to his face or at least a voicemail.  I am always about 100% closure when the relationship is over; not 100% disclosure because there are some things i just want to keep to myself ;)

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Date: September 30 2015

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Summary:

The year 2016 looks promising for Faith Jamison she's finally going to acheive her purpose in the world and feel good about herself for the first time in her life. Women are now finally allowed to train to be Navy SEALS. Faith isn't going to let that oppurtnuity slip by her not when she sees a future that is brighter than her painful past.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Inspirational
Story Status: On hiatus indefinitely
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 25940
Read Count: 51481
Published: September 29 2015
Updated: March 21 2016


Title: Chapter 1: PREVIEW

Awww, MP you are doing your job if you have me emotionally attached to this story and Faith.  I have 2 daughters and in stories like this or very similar, I always think about my daughters.  I am enjoying to story and can't wait to see how Faith has the last laugh over Howard and her sperm donor.  I actually hope her mother instills in her son's lives that the behavior that her father displayed is not appropriate and the cycle doesn't repeat itself with the next male generation.   Keep up the good work, I appreciate having something to read besides nursing textbooks.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: October 08 2015

Title: Chapter 4: BUTTERFLY

Kay, at this point the hospital should have intervened.  They would have taken her to a private area and asked if she felt safe at home, especially with the type of injuries she had.  This is still a 15yr old girl and there should be some questions asked.  I can't believe her mother allowed this travesty to happen.  If she didn't like it happening to her and in a new country.   I will be honest and say I can't understand and I am coming from a position of ignorance with regards to the traditions she has grown up with but sometimes love and the right thing to do has to outweigh that.  If we kept that thought, we would still be in chains right now without the small, minute successes we have had.  I am all in my emotions right now.  Time to woo-sah and calm down and realize it is just a book but at the same time, understanding there is some girl going thru this BS for real.  Deep breathing.

 



Author's Response:

Didn't mean to make you upset lajack1 and it's sad that things like this actually happen. The only reason her mother allowed this to happen was beacuse she actually felt that this was her daughter's place in society as a female and Faith didn't feel comfortable going to her mother since she was the one who put her in that situation in the first place.

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Date: October 08 2015

Title: Chapter 6: SOMBER SIXTEEN

Absolutely no justice for her at all. 

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Date: October 24 2015

Title: Chapter 5: FAMILY?

And Bish you a hoe, so we know that, it's a fact...you have no clue about Faith.  Heather what da hell do you mean decent woman.  No decent woman would cheat on her fiancé while he is deployed then.  Hate people who just have to have something negative to say.  Perry, nah he can't even have my platypus name (Phineas and Ferb) so I must come up with something else for him but he is so cocky they wouldn't choose him based upon personality alone.  His whole squad would plan his demise because his arrogance will get them killed.  He doesn't even know how to tone it down at all.  He gonna try Faith and she will have a flashback damn near killing his ass and that is what he needs.  Jackass.

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Date: October 14 2015

Title: Chapter 10: PHYSICAL SCREENING TEST

What da hell is Wilkes problem.  It seems more like an issue of color along with sexism from him.  I hope Faith makes him shove all of that BS down his throat.  Her weakness will be her psychological state.  She needs to figure out how to handle that 'cause I can see Wilkes exploit that.  Really didn't want Ron to pass.  Wonder what Gibbs said to Wilkes.  Also can't wait for his fiancé betrayal to come to light.  If she felt Conrad was do great she would not have fooled around on him while he was away.  She needs her ass whooped.  You was a grown ass women laying with someone who wasn't your fiancé, be a grown ass woman and tell the truth and accept the consequences of your actions.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 19 2016

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Rated: Teen or Above
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[Reviews - 151]
Summary:

Sometimes hurting the person you love is easier than showing them love, especially when you're hurting inside.

Saint-Luc and Naomi Adebayo-Roux aren't any different.

This is their story.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Friendship, Inspirational, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 28
Completed:No
Word count: 46514
Read Count: 375366
Published: October 14 2015
Updated: July 15 2017


Title: Chapter 2: 2.

He is an interesting character.  I think he felt offended when she didn't remember him because he purposely was a butthead so he would stand out to her in comparison to all of the other gentlemen she served that evening.  Then to put on that charade and she didn't remember him...oh the ego.  I think that first sentence was based off of past experienced and again a hurt ego.  He definitely comes accross as an ass but I wonder if it is from boredom with everyone else around him.  I'm sure it has to be pretty stuffy in the upper echelon with the same people.  I wonder how old is he since Miriam called him an old man.  Their conversations should be interesting as I think he is trying to be helpful but sounds like a pompous jerk.  She will have to utilize some good ole Christian values to maintain her calm around him.

Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

You're definitely onto something Ms.Jackson :-P

Thank you so much for reading :-).

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: October 19 2015

Title: Chapter 3: 3.

So what does he consider her?  I mean you are paying her to sleep with you but yet you want a Christian wife?  What happened to him in the past?  He didn't start off this way.  I really feel like underneath this straight shooter talk he is a romantic or softie underneath.  Why doesn't he see his brother?  I can't wait for this story to unfold.  You did shock me with him being 45 years old.  I pulled out the calculator to double check my math...LOL



Author's Response:

Lol, he considers her his ''personal assistant''.  Yes Saint does has had quite a lot of growing up to do which has made him into the man he is now, but all that for later. You are definitely one inquisitive reader, I like how your mind works. Thanks so much for reading :-).

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Date: October 23 2015

Title: Chapter 7: 7.

One of them is going to have to open up outside of the bedroom in order for this to progress.  They are hiding themselves from each other and by doing that is actually causing them additional stress.  It is a normal human inclination to simply ask "How are you doing?  You look like there are some things going on?  Would you like to talk about it?"  Maybe Saint can just take her on a date since they kind of skipped the whole courting phase.  Maybe she can suggest an outing where they can both de-stress.  I'm waiting for stuff to hit the fan with her family finding out she married and to an older gentlemen. 

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Date: December 03 2015

Title: Chapter 9: 9.

I would have a hard time believing Saint was in love with her too when he did cheat.  This wasn't a too drunk to get it up but full blown menage ( 2 women ) and then say you are in love with me.  I don't care what I say, you still chose to perform those actions.  Now I don't agree with her treating him like he doesn't matter because every person wants to feel loved, cherished and wanted.  I think Naomi has a lot of issues stemming from her upbringing and she has yet to discover herself and her strength before Saint came along.  I think they need sometime alone without her school or his work, even if for a week or two in an attempt to connect.

Am I the only one suspicious she is pregnant?  Plus Saint, can you really blame her for wanting you to wrap it up after seeing you with two women.  I would have made you get an STD/HIV test before even coming near me again.  What's love got to do with an HIV infection, nothing.

Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 15 2015

Title: Chapter 10: 10.

I'm partially confused.  Did she miscarry, abortion what happen d then will she continue her studies in Paris or just give up her education all together?  I hope not because she might really feel like a kept women.  Then dang, these two need to learn to use their words appropriately to communicate.  They both go from 0-100 in 0.5 seconds whenever they talk about anything but sex.  They got along fairly well before, hope they can find that common ground again.



Author's Response:

They definitely get turned up so quick and get turned on without a a second's wait lol. It's hard figuring out the two with their bipolar selves lol.

thanks so much for reading :-).

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: December 20 2015

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.