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Summary:

Twenty-seven year-old Layla Jones made a promise to Dominic Slater ten years ago that she intended to keep. But the night her Step-Father took her innocence was the night she knew she could never keep that promise. Besides, why would Dominic want her if he knew what had been done. So she did the only thing she could do to protect him from that. She ran away and never looked back.

Dominic Slater never forgotten about Layla. In fact, she haunts his dreams and even more so took a piece of him that he could never reclaim without her. So when she comes back into his life, he won't let whatever hurt in the past pull them apart again. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 14
Completed:No
Word count: 48063
Read Count: 20391
Published: January 08 2017
Updated: May 09 2017


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1

Honestly, Dom you have a fiancée, do not set her back being brought into this love triangle.  Obviously he has strong feelings for Nicole since he proposed and she seems like a nice woman.  Don't want Layla's opportunity destroyed because of vindictive agendas of spurned exes.  Looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

I'm glad that you're worried about Layla's wellbeing. COntinue reading the story and love that you're looking forward to more!

-Maya

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Date: January 12 2017

Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

This chapter showed the determination Layla has to turn her situation around and I hope she succeeds.  Don't let those women take away what you need to survive.  Work your hours, earn your paycheck, get your GED and keep it movin'.  They can move up that ladder there or someone else if they want to.  Loved how she discussed the situation with Betty and I think Stone has a crush.  I just have this feelings that things are going to go up in flames before they settle into happy future.

 

 



Author's Response:

lajack1,

That was very much my goal for this chapter. Layla does have a back bone when it comes to certain things, just like all of us.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: January 17 2017

Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 4

OH goodness, please Nicole do not attempt to have a child as a way to keep a hold on Dominic.  This is not the time when a man is being distant the closer the wedding becomes.  If I was Dominic, she would have literally heard "skerrt" while moving away from the vajayjay.  I would have shrunk in size so quick she would have thought it was a re-enactment of Honey, I shrunk the kids.  Dominic needs to postpone the wedding because pretending will hurt everyone.  Layla is saying this to him because she has him placed on a pedestal and she doesn't thinks she is worthy of his affections. Dominic I feel ultimately holds the key.  He has to prove to Layla that he accepts her as she is now, in its entirety, all faults genuinely before Layla thinks otherwise and he has to let Nicole go if he isn't going to be 100% hers.  Now I wouldn't let Nicole go until after Layla's debut and interest in her as an artist shines bright.  After that move to internet based sales.....no gallery.  I would hate to be beholden to anyone regarding my talent.  

Another great chapter.

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Date: January 19 2017

Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

I'm slipping because I didn't even see this was updated.  I am so happy Layla shared her story and honestly it isn't as bad as I feared.  I think Layla still is selling herself short and may need additional counseling outside of group because she never had any self esteem based on her upbringing in the prologue.  I also feel like she has to fight FOR Dominic.  He seems to always being the one to fight while she flees and it's only so long someone is willing to fight by themselves for a relationship.  Eventually she is going to have to show him she is willing to fight for their happiness.  I honestly don't know if I would leave Nicole because at least I know she wants me compared to Layla.  I don't mean the past, I mean now.  What will Layla do if he comes back after processing it and says he wants her over Nicole?  Hmmm.



Author's Response:

Lajack1, 

As things go on, we will see a lot more fight from Layla. But some big problems are ahead. Hold on for the ride. 

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Date: January 24 2017

Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

Wow, I don't know what to say about this chapter.  Each section was good.  It showed their honest emotions and how grey a lot of areas are when it comes to relationships.  I'm curious about these two men getting out the car and I think both Stone and Dom are going to be needed for her to survive everything heading her way.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your review. There are a lot of grey areas here. I could have made things so simple for Dominic to leave. Nicole but that's not what I wanted. Often times the person you thought you loved isn't just a raging bitch. Lol Nicole is a good woman who fell for a man who's heart had already been taken. 

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Date: January 26 2017

Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

Well now Dom :) I wonder if that was the attraction so long ago between them.  Their natural tendencies sought each other out.  He's aggressive, powerful, in control more often than not and she is quiet, caring and somewhat meek.  Pondering this thought.  Anyway, I hope Dom forgives himself for Nicole because honestly I don't think he treated her horribly.  He did what any person does, tried to move on with his life and find happiness.  I mean he was looking for Layla for awhile and she switched up and thn he just recently met Nicole after Layla was gone for 8 yrs.  I wouldn't expect my first love to pop up out of thin air after 10 yrs missing.  How long was he suppose to wait. Then after seeing Layla he was trying to get his thoughts together on what to do in order not to hurt anyone and Nicole noticed this preoccupation.  I would rather know before I married a fool if he wasn't 100% there with me.  I hope she finds someone who can give her that.  Lastly, for a moment there I thought they were only seeing each other in this savior glow.  I definitely want them to see each other as real people with flaws, who are not perfect but perfect for you.  Each seem to focus on how each saved them or maybe it is me.  Great chap and looking to read more.  You can help me make it thru these last 20 wks of school.  

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Date: February 05 2017

Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10

Slow down Dom, everything doesn't have to come in a day.  Take this time to date, re-learn each other, old habits and new.  This should be an exciting time.  The new love feeling, smiling for no damn reason...lol.  Keep it up.  I wonder how she will react to him investigating Chuck.  That might be her and their first real test.  

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Date: February 17 2017

Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

Stone, I'mma need you to get yourself together before you attempt to drive our girl back to drugs herself.  Stone's dad needs an epic smack.  Hope Dom can help our girl. Maybe she needs to call her sponsor as well.

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Date: February 23 2017

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Summary:

Jamila had her secrets, he was one of them.


 


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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Action-Adventure , Drama, Friendship, Mystery, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 6243
Read Count: 1385
Published: January 12 2017
Updated: January 26 2017


Title: Chapter 1: Preview

C'mon Jamila, don't be a wuss.  The dude was pushing to assault you and he jay got what was coming to him like Karma demanded.  He couldn't take no for an answer, good riddance.  Now I am curious how Jamila met Ryuu and this relationship began

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Date: January 13 2017

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[Reviews - 9]
Summary:

Eden has sacrificied herself for other people all her life. She thinks it's about time she did something for herself.

Isaac is a workaholic who blames himself for every bad thing that's every happened in his life, whether it was his fault or not. 

Both Eden and Isaac feel broken and unfixable, afraid they'll never love again.

How can you fix someone else when you're not whole?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Muse went on vacation, no idea when it will be back
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 3530
Read Count: 2257
Published: January 24 2017
Updated: March 15 2017


Title: 24 Hours and 24 Years

Wow, these are two seriously troubled people.  Their thought processes are completely understandable and flawed.  Interesting how you bring them together.



Author's Response:

Hi lajack1! Thank you so much for reading and commenting!! I will try my best lol

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Date: January 26 2017

Retired
Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 65]
Summary:

The typical bag of sugar experiment in 11th Grade made Aurora "Rory" Campbell realize that she liked her friend Sean Sullivan as more than just a friend. (Working Summary)



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Friendship
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 17139
Read Count: 22025
Published: February 05 2017
Updated: November 19 2017


Title: Chapter 3: SEPTEMBER 1992: PICTURE DAY

I think he should be black also and definitely want to know what happened to him.  Sean's twin is a little she-devil.  No wonder her and Lauren are friends.

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Date: February 17 2017

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Summary:

 

      Harper Vaden, a beautiful and irritated marine biologist dreams of nothing more than to be rid of her genius of a father's horrifying legacy left in the shadows of Metropolis. Under the government's radar  and ostracized from S.T.A.R Labs , Harper plans to leave Metropolis and anything that reeks of Gotham once and for all after her newfound lab is destroyed by an alien of whom she detests. However, her plans come to a complete halt once she is targeted by her slain father's  employer at LexCorp. With trouble at her doorstep and determination to keep her insane late father's hidden agenda, Harper undoubtedly seeks the aid of the indestructible alien that could possibly help free her from the madness and on her way to a new start……but even the most intelligent woman in all of Metropolis cannot deny the hidden attraction towards the Man of Steel himself.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Movies, Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Alternate Universe
Genre: Romance, Science Fiction
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Challenges: Be My Hero
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:Yes
Word count: 10842
Read Count: 1871
Published: April 10 2017
Updated: April 24 2017


Title: Chapter 3: Flight 3


Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: April 30 2017

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[Reviews - 13]
Summary:

Where do you go from there? Who do you trust when you can't even trust your own jugement?

Is love worth sacrificing everything ?

 

For anyone who feels utterly lost in the love game - this is for you.
Please be aware that this story is a stand alone prequel of  "The One" which is available for purchase on Amazon/itunes/B&N.

 

This story is my property. Please do not copy or post it or extract it to any other websites. Copyright 2017 VMMckeon



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Psychological, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 7
Completed:No
Word count: 20961
Read Count: 3307
Published: April 10 2017
Updated: August 04 2017


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5. Why are you so sad?

Is the older woman Melissa is your character pics?  I'm trying to grasp the pics with the story.  Otherwise good.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 11 2017

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[Reviews - 21]
Summary:

For Weston Brooks life is perfect. He's at the top of his game as a Pitcher for one of the best MLB teams in the country. He's also just happens to be one of  New York's most notrious bachelors. Wes lives the life every man dreams of. A different city every night, a different woman in his bed, and more money than he knows what to do with. 

But all of that comes to halt when his father has a heart attack and he must go back home. Back to the town he fought so hard to get out of, and the woman he had let slip away. 




Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 6518
Read Count: 2057
Published: April 26 2017
Updated: May 05 2017


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Josie doesn't need Wes indecisive self.  I want to know why his dad didn't call and tell him he was even contemplating selling the farm and then to his nemesis.  That seems a little petty of dad so far.  I need to hear some reasoning.  Even his sister sent her husband to do the dirty work.  Makes me wonder what kind of anger issues he got.  

Now Wes you can't be upset she is dating someone when you left her in the dust without a bandana to protect herself.  I do wonder about Dean's motives after hearing their history.  Need to meet him soon so I will reserve judgement.

Piper if she doesn't love him, it won't matter.  The love has to flow two ways for marriage/relationship to truly work.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 08 2017

Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww Leukemia.  She's still young, are they going to discuss fertility, her eggs due to side effects of chemo.  What about bone marrow transplant?  Sorry this is just the nurse in me.  Great start and I wonder how he is going to feel about possibly losing her because it seems like he has been sowing his oats.  Is there anyone for her?



Author's Response:

This will certainly be a rollercoaster of emotions! I hope you enjoy the next chapter as much as this one. 

-Maya

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
Date: April 30 2017

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.