Penname: BabyPasha [Contact]

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Member Since: December 16 2011

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I'm not a writer. Unfortunately I didn't get the memo. So you will see me try and fail many times. I don't mind failing. It's one thing I do well. I promise.




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If Only by Village
Rated: Most Ages
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[Reviews - 315]
Summary:

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Taylor Mooreland has more than her share of problems. Her mother's an irresponsible dreamer who's more interested in floating from audition to audition than she is in paying her bills. So, Taylor's got to keep the ship afloat, taking care of her little brother and working to help pay the bills while she's going to school. And if life wasn't difficult enough, now she's gotten herself into quite the mess with a guy who thinks she's a man.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction, Miscellaneous
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: None
Warnings: Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 16
Completed:Yes
Word count: 48727
Read Count: 130100
Published: January 15 2009
Updated: June 09 2013

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Title: Chapter 1: One

This is so great that you updated again. I'd kinda given up so I'm happy. I love the way you write. Christian's reasoning and emotional life are so believable and I really feel for him. That must be exactly how someone feels when they discover a same sex attraction. It would mess me up for sure if I thought I was falling in lust with some tomboy girl at work out of nowhere! Take your time with it because I get Taylors deal too. She didn't exactly plan for it to end up like this. Heck, I might have done it!

You do great with characters inner emotions and make good transitions that are natural and scenarious so vivid It's like I'm there. I also like the fringe people, usually writers make them annoying and one dimentional. Not true for you. You could write for tv or movies, easily.

Update when you can and I guess I'll re-read in the meantime.

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed
Date: July 28 2012
Lila's Thunder by Voices
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 359]
Summary:

  

 

Lila James knows that her friendship with seventeen year old Chase Almeida is extremely inappropriate, but she still isn't prepared when his older brother Jack decides to tell her just how inappropriate it actually is-- inadvertently igniting a fire that had been burning quietly inside of them for years.

*****Lila's Thunder has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:Yes
Word count: 670
Read Count: 65030
Published: October 07 2011
Updated: September 09 2014

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Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Wowzer! You haven't updated in so long I'd almost forgetten how good this saga is in all its meandering ways.

Lila Lila Lila, tsk tsk tsk...You...like...Dramah!!! Yes you do cuz why else do you still NOT know that You are the Eye of the Storm! You ARE the problem, maybe not at its root orby design but nonetheless you have fed the Beast even after your moment of clarity.

Jack, Are you a masochist? That's all I wanna know really. It would explain some of you choises and upside down reactions in my opinion.

Chase.Sigh. I mean at least Jack has had her now multiple times. But all you've had are hugs and you are even more obssessed with Lila than your brother! Makes one wonder if Lila is the Primary goal or if she's just the best way of getting to Jack.

I can't wait for an update I'm such a fiend.

*Waiting to re-read chapter 127 times for further clinical disection*

Loves It!

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed
Date: March 17 2012
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OMG I love Grams! Finnaly someone to put a stop to this charade. All the innuendo and double entendres coming out of Bitsys mouth just made me shake my head and laugh.

Seriously, I'm not sure which hook to hang my coat on. That's a compliment 'cuz I enjoy the not knowing what everyone is thinking at all times. Lila and Jack are hot and still...

I can't wait for the dinner and all the Dramah it most certainly will entail.

I even came up with "ship-names" LOL!

Lilack and Lace. That's how all up in this I am. It's ridiculous really.

In any case Keep 'em coming!

 

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Date: January 05 2012
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Michael Jackson & Diana Ross Affair

This is my favorite story and I'm literally losing my mind every time I reread it. Voices! How do I get you to update? Can I pay you? Do you have Paypal? Please tell me this is a script somewhere and that's the reason you can't update it anymore.  Like OMG this last chapter is juicer than I EVER thought possible. I have to tell you I feel soooo jealous of your other stories, it's ridiculous! I hope you're seriously persuing writing for television if not books, you're style is very visceral.

I just wanna know who the fuck is taking those pictures...

  1. Jack[OMG, It's him, Right?]
  2. Chase  [It's NOT him Right?]
  3. Ashley[the blonde]
  4. Bitsy, Grams
  5. Tracy, BFF
  6. Lila's Mom or Dad
  7. Lila's reject ex-boyfriend
  8. Lila's little brothers
  9. Grace
  10. Lila's reject disaster date
  11. Marsha
  12. Frank
  13. Ashley|[the redhead]

All these people have  or could very easily muster up motive for wanting to separate Lila from the Almeida Brothers. But, Who?

I feel for this little twisted threesome. The more Lila runs from Chase the more she runs into Jack and she does it knowing exactly how much she is hurting Chase by chosing to love his brother instead of him. Everybody sees the trainwreck about to happen and at least one person is looking to secure a permanent separation of the three through blackmail, intimidation or extortion. Lila has to make a choise or one WILL be made for her.

Voices, when are we gonna get to know Lila's family and how they may or may not figure into the story? Anyway, I love this story so much, I will literally pay for you to continue. It's not even a joke or an exaggeration. Let me know what I have to do to awaken the muse of this tale and I will! 

The picture isn't random either, it's of Michael and Diane because I keep thinking of  starcrossed love when I read this story.

If nothing else at least let me wish you a  Happy New Year Voices!

 

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 01 2014
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

OMG! OMG! OMG! OOOMGGGAAAAAAAA!

I haven't even read the update yet I'm so excited!!!!!

Can you believe I wrote fanfiction to the last update?!? I can't even believe myself. SMH. That's how invested I am in this Story,  That I actually can hear what they (Lila, Chase, Jack) would say and talk about enough to want to get it written down for my own entertainment. That has never happened to me before when I've read original fiction. EVER!!!

Voices, You are Genius in my honest opinion. I feel like I'm taking an inadvertent creative writing course or something. I'm so hyped i'm on the verge of being giddy, wait wait wait...I AM Giddy!!!

Thank you for updating so fast, I litterally don't kow what I would do if you hadn't.

Okay, off to read the Update...Yaaaaaay!*smiles"



Author's Response:

I have to tell you... my biggest dream is to write for television and I know when I love a tv show I can't help but write fan fiction about it to give it my own spin and hoped one day someone would be writing about stories/character I wrote so I have to thank the hell out of you for this review.  Everyday I have my doubts about my "dreams" (as do my parents) and reading this made me smile so big.  THANK YOU!

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed
Date: March 24 2012
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

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I'm "AA" by the by. Wasn't trying to be shady on purpose just hadn't logged in yet...

Ciao! ^_^

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed
Date: March 28 2012
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay, I am in serious withdrawal over this here story you fabricated Voices. Are you pausing for realtime effect or is the muse slumbering? Dirty minds would like to know this! I hope I am not asking too much but could you like "tease" us once in a while? Leave a little spoiler, or preview, snippets of some convo? i know i's not "done" but I mean why not? If you got it ,flaunt it right?

Lilacks and Lace...

I've been wathching alot of YT lately. Many clip topics touching upon the teacher(coach) etc/student "affairs" where these females seem to be going for morally broke every state you turn! Lila is NOT trying to be anywhere near that. I think Chase knows this very well, respects it even. I get why Chase is not an option in Lila's mind. Yet I can't help but feel like when Lila is with Chase she is in her primary relationship. They fight like it,talk like it and act like it.

Jack can give Lila an adult/equal/normal/No one objects but you little brother-kinda thing!

Chase...Well he can give You... EVERYONE objects! Especially your big brother-kinda thing!

Guess I'm trying to figure out why I'm not feeling her and Jack are IT!They have chemistry and their own connection but...The same way Lila says to Chase she doesn't love him "that way" She doesn't seem capable of feeling for Jack the way he feels for her either. What gives? 

What are you gonna do about Harvard Lila? Either way she can't say the Almeida brothers didn't influence her choice to stay or go.

Time is not on Jacks side and I feel for him 'cuz i don't think Chase is gonna abide by any rules Lila sets up.

Please send a Proof of Life for your loyal readers! Boston is a long way away...

 

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed
Date: May 11 2012
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Voices, this story occupies my everyday life. I find myself thinking about Jack, Chase & Lila almost daily!

You can't know how happy I am that you're making this into a mini series. This is one of my all time favorite stories EVER! Bible. I think partly because you give such distinct voices to each and every character. Marsha is a riot and I feel like I've met Frank even though he's hardly said a word! Usually fringe characters don't stay with me and I as a reader just go along to get along our whatever. Thank you for doing that & I think it's just brilliant use of language, the economy especially, if that makes any sense...

Lila's Chase's guidance counselor [tutor] so technically she's not his teacher. Semantics, I know, but still...

Chase's closet-wish is pretty much a reality & since Jack quit Jones-Day I put 20 on 10 he's gonna find himself in Massachusetts sooner or later...

Lila runs away from one brother then crashes into the other. It's the result of a perfect storm.

Is Cambridge really big enough for Chase & Lila to avoid each other successfully?

Also, who are Lily & Jake? Do they happen to know Case by any chance?

Author's Response:

LOL it took me a minute to get that last sentence.  I DIED laughing.  Thank you for that.

And of course I have to also thank you for all of the beautiful reviews you've left me for Lila's Thunder.  Not everyone has been on the same page with me with this story, Jack, Lila or Chase (and that's fine) but I have always felt like you GET me.  You get my story and my characters that mean so much to me (yes even the minor ones that barely uttered a syllable)--so thank you.

And keep your eye out for the sequel. ;) Stay well.

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 27 2014
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh my God I'm so happy! Congratulations Voices and I'm for sure gonna buy it and re-read it. Thanks for adding extra scenes btw, I'm so excited it's ridiculous. SMDH. YAY!!!! LOL

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Date: September 10 2014
Stereo by Voices
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 615]
Summary:

 

When rockstar Adam Brand makes a racist remark during a drunken magazine interview, it becomes an international headline.  Within hours his PR Agent concocts the perfect plan to revive his rapidly sinking career before it’s too late, but will Adam be able to pull it off?

 

**** STEREO has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:Yes
Word count: 922
Read Count: 90699
Published: March 24 2012
Updated: August 30 2014

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Title: Chapter 2: “I need to know how the hell you manage to make it down any fashion runway alive."

Okay, I'll read your little story.

The premise spells out a romanitic comedy, No? I guess It'll be a nice reprieve from Lila's Thunder.

And what of BasketBall Wives???Why is it an issue? I mean I don't want any of them to represent my blackness, Fiction or Reality...but I digress.

Keep'em coming Voices!

Ciao! ^_^

 Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed
Date: March 29 2012
Trois by Voices
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 216]
Summary:

31 year old self-made millionaire Dean DuPont has only one weakness--his wife Charlotte.  There is nothing he wouldn't do for her.

Nothing.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Extreme Language, Strong Sexual Content , Threesome+, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 21048
Read Count: 20106
Published: December 16 2012
Updated: January 02 2013

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Title: Chapter 4: Four

 

WOW! You did it again. I actually forgot how good this story is on account of how obsessed I am with LT, your other creation, a favorite of mine. This is beautiful. Like someone already pointed out, it's so great how it's reversed that it's the wife and not the husband that wants to stray and the husband is the one grappling with how to keep her satisfied while not wanting to jeopardize his marriage but coming to terms with his own attraction to his wife's sexual muse.

I tend to get bored with how writers typically handle threesomes and interracial romances in general but the way you've coloured these characters make them known and real to me. You're not afraid to make your characters unaware of their own thoughts and feelings. So many writers give away too much of their protagonists inner workings. That's part of the reason it's like literal crack reading your words. I need a fix so bad!!!! *itches skin raw*

Kai is like most of us, well, at least I identify She wants a better life for herself and her family, that's her weakness AND her motivation. We all have a price no matter how much we think we can't be bought. At least she didn't take it lightly and has turned the situation inside out to make sure there is as little damage to her as possible. But of course there is no accounting for what actually happens when the deed is done and how all three of them will feel about each other and what they are doing. And contrary to most of the commenters I quite enjoy Charlotte. She's complex in a way I don't think I've ever encountered in fiction or real life for that matter! And James is a welcome addition to the cast. I really love how your antagonists aren't of the [romantic]norm.

Are you published yet? You need to be so I can buy your books. I need them in my life. When I think of that 50 shades of bullshit they call erotica, let alone literature, and mockery of a film it is sure to be I feel sick that someone like you is still a literal unknown.  Voices, PLEASE PM me if you know of any good reads I can purchase online. *wink wink, nudge nudge* Your writing is so good I don't even care the few times there are typos!!! You don't understand how absolutely rare that is. I've stopped reading stories cold turkey from simple shit like that! I'm not even exaggerating. Okay, obviously I want an update ASAP. It can be one paragraph for all I care.

Thank you awfully for gracing us with your talent. Holler!



Author's Response:

BabyPasha as always your words and so heartwarming and inspiring.  I really apprechiate how much you show support for my dream of writing.  Hopefully it will be a dream realized one day.  God bless. :)

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Date: August 10 2014

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