Penname: bry1124 [Contact]

Real name: Bryana

Member Since: June 29 2013

Membership status: Member

Bio:

I'm just an avid reader who's becoming more interested in doing a little writing.



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Gandy's Glory by Bryleigh Lisette
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 89]
Summary:

He's the world's most famous supermodel.

She's the church singer whose hypocritical lifestyle has been unveiled by one simple picture with him.

 

A story of redemption, love and family.  

 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Friendship, Inspirational, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Extreme Language, Fluff, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Spritualism, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 14
Completed:No
Word count: 26153
Read Count: 31585
Published: October 22 2013
Updated: October 24 2014

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Title: Chapter 1: Whatever Happen's in the Dark comes to Light.

I think was completely on board with reading this story until this chapter. I think literally making her Byonce is a little too much. It detracts from the originality of the story.  Your writing also seems less clear and I'm not sure if its because of the new direction of the story? Sorry I'm not trying to be mean I'm just giving feedback I would want for my own story.



Author's Response:

I am thankful for your review but hopefully my response will clarify some things. I am not literally making her Beyonce. I want you to think about how popular and vocally talented Beyonce is, and envision Glory in that way. Also, Beyonce in  a sense went through the same thign Glory is going through. Being able to be herself fully, hence why I used her album for Glory. 

I think it is still original since it has happened in someone's life before. Namely, Beyonce's. 

Not being mean, but i think you misinterpreted my direction.

 Reviewer: bry1124 Signed
Date: January 17 2014
Carmen by Treale
Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 9]
Summary:

Darlin', darlin', doesn't have a problem Lyin' to herself 'cause her liquor's top shelf It's alarmin', honestly, how charming she can be Fooling everyone, tellin' 'em she's having fun


She says, "You don't wanna be like me Don't wanna see all the things I've seen I'm dyin', I'm dyin'"


She says, "You don't wanna get this way Famous and dumb at an early age Lyin', I'm lyin'"


The boys, the girls, they all like Carmen She gives them butterflies, bats her cartoon eyes She laughs like God, her mind's like a diamond Audio tune lies, she's still shining



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Action-Adventure , Comedy , Drama, Erotica, Family, Friendship, Psychological, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death, Crackfic, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Dubcon, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 2125
Read Count: 5189
Published: January 12 2014
Updated: January 12 2014

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Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: My Life

I like the premise of your story I just think it need a little tightening/editing so that it flows easier, and makes it easie to read! 

 Reviewer: bry1124 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 12 2014

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