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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 359]
Summary:

  

 

Lila James knows that her friendship with seventeen year old Chase Almeida is extremely inappropriate, but she still isn't prepared when his older brother Jack decides to tell her just how inappropriate it actually is-- inadvertently igniting a fire that had been burning quietly inside of them for years.

*****Lila's Thunder has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:Yes
Word count: 670
Read Count: 65030
Published: October 07 2011
Updated: September 09 2014


Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Your updates are so intense they get me riled up lol. That's a testimony to your talent as a writer.

I tried but I really can't with Chase. It's all about him, his emotions, his feelings, his comfort, etc... it's like get over yourself, bro. No wonder he surrounds himself with women who cater to his ego. First, it was Lila though that's understandable considering his parents had died. And now that she's finally getting away from their unhealthy situation, he lashes on to this Ashley girl who needs to fall back and have several seats by the way. He needs to grow up.

And Lila... sigh. I understand why she feels that by breaking up with Jack, things won't get messier. And for the time being, she's probably right. But ultimately, the message she's sending Chase is "throw a fit and you'll have your way" and that's wrong.

I feel for Jack because he's his loved ones' "punching bag".

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstar
Date: March 26 2012

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 615]
Summary:

 

When rockstar Adam Brand makes a racist remark during a drunken magazine interview, it becomes an international headline.  Within hours his PR Agent concocts the perfect plan to revive his rapidly sinking career before it’s too late, but will Adam be able to pull it off?

 

**** STEREO has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 18
Completed:Yes
Word count: 922
Read Count: 90698
Published: March 24 2012
Updated: August 30 2014


Title: Chapter 3: "Remember that this isn’t real. It’s just business, Adam.”

Love the update!

I can't tell if Janelle is jealous and stalkerish OR just a manager watching out for her interests and her client's. I'm going with the latter for now.

I appreciate that even Adam's bandmates are calling him out on his racist comment. It feels like the less he gets away with it, the more he understands and tries to do better.

I hope we get to see more of Yoshi btw. It should be fun to watch him interact with both Shaun and Adam lol.

Reviewer: paayush Signed
Date: April 28 2012

Title: Chapter 6: Rule #2: No Booty

I understand that Celia is looking out for her friend by telling her not to get emotionally involved. But she has to realize that now there's something more between Shaun and Adam, right?

I wish that Shaun was more confident, she wouldn't need to call Celia that much. But at the same time, considering her past, it makes sense that she relies on her more experienced friend in terms of relationships.

I just fear that in the long run, it xould cause more damage than good.

I am excited that the ex is back in the picture. It should be a challenge for Adam lol.

I loved this update :)

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstar
Date: December 29 2012

Title: Chapter 7: Rule #3: Be a Social Butterfly

Adam & Shaun need to talk to each other. She doesn't necessarily have to tell him about the article because let's be honest, angst is fun lol. But imo, they should at least talk about their feelings towards each other.

It's not cute for Adam to act like a wall when she's around then pull the jealousy card when he's alone with Yoshi.

And it's not cute for Shaun to act like a rebellious teen because she can't handle what she feels for him. Falling for him wasn't the plan but she did so she needs to deal lmao.

The way it happened might have been cold but I do think she needs a break from Celia. She's her friend but she can't be her crutch forever.

 

Amazing update, I've missed this story <3

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstar
Date: March 12 2013

Title: Chapter 14: 'How to Land a Rockstar in Thirty Days'

First, welcome back, Voices!!

Now onto the review...

The road to Hell is paved with good intentions so I'm still not here for Celia's antics. It's realistic though, we all have that toxic friend who oversteps her boundaries all the time. At least, Shaun actually told her to stop trying to help.

I'm glad the truth came out. It was messy but it needed to happen.

It's going to be a complicated reunion though if both Adam @ Shaun are too afraid to make the first move lol.

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Date: March 13 2014

Title: Chapter 1: "My dick is sort of like a white supremacist."

I would NOT turn down head from Adam Levine. Somebody hands a medal to Shaun lol.

I like her better when she's not listening to Celia tbh. She can handle Adam without an expert.

They're getting so deep though, they're both this close to be in love. I'm afraid of what will happen when the truth comes out.

Update more often, pleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaase :D

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Date: May 12 2013

Title: Chapter 15: "Are hose and garter your normal Friday night get-up?”

Yay! An update! I've missed this story :)

I'm unimpressed by Adam's judging attitude. Shaun did him wrong and he should be pissed. But she has the right to drink without his smug comments lol.

She was too sheltered before and I do think that she could learn from witnessing some of the non-perfect things in this world. She has the good sense to refuse coke so she's not lost imo.

Reviewer: paayush Signed
Date: May 14 2014

Title: Chapter 16: “If anything happens to her I swear to god I’ll fucking kill you.”

As cruel as he was, Adam wasn't wrong in leaving. Sex doesn't solve anything and if he knows that he's still going to harbor resentment towards Shaun, it's better to break it off now than later. I still think that he's a bit dramatic but that's artists for you lol.

As for Shaun, she apologized multiple times now. There's nothing left to do beside trying to move on. I want her to go to NY. I'm rooting for them as a couple but it'll be good for her and her self-esteem to have a successful career in her dream field.

Amazing updata, I wasn't expecting one so soon :D

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 15 2014

Title: Chapter 17: “I just want you to be happy Adam.”

Perfect ending to one of my ultimate favourite stories on this site ^^

After "Lila's thunder", I'll admit that I was a little worried that this one will also finish on a bittersweet note. I'm happy that Adam & Shaun managed to find each other back.

You have all the elements for a sequel though. No pressure, just saying lol.

It was a pleasure reading you. You're super talented.

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 18 2014

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 216]
Summary:

31 year old self-made millionaire Dean DuPont has only one weakness--his wife Charlotte.  There is nothing he wouldn't do for her.

Nothing.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Extreme Language, Strong Sexual Content , Threesome+, Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 21048
Read Count: 20101
Published: December 16 2012
Updated: January 02 2013


Title: Chapter 3: Three

I applaud Kai for having a moral compass but her friend Drew also has a point. On paper, sleeping with a consenting married couple and getting money as a bonus is not necessarily a bad deal.

What is worrying though is:

1) Kai's admiration for Dean might develop into real romantic feelings

2) The same goes for Dean. The cold mentor facade isn't fooling me

3) I don't get Charlotte, I really don't lmao. She sees that har husband is upset but she manages to bring the conversation back to her threesome idea with Kai. She's either ditzy as hell or one manipulative woman.

Amazing update. Three chapters in and I'm already confused. That's a compliment.

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 22 2012

Title: Chapter 1: One

Another one from Voices! I'm excited because I love your stories.

The beginnging of this one is surely interesting lol. I'm all for wanting to rekindle the flamme in your marriage but something about the way Charlotte did it is off. We shall see.

I'm curious to see who you have in mind for both Kai and Charlotte.

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstar
Date: December 16 2012

Title: Chapter 2: Two

Ok, I was reserving judgment until further development but Charlotte behaves like a petulant child who is used to getting her way. Your husband doesn't want a threesome so you threathen him with a divorce? Okay, girl.

Like others, I am curious to know why Dean is so submissive to her. It goes beyond the regular desire to please your significant other.

I am glad Kai left like she did. Btw, she has grounds for a sexual harassment lawsuit, js xDD

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstar
Date: December 18 2012

Title: Chapter 4: Four

Uh-oh, shit just got real lmao.

At first, I thought James was going to have a crush on Kai. But this is even better! I love that someone at the office isn't oblivious to the change in Dean & Kai's relationship, it feels realistic.

Love the update ;)

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 02 2013

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 72]
Summary:

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Lana and Lucas have an arrangement. Something that works for the both of them. At least Lana thought it did.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:Yes
Word count: 8868
Read Count: 11844
Published: March 12 2013
Updated: April 13 2013


Title: Chapter 1: Rituals

Ooooh great starter! I think this story will hit close to home for A LOT of people. The only advice I'd give Lucas is to run loool. If he's not strong enough to call off their arrangement face to face, he can always leave a voicemail or something. 

You can't force someone to be in a relationship with you, especially if you've started as fwb's.

Can't wait for the remaning chapters.

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstar
Date: March 12 2013

Title: Chapter 1: Rituals

It's Lana's prerogative to want a man who's more like her financially. Hell, I even share that opinion irl to an extent.

But don't hook up with an artist whose lifestyle you don't approve of then act like you're better than that.

I'm proud of Lucas for standing his ground.



Author's Response:

Lana was wrong. She knew what he was and had no problem with it. But she has an ideal man, and it's not him.

She felt the need to express that in a manner totally unnecessary.

She was rude as hell.

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 22 2013

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