It was awesome to the max.
Author's Response:
Why thank you so much and thanks for taking the time to review! :)
Reviewer: Liason4220 Signed [Report This]Date: May 10 2011 06:16 pm
A bit confused with this timeline...all of interactions Justine and Jelena are having with each other are occuring in the same day? If so this is one long first day of school for Jalena...eventful too.
Author's Response:
Yes, it's still the same day I went back and put in the author notes where we are in the story and I will continue to do that for each chapter putting a lil recap of whats going on hope that helps... And yes its the longest school day ever and yes it is very eventful for Jalena and Justin too.. ;)
Reviewer: XxSKYxLARKxX Signed [Report This]
Date: May 10 2011 06:12 pm
lol wow a gym teacher stuck in the 80's big time lol. Glad she got caption and she had justin ready to rip off her clothes and take her right then and there in the gym lol. Justin girlfriend better watch out because she about to take your man lol. Like the story and thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
Your welcome and thanks again for reviewing I love it when you get reviews for each chapter thanks for taking the time to do that I really appreciate it.
Ms. Weeks is a trip I truly did have a dance instructor just like her.. And Yes Justin Girlfriend is in for some serious competition she better watch out but so should Jalena......
Thanks a again
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed
[Report This]Date: May 10 2011 05:53 pm
Yes loved the update. I cant wait until the party. Love the anticipation.
Author's Response:
Yeah!!! Glad you loved it I can't wait till the party some interesting things will be going down that night... thanks so much for the review makes me so happy!!!
Reviewer: pokerdiva01 Signed
[Report This]Date: May 10 2011 03:00 pm
abit longer plse but i loved it..
Author's Response:
I'm trying, I'm trying its just that sometimes the chapter just ends for me and I just go on to the next but the characters are starting to speak to me more and the more I go back and edit the more they want to say... But I will say this if the chapter is short I will at least post more than one.
I'm so glad you love it that makes me feel reall good as a first time writer...
Reviewer: heather2you Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 10 2011 11:56 am
i like it!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Reviewer: Brandy Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 03 2011 06:36 am
You are a talented writer and I am truly did enjoy this update. I like the fact that you give us insight into the two main characters thoughts and I hope to see another update soon!!!!
Author's Response:
AWWE!!! Thank you!!!! SOOO Much!! I feel so happy once I read this I got to writing some more.. finished a chapter in a day I was on a review high... I'm glad your liking the two points of views, this story was originally going to be just Jalena's pov but Justin just wont keep his mouth shut he has stuff he has to say too. :)
Again I thank you and hope you like the next updates... I look forward to hearing what you have to say about them... Happy Reading
Reviewer: Tempestsunshine Signed [Report This]Date: May 02 2011 03:55 pm
Really liking this story.
Author's Response:
Yeah thank you!
Reviewer: Janetbd Signed [Report This]Date: May 02 2011 01:37 pm
The story seems to be progressing quite nicely. Jalena is making friends and she may have found her all-important nemesis in Justin's girlfriend. However, I think reviewing your grammar might enrich the chapters quite a bit. I don't know about everyone else, but I get caught up in that when I'd rather be totally engrossed in your character's lives.
I hope this helps as you continue to write more.
Peace.
Reviewer: TRaberah EH Signed [Report This]Date: May 02 2011 08:16 am
Interesting update.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: May 02 2011 06:52 am
Ever one watching those to to sew what going on. It like her friend telling her she better watch her back because he has a crazy girlfriend who seem the type to try to kill a chick over justin lol. I hope she goes to justin party and get to know him because they seem to realy like each other alot. thanks for the update.
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed [Report This]Date: May 02 2011 06:09 am
great chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Reviewer: mfoto22 Signed [Report This]Date: May 02 2011 05:42 am
Damn this is a good story_ keep coming with the updates. Sometimes a 'little' competition is good.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much I'm so glad you like it thanks for the review and the 5 start rating you are AWESOME!!!!! And I agree a little competition is good.
Reviewer: tempestsunshine Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 27 2011 03:55 pm
Definitely, Alohomora is a spell used to jimmy locks. Damn, that JK Rowling, for making lock-picking cooler than it already was. And for making it impossible for us muggle folk. I doubt she has powers, unlike the witch Angela, was it?, in Beastly.
Yes, why IS he comparing them? I mean, I cannot understand what has captivated him so. They hardly know one another and it seems a little premature, his love for her.
A party, eh? This could be interesting.
Singing Aaliyah in reference to sex, Caleb might be a little gay. Which is cool, I could get into that.
A teenage life without sex? A better one for the Mothers and Fathers that have to raise the children born from those hormonal unions. Oh, and let us not forget the STI levels in teenagers. It is so not cute.
As a Junior, I thought I was ready to settle down. As a Senior, I realized just how wrong I was.
To each their own, though. Honestly, I think those two need to get to know one another.
Peace.
Author's Response: Ooo The love of romance... it can happen kinds of ways for people, you know, love at first sight... love at first kiss.... or...they take years to get to know one another ....maybe just lust at first sight,... who knows! Hey it was that way for me when I met my husband have been married what? 12 going 13 years this May. Still hot for that Man! ;)
Our Family love Harry Potter! Our youngest thought she was a wizard at one point.
Party will be intresting...No Caleb is definitly not gay and oh, don't worry he wraps it up.
Its just the begining enjoy.... :)
Thank you so much for reviewing. Happy Reading. :) Reviewer: TRaberah EH Signed
[Report This]Date: April 27 2011 09:45 am
Well, well, well, Justin made a mistake and likes Jalena. Wonder what he's going to do about it? Well done. Next chaper should be interesting.
Author's Response:
Thank you ever so much! yeah it should be interesting to see what Justin is going to do about it hmmm I wonder.... :)
Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed [Report This]Date: April 26 2011 07:50 pm
Interesting update.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: April 26 2011 08:13 am
So justin belives she put a spell on him lol wow yes the spell is call love because he in love with her bigtime. He need to get it together before he do something stupid lol. I wonder if she going to his party? Thanks for the update and let you know all your words in this chapter are realy realy big.
Author's Response:
Ha yeah I finally got that fixed.... As for Justing doing something stupid well will just have to see and as for the party..... Of course she's going.. Doesn't something interesting always happen at parties???
Thanks so much for reviewing... and a 5 star at that yeah!
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed [Report This]Date: April 26 2011 04:47 am
Caleb said Patting his hair. - I hope this is a caricature of how pretty boys behave. I know not if I have known any, but if ever I do, they better not behave like this. Preening and the like, it is not attractive. And who told Caleb he was pretty anyway?
KrisIko, Krista & Niko, are they together? I really hope so, but then I do not know. If Niko is all over Jalena, that is the very meaning of uncool.
Sam surely is a hunky piece of pie, now he could definitely be a pretty boy. Okay, he already is one.
Krista seems a bit insane for no reason. But people usually have no reason, I suppose, just genetic predisposition.
That had to be the shortest class ever. Way to bolt Jalena, though it is quite obvious that he has a girlfriend.
-Peace.
Author's Response:
LOL! Caleb reminds of the time I worked for the Lancome counter at a mal.l This one teenage boy would come in with his girlfriend every Friday and would stop by my counter to look at this full body mirror we had. He would check himself out pat his hair, make sure his clothes were smoothed out, the whole nine yards and yes he was a really good looking guy and he knew it too. His girlfriend would walk around my counter waiting for him to finish primping, It was the saddest thing I ever saw. So every time he came in I'd tell my co-workers "here comes pretty boy." :)
Now as for the class time class in my head, ran the usual 45 min i just didn't fell the need to drag it out I'd die of boredom reading about what happen in the classroom i just felt I need to move on.
And as far as KrisIko.. Love that by the way... They have some history as far as her being a lil crazy she does tend to be a lil on the violent side but if fits her. Just be patient with me its coming remember I'm a new-be.. lol
Thanks for reading and reviewing again.. I can't tell you how happy I am to get another review from you again.. This is so much fun.
Reviewer: TRaberah EH Signed [Report This]Date: April 22 2011 09:52 am
I'm not going to lie, there were things I really got into when reading this, and then there were other things. I have no idea what it was, but I didn't connect enough to the characters. Jalena, her voice, I felt was a little drowned out in this chapter and I can't work out how that happened because it was all in her point of view. There were some tense issues here and there, but I liked it. I am going to read what more there is to this.
I'd love to see more information, be it background or foreground, on the characters, which will make getting a feel for them easier for me. Of course I remember my first story, there was a lot going on there for me, so i understand. Keep it up.
-Peace.
Author's Response: I've have never in my life written a story and I'm definitely no professing Author. I've just played around stories in my head. I'm what you'd call a constant daydreamer. I have story scenes going in my head all day beginnings, middles, endings, sequels. Ok now you prob. think I'm nuts. lolAnyway I'm just going with the flow of what ever pops in my head. if I start to think and try to edit over and over I'll never get typed out. I'm sorry you didn't get a good feel of Jalena. It's just how it all came to me in the first chapter. She is starting to speak to me more More Justin too as well as some of the other characters. So I hope you get more of a feel of her with the up coming chapters.All in all this is just for the fun of it for me. I truly appreciate your advice and I am so happy that you took the time to read and review my story that means so much to me. Thank you so much. I look forward to hearing from you again. :) Reviewer: TRaberah EH Signed
[Report This]Date: April 22 2011 01:37 am
Wow I thought justin was about to have her for dinner and dessert the way he was looking at her lol. I love how she came back on that bitch stacey. Stacey is going to be in a huge suprise when justin dumps her but like a bad hair cut. thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
LOL! ;) Jalena has a backbone she's definitely not some meek young lady.
I'm glad I'm keeping you interested this is really fun for me I like hearing people get into it. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed [Report This]Date: April 21 2011 04:28 am
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Author's Response:
Ok, thanks, sorry about that. I change them are they the right size now?
Reviewer: PassionK Signed [Report This]Date: April 20 2011 05:41 am
Oh lord that was good. Justin cant help him self he better drop ms stacey and go get his soulmate lol. Looking forward to next update.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing... hmm well just have to see what happens. ;)
Reviewer: pokerdiva01 Signed [Report This]Date: April 18 2011 05:14 pm
oh spoil us . I love the story and look forward to reading it.
Author's Response:
I will do my best to spoil you, your reviews are like my food they keep me going.
Reviewer: pokerdiva01 Signed [Report This]Date: April 18 2011 05:46 am
they are too funny.
Author's Response:
I think teenagers are the most hilarious characters ;)
Thanks for reviewing
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: April 18 2011 05:17 am
I like.
Author's Response:
Thank you :)
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: April 18 2011 05:10 am