This is getting really good. Poor Miguel. Shame on Matt's mother.
Reviewer: Natori aka R Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 04:06 pm
Dayum I hooked = Hook, Line 'N Sinker
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Date: May 15 2013 03:31 pm
Matt is about to be full on caveman. I like Miguel. He's smart to know that he might end up being odd man out. *le sigh*
Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 02:48 pm
Dear Matt, I'm sorry. Love, Z
Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 08:16 am
It seems that Matt has taken the first step forward. At least he realized that it did not feel right marrying Liz.
Reviewer: reader101 Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 07:49 am
Ok, I know I've committed the cardinal sin of the "read and dash" with this story for chapters and owe more than I'm about to type. I need Matt to have a stadium full of seats! I have needed this for a while, but that last bit just got me. Ditto to the TMZ mom.
Reviewer: Fantasque Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 07:07 am
Wow finally the truth comes out! Good chapter, I hope he finally gets the family he has longed for. Amelia needs to fight for Matt. Become the family they deserve!
Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 06:09 am
Thanks for updating so glad to have back to back updates :) I can't wait to see what happens next and I can't wait to see zee and Matt fall back in love again. I can't wait to see what's going to happen when Matt confronts his mom about her part in zee leaving him. On the edge of my seat :)
Reviewer: xiaomei21 Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 05:44 am
Matt better take them on that tour with him 1) will get Chase away from the madness 2) he get to win Z back and apologize for being a d*ckhead.
Miguel know what time it is and it is not for him. He seems like a nice guy, but hey everybody can't win.
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 05:02 am
So Z kisses and feeds Miguel. Let's him sit at the head of the table and MAtt walks in??? dun-dun-duuuuuuuuuunnnnnnnn.
Reviewer: Qsmommy05 Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 04:57 am
Miquel stick with your first thought she is in love Matt and there is no room in her heart for you. Z is just being stubborn and stupid!!! Miquel you need to keep your trap shut, as Z is confused as hell and as soon as unconfused you will be kicked to the curb. THe curb is where you belong anyway!! Team Matt!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 03:33 am
WELL DAMN
Reviewer: renata Signed [Report This]Date: May 15 2013 01:11 am
Hurray! About time he got rid of Liz. No matter what happens with Azalea, he never loved Liz like should a woman he was going to marry.
Poor little Chase, its been hard on her with all the changes.
Nice!
Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 11:49 pm
Hey there, I just wanted to make sure you got my email. -thanks
Reviewer: partial2passion Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 11:36 pm
Glad to see Matt was on his A game--for a moment I thought he was slow. Also glad to see he got rid of Liz before he goes after Z. Z should keep dating that 'other' guy. Matt should take them on this tour with him--separate bedrooms, of course. Chase is upset and this would be the perfect opportunity to spend time with his daughter and win Z over. Thank you for the update--well done!
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 07:44 pm
Ding dong the witch is gone! Telling that poor child, those lies about her daddy, she needs to be beat.
Reviewer: bayoumomma Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 06:40 am
wow! shat a great chapter... Go get you man or woman
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 06:15 am
Yay! Go on Matt with your bad yourself. This chapter went just right. I'm so glad Matt handled his business and broke up with her in person and put his ducks in a row. Smart move having the photos and making her sign a non-disclosure agreement. Im surprised I expected a lot more drama from Liz but that's good he nipped this in the bud. Poor Chase, maybe she has some fear of abandonment issues going on. They're going to have to talk as a family. I can't wait for Z and Matt's reunion! Nice job. ;-)
Author's Response:
I am excited for where this story is taking me. If your offer is still good I am in desperate need of a beta reader or editor. I would be eternally grateful. However to be honest I don't even know how that process gets started do you?
Reviewer: partial2passion Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 04:40 am
IT's about damn time that Matt dumped Liz, that ho was past tired!! Why does Chase think that her daddy doesn't like her? I feel like I missed something, I am going to read the chapter before this one, as I am all kinds of lost. When did Liz leave for New York? I love this story!!
Author's Response:
THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU. I was missing a peice of the story. Thanks for noticing.I write on my tablet in between breaks and then mail it to my laptop and thendownload it. So sometimes things get lost in translation and my eyes are so glazed I can't tell the difference. Thanks again!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 04:16 am
Yay no more Lizbeth. I can't stand that heifer.
Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 04:05 am
*HAPPY DANCE!!!*
Reviewer: idriveavitz Signed [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 03:55 am
Hahaha...Matt better make sure he disinfects his lips now. Don't take chances.
Author's Response:
Why he kissed her cheek?
Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 14 2013 03:29 am
it's about to get real
Reviewer: 100percentFAN Signed [Report This]Date: April 21 2013 04:35 am
Oh wow. I just stumbled upon this story and read all the chapters in one sitting. I really love how you've framed your characters. Chase is adorable and witty. I really love Z's personality. Her character is both vulnerable and strong, sweet but fiercely loyal- love it! You also did a really good job with Miguel and her chemistry. Their dialogue is smooth. It kinda makes me sad because they're a so great together... but we know he's no Matt. :/
Matt, well I love him too. But he seems a little too perfect. From the beginning he's been the poor guy that was left behind and lied to and now he consistently does the right thing. With his daughter and even with his awful fiancee. I mean he gets mad and destroys things but doesn't really do anything wrong.. except for cheating on his girlfriend in the beginning. I dunno I still love him. :)
Also I'm surprised you've made the grandmother Nicole so repentive so quickly. I thought there might be a build up from when she's first introduced to when she admits she was wrong. I thought maybe Chase would soften her heart and then she would feel regret. But that's good that she's supporting Z now. Probably threw Z for a loop. And then there is Liz, well she's just a spolied brat who feels threatened.
An editor or a beta would really really be helpful. The simple grammar mistakes easy to fix and really disrupt the flow of the sentences. It's always good to have a second set of eyes to help you out. (I'm available if you're interested)
All in all very very nice job. Your words are like butter gliding on the page. :)
-p2p-
Author's Response:
I would love for you to be my editor.Lord knows I need one. I have been of fan of yours since I read your work on literotica. I actually don't even know how this whole process works but I wold love if you could help me. Thanks.
Reviewer: partial2passion Signed [Report This]Date: April 17 2013 07:26 pm
Still loving this story and I would love that you not take so long with the next update!!!!!
Kim
Reviewer: kimyso Signed [Report This]Date: April 17 2013 06:53 pm