I'm loving this story. I completely side with Matt about her not telling him about Chase but he's being an ass. As far as he can tell, his daughter is well-rounded and very respectful, intelligent so he should give Azalea a little credit and not assume that she's being spiteful by saying (rightly) that Chase doesn't need to be overloaded with things. He should also do himself a favor and try to talk to Azalea and find out why she did what she did and also, stop encouraging Lizbeth. He's only going to make it harder for himself in the end.
Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 29 2012 06:54 am
When will this story earn its "mature content" rating? There's been no sexy action so far. When can we expect some? :D
Reviewer: CurlyQ Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 29 2012 02:13 am
Love that Matt isn't letting azalea push him around or ignoring that she kept him out of their daughter's life. I hope the figure things out in a realistic time frame. Because most of the stories I've read the woman makes the guy feel like he's in the wrong and he ends up apologizing for something she did and the confrontation lasts like a chapter and a half or a day or two.
Excuse the venting/rambling, I guess I'm saying dnt let Azalea puke Matt. She's in the wrong. She shud difinitely feel the repercussions
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 04:25 pm
I so agree with Matt. Azalea is so wrong. She selfishly kept his daughter from him, so he has the right to make up for those lost years. She need to thank her lucky stars, he didn't filed for full custody, because unlike her he was thinking about his daughter. I think you should make her feel shameful of her action and the consequences it brought. But this a great story to read.
Reviewer: skriver Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 02:01 pm
ouch. what a nasty piece of work he's become. You need to proof-read or get an editor. Loads of typos.
Reviewer: cuppacoffee Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 09:09 am
I think he still loves Z, but is using Lizbeth to try and keep her at a distance, because of how she hurt him. He is angry right now and lashing out at her, to hide his true feelings.
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 06:47 am
Am I the only one who likes Lizbeth? She's (unintentionally) funny. I lol'd at several lines in the story. Great job! Please update soon!
Reviewer: CurlyQ Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 06:09 am
I'm confused... does he like Z or not? Is he really still interested in his girlfriend/fiancee or not? In chapter one he said he loved Z, and that he is tired of his girlfriend/fiancee, but by the time we get to chapter four he seems to can't stand Z.
Reviewer: Anonymous Confusion Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 06:09 am
Wow, I am not liking the way this is going. Yes she was wrong, but he will have to be a little more composed than this. His little fiancee does not have the right to chime in either. It would not be good for Chase to overhear him say something negative either, because she would surely take mommies side.
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 04:34 am
i like the story line, but it doesn't seem very developed.
Reviewer: anon Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 03:48 am
She's beautiful.
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 03:01 am
Couldn't you wait until you had some words to add this one photo. I mean she's cute and all but this is like a huge disappointment when you expect more.
Author's Response:
I'm still learning the sight. I won't put up anymore half-assed updates. Sorry :)
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 02:41 am
Look at the those big eyes, she is a sweetie!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: August 28 2012 01:34 am
Can't wait to find out what's going to happen;)
Reviewer: xiaomei21 Signed [Report This]Date: August 27 2012 06:30 am
Nice looking additional cast!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 10:47 pm
Excellent cast!!! Love you casted as Mr. Shah and Javier although Javier makes my teeth itch.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 09:10 pm
love your story. keep on keep on.
Reviewer: pocket Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 09:05 pm
Great update Love, love ,love this story . I hate that Azalea gave into Matt's demands so fast but I kinda understand , it's for her daughter's sake. Even thought Matt didn't sign the birth certificate so legally he's not Chase's father but I understand . Can't wait for the next update . : )
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 08:02 pm
Great start. I would howerver suggest to fix the formatting for the sentences and paragraphs. It would make the readability of the story easier. Thanks for sharing your work.
Reviewer: HFLover Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 06:59 pm
What does the strumpet Lizbeth look like?
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 05:43 pm
Lizbeth you are in for a rude awakening as Matt doesn't love and he never has. Z as he calles has his heart for the 4 years. Lizbeth you just want for his money and what he can do for your career. So don't get it twisted, you time has past so just let him go. Lizbeth you so right Azalea and Chase are his family, you are nothing but the appetizer before the the dinner. A and Chase are the main meal and the desert. Go away fly!!
I love this story and I am so happy to this update this morning!! Thank you for blessing us with your talent!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 05:41 pm
Wait till Lizbeth sees the not pudgy black school teacher. Her dad wasn't that uspet with her not getting rid of the baby, it probably was a way out of the marriage for him. He was most likely seeing the secretaey before that. Matt is leaving no wiggle room for her, but unfortunately she brought all this on herself. She did this to help him, but in the end it hurt him more than she can know. Awesome update!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: August 26 2012 03:36 pm
any chance of changing the pic of the male, he's no rock star lol, she's beautiful btw, no wonder he fell in love with her lol
Reviewer: dounome Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 10:48 pm
This story is so well writen, which makes it readable. I don't why some woman make themseleves single mums. When they choose not to tell their man. I think it's selfish. Azalea is selfish, I don't care what her excuse was, she was not in an abusive relationship, so she had no excuse. She is selfish!!!!!
Reviewer: skriver Signed [Report This]Date: August 25 2012 01:56 pm