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Title: The Touch of You

Love the start of the story so far, keep it up.

 Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 03:54 pm
Title: The Touch of You

Great start. Why is Tamera suach a bitch?

 Reviewer: juno Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 09:53 am
Title: The Touch of You

The story has a very promising start, the only thing I had a problem with rereading lines. Some paragraphs are to compacted.

 Reviewer: BritneyKai Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 09:41 am
Title: The Touch of You

P.S. I would love to edit for you; a sneak peek would be more than worth it. 



Author's Response:

thats awesome :)

 Reviewer: tens Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 07:42 am
Title: The Touch of You

It could use a lot of editing but the premise is great.  I look forward to seeing our heroine interact with Bastien/Harry. 

 Reviewer: tens Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 07:40 am
Title: The Touch of You

I haven't even read this story yet but HARRY GOODWINS FOREVER. 



Author's Response:

ahh yes good ol harry dont you just love him lol

 Reviewer: tens Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 07:27 am
Title: The Touch of You

Wow, this story is really well written. I would love to see where you will go with this. An arranged marriage? Now that doesn't sound good. Can't wait to read more.

Also, you should really make those pictures smaller. They don't need to be so big. Just saying

Nsablo



Author's Response:

I know I just have to figure out how lol

 Reviewer: Nsablo Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 06:39 am
Title: The Touch of You

Good start. Waiting for more .

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Date: December 03 2012 06:01 am
Title: The Touch of You

Looks good! Tamara is going to have me fussing, I already know!

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 05:55 am
Title: The Touch of You

This is a little confusing, although it's a decent start. It would help if you would explain her father's reason for feeling that she would do better with one on one teaching. There are to many great private schools in and out of the country for me to believe that they weren't good enough for him. 

You also need to work more on the characterizations, at least getting them to come across more. 

I liked that Tamara knew her faults and owned up to them. I don't like her, but I appreciate her candor. 

You might want to break up those larger paragraphs. 



Author's Response:

I understand I guess I didnt want to give everything away so quickly sometimes I find when things happen so quickly its hard to appreciate the end. I didnt want to throw these two charcters in your faces its the beginning.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 05:26 am
Title: The Touch of You

Great chapter!!! 

 Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 04:53 am
Title: The Touch of You

Thanks for reveiwing the question isnt will she leave rather will she want to.:)

 Reviewer: Dream89 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2012 04:49 am
Title: The Touch of You

Interesting. Tamara is just evil and even though I don't know which direction this story is headed in, I hope she gets her comeuppance. Whatever plans the father has made, when she's of age she can tell them to piss off. 

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Date: December 03 2012 04:39 am


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