Title: Epilogue

This was good. I hope it continues, I'm anxious to find out what happens with the two couples.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading. Hope to see you at Part two. :-)

Reviewer: Khamalani Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 07 2015 06:46 pm

Title: 1. Ali

Why is James so eager to hang out with Ali?  I'm intrigued. 

Reviewer: Khamalani Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2015 05:31 pm

Title: Epilogue

Great story and now ready for pt.2.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and taking the time to leave feedback. I really appreciate it.

Reviewer: AP Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2015 04:09 pm

Title: 5. Ali

How are both their cellphones dead? How do they both end up in the same area of town at the same time? How do they each meet a partner of the same couple on the same day? And while they both seem destined for infidelity, why is Gabe further ahead in the race than Ali? 

Reviewer: AP Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2015 03:47 pm

Title: 1. Ali

This is a great start. I'm not going to jump to conclusions about how the story will go because you're a great storyteller so I know this will be anything but predictable. I don't remember seeing this posted so I'm glad you mentioned it in the shoutbox. You shouldn't take it down and definitely post the other parts.

Reviewer: AP Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2015 03:06 pm



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