I'm really enjoying the flow of this re- write. Before, it seemed rushed. I like how we're seeing more of a relationship building between them in a slower fashion, then the prior first write.
Thank you so much. I am not denying that the first posting of the story was rushed because it was. The relationship, the plot, everything was very rushed. Being able to go back, change some things around, and fill in the blanks has definitely made the story better and made me a better writer. Thank you.Reviewer: jlly16 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2015 04:14 pm
Bastian is scarily fine. Oh Willow, your mouth, girl. You said it, Bastian will make it so.
That is a very good way to describe him. He is scarily fine. In a possessive and overtly aggressive way. His past contributes (childhood and adulthood) contributes to why he's the only he is now. He didn't always used to be like this though. I think you will like the new changes to his background story.Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2015 05:29 am
We are learning more about Sebastian...he's dangerous with a true soft spot for Willow...so if anyone messes with his Willow...look out...
The soft spot for Willow makes him even more dangerous. The things he will be willing to do will exceed imagination and may challenge morals.Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05 2015 07:54 pm