Well the crap has hit the fan!!! Loved it but Adena is beginning to make me sick of her immature and silly ways of dealing with things. She's 24yrs, grow up already!!! Running away doesn't solve anything. Enough is enough chica....talk to your parents!!!!
Eventhough she doesn't like surprises she could have at least acknowleged the fact that Craig did it and tried to make her happy. If she wants to go back to Taye, so be it. Live with what you want but she really needs to work on herself first. Craig, Craig let her ungrateful behind go and move on. I don't know if she's worth the stress.
Fee Fee, you know you're lying. Hmmm, let's see what Taye have to say now.
Author's Response: Adena is a piece of work right now! She needs time to herself definitely. Fee Fee is making everything worse! Shit has hit the fan, its gonna be messy! Thanks for reading! Reviewer: baha_malo Signed
[Report This]Date: 30/04/10 05:42 am
With friends like Kim Adena doesn't need any enemies. She has a new enemy and she doesn't even know that Felicia is Craig's ex and the skank that has been sleeping with her husband. Can't wait to read what happens next especially since Adena thinks that Craig and her friend are dating. Thanks
Author's Response: Yeah, Kim's priorities as far as friends is real mixed up right now due to Adena's disappearance. A lot is going to happen and thats all Im gonna say! Im glad that you cant wait! But wait a little longer ;). Thanks for reviewing! Reviewer: Divsionred Signed
[Report This]Date: 29/04/10 02:05 am
Oh hell nooo!!! Taye is a mess!! The grass always seem greener on the other side. Now he doesn't have Adena , he's not having much fun with his affair. What a dick!!! Fee Fee is gonna turn that party out. Hope Adena asks Craig what's going on instead of making assumptions and being miserable. She needs to act as a grown a** woman and stop running away as a child. She needs to face her darn problems head on. Whose friend is Kim, really????!!! Kim is a traitor!!! She always seem to have Taye's back but where's the support for Adena.
Author's Response: EXACTLY! The grass is always greener on the other side but green aint shit when karma bites you in the ass! Lmao, thanks for following! Updates soon. And yes, Adena's party is going to be an affair to remember!
[Report This]Date: 28/04/10 11:56 pm
Taye has some nerve, he cheated on her and now he's acting all concerned. I am loving Craig and I hope that Adena gives him a chance. Taye is over and he better recognize that.
Author's Response: Its funny how that happens huh? Especially now that a "guy cuter than him" is now in the picture. Thanks for reading!!!
Date: 27/04/10 07:11 am
Loved it!!! Kim needs to quit discussing Adena with Taye. Where is her loyalty??? If Adena needs space especially from Taye, let her have it!!! One of the reasons their marriage might not have lasted was because they were too young and immature for a serious committment. They still have some growing up to do.
Author's Response: I agree, thats why certain things need to stay between the two people in the relationship. I myself am going to stay single til my 30's lol. I feel your 20's is when you start to understand who you are and how can you when you are married? Thats just me. Thanks for loving it!!!
[Report This]Date: 27/04/10 02:26 am
Thanks for a great update. Her friends shouldn't believe anything that Taye has to say the cheating dog.
Author's Response: Lol, I agree and you know Missy aint having it. Thanks for staying with it!
[Report This]Date: 27/04/10 01:47 am
Felicia is Craig's ex...WTF? Wow. Thanks
Author's Response: Lol, your welcome! I decided to shake it up a little bit! Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: 23/04/10 01:08 pm
Taye is a weak a**ed man being lead by his little head. He doesn't deserve Adena. He needs to decide what he wants and move on. Wow, Fee Fee was just trying to hook up with Craig!!! What a small world, everyone with everyone's ex.....Yuck!!! Interesting update.
Author's Response: He is! Thank you! Glad you liked my little twist in the story!
[Report This]Date: 23/04/10 03:17 am
Adena is a crazy mess. Her friend is crazy the one that saw her at the club. I like Craig he seems like a really nice guy. Can't believe that he is allowing Adena to continue to crash at his house while she thinks. What does she need to think about? She needs to act like the adult that she says she is and deal with the crisis in her life instead of hiding out. She needs to call her parents to let them know that she is ok. Thanks
Author's Response:
Yep, the divorce is turning her into a crazy person most definitely. The mess is going to get even bigger too!
Thanks for following!
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 21/04/10 01:38 am
Adena needs to face the music and move on. Taye done her dirty, forget him! She can't use Craig to avoid her problems. Hope she doesn't use Craig and try to go rebound with him. It just wouldn't work. Taye isn't worth the stress. Interesting update. She should at least let her parents and friends know she's ok even if she doesn't want to talk to Taye.
Author's Response: Glad you are still interested! Thanks for reviewing! More updates soon!
[Report This]Date: 20/04/10 03:33 am
wow, what is she doing? She needs to call someone and let them know that she is ok. I can't believe her husband called her parents crying what an idiot. Thanks for a great update. Take Care.
Author's Response: She's running for the wrong reasons. The fantasy is gonna fade soon and she's gonna be thrust back into reality! Thanks for reviewing! Take care!
[Report This]Date: 19/04/10 11:28 pm
Taye just seemes like a weak a** man. No back bone to do the right thing. Now he needs to piss off and leave Adena alone. The grass always looks greener on the other side but he had to get burnt to see that. If she ges back to him......awh well.
Author's Response:
I agree and shit's gonna hit the fan soon!
Thanks for keeping up with the story!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 17/04/10 02:36 am
Why the heck doesn't he leave her alone??? He needs to GIVE her some space. It becomes annoying after a while. What does he want from her now???? He was the one feeling bored in their marriage and screwed around. Now he has his freedom and he's hounding her???!!! The nerve of him!!! Great update.
Author's Response:
Its the grass is always greener on the other side curse. Hes a little too late!
Thanks for all your feedback! I really appreciate it!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 16/04/10 05:47 am
I feel so bad for Adena. She's so heartbroken =( Btw, will you be making other books about the other signs of the zodiac?
Author's Response:
I know, me too!
Yes I will make more books for each zodiac. I actually have half of Aquarius written, a little slow moving though lol since theres 12 of them and Im only halfway through book 2!
http://fictionalfantasies.webs.com
thats my website, aquarius is posted there as well as some other stories ive written, ill post aquarius here soon as well
Reviewer: Samantha Anonymous [Report This]Date: 16/04/10 04:23 am
She should really call her friends and let them know that she is sick and staying with a friend. As for her husband he can kiss her behind the dirty dog. He has a nerve to be threatening her that he is going to tell people. I hope he tells them why he can't find his wife because he was a ho. Thanks
Author's Response:
"he can kiss her behind the dirty dog"- love that one! Im gonna have to use that!
Thanks for all the feedback, I really appreciate it!!!
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 16/04/10 02:16 am
Well, you don't really punctuate your dialgoue. You also leave off a few periods here and there in the actual story. I also think that your spacing is off between commas and after quotation marks. I think that might've been all that I saw. Other than that, it was good.
Here's how I learned to punctuate dialogue.
You use commas for speaking/saying verbs.
"I did that," she said.
"Okay,' he replied.
You use periods wtih action verbs.
"I did that." She pointed to the mess around them.
"Okay." He shrugged.
You still use question marks, exclamation points, and etc.
Author's Response: Oh ok lol yea sometimes i write my sentences like poetry and i always forget to put periods at the end, thats just how i write i guess, but thanks for the heads up! Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed
[Report This]Date: 15/04/10 03:58 am
Thanks for a great update. Now she has a new friend. He seems nice but they don't seem compatible. He worked in the mail room and is a club. She works at an art gallery. Plus he is in the same boat as her husband, looking for a job. Somewhat looking...but I guess he was just recently laid off.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Yeah Craig is a Cancer and they along with Capricorns can butt heads a lot. He is different from Taye in many ways however and we will see about that later! Thanks again!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: 14/04/10 06:00 am
The good points: The characters and plot seem well wroked on. I think it's interesting.
Would you like to know what I thought wasn't that great in my opinion?
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading!
Um sure constructive criticism only please! ;)
Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed [Report This]Date: 14/04/10 03:51 am
Taye needs to give Adena her space. Hope she pulls herself together and move on. Also hope she's not preggers as all that does is complicate things. Let the cheater go!!! Great update.
Author's Response:
Yeah, they both need time away from each other to truly think
Again, thanks for all the feedback!!!! Much love!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 11/04/10 06:51 am
Taye was a dog and she needs to divorce him and move on. He a CHEATER!!! There is NO justification for that!! Love the update.
Author's Response: Thanks for all the feedback! I really appreciate it!
[Report This]Date: 11/04/10 06:43 am
Taye is a shit head!! To do that to Adena after 10 months of marriage. Don't see marriage counselling going well either. Great update.
Author's Response: I totally agree! Thanks for reading!!!!
[Report This]Date: 11/04/10 06:31 am
Thanks for a great update. She needs to take some responsibilty for the break up. Yes he cheated but she was treating him like a child. The same way that she is treating her friends...like children. I was stunned that he is starting to miss her now that she is gone. Is she pregnant? That will make her even more miserable.
Author's Response: I agree. Ive learned the hard way that it also takes two to break up, one doesnt realize they didnt do anything wrong until its too late...or they never realize it at all. Taye now has to lie in the dirt that he has played in and he is feeling very sorry about it. Thanks for reading!!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: 09/04/10 04:00 am
More please!
Author's Response: Im glad you like! I will update soon, most definitely!
[Report This]Date: 07/04/10 09:07 pm
Well at least she knows what is going on with her husband now. How sad for her and him. I hate that saying I love you but I am not in love with you anymore. WTF does that shit mean anyway. Did he ever really love her? Hell no. Lying freaking dog. Good riddance to bad garbage. OF course she thinks that her life is over.
Author's Response: It basically means I wanna be your friend. Lol, when I was dumped I was told the same thing! Thanks again for reading!!!!!!! I appreciate your feedback!
[Report This]Date: 07/04/10 07:18 pm
Why didn't he just tell her that she is acting like his mother and not his wife? Thanks
Author's Response: Right? Thats the main problem, NOT COMMUNICATING!
Thanks again for reading!
[Report This]Date: 07/04/10 07:08 pm