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Real name: Brandy

Member Since: 20/09/09

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Island Interlude by Junebug66
Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 222]
Summary:

Island Interlude is the story of Gabrielle Hall, a young woman who teaches physical education and K.C. Whitfield an architect who comes to the fictional island of St. Sebastian. They meet and sparks fly but K.C. isn't who he seems and Gabrielle must decide if she can live with who he really is.    

island interlude                

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.  



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dubcon, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 47
Completed:No
Word count: 97729
Read Count: 235254
Published: 07/05/10
Updated: 01/02/11

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Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

June, that food sounds so delicious, and all I had was a chicken pot pie for lunch. lol

It sounds like things are about to heat up. I'm confused thought Camille's brother was married to Georgie? I must have misread the first chapter.



Author's Response: Sexy Bryan is interested in Andrea.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 14/05/10
A Wife Scorned by Suprina Frazier
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 38]
Summary: Connie thought she wanted revenge on her cheating husband. She got more than she bargained for.

Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Challenges: The "Less is More" Challenge
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 995
Read Count: 9974
Published: 07/07/10
Updated: 07/07/10

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Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

It made a great point...it made a great point.



Author's Response: Thanks for getting that point, Cholyn. Special thanks for leaving a comment.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 12/07/10
Possession by Thespiandiva
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 10]
Summary:

pos·ses·sion   [puh-zesh-uhn]
-noun
1.
the act or fact of possessing.
2.
the state of being possessed.
3.
ownership.
4.
Law . actual holding or occupancy, either with or without rights of ownership.
5.
a thing possessed: He packed all his possessions into one trunk.
6.
possessions, property or wealth.
7.
a territorial dominion of a state.
8.
Sports .
a.
physical control of the ball or puck by a player or team: He didn't have full possession when he was tackled.
b.
the right of a team to put the ball into play: They had possession after the other team sank a free throw.
9.
control over oneself, one's mind, etc.
10.
domination, actuation, or obsession by a feeling, idea, etc.
11.
the feeling or idea itself.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Dark Fic, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed
Challenges: The "Less is More" Challenge
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 451
Read Count: 1711
Published: 24/07/10
Updated: 24/07/10

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Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was dark, sexy and hot.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
Date: 20/09/10
Viper's Proposition by Dsmoothone
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 25]
Summary:

My response to the "Less is More" Challenge. Enjoy!

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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: None
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:Yes
Word count: 998
Read Count: 1943
Published: 02/08/10
Updated: 02/08/10

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Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

YAY DS, you did it! I remember you mentioning that you were nervous about writing a bad boy, but you did a great job. :D

I don't know if Larissa should trust him, lol. He is the viper after all.



Author's Response: Yeah it was ripe for the one shot...

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 03/08/10
My Brother's Keeper by kellyklue
Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 132]
Summary:

 

 MY BROTHER’S KEEPER

Twin - One of two offspring born at the same birth; or one of two identical or similar people

Brother - a male who has the same parents as another

Family - Two or more people who share goals and values, have long-term commitments to one another, and reside usually in the same dwelling place

 

Love - A deep, tender, ineffable feeling of affection and solicitude toward a person, such as that arising from kinship, recognition of attractive qualities, or a sense of underlying oneness. A feeling of intense desire and attraction toward a person with whom one is disposed to make a pair 

AM I MY BROTHER’S KEEPER?  



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: On hiatus indefinitely
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 9
Completed:No
Word count: 43918
Read Count: 28031
Published: 19/08/10
Updated: 19/02/11

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Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I can't blame Samara for her initial reaction. I know Noah's heart is in the right place, but he seems so...i don't blase about the idea of her sleeping with his brother. I know he got choked up, but he just seemed so matter of fact.

Don't judge you're writing based on someone elses. Each writer grows at his/her own pace. I think you're doing a good job. :D 

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 09/10/10
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Hmm what is the favor? Can I guess that it has something to do with Jude giving Samara a baby or just plan old giving it to her?

 

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 22/08/10
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Intriguing. I like your riding style, its very easy to read.

Thanks for sharing. 

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Date: 21/08/10
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Ohh and the plot thickens. I like the interactions between all of the parties. Jude's attraction to Samara and vice versa is going to be interesting. 

Again, this story is very easy to read. The transitions between paragraphs, and characters are seemless.

 

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 21/08/10
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Jude was right about Noah. I sort of understand Noah's pov, but he should have told him wife. I don't think she's appreciate him pimping her out.

Thanks for sharing. 

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 05/09/10
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I'm looking forward to Jude and Samara's weekend getaway.

I'm happy that Jude has decided to grant Noah last wish. I think it will be good for them both, the ultimate bond.

 



Author's Response: Thank you for reading and the getaway should be fun.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 06/11/10
Sandpaper Kisses by Thespiandiva
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 82]
Summary:

The Continuation of Possession  

Olivia is in love with a man that belongs to another. Sounds simple right? Well, he enjoys taking her to the height of lust, but can never remember a thing the next day. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Friendship, Mystery, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Character Death, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 10
Completed:No
Word count: 8814
Read Count: 17762
Published: 07/09/10
Updated: 03/10/11

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Title: Chapter 8: Love and other drugs

Pretty hot.

Thanks for sharing.  



Author's Response: Thank you for reading!!

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 12/01/11
Title: Chapter 7: The Breaking Point

This chapter felt a little disconnected. The story jumps around, which causes it to loose the flow emotions, which should stay a continuous undertone of this type of story. 

 

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
Date: 08/10/10
Title: Chapter 3: It all leads to this

It was pretty intense, but I don't understand why she's so into him. Yeah, he's a good lay, but so far nothing else. She's stupid if she thinks he doesn't remember, unless he has a split personality.

Author's Response: well.... i can't exactly say but... :)

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: 20/09/10
Title: Chapter 5: Distractions

I can't say that I didn't see this coming. Looking forward to their next conversation, because they really do need one.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
Date: 22/09/10
Title: Chapter 6: Head Games

So I take it his has Dissociative Identity Disorder? I suppuse its because of his childhood trauma.

Olivia is sort of flat. I'm liking Ian, but some of their 'feelings' don't really make any sense. 

Thanks for updating. 

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
Date: 05/10/10
Title: Chapter 4: Alive

He must have a split personality or something. Childhood trauma can bring them on. It would be different if he weren't aware of what he was doing in the moment, but he does know. It will be interesting to see where this goes.

Author's Response: Thanks! hmmm..... we'll see. :)

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 20/09/10
Live Like We're Dying by cella_bella
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 26]
Summary:

 

llwd

"We only got 86,400 seconds in a day to
Turn it all around or to throw it all away
We gotta tell them that we love them
While we got the chance to say
Gotta live like we're dying"

Mimi Balfour lives each day knowing that no matter how bad it gets, the sun will rise in the morning. She's a student at the pinnacle of the social society of Cape Town, and her relationship with one the most influential families' son, Karl Muller, only adds to her image as a "Black Diamond." The only person she hides her relationship is from her difficult father, who hates everything Karl's family stands for.  Then she meets Alessio la Scala, who lives each day knowing that he may not see another sunrise. Does Alessio end up influencing Mimi's heart, and not just her mind and body?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 7338
Read Count: 3122
Published: 26/09/10
Updated: 18/04/11

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Title: Chapter 2: 1. Birthday Wishes

I like that Mimi is just as wealthy as Karl. Although I get the feeling that she's not as into him, as he is to her.  

Karl doesn't like people touching what's his. Hmm, me smells jealous, possessive boyfriend.

Hmm. I have a feeling sex Pen guy, will be Karl's roommate.

 

 

Thanks for sharing.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the feedback! :)

You may be onto something.... I hope you find the story more interesting as it goes along!

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 26/09/10
Unresolved by mocasoul
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 89]
Summary:

Four years later, Keisha is still shook to the core about her nightmare she experienced with the infamous frat-boy murderer and rapist, Tyler. She’s coping and with the help of her friends, Julie, Greg and Will, she’s on her way to a somewhat normal life…until Tyler escapes prison and is hell-bent on finishing what he started.

 Sequel to Party Monster



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Friendship, Horror, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Rape, Strong Sexual Content
Challenges: The Chamber Grindhouse 3
Series: None
Chapters: 14
Completed:Yes
Word count: 17476
Read Count: 21828
Published: 04/10/10
Updated: 01/11/10

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Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Aww poor Keisha. Didn't she go through enough the first time?

I don't know if I should thank you for writing a sequel. LOL Poor Keisha. I hope Will stays by her side. *tear*

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Date: 07/10/10
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Dayum. I didn't see that last part coming.

I need an update now, lol

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Date: 21/10/10
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

I hope she pushed it through his back. She's a real fool if she didn't. She should have keep stabbing him with the spike until he's dead. 

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
Date: 27/10/10
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Aww poor Keisha. Damn that Tyler. I hope his ass dies this time.

Thanks for updating, keep them coming. 

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Date: 10/10/10
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Those two...no words.

Aww Poor Keisha, Tyler is slightly in love. I don't think he will be able to kill her. I would LOVE it if she turned the tables on him. She should torture and then kill his ass.

Moca the anticipation of when he first see's her is KILLING ME! lmao. 

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 13/10/10
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

That was umm...I'm speechless.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
Date: 19/10/10
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Oh Will, dude you need to shutup. LOL. You are chained to a chair, withouth any way of escaping. You are making things worse for the both of you.

I hope Keisha tortures Tyler this time. I think that's the only way she might be free of him, after everythings said and done. I'm happy that she's growing a little more backbone, and standing up to him like she had previously.

I want to know how Tyler really feels about the abortion.

What if Tyler got her pregnant, moved them to an another location, and held her hostage until she had the baby. I saw something like that ona Lifetime movie. Lifetime *cringe*

It would have been a more complex story if she'd actually kept the child. Maybe her child lives with her parents. She could escape, but he's not caught and he discovers the truth, and that would lead to a trilogy and a different story. Ok, just ignore me. LOL My imagination is getting the best of me. 

Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 24/10/10
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Tyler is messed up. I think in some twisted way he really is in love with Keisha. Well, not real love, but his twisted version of love. I would actually like to here Crazy's story.

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 01/11/10