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Summary:


   Caleb Garrison has been in love with Grey ever since they were children. He even told his parents while a child that someday he would marry her. However, there was one problem...although adopted, she was legally his sister.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 13
Completed:Yes
Word count: 29115
Read Count: 36926
Published: October 07 2014
Updated: November 05 2017


Title: Chapter 10: Lovers

Yay! so happy to see this story back!

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: July 25 2016

Retired
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Summary:

Sequel to "Love, God & Ultimatums"



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 38
Completed:No
Word count: 227600
Read Count: 78673
Published: July 03 2015
Updated: May 09 2021


Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - In the End (The Last Supper Part II)

Oh no Diya! No!

Well, that dinner could have gone better lol but for real though, my heart's broken.

This amazing story shows that the saying 'blood is thicker than water' is absolute bullshit.

 

 

 

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: November 23 2018

Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - The Trouble with Assuming

I love this story. Her family is just something else, I would go insane if I was Diya. I really want Diya to find another job on the sly, working for her dad has never worked with regards to trying to set her up or keeping her under his thumb by not letting her work at home on some days. I get that she loves her father but she's a grown woman and he's very possesive but the lesbian intervention was funny, frustrating but funny although I'm really surprised Chandi didn't have Diya's back (even a lil bit) during that intervention, seeing as she's the only one in the family that knows about her love for Brandon and didn't seem compltely against it but then again Chandi seems a little sadistic when it comes with messing with Diya. Excited about that lunch, Bran could deff handle himself but her (some) family can be so toxic. This lunch is certainly going to be a true test to their relationship. Can't wait for the next update.



Author's Response:

Yeah, dinner at the De la Roys will be a test and a trial for Diya and Brandon, to say the least.  Chandi was still in her feelings about Diya not sympathizing with her little temper tantrum early that day.  As for Diya finding a new job, that's an idea, but might not be enough to earn her freedom from William's interference.  More on that to come.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, carmen90!

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: July 22 2016

Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Angles

Wonderful update! I'm starting to think Brandon didn't tell Diya the whole truth about him and Marisol, maybe it wasn't just a teenage kiss after all. However, I'm glad Brandon showed his frustration towards that snake Marisol, that he didn't water down his feelings in front of the kids and that his first priority was Diya. Damn, like mother, like daughters, huh? (except Mara, she's a cutie). Okay, it bears repeating, Marisol is a snake! using her kids to manipulate Brandon, she deff knew all along that she was going to go on the trip and that 'hook up' comment? omfg BUT has Brandon actually told Marisol flat out that he's IN love with Diya and only Diya cause idk, Marisol needs a really harsh reality check and Brandon seems to still be walking on egg shells in regards to Marisol's feelings. I love Diya, she's a better woman that I'd ever be but she needs to communicate her reservations with Brandon more. 

Anyway, excited about the next chapter, omg Diya's family is gonna be a handful and a headache but hopefully Brandon can handle himself.

Again, wonderful update!



Author's Response:

You're not alone in your suspicions about Brandon not being completely forthcoming concerning his and Marisol's prior dealings.  He claims to have told her how he feels about Diya, but she clearly doesn't believe him or care.  Communicating her feelings is going to be necessary for Diya, but is a proven gamble, especially on the cusp of family dinner.  They ARE NOT ready, as we will soon see.

Thanks, carmen90!!!

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: November 13 2018

Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - In the Beginning (The Last Supper Part I)

Brandon handed himself very well. I'm impressed. I love the united front Diya and Brandon had. Their moments were very sweet.

Diya's family is something else, they're toxic (most of them). William is overly and strangely possessive of Diya, that outburst was telling and Devaneesh is so cold (prob cause of Diya and Williams's relationship, she's jealous), Diya shouldn't have to appease them and it seems like she's done giving a fuck but Diya really needs to not work for William anymore. She needs to be fully independent or he'll always have some control over her life.

Good, I'm glad Chandi is gonna get the silent treatment, she's such a shit stirrer.

I'm glad it wasn't all doom and gloom, that they had some family members that didn't give them a hard time, at least that's something?

Diya and Brandon both have difficult choices to make if they want to have a life together.

Excellent update!

 



Author's Response:

You are so right: Diya and Brandon will have some very difficult choices, especially in the wake of family dinner.  William and his dysfunction-loving crew are JUST getting started.

Stay tuned, and thanks for reading and reviewing, carmen90!

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: November 15 2018

Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Who You Love

Okay, first offf. I'm so happy you updated. I love this story so much.

Second; WHAT THE ACTUAL FUCK, BRANDON!?!

I an inkling but at the same time, I'm still shocked.

I'm trying to sort my thoughts out cause this was alot. This def does explain why Marisol is all up in Brandon's space and completely disrespectful to his relationship with Diya. I'm not exactly sure why Brandon kept that from Diya, he probably thought it wasn't a big deal, I guess. He's in love with Diya and Marisol is in the past but shiiit, he knew Diya's insecurities with his relationship with Marisol. He should have told her. He should know better. And how he's making Diya question her feelings for him and guilting her for bringing up his past and 'rehashing shit'...tf? whether, that was his intention of not, that is manipulation, in a similar way Diya's dad manipulates her cause even though I love Diya, she is a door mat to the people she loves.

tbh, I don't believe Brandon loves Marisol romantically at all, I believe he meant it when he said that chapters ago but, maybe unconsiously, he idealizes Marisol as others idolize their first love. maybe? idk, idk. It's the kids as well, of course, Brandon loves her kids.

I'm trying to imagine myself in Diya's situation and although it kills me to say this cause I love them together, I'd walk or at the very least go on a break. I think Diya needs to work on herself (hell, Brandon needs to work on himself), create distance from her family and develop a very sturdy backbone.

He can't be Diya's partner but also be on the beck and call to Marisol, like it doesn't compute. No woman would stand for that, Diya has the patience of a saint. Like what is Marisol's secret that Brandon has an absolute knock out like Diya but still remains loyal to Marisol?

Anyway, my incoherant rant means I love this story.

Pleeease for the love of God, update this story.



Author's Response:

Lol!  I'm working on it.  I promise.  

Brandon has his reasons for feeling and the doing the things he has/does, including his involvement with Marisol and not telling Diya about it.  The kids definitely play a part in ways even he might not realize.  Whether Diya and Brandon's relationship will survive the reveal is a big IF.  Their only hope is for him to create some hard boundaries for Marisol, if he can.  But even that might not be enough at this point.  We'll soon see.

Thanks for reading and sharing your insight, carmen90!!!  It's spot-on.

 

 

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: March 27 2019

Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Angles

I'm re-reading your wonderful story again and omg, this chapter had some serious foreboding now that I read the recent one, that last line?! aaah! and it was obvious when Brandon was hesitant to say something and Diya said, 'what are you not-?' he was thinking about his history with Marisol. AHHH! what a mess...can't wait for more lol



Author's Response:

Good eye, chica.  There's A LOT Brandon hasn't said and Diya doesn't know--secrets soon to be revealed.  Stay tuned...

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: March 28 2019

Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 - Seconds from Disaster

I know there's a light at the end of the tunnel but boy, does it hurt now. Although devastating, this was a wonderful update.



Author's Response:

Thanks, carmen90! We'll get through this.

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: May 24 2020

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Summary:

Coming home can be harder than staying away sometimes.

Home has now been published on Amazon and there's quite a bit more added from where I had originally ended this story. Hope you all enjoy it.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations
Series: None
Chapters: 21
Completed:No
Word count: 21
Read Count: 18591
Published: June 10 2016
Updated: October 06 2016


Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Contrary to what other reviewers are saying about Charlie, I do get where she's coming from, she's been absent and it seems like she used money as a way to cushion the blow of her leaving and it seems like she's still using money as a way to make up for her not being completely mentally there although she is physically (that's my take on it anyway, even though I think she's doing great but she doesn't seem to think so). But I think she's doing too much, she needs to take a step back and realise she's prefectly fine. This story has layers. I think Alec might be partly at fault too, I remember a couple of chapters ago, was it Charlie's foster parents thought Alec pushed the relationship when they were teenagers before Charlie was ready - sexually/emotionally. I think history slightly repaeated itself there like in the club and living arrangements, of course Alec wants his wife back and he loves her but maybe Charlie would have been better off living close by instead of living with them. Baby steps. I mean Charlie thought they were going to get divorced on the same day Alec came onto her in the club. I think they're great for each other and they're great parents but communication is key especially on Charlie's end, she's trying to be super mom and that's just not possible.

Can't wait to read the convo between Alec and Sean. Great chap and can't wait to read the next one.

Reviewer: carmen90 Signed
Date: August 03 2016

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