Title: Chapter 5: Lesson Learned
Pearl is the definition of what a parent should never be; in a perfect world there would be none like her. Still.
James has been through quite a bit. In the drug game, given to men(?) by her own mother, no less. It is a disturbing way to go through life.
On to her and Tristen. Her moods shifted a lot this chapter, carrying on from the last of course. Are they moving a bit fast I wonder? With him getting her dress up to where her panties were showing on the first, or second, date. You know. I don't know.
As for Melvin, I knew who he was when his name was called. How they got to where they are now, well, I know that will be revealed sooner or later. I wonder, though, are you giving us readers too much information at once? All this to process, because there is a lot of history here, and it is well thought out. However, when there is too much I know I find myself forgetting things. Overall, I enjoyed this.
*Peace
Author's Response: Yes, James was pretty bipolar during this chapter, but she is intoxicated, which plays a huge role in why she switches moods so suddenly and why she revealed some of her past to Tristen. As for the information, I never thought that I was giving too much information at once in this chapter! Please forgive me if I confused you in anyway. There is a lot of information in this chapter, but it is truly a ripple in the ocean at the moment. I just wanted give readers a tiny insight on why James became the way she was and why she hated her mother. There were a few hints there and there in the first three chapters, but I didn't want to drag it along too much.
As for Tristen and James, if I could describe their developing relationship in one or two words it would be fast forward. At this point, they have only met each other three times in total and have been on two dates in which they've known each other for three weeks. I wanted this story to be fast paced even though my updates are as quick as I'd like them to be. They did go to quick in this chapter, but there is a very good reason for that! Thank you for your review and I will definitely take all of your suggestions into consider in my next chapter.
Reviewer: TRaberah EH Signed
Date: 12/10/10