I love this story please update can't wait to find out what happens to Carla and Aza
Reviewer: Cju Signed [Report This]Date: August 12 2014 04:35 am
Ok please don't take this the wrong wrong way because I'm really intrigued with this story. I just found it and can't put it down. You've created done interesting personalities. But there are some things that are bugging me.. so Vito is an interesting character because he is so evil but now I'm staring to see him in a different light. I think he's very interesting. In my opinion he's character is the most developed so far. ok Ava he's.. I don't know just there. I guess he's coming along but Im indifferent to him for some reason. Carla to me us just plain annoying... some of things she says are not only childish but its like something us wrong with her mentally. She speaks soo immature for a 21 year old. She talks about her stuffed lion, has tantrums and constantly calls him a jerk, refers to her gown as a Disney gown, manga??? and she introduces herself as, "My name is Starshine Carla"... reminds me of a 4 year old.
She is brave Ill give her that but her clumsy, dimwitted comments are a little bizarre. But maybe you'll develop her character more?? Also I thought your planet is weirdly very much like ours. Comptuers and four post beds?IIt would be rally good if you explained the similarities and differences of the planet. I know its really hard to picture an alien planet without having more specifics. I think this angle of having psychopath mutating aliens is VERY interesting. Im really exited to go through the rest of the chapters. Please keep writing... :-)
Reviewer: Anon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 21 2013 03:26 am
Interesting I wonder how she feels about him...hmmmm
Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]Date: September 07 2012 01:55 pm
Ah so that explains why one minute he seems alright then the next like he has lost his ever loving mind.
The Junirk suffer from multiple personalities if I understood that correctly. I hope that he is able to fight the mean part of his personality and try to get to know Carla and even bet better to Aza.
Thank you for the update.
Happy writng
Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]Date: September 07 2012 06:36 am
Loved the update. Hmm, maybe Ruasu was right and Vita is cracking up!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: September 07 2012 05:31 am