Damn!  That's some gangsta shiot 4 ur arse!  Loved the continuity of scenes from chapter to chapter.

Is Adina right?  Will Antioco treat her any better than Jacobi did?  I gotta find out 

Maggie is a good friend, a motherly-type that most assuredly will be needed in Jackie's life.  Miss Sabi is intelligent, powerful and kind...a combination that gravitates all types of people toward her, including sexy blue eyes.  Ut oh. LOL

You astound me with your talent Scribe!  I read this during lunch and was like…in awe of the interplay of words and how the lines are skewed between good and evil [if you will], and the struggle of mankind to adhere to The Word or be seduced by the ‘unholy’.

Mostly, I admire how you continue to push-the-envelope…and you do it so eloquently.

Brava!

oh crap! too short!!

I know you've got a lot going on but c'mon, don't leave a sista hanging too long :)

Shaun is an intelligent idiot right about now!  Well no, she's not an idiot but she's definitely being idiotic about what she's doing and I'm surprised, frankly, that no one hasn't 'scooped' her background yet and splattered the shocking details all over the news.

Adam has been nothing but kind to her since day one- a little cocky yes, however, the man has been a gentleman, a friend- offering compliments, and encouragement and all the while Shaun continues to deceive him and for what...?  Payback? Retribution? pssshhh!  Dude spoke aloud a stupid thing during an opportunistic moment after an all-nighter with no sleep, an inner thought based on past experiences.  He didn't do anything to her personally- and well hell, we all know that, that statement isn't true anymore.  Poor man has fallen hard for a woman whom he knows nothing about.

Now let me say this...I really like Shaun...she's sweet, kind, smart and the lady made for Adam but chick has got to come clean or this whole debauchery will blow up in her face and it will be HER fault, not his.

And please, puhleeze, don't let anyone or anything interrupt the inevitable...'cause after that sweet serenade- those lyrics, the KISS! It would be on-and-poppin up in that hotel room!  lol

So loving this story, update real soon! :)

This chick!

I mean, really! Really!?  How many lives does she have!?!!

Oh no...it's time for Richard to earn his bad-ass credentials and drop that crazy bitch like the overdone-scheming hoe she is. C'mon Richard...handle your woman's business and eliminate that menace-to-society with the quickness!

First thought: Bastien isn't his or he believes he's another Kai's kid
Second tonight: his father is envious of his son's accomplishments
Third: he's just an unpleasant SOB

OOOOO that sorry piece of SHIT!  OOOOO I'm fuming right about now!!!  I absolutely HATE punks like Dice, hate them with a passion!!! Somehow, some way Camille needs to get away from this prick! She can't do it alone, a certain someone needs to rescue her from that demon's clutches.

oh snap! I'm still mad, not about him sexing other ppl but how he degrades her, he belittles her and it's all b/c he's an opportunistic, inferior leech! And she allows it!

OOOOOOOOOO!!!

OH MY GOODNESS!  How awful for life to render such a hard lesson on an innocent - a lesson that Camille cannot dismiss or find laim excuses for. No, she has shouldered the blame, and with that comes acceptance, responsibility and wisdom. She has to eradicate the 'sickness' from her world because one, she deserves freedom and two, the ultimate price was paid so that Camille's eyes-wide-shut syndrome would be no more.

Xavier!

That man just does it for me; I love everything about the character. If ever Camille wondered what a real man should be...well look no more, this guy is all-male, a gentleman.  However much I want these two to be a couple, I can appreciate's Camille's resolve to keep him out of harm's way. But something tells me that Mr Bianchi is already vested in Mrs Bianchi's well-being.

Love the entire chapter. it was well-written, emotional without being over-the-top, realistic though i wondered how Xavier explained how his 'wife' ended up at the ER.  The doctor is required to report such injuries to the authorities unless Xavier and Nick's "job" and who they really are has something to do with it. But as far as the dialogue from both scenes (hospital room and car scenes), and then tough-love from Tasha was spot-on.

Great job!

I like the story -- can't STAND punk-ass Vincent though -- but it's an a good read. Love Kelsie, Keith and ooh-la-la Chase! As far as this chapter being Chase's POV...it didn't work for me. Experiencing his viewpoint was cool but it wasn't masculine; his thoughts sounded like Aubrey's inner monologue. 

The scenes at his house were interesting because we learned the magnitude of Aubrey's emotional and psychological abuse...it's devastating to her mental health. I'm glad Chase has agreed to help her piece her life back together again. 

Update soon 

WHAAT!?  Why sign with Lopez!  That's insane!  Daniel is about to blow-uuup as a male model, and Terri stands to make a small fortune b/c of his success (that's why Alonzo was trying to recruit him in the first place, plus, I don't trust Lopez's motives or methods at all), why sabotage your professional and financial growth now?  aah...I know why...she's got it bad for Daniel that's why- hell, I don't blame her but still I think she's making a professional and personal mistake.  Daniel is fantastic for her - they're good for each other and I hope he has the backbone to turn her down.

I like this story.  Daniel is hawt! That smirk at the end of the runway works for me too. lol.

Update soon

“Can I touch you?”  Dana asked looking up at him.  “I took a bath and I washed my hands already.” 

Oh my goodness, that was so sad; it just broke my heart for a child to ask permission to touch her own father!  Though i must admit the kids took everything in stride but Jayden has got to get a grip! Not only did he not bring his children gifts...the man had a nerve to tell them he brought cleaning supplies?!! C'mon dude, what kind of etiquette was he taught growing up?  I mean really, lol!!! Jayden had me shaking-my-head-laughing at his totally out-of-touch demeanor.  Perhaps they should have chosen something other than dining out to better aquaint themselves with one another but i'm sure they dinner will be a riot! The kids keep me rolling, they are a trip.

What mean things was Miss Audrey Fisher saying about Dana?  Was it about not having a father, or along those lines? hmpf If so, Dana's dad is fine, and rich, and crazy (some would say)...but alive and well nonetheless.

Let's see what happens next! :)

Now I understand why Jayden is the way he is. Losing someone whom he’d adored was hurtful enough but the way in which he’d lost her, especially at such a young age, was devastating.  Something in Jayden broke that  day, life delivered Her message far too soon and the fear of abandonment carried too much weight to bare, even throughout his adult life. I wonder…did he mourn her properly (whatever that means), or did he just completely shut down?  Grief has no policies & procedures, or time limitations for that matter.  However, Jayden found his respite in Tamaeya…, if only for a moment.

As far as his children are concerned, becoming a parent is almost as phenomenal as the gift of life itself.  A person can fall in love with their offspring before they’ve even met, and I believe this is the case for Jayden.  Perhaps the urge to clean may not be as detrimental or as stressful to his psyche b/c now there are two little pieces of himself to treasure for a lifetime.

Speaking of those little munchkins….they are absolutely adorable!  They had me rolling with their bickering.  Loved the therapy session as well as the word-play/conversation between Jayden’s parents.  I don’t think they are trying to be malicious per se but they are definitely being manipulative.

Can’t wait to see what happens next. Nice chapter Lady, update soon.