Wow!!! Really loving this!
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Thank you for the review!
Reviewer: Halo_ Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 06 2020 10:55 am
great start
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: May 06 2020 05:03 am
I feel so bad!! I want to like this story so much but the forcing her to call him daddy all the time no matter what is a bit offputting and her all of a sudden wanting to be there with him even though theres really not been any emotional connection/growth with them just makes it feel very stockholm-ish and not in a good way.
Still here to see it through though. The writing itself is great, just not really sure about this plot...
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! This is a dark story with dark thems but I do plan on giving them sometime to develop their relationship.
Reviewer: s_k689 Signed [Report This]Date: May 05 2020 07:48 pm
Excellent!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 05 2020 03:52 am
So good!! I can not wait to read more!!!! There is nothing wrong with a man liking your features....he should!!! Update Soon!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for that! More character development coming soon!
Reviewer: PurpleIsBest Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 05 2020 02:19 am
I knew it was a set up !! Atleast she didn't break her ankle on the porch like a bad scary movie. Love where you're taking this story, definitely not what I was expecting!
Author's Response:
Haha...no bad scary movie logic here! Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: Indigo_bluee Signed [Report This]Date: April 28 2020 09:45 am
Run girl ! You're in danger!!
Author's Response:
Yeah...she gonna get it! Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: Indigo_bluee Signed [Report This]Date: April 28 2020 09:31 am
I wonder who is Miss Seraphine's husband and how long she's been in town? I loved her response to Abby about being not being the only smart black woman in town! As always, I can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and the review. Smart black women for the win!
Reviewer: Drea Signed [Report This]Date: April 26 2020 11:33 pm
Will we see Abby's friend, Leah, again, I wonder. She's supportive, that's the kind of friend we all need.
If I have one criticism about Abby it's that she seems naive for her age. Maybe there's backstory for that. If so, I'd love to see it; to understand it.
I do love a road trip story...though I wonder if this is that. The self-discovery and reliance one uncovers while traveling alone is magical and an inspiration to me when the naysayers tell me I shouldn't "do this or go there" all by myself. So, that's cool.
Gran, I don't know how I feel about her. I don't know how I feel about people like her, though we all know one or two. Relationships are not a panacea for an unhappy life. If only people would grasp that.
I enjoyed this opening chapter and the characters are interesting. More Leah, I hope, I'd like to get to know her better. Less Southern stereotyping by Abby, more getting to know the people individually. Maybe that's one of her character flaws, making assumptions! That's always good to learn and grow from. I will continue reading on, see what you got going on here.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review! Abby is definitely naive and sheltered. I think Gran just has a different mindset from a different time. We will see Leah again.
Reviewer: Die A Mouse Death Signed [Report This]Date: April 25 2020 01:46 pm
There was so much that happened in this chapter. I think the most curious character now is Miss Sepharine. Looking forward to reading her story and see how her character contibutes of the overall story. Abby's outburst about the children was spot on. It seems she woke up a bit and even though she feels guilt over what happened between her and Elias the night before, she is till keeping she wits about her that she wants to leave. Very good with the progression of the plot.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and reviewing! I thought it was important for Abby to have an ally in a place like this. Miss Seraphine will play a role in the chapters to come. Stay tuned!
Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 23 2020 04:49 am
Re-reading all of the chapters. Thinking Abby grandmother know something about this town and there form of courtship. Wonderful writing!!
Author's Response:
-_-...We shall see!
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 23 2020 02:47 am
Interesting chapter. I still don't like the 'daddy' part especially after now knowing that her father left her when she was a baby. It's just ikky but I want to see where you are going with it and if there will be a change. I am also very curious on how he handled things with her grandmother and her friend. I would think that her grandmother would want to speak with her as they seemed very close.
Author's Response:
I understand...I have an explanation planned but I know it's not for everyone... You'll see about her grandmother and friend.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 22 2020 09:52 pm
A whole town full looney tunes.
Author's Response:
Oh yeah..lol. Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: April 22 2020 09:36 pm
Idk what to think about this story! But I'm here for it. Its nice to read something thats different than the norm!
Author's Response:
Thanks! It's not going to get too crazy, just a little crazy...
Reviewer: CrimsonBlaze Signed [Report This]Date: April 21 2020 05:49 am
I'm going back to check the summary description of this story....it's very good. I have to say however, that I really don't like that he wants her to call him 'daddy'...just creepy. I don't like the other endearments he calls her either but that one really is 'ikky' to me. I like that she ran and most of her reaction are plausable. It's a bit scary but I'm enjoying this story.
Author's Response:
Hey thanks for reading. I was angling for an element of creepiness. Please be aware that it is a dark fic and dark themes will be explored.
Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 21 2020 04:17 am
Didn't expect! That was some chapter. I feel so sorry for Abby and do hope she excapes. No matter what, even if they fall in love, she doesn't deserve to have her life taken away like that. Good chapter!
Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 21 2020 03:49 am
Wow! What a way to end a chapter. Very well written. Can't wait to read the next!
Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 21 2020 03:33 am
Very nice that Abby is beginning to ask questions and notice things that doesn't seem quite right. I do wonder why she couldn't go back to the hotel she was staying at before she broke down but not sure if it is because she was staying at a differnt town. The story is progressing nicely. Elias does seem a bit creepy his calling her 'babydoll'. LOL!
Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 21 2020 02:57 am
I read this all in one go! This is soooo goooood!!! Please continue. I can't wait for the next chapter! Hope you're staying safe during all this craziness.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it. Stay safe yourself!
Reviewer: anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 21 2020 02:54 am
Very realistic interaction between Abby and Elias when they met and very good flow of what Abby is thinking and her reactions to her situations as they evolve. Pleasant chapter.
Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 21 2020 01:27 am
Loved this first chapter. Very opening for the character and the dynamics between Abby and her grandmother is very personal. Abby's fears of dating but now deciding to take the chance first by going on the trip and then to begin dating it wonderful. Well done on this first chapter.
Reviewer: Caribbean Fire Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 20 2020 11:27 pm
MORE!!! MORE!! I can not wait for the next chapter!!!! Update Soon!!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! Stay tuned!
Reviewer: PurpleIsBest Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 20 2020 06:36 pm
Third test failed too😂😂
Author's Response:
Haha yep! Thanks!
Reviewer: Blessed Soul Signed [Report This]Date: April 20 2020 06:20 pm
Uh oh...Abby girl, you in danger...
Author's Response:
She definitely was trying to upset him...lol Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: dcphoenix1 Signed [Report This]Date: April 20 2020 03:30 am
Ohhhhh....I like Ms. Seraphine! I think her and Abby will get along well and cause all sorts of mischief. She seems like a straight shooter and tell Abby what the hell is going on. Dang it, I do not like the daddy stuff, but to each there own I suppose. Please don't leave us hanging too long with the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Yes she definitely will keep an eye out for Abby. I know the "daddy" stuff isn't for everyone but I felt it would and another layer... Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed [Report This]Date: April 20 2020 02:08 am