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Title: Chapter 3 part 1

please update soon I love your story

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 17 2013 09:11 am
Title: Chapter 3 part 1

I enjoyed the chapter. Good job 

 Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 15 2013 07:35 am
Title: Chapter 3 part 1

I absolutely adore this story, especially little Palesa.  My only complaint is, I do not know who speaking at times, for instance, the fourth paragraph from the bottom is confusing because I do not know who is speaking.

This will be a truly great story, thank you for sharing...Update soon



Author's Response:

I'm glad you are loving the story, I enjoy writing it too. I wrote the thoughts and any mental conversation in italis, to my surprise when you load the story the fonts come out different. on the 4th paragraph, Kiero is telepathically ( not sure if it's real word but...) to Draven. Draven is Armelia's bodyguard and Kiero's undercover man. 

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 15 2013 07:27 am
Title: Chapter 3 part 1

I loved this chapter! I'm happy to see that Kiero is really as smart as he seemed. He really does have a decent handle on things with Armelia and her crazy antics; and Palesa's safety. He also has some decent people working with and for him. I'm impressed with him.

LOL....loved this line, and I agree with Kiero. Because even though it was explained, its still a little creepy...

What?...hell no, a mate? A baby mate? Lunar why?


Really good chapter!



Author's Response:

Thank you...I'm glad you don't hold Lunar as opposed to Luna against me. I realised this after awhile, sorry and thank you for the support.

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 15 2013 06:58 am
Title: Chapter 3 part 1

This chapter has so much drama in it and I loved it. 

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 15 2013 03:16 am
Title: Chapter 2

Interesting story so far. More please!

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 14 2013 01:54 am
Title: Chapter 1

I'm enjoying the story but a bit confused. Not sure if the littl girl is intended to be Kiero's mate or he will be her protector only?

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 13 2013 07:33 pm
Title: Chapter 2

Ok, I'm LOVING this story! The characters seem to have a commonality going back generations, and that intrigues me. 

Kiero is an interesting one. I like the layers you are creating for him. Its going to something to see his evolution.

Palesa is his mate, I'm guessing? Is that what the pull towards her about? 

Armelia is deranged, and I cant wait for you to reveal her to us. Attacking a little boy like that; she has to die a painfully horrible death, right?

Its fluid, with enough moving parts to keep it engaging without losing the reader. Oftentimes, too many subplots lose the reader to the storyline. This reads clear with all the supporting characters being set up to play an integral part in the story.

Good stuff!

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 13 2013 12:04 am
Title: Chapter 2

Damn Kiero is old, how old is the Queen?  Why is Kiero's father so stupid? KIERO GREW UP IN A HORRIBLE SITUATION and all because his dad was numb in the head!  I love paranormal stories and I am looking forward to reading this one.  Palesa will be powerful,  but the ick factor because she's. 8 and Kiero is 350. Please tell me that somehow her age will be accelerated?  I already know that Kiero will be her love interest.

FABULOUS!!!!!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 12 2013 04:55 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Aww, snap the little girl is in trouble! Me likey!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 12 2013 04:45 pm
Title: Chapter 1

oooohhhhhh this is very interesting.  looking forward to more.  

 Reviewer: idriveavitz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 02 2013 05:08 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I am a little confused, but also intrigued. Please continue soon.

 Reviewer: Well... Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 01 2013 01:44 am
Title: Chapter 1

I don't really get the plot and the grammar is sort of lacking as well as the random font changes. Try getting a beta.

 Reviewer: Apples Anonymous star [Report This]
Date: January 01 2013 12:49 am
Title: Chapter 1

Bad grammar, messy spacing, no real plot

 Reviewer: Blah Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 01 2013 12:47 am
Title: Chapter 1

I like the begining! You're off to a great start, I hope to see an update soon!

 Reviewer: Song K Anonymous starhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 31 2012 11:40 pm


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