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Title: Chapter 2

Initial review up to Chp 2:  Hello, so I just started reading your story and so far so good. I like her personality as bubbly and optimistic and his dark and gloomy one. And the plot is interesting. The only thing that is REALLY distracting are the spelling errors. Also its dialogue doesn't flow well. It seems dated and unlikely that people actually talk like that. For example:  "Release me Neanderthal. I have better things to do than to be manhandled by you."

This dialogue goes better in renaissance story... not modern day New York city. Believe me, us New Yorkers don't talk like that. And if they did they would be weirdos.. A good editor or beta will really help iron all those things out. But I REALLY like this story and can't wait to read more.

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 09:05 am
Title: Chapter 12-Morning

fantastic update...pleasee update soon

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 08:10 am
Title: Chapter 12-Morning

*Stands up and bow* I bow in the presence of greatness. That was the best interest I have ever read. It wasn't "who are you?" or "WHAT'S GOING ONE ARE YOU A GANGBANGER" No no no our dear Laura has style "Well isn't this lovely...is this my apartment or the board room at Alexander's" I freaking love her lmao that was so awesome.

 Reviewer: SeriouslyMe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 07:29 am
Title: Chapter 12-Morning

"Tomosoe had always loved Nicholi, it had been that way since they first met. That’s why his heart had nearly stopped when Nicholi had asked if he acted gay."

uh, oh wait, what?!?!

Nicholi seems to want to take over Laura's life. Already wondering if the cat will get along with his dogs. Sounds really domestic.

That Lisa chick needs her tongue cut out.

Enjoying this story a lot, Chica.

 Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 07:06 am
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

more please...love it

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 06:26 am
Title: Chapter 12-Morning

I llove Laura she speaks her piece and doesn't care what everyone else thinks. Nicholai has it bad and is in denial about being in love with Laura. This is going to fun because Laura ain't no punk!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 05:06 am
Title: Chapter 12-Morning

lol - love this story, it get's better every chapter..nice.

 Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 04:52 am
Title: Chapter 12-Morning

Welcome back and love the update. 

 Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2013 03:42 am
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

Loving this story....



Author's Response:

Thanks :)

 

keep reading and reviewing. Hope you continue to enjoy.

 Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 15 2013 02:14 am
Title: Chapter 10-Resolution

Laura is so crazy, lol

 Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14 2013 02:00 pm
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

Nicholai put it on her and it was good! He put it on so good that she passed out!  Laura was so stupid that she couldn't or wouldn't tell him why she thought that he was gay.  Laura passed out from receiving some oral loving I know that actual sex act will put her in coma. Loving this story!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 11 2013 01:24 am
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

WOW

 Reviewer: keikei2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2013 10:09 pm
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

Awesome!

 Reviewer: Serenity Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 10 2013 10:04 pm
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

Ooh yeah!!

 Reviewer: caribbeanisland Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 10 2013 09:50 pm
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

:)

 Reviewer: Emy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10 2013 01:42 pm
Title: Chapter 11-Pleasurable retribution

My favorite part of this chapter.

 

He leaned up; looking down at her he enjoyed seeing the yearning in her eyes. Pressing his lower body more firmly into hers he gave a wicked smile and said “Beg for it”

 

lol

 Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2013 01:32 pm
Title: Chapter 10-Resolution

great story ! Plz keep updating

 Reviewer: M3l4n1_C4rt3r Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 09 2013 06:03 am
Title: Chapter 10-Resolution

That was hilarious!  I can't wait for her to tell him what made her think that he was gay. Loving this story.

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 09 2013 03:50 am
Title: Chapter 10-Resolution

I'm glad Laura got it all out. Sometimes you just need a good cry and she's been holding this in since she was a child. 

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 08 2013 06:07 pm
Title: Chapter 10-Resolution

Emotional chapter...although I don't think their interactions/dialogues should be repeated. 



Author's Response:

I dont usuall repeat the diaolgue or there interactions, i usually just switch whose perspective the reader is reading from but this time i wanted Nicholi's reaction and feelings on the matter as it was happening>

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing

 Reviewer: 100percentFAN Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 08 2013 12:29 pm
Title: Chapter 10-Resolution

Oh Laura, you'll soon find out how NOT gay Nic is. :0



Author's Response:

My thoughts exactly, but first he wil have to calm down. lol

thanks for reading and reviewing. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

 Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 08 2013 05:50 am
Title: Chapter 3-First Meeting

Dam boy want her real bad i would have run to Lauren lol run like the wind. Little one to funny.

 Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 08 2013 05:14 am
Title: Chapter 10-Resolution

I couldn't help but get a good chuckle out at the end. Laura is just blunt and I love it!

 Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 08 2013 05:08 am
Title: Chapter 2

What pain is  Lauren  hiding?

 Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08 2013 04:55 am
Title: Chapter 1

Well seems to me Nicholi has something up his butt lol hope he find something that make him happy.

 Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 08 2013 04:54 am


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