This is a sweet and funny story. So far so good! I like how we are in the minds of the characters.
Author's Response:
Awwww! Thanks! :)
Reviewer: LadySade Signed [Report This]Date: May 13 2013 06:22 am
Hi Pot I'm Kettle. I have grammar issues as well so I won't even go there but there is something missing. Maybe if you increased the length of the chapters to give them a bit more meat but glimpses could be what your going for.
Author's Response:
Hi! The pot kettle thing made me laugh lol! more meat?
Reviewer: Acdromance Signed [Report This]Date: May 13 2013 12:28 am
Thanks for the update. Yes. You still had some grammar mistakes like I, was lower case.
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: May 13 2013 12:07 am
The element of story needs more. Its a really good story
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: May 12 2013 10:20 pm