Reviews For In Circles We Go
Title: Fireworks. Part I

Previous reviewer must be crazy. OF COURSE people hate Monica. Why wouldn't they? lol Anyway, liking this story so far.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading!

Reviewer: guest Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 16 2013 01:53 am

Title: Them.

i don't think the readers hate Monica as much as they were and are disappointed in her.  Of course she was there as a friend (although Deena scoped her game early) and never made a move on Jake.  Monica just went for the one she loves whenthe opportunity presented itself--thanks to the ex. 

Monica will realize how much of a rebound chick she is to Jake when he accidentally calls her his ex's name. 

I want Monica with the Butcher and Jake with the one he really loves, but he needs to know it will be a daily battle with her impulsive and addictive personality; only he can decide if she is worth it.

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 10 2013 09:36 pm

Title: Them.

Okay, I feel as if I have to defend Monica because the hatred is ridiculous.  Does anyone have to like her, no.  Do they have to root for her with Jake, no.  But acting as if she is the villian in this piece is narrow. She did NOT cause the breakup between Jake and Sierra, SIERRA DID.  She is not the cause of Jake and Sierra not getting back together, SIERRA's ACTIONS AND THE DISTRUST THEY CAUSED ARE.  And those two were having problems before Sierra started with the drugs, so not everything can be blamed on her addiction.

Jake tried in the beginning to talk to her, understand why she was doing this and get her some help.

After awhile the tug of war between them was something he looked forward to. He made himself believe that as long as he could see her face and hold her everything would be okay. That was before she’d become acquainted with drugs. Viktor’s hold on her tightened, and Jake’s fight for her weakened.

Monica was not following around Jake with her tongue hanging out just waiting for him to end his relationship with Sierra.  They worked together; she was his friend, as well as Finch. 

“You were my friend. Other than Finch, you were there for me...you know.” Monica nodded her head understanding just what she was there for.

Jake and Monica hadn't seen each other for months after his breakup.  She wasn't calling him, visiting him or asking about him.  But he showed up at her club and sat there fantisizing about kissing her. 

“Yeah,” he drawled. “Need something a bit stronger.” ...

“I got just the thing for you love.”


Her smiles were always so mysterious to him, like she held some kind of secret and the only way to find out what it was, you had to kiss her. Corny as it may sound, right now he was itching to find out about that secret.

After that, they still don't see each other for a while.  Monica is still not looking for him.  When they do meet again it is coincidence.  She has taken her car to Finch's garage so that he can fix it and Jake is there--which she did not know beforehand.  Her attitude is friendly, open, but she is salivating all over him and there is no indication in the text that she is throwing out silent invitations either.  She does remind him that he promised to keep in touch, but Jake himself gives a possible reason for that.

Jake had never been the type to renege on his promises. He made sure every word he spoke to another person rung true.

Even so, Monica just mentions it in a light manner, no accusations.

Finch doesn't seem to have any axe to grind because he was the one that told Jake about Sierra when she was found in the alley.  He could have said nothing and hoped that Jake never heard, but, he didn't, so he can't be called partisan in this.  However, he saw something between Jake and Sierra and apparently has done for some time.

Finch always joked around when it came to Monica and Jake. He always saw something there that Jake had missed till recently. Jake had to wonder to himself if maybe his friend was on to something.

After this, the pursuit of the relationship is all on Jake.  He asks her out, he continues the relationship and because she likes him Monica accepts.  Given that he has always been someone true to his word, why shouldn't she take the chance that he asked her to take with him.

Monica was the one encouraging Jake to go see Sierra on visitor's day. And yes, she is feeling a little insecure now, but I still don't get why she isn't allowed that.  If Sierra and even Jake are allowed their insecurities, their mistakes; if they are allowed to be human, why isn't Monica allowed the same?  Maybe she is fooling herself about the possibility of a permanent relationship with Jake, but he has shown himself willing, if not eager to build one, one moment at a time with her.

Jake fooled himself for years that he was enough for Sierra, that his love could hold her together when he, when it clearly wasn't.

Sierra could just as easily be called out for fooling herself.  Jake sent her away that last time and didn't go looking for her as he would have done earlier in their relationship.  He went to visit her in rehab out of concern, but Sierra herself noticed nothing romantic in his manner.

Sierra settled in her seat watching Jake’s whisky colored eyes peruse her body. There was nothing sexual or even remotely intimate in the way he looked at her.

He avoids her touch, and tells her that he only came to see if she was better after she says '...I know you still love me.' When she asks him directly to tell her that he loves her, he only says that he doesn't hate her. Everything he is doing now is completely opposite of how he behaved back in the day; back when he loved her more than anything and forgave her everything.

There is an argument to be made that Jake is lying to himself, but then again, how is that Monica's fault? How is she supposed to know his mind if he doesn't know it?  If he is lying to himself, and consequently to her then the fault lies with Jake and he needs to man up, face his feelings, choose which woman he truly wants to be with and let the other one go in a way that is clear to all parties.

Anyway, this has become way too long, but I couldn't let it rest.  I am rooting for Sierra.  I want her to recover, resolve her issues, become a stronger person for herself. Whether she and Jake get back together, only the author knows, but just because Sierra is the heroine, doesn't make Monica the villian.

If it is not meant for Monica and Jake to stay together then I hope that they can resolve, dissolve their relationship in the least painful way possible.  Maybe if he truly is a 'reformed' guy and sincerely trying to stay out of the 'family business', Monica and Maksim can somehow meet, fall for each other and build something (but only if he can completely divorce himself from his family; Finch seems way too much of a hound-dog!).

So far Monica seems a kind, loving person and I hope she finds happiness--with or without Jake.



Author's Response:

Wow, just...this actually helped me see certain things that have slipped my mind. You've hit the nail on the head with the way Jake has acted in the past and the way he is now. When I'm writing these charcters I'm not writing as me if that makes any sense, so when I step back and read it for again, and then read the reviews it brings to light how everyone interprets these characters.

The hate that Monica is getting is moreso directed toward her being insecure and I can see why. But I have to always ask the question, wouldn't I be insecure if I was in her shoes knowing what Jake has done in the past? Heck yeah I'd be. Don't know if I'd corner ol' girl in the restroom though, lol!

Thank you so much for this review mcsgirl. I really enjoyed reading it. 

Reviewer: mcsgirl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 05 2013 02:25 pm

Title: Them.

I was just starting to like Monica, but then she had to show her trifling ways.  I feel for Jake bc all of what Sierra has done, he still loves her.  If he can forgive her and she can stay clean then they should be together. 

Monica showed her insecurity and just how low she will go to keep the man--wanting to fight Sierra in the bathroom...trifling.  She has a lot to learn bc a bj will not keep Jake and if he had seen her nasty way she treated Sierra, he would have walked.  Sierra needs to do Sierra for a while. 

Would love to read a story about the Butcher.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading Penelope. Oh, The Butcher is coming. 

Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: September 04 2013 04:24 pm

Title: Fireworks. Part I

First things first: thank you for the update. I truly enjoyed it. 

Now on to the update: Jake needs to be honest with himself and with Monica. He is just using her to TRY to get over Sierra and he is failing miserably. If he's not ready to give Monica 100%, then he needs to let her go. It's not fair to anyone involved.

Monica needs to take her pride and move on. She didn't need to confront Sierra (but I get why she did). She needs to have a real talk with Jake and not let him brush her off with lipservice. 

Deena really needs to back off and let Sierra focus on getting better. Sierra knows what she is ready for and Deena needs to sit back and be a true friend.

I am actually proud that Sierra didn't take the bait and get into it Monica. She seems to have really grown. Let's hope she keeps it up.

Thank you again; please update soon.



Author's Response:

I'm always here for character growth and I can see Sierra doing just that. Thanks for reading SuperStar2577!

Reviewer: SuperStar2577 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 04 2013 01:00 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

What Monica did was just sad, she did not have to step to her like that I mean really...so uncalled for. I fell like Monica was looking for a fright , you got the man girl so move your ass on and stay out of Sierra face. Your not her friend, you don't like her, so why try and start shit.

 Can Sierra just be happy and have a better life and not have people like Monica and that V guy in it (hell keep Jake away to if that Mo girl going to be with him), I just don't want to see unnecessary people in this girl life. 

and she needs a job or something.

 

 



Author's Response:

Sierra most defintely does need a job, and hopefully that'll give her something in life to focus her energy on. I really do want Sierra happy but no one said it would be easy getting there. Thanks for reading bebe2pink!

Reviewer: bebe2pink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 01:16 pm

Title: Fireworks. Part I

Yeah!! You updated!!!My guts tell me Jake called Sierra's name in his sleep but Monica refuses to admit it, you desperate girl! Just like Viktor, she is in denial of the reality, she's just a pause in Jake's life (him, move on?! Don't make me laugh!).


I don't specifically like her, but the other girl doesn't necessarily need to be hateful. I think you managed that part by giving us her inner thoughts, her feelings for Jake are real. You know I love your story through & through (righ?), but please, resist the call of cliché by not making Monica the obvious jealous desperately conniving villain who will tell on Sierra to Viktor to get rid of her.... (hopeful intake of breath!). 


Considering the Sierra/Viktor background case, I confess to find her innocent in this mess. But, in the meantime, she let herself sink in her sorrow. She was so caught up in her self drug pity that she's now in denial about how much she hurt Jake and lead him on. I think that for her full recovery, she needs to face the reality of her past as a junkie, and that means listening to what she drove her entourage through, meaning a closure of this period by discussing with Jake.


I love how Deena is a true friend for her and genuinely wants to help Sierra. Call me ungrateful, but I can't stand friends who push you too hard to do something they think is good for you (even if they're right) when you to told them you don't want to or want to take it slow. Sierra is still fragile, pushing her might have a counter effect, she needs to find her own rythm...


Ahhh.......in two words, great job as usual, can't wait to read more!



Author's Response:

Peanut! [gasp] I wasn't even thinking about going that route with Monica/Viktor. I dislike stories that go that route. And Monica is most definitely not that vindictive. And I've had associates who pushed and pushed me and it wound up becoming a mess in the long run even if they did have good intentions.

 

Reviewer: Peanut Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 07:58 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

I was liking Monica until that scared punk ass move.   Let the man go Monica Jake needs a real woman! Fabulous!!!.



Author's Response:

HA! Thanks for reading pmgayles.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:51 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

Bleh. Monica's insecurity is almost cause for pity. Keyword: Almost :) lol. Love the update & the name change. I've been waiting on baited breath for an update and the build up in this chapter did not disappoint.



Author's Response:

LOL @ almost. Happy this chapter didn't disappoint. Thanks for reading bhvana. And the name change was much needed. :)

Reviewer: bhvana Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:35 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

Can Jake pleeeeease find out why Sierra did what she did, it's inexcusable but he should know and at least be friends because I HATE Monica



Author's Response:

He'll found in due time. Thanks for reading MIAmourrr!

Reviewer: MiAmourrr Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:27 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

Good update. I really do want Jake and Sierra to be togetehr in the end. But I don't want him to fall all over her everytime they see each other. Monica has a point. Can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading Stacie!

Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 05:10 am

Title: Them.

Monica is receiving hate because she spoke to Sierra not as Jake's friend but a jealous, insecure girlfriend.  Sierra has not been in contact with Jake since she got out of rehab so why are you in my face about his feelings.  You need to discuss this with yo man.  I don't have anything to do with that,  and all this drama is not good for me trying to recover and find myself.  I am so happy Sierra told her what she said, because the bottom line is I hurt myself more than anyone else including Jake.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading lajack1!

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 03:52 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

At last, an update yay!!!

Monica is so insecure. Why get in Sierra's face about Jake if things are going so well for her and Jake. I am rooting for Sierra and hoping she stays the course on the road to her recovery. Monica does know that Sierra is an addict right and a lot of things addicts do is part of their sickness. She needs to keep away from Sierra and work on her own insecurities. Maybe she needs to ask herself why is she with Jake when it is obvious that he still has deep feelings for a woman who she accused of abusing him. A blow job wouldnt solve their problems. Jake is still fixated on Sierra. Poor Monica she should have known better. As for Jake he needs to get his act together.

Please updatee soon!

Reviewer: Introspection Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 03:34 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

Loved it! I'll be glad when Monica is out of the picture and Sierra and Jake are able to get to a point where they can have a healthy relationship.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading Annie!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 03:00 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

At last, an update yay!!!

Monica is so insecure. Why get in Sierra's face about Jake if things are going so well for her and Jake. I am rooting for Sierra and hoping she stays the course on the road to her recovery. Monica does know that Sierra is an addict right and a lot of things addicts do is part of their sickness. She needs to keep away from Sierra and work on her own insecurities. Maybe she needs to ask herself why is she with Jake when it is obvious that he still has deep feelings for a woman who she accused of abusing him. A blow job wouldnt solve their problems. Jake is still fixated on Sierra. Poor Monica she should have known better. As for Jake he needs to get his act together.

Please updatee soon!



Author's Response:

Monica knows about much of everything that went down with Jake and Sierra. But she's just...feels a certain kind of way when it comes to Sierra. And yes Jake does need to get it together, poor thing. 

Thanks for reading Introspection!

Reviewer: Introspection Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:51 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

I'm not sure I understand the vitriol towards Monica.  Was that bathroom scene a sign of her insecurity? Yes.  But she didn't say anything to Sierra that wasn't true and she didn't call her names. Her message was 'Stay away from Jake'.

And really, why is Sierra allowed insecurities that had her doing things that truly hurt Jake, all of which Monica had to hear about and witness when Jake was just her friend; yet Monica is not allowed her moment?

I truly feel that at least half of her reason for the bathroom confrontation was for Jake's sake.  She knows exactly how torn up he was and she also knows that Sierra has had previous 'clean' periods, so she can't be expected to know/believe that this one is any different until that's been proven.  Monica does have deeper feelings for Jake, but she was his friend for a long time too and I think she wants to protect his feelings as much as she wants to protect their current relationship.



Author's Response:

A different view from the rest and very insightful about Monica. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 02:47 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

One thing is for sure, if Monica was so "stable" in her relationship with Jake she sure as hell wouldn't need to get I to Sierra's like some insecure school girl. Sierra has done a lot to herself which took Jake down a path of having to watch someone that he loved/loves go down a path of self destruction. He's not over Sierra and until he admits it to himself he will continue to fight the urges when it comes to her. I'm not liking Monica in this story because Sierra is working on herself not getting to anyone's face about Monica getting her man. Monica so needs to wake the F*** up because if she was so secure about Jake, Sierra wouldn't even be a factor. But not only is Jake letting Sierra in but so is Monica. Looking forward to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading Jovanbleu26! 

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2013 12:25 am

Title: Fireworks. Part I

Monica, Monica, Monica, girl: you set yourself for an heartbreak when you went after that boy and became the rebound girl; and meangirling the ex is just showing how insecure you are (though I don't hate you, you seems like a good decent girl, Jake is a good decent guy, but not just the one for you...). Jake, Jake, Jake, you can try, and try, and try, but when you dream of your ex while laying with your present girl, there is no way you are over the ex and you might be better take the hint your subconscious self is giving you (but you are right to not go right back to Sierra just like that, she needs to be by herself, just don't string Monica along, it is not cool)...Sierra, Sierra, Sierra, you need to stay strong, not for Jake (even if he is indeed a good guy, and he still loves you and I really root for you both, together or separately), but for yourself; also, when you are just fresh out of rehab, maybe avoid anything involving party and alcohol (try and find a steady job too)....Oh, and can we get rid of Victor; may be have some more Finch with that too. Thanks for the update. This story is very good. It was interesting to have the three different point of view.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading RedHobo! Sorry to tell you but...Viktor isn't going anywhere, lol! Not yet at least. Jake is so conflicted and he knows he's pulling Monica along. He just doesn't want to admit it. I've been saving Finch for future encounters. He'll become more involved soon.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:38 pm

Title: Fireworks. Part I

Love it! Monica is a b*tch though, but I'm sure she's gonna get hers..I hope she does. I'm also rooting for Sierra, I hope she gets a happy ending



Author's Response:

Hopefully Sierra will. Thanks for reading Teiga!

Reviewer: Teiga Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 11:08 pm

Title: Fireworks. Part I

I think that Monica wants the heart break. What she did was unnecessary and I was kind of rooting for her. But, I just want Sierra to be a good, healthy person. She deserves that. I hope Viktor leaves her along. 



Author's Response:

Daddyprincess, I want happiness for Sierra too but things just keep happening. She'll catch a break...hopefully.

Reviewer: Daddyprincess Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 10:31 pm

Title: Fireworks. Part I

I do not like that Monica bitch!! She didn't have to say nothing to Serria. Ugh!! I hate females like that. You got the boy, so why say something to her when just got out of recovery. I know why cause her ass insecure about Jake. smh. 

Now Jake ass smh is all I can do!! He know he stills care about her. So he need to stop playing!!

Love this story!!!



Author's Response:

Ooh you really don't Monica. lol! I'm smh'ing right along with you about Jake. Thanks for reading Treale! :)

Reviewer: Treale Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 09:37 pm

Title: Fireworks. Part I

i want monica's tacky ass to get dropped like a hot potato.  i don't like her one bit.  that little confrontation in the bathroom was absolutely unnecessary.  can't wait for part 2!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading Lili! Part 2 is on the way.

Reviewer: LiLi Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2013 08:34 pm

Title: Slow Fuse.

I like Deena she is cool, but I think Sierra needs to stay on trying to get her life back when she out. I hope she does the support group thing, she will need it.

 

Sierra does not need to worry about Jake if there meant to be, then it will happen just give it time, and worry about yourself.



Author's Response:

I agree. Sierra needs to be by herself for a minute. Hopefully she'll come to realize that. Thanks for reviewing bebe2pink! 

Reviewer: bebe2pink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 28 2013 02:44 pm

Title: Slow Fuse.

Wow, I totally like this Maksim, Viktor is too greedy to realize that he runs nothing but his personal court, not even himself! If Viktor thinks that Kazimar doesn't let his offspring slip away easily, I suspect that Maksim is in New York for a purpose and that he never really quit the family business....mhm, I definitely like Maksim the butcher! I hope Sierra will be safe and doesn't go after Jake yet, but live for herself a little bit, she deserves to rest. And in the meantime, Jake will miss her....mwahahahaaa!! (creepy laugh!). Great job!



Author's Response:

LOL at that creepy laugh, and yay! I'm happy that your liking Maksim. You're right about Viktor he is greedy and also very short sightened. Thanks for reading and reviewing Peanut! :)

Reviewer: Peanut Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 28 2013 07:24 am

Title: One Weary Rode.

This story is a tear jerker.



Author's Response:

Sorry if it had you teary eyed 1nadali. But thanks for reading! :)

Reviewer: 1nadali Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 11 2013 12:01 pm



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