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Title: Chapter 2

I like it but confused,  great start though.

 Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2013 11:17 pm
Title: Chapter 2

Hmm, intriguing. It was a pretty good chapter, although you may want to descibe things with a little more detail. Example, Caroline gasps when she see's the library and asks who designed. What does the library look like, and what was it about the library that blew her away? We, the reader, know that there's a large collection of books in the library, but that's not enough information.

You might also work on using the correct words for the things you describe i.e. full length mirror, not full body mirror. If you're not sure what something called look it up. I do that often. You want your prose to be as smooth as possible. 

This story is interesting. You just have a few quirks to work out. 

 

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2013 10:39 pm
Title: Chapter 2

more more pls ....

 Reviewer: africanblossom Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2013 08:28 pm
Title: Chapter 2

I love it 

 Reviewer: RedMoon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2013 07:56 pm
Title: Chapter 2

Damn this good!! I am disgusted that her parents are selling their child to the highest bidder. For what purpose? Is it too advance his career? Although it doesn't matter its wrong no matter what the circumstance! Excellent!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2013 05:07 pm
Title: Chapter 2

I am on the edge of my seat...Please continue

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2013 06:35 am
Title: Chapter 2

This is getting good. I really can't wait to read more. I wonder why Nikoli has such a fascination with Caroline. Please update asap

 Reviewer: Primegirl04 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2013 05:41 am


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