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Title: Chapter 21

I hope that before Debbie and the Klan finds out where Camille, Savannah and Hiram are, that we will get some scene between Hiram and Camille first. Some progress between their relationship because I'm starting to loose hope that anything will happen between them. I get that they can't jump in to a relationship and that things have to move slow. But in my opinion its moving too slow. We are at chapter 21 and they still didn't have a serious conversation about what is bothering Camille, her family and why she thinks she is ugly or not attractive. They need to start with something or somewhere. Right now I feel as when it come between Hiram and Camille the story is only dragging. Everything else is fine though. I also hope we will get some insight as the why Debbie is so obsessed and determent to get Hiram. She can have every other guy, but she still stuck on him. He obviously made up his mind and he made it clear that he is not coming back to the clan and that he doesn't want her. And by getting rid of Savannah and Camille will only make things worst for her. Because that will only make Hiram hate her more. Like seriously how desperate can a woman be for a man. Debbie is a psycho.



Author's Response:

Hello grayliza. Yes even though we're at chapter 21 at the same time we're just now hitting December '91 and the story

spans for a year since the co parenting is up by July '92. So really I haven't even hit the six month mark yet. The scene

at the end of chapter 20 is supposed to forshadow what's to come really soon. And by soon I mean before the story hits 

New Year's '92. 

Reviewer: grazylisa Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 03:41 pm

Title: Chapter 21

Happy Thanksgiving! !  Debbie is an evil ho in denial about ever being Hiram's wife. Debbie or as I like to call her Debho Hiram has never shown any interest in you. That was all his sadistic sperm donor and your sire. If you were the last ho on Earth, mankind would die off because Hiram doesn't want your crazy ass!!  I can't wait for all those fools to pay the price!!



Author's Response:

I'm going to assume that every jealous or other woman I come up with now will have ho attached to her name. That's 

pretty funny.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 01:58 pm

Title: Chapter 21

This was so adorable great update. I love the comic relief of the Henderson Sisters not getting to gossip like hens and nobody wanting to eat their nasty peach cobbler lol.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 01:52 pm

Title: Chapter 21

I don't get it. Why is Debbie so fixed on Hiram? She does not love him. She sleeps with anything that moves.

Reviewer: juno Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 11:15 am

Title: Prologue

thanks for the update. So no one knows where they live,that's great plus they've taken precautions with one or the other or both of them being there for Savanah even to the detriment of their finances. It's nice that the church stepped in &his gonna help them since Harim also lost his garage job. So they will have at least a little more coming in. That was a nice Thanksgiving dinner then Savvy stood up for the first time which was cause for another celebration of that milestone. Camille & Harim are getting closer everyone can see it plus they see that he not only cares about the baby but her also & wants to protect both,& has.now when the next step is gonna happen is the question. Especially since evil is afoot with Debbie still determined to have him anyway she can & if that means harming Camille & Savannah all the better because she's thar warped.

Reviewer: Kvgurl Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 11:02 am

Title: Chapter 21

I'm not one for violence against women...but somebody needs to whoop Debbie's ass. One good time. Ole girl is working my last damn nerve! Otherwise, I'm glad to see Camille and Hiram moving forward.

Reviewer: CaramelGal Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 08:27 am

Title: Prologue

I also wanted to say that I truly love this story. It's raw, and original. I love the fact that you're bringing a bit a reality into the picture here. Given this site is abt interracial relationships, we get caught up in the fantasy, and skip over the reality of what ppl in interracial relationships really have to contend with even in today's society. Very well done!  I can't wait for the next update. 

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2014 06:20 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Hmmm.  I don't know how comfy I wld feel abt staying in anything his father owned! 👀  I'm glad that Camielle is starting to open up to Hiram. I wonder of she'll ever reconnect with her biological family?  Also wonder where Savannah's skin tone 'really' came from? Great update!

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2014 06:14 pm

Title: Chapter 18

Wow!  I wonder who got to Hiram's dad?!  Great update. 

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2014 05:45 pm

Title: Chapter 17

Debbie is a real bitch!  Why is it that she can't get it that Hiram doesn't want her @$$!?

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2014 04:56 pm

Title: Chapter 20

I totally agree with encouragement please update soon this story is so good

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2014 03:51 pm

Title: Chapter 20

It really sucks how much shit you've been getting handed to you when both of your stories are very original and fresh.  And you've only been on Chamber for less than two months.  But you keep going I admire that. I see comments in both stories picking and nagging at little things instead of the actual story. Like the Spanish and Italian translations for example yeah you probably did use a free translation site because possibly that's your only resource. I'm pretty sure if you did know someone who spoke the language you'd ask them. I can understand if you were going to publish then yeah get the real translation but if it's just for this site people need to calm down it's a fictional story. And just because your characters are not jumping in the hay right away does not mean there's no connection because Hiram and Camille definitely have it and it will be worth it when it does happen.  Same goes for the characters in your other story. Keep going not all of us think this way.

 

 

Reviewer: encouragement Anonymous [Report This]
Date: November 23 2014 02:33 am

Title: Chapter 20

Hiram and Camille are just great together, and Savannah is just too cute.

Reviewer: liberty lady Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 21 2014 03:10 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Ok, first step taken...telling her she is beautiful,  next step, getting her to believe it! I love the Jackson-Whitfield family.

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 21 2014 10:09 am

Title: Chapter 20

Ok. Moving into his father's old cabin seems like a bad idea!!!

Reviewer: CrimsonBlaze Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 11:19 pm

Title: Chapter 20

I love how quickly you update this story. Btw this chapter was perfect. 

Reviewer: Carriekiara Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 11:03 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Hiram really cares about Camille. He seems to be the one for her.nThere has to be something great coming to them.

i can't wait to see what is going to happen with Hiram's family and the klans. Surely you have something planned for them.

Reviewer: Update Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 10:37 pm

Title: Chapter 20

That was soooooo short, what's up with that?

Reviewer: kimyso Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 07:53 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Always love a little self exploration.  Nice to know she knows what an orgasm feels like.  Now I can't wait for the moment when their feelings culminate one night.  Anyway, does anyone else remembers the hunting lodge.  I question their safety so far away from town.  It feels like this move is bringing them closer to Hiram's dream.  Hiram needs to teach Camille how to shoot first and ask questions later after they are wounded.  Love the story and progress between Hiram and Camille.  Hope our girl is strong enough to weather the storm still heading their way because I know Debbie has not given up.  Now it is really about pride.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 07:29 pm

Title: Chapter 20

They are so beyond perfect!

Reviewer: brookedoe Signed [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 06:31 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Yes!!! Thank you for this chapter. I wanted more to happen but it's great that they are moving closer. I love this story and I can't wait for more. Great job :)

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 06:11 pm

Title: Chapter 20

It's always at the remote cabin that the psycho killer shows up.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 06:03 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Ooooooh snaps ! Its getting serious ! Theyve admitted thier feelings ! WooHoo

Reviewer: Heleana503 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 03:05 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Great moment here. Loving the connection Hiram and Camille are making. Now they both know how each feel. 👍

Hopefully this is a safe place. You know the kkk like the woods.

It is time for some action against them!!!!

thanks for the update. Can we have more than one chapter the next time?

Reviewer: safety first Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 01:47 pm

Title: Chapter 20

I appreciate the tenderness, patience and love Hiram has for Camille. These are definite qualities she need in her future husband.

Okay, i'm not sure about them staying so secluded, especially with Camille and Savannah having to be by themselves sometimes.

It would be nice if they come across some money in that house that Hiram's dad stashed away. Enough for them to have for the rest of their lives. Maybe Hiram will come across some information on the klans, his family and Debbie to dismantle their organization or send them to prison.

Reviewer: Touching Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 20 2014 01:38 pm



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