IDK if you're using music to set the scene, but it kind of throws everything off and takes away from the story. Maybe because it's in almost every chapter. It's a little to much. Still a good story though.
Reviewer: lonieg Signed
[Report This]Date: November 22 2014 10:25 pm
Tracie is so annoying!!
Reviewer: lonieg Signed
[Report This]Date: November 22 2014 10:15 pm
All this ratchet music is a such a turn off.
Reviewer: lonieg Signed [Report This]Date: November 22 2014 10:10 pm
Ok, I must have missed something, don't remember reading about Justin. Dud Elle date him in college? Seems he really wants to get together with her.
Mom is kinda getting on my nerves with the meddling.
Author's Response:
Elle bumped into Justin at the club while celebrating Gretch's birthday. They had a "thing" when she was in graduate school---after the incident with Dean. He’s determined now, but he hasn’t always been. Elle's Mom is always meddling---it’s just her annoying maternal intuition lol. Thanks for reading and reviewing liberty lady.
CG
Reviewer: liberty lady Signed [Report This]Date: November 20 2014 04:32 am
So glad I gave this story a chance. It's really good. I like how the relationship is growing between Elle and Dean, plus the flashbacks are great!! Update soon
Author's Response:
Excited to hear you like it so far! The flashbacks are the essence of Elle and Dean’s current budding relationship, so it’s great to know you’re enjoying them. I'm working on the next two chapters as we speak. Thanks for reading and reviewing Michmom2.
CG
Reviewer: Michmom2 Signed [Report This]Date: November 20 2014 01:38 am
Elle needs to stay away from Justin. But she won't because now that she's digging him he gonna be on her like white on rice.
Author's Response:
Elle doesn't want to be around Justin. He's just always inconveniently there. Congregating in the same circles as the people you want to forget never makes them disappear. Thanks for reading and reviewing Khamalani.
Side Note: "Like white on rice" is one of my fave sayings---you're the real MVP for using it.
CG
Reviewer: Khamalani Signed [Report This]Date: November 19 2014 02:03 pm
Well, seeing Justin again went like I would've expected to. But she should have just told him she wasn't interested in "catching up" with him about anything. That she was his booty call and when he was finished he stopped "calling." And yes, told right there on the step of the church! Seriously, what could he possibly want after all this time except to pick up where he left off. He's acting like it's all good. Like she's been waiting on him to actually call or something. Geez! Settle it and move on. Creep!
Evie knows her well!
Nice!
Author's Response:
I totally agree with you. Elle definitely has a knack for not closing cases when it comes to her personal life. Hopefully, she'll get it right---eventually. Evie, like Tracie, knows how her sister operates. This chapter was just another way to get a little background on someone else in Elle's life that’s rooting for her to get it right. Evie just wants the best for little sis. Thanks for reading and reviewing flikchick.
CG
Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]Date: November 19 2014 07:06 am
I can't wait for their coffee! I like Cranston. Justin is a big douche, but I suspect he's supposed to be that way. Cranston is a dream boat, I wish elle wasn't so wishy washy with him though. She seems to be doing better or at least your writing is already showing some character development which is awesome!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I'm glad you noticed the improvement and their coffee should definitely be interesting to say the least. Justin is definitely not a fan favorite, which I fully expected. Although for now, he's necessary. So he's not going anywhere just yet. Thanks again for reading and reviewing jb.
CG
Reviewer: jb Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 19 2014 06:04 am
Ok, why didn't ask either Gretchen or Tyler for Dean's number, she was seriously into him in college... Elle still kinda makes me wanna shake some sense into her.
Oh that scene was Hot... Dean knew what he was doing, and if it was me wé would be wearing out that couch and his mattress.
Author's Response:
Same old Elle---clueless as usual lol. Yeah, they had a lot of chemistry in college, so it's all extremely confusing. Even thought I write about her, sometimes I want to shake her too.
Dean definitely showed out, but things just got in the way---as always *deep sigh* Maybe if they weren't interrupted...oh well. Thanks for reading and reviewing liberty lady!
CG
Reviewer: liberty lady Signed [Report This]Date: November 17 2014 03:42 am
Just read the whole thing and I love it!
Dean has an easy sex appeal about him. He doesn't talk a lot and doesn't like games. And he's been on a slow burn for Elle from jump. He probably knocks it out of the park in the sack! You what they say about the quiet ones....
I like Elle and thinks she makes a good fit for Dean. However, this Justin thing has me giving her a small side eye right about now. I just don't believe she's resolved whatever she needs to about him within herself yet. He caught her off guard, but running into him like she seemed...conflicted. I hope she does right by herself and Dean if/when she has any more contact with him. Because although she may not realize it, right now, with Dean, she is on a trust but verify sort of basis.
Tracie is a straight up fool..lol! Love her.
Very nice!
Author's Response:
I love that you loved it! Dean is definitely a no fuss and easy going type of guy. Him wanting Elle, regardless of what they’ve been through, is pretty interesting. He's also not a stranger to knowing what to do in the bedroom---which which was hopefully captured through the incident. Elle and Dean really are a good match---hopefully she will see that. Elle has never been good with romance or love.It’s not something that she’s had to be good at to advance in other areas of her life. It's something she’s put on the back burner and kind of let boil over. Glad to see you’re rooting for her to make the right decision and interested in seeing how it all goes.
Justin is a wildcard whose purposes will be revealed soon enough.Tracie is actually just pieces of every crazy person I know balled up into one---so I’m glad you like her. She’s definitely fun to write.
Thanks for reading and reviewing flikchick.
CG
Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]Date: November 17 2014 01:32 am
Poor Dean got the short end of the deal. I do understand why Elle couldn't stay, but she should have tried to contact him. That just leaves a lot of unfinished business between them. I understand his hesitance to continue any type of relationship, but his mind and heart are too caught up. She's interested but isn't quite sure how to act. smh isn't that mess how it always goes?!
Author's Response:
Yeah, Dean did get duped. The situation left a bad taste in their mouths (No pun intended). The next chapter will explore the immediate aftermath of the incident. Lastly, you’re right. It’s always a merry-go-round of mixed signals and hurt feelings. Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing HumorMe.
CG
Reviewer: HumorMe Signed [Report This]Date: November 16 2014 10:49 pm
I can't wait till Elle sees that Dean is a grown ass man!! I hope he put it on her so good she speaks in tongues!! Lol!!
Author's Response:
I'm hoping she peeps his grown ass man-ness too. I cracked up at you talking about him making her "speak in tongues." Lol! Thanks again for reading and reviewing Khamalani!
CG
Reviewer: Khamalani Signed [Report This]Date: November 16 2014 10:38 pm
Great chapter, loved their date and that kiss.. hope that Elle goes for it with Dean..but I do still wonder why they didn't get together while in college, did she not want her friends to know she liked Dean, I mean her friends don't seem that shallow
Can't wait to read more about their past.
Author's Response:
Thanks, the date and kiss was probably the most enjoyable scenes I've written so far. Elle is just a stickler for keeping her love life private from everyone she knows. Her reasoning for not saying anything will come up soon. Thanks again for reading and reviewing liberty lady.
CG
Reviewer: liberty lady Signed [Report This]Date: November 12 2014 05:56 pm
Loving this story. And the fact that you used SZA's song Hiiijack... Bonus points!!
Author's Response:
Excited that someone likes SZA as much as I do! I had "Z" on heavy rotation while I wrote this chapter, but something about HiiiJack just seemed fitting for the moment. Thanks for reading and reviewing Daddyprincess!
CG
Reviewer: Daddyprincess Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 12 2014 04:23 pm
I'm really enjoying this story. But this note is to say, Elle is a very stylized sh dresser. I want her closet
Thanks for taking the extra time to source and post the outfits
Author's Response:
Glad you're enjoying it and you're not alone---I want her closet too lol. The outfits literally keep the story flowing for me. Thanks for reading and reviewing rainey.
CG
Reviewer: rainey Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 12 2014 01:42 am
That was sweet, i love how they use wach others last names. They are so cute!! More please!
Author's Response:
Them using their last names was something I really wanted the reader to get. It's also another clue to their past, which will be discussed next chapeter. It's almost done, so I might post it earlier than expected. Thanks for reading and reviewing pmgayles.
CG
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: November 12 2014 01:40 am
Finally!! They kiss!! He put it on her!! Lol! Go Dean!!
Author's Response:
Yeah, the kiss was a must have for this chapter. I agree, he did kind of put it on her something serious lol. As always, thanks for reading and reviewing Khamalani.
CG
Reviewer: Khamalani Signed [Report This]Date: November 11 2014 10:59 pm
Yes, yes, yes!! I really like this turn of events and hope that Elle can "make it up to Dean." Lol. I was also pleasantly surprised to see that the two had history, that definately makes the story more interesting. Please update soon!
Author's Response:
You're the first reviewier to be into this turn of events. Everyone else thinks Elle needs to get it together quick. She will---just in her own way on her own time. Their history will be revealed soon, since it's necessary to explain why they act the way they do. There should be an update by early this upcoming week. Thanks for reading and reviewing MI97.
CG
Reviewer: MI97 Anonymous [Report This]Date: November 07 2014 05:50 pm
I kinda wanna slap Elle,girl put on your Big Girl Panties, abd tell Dean that you were always into him b4 he moves on, and it will be her lose.
Oh when I see this story, I get the Isley Brothers song in my head.
Author's Response:
Everyone seems a little fed up with her. Elle is mature in every aspect of her life exceot for love. She'll see the consequences of her actions or lack there of shortly. Funny thing is that I picked that title because I couldn't get that song out of my head either lol. Thanks for reading and reviewing liberty lady.
CG
Reviewer: liberty lady Signed [Report This]Date: November 05 2014 09:41 pm
Dean is right; he can find someone who will treat him way better. Her behavior at the party still doesn't make sense to me. I like that Dean is willing to allow her to redeem herself. I question her invitation for "dinner" at her place.
The expression is to sow her wild oats.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the correction. I fixed it. Dean is definitely being nice (as usual), and when Elle says dinner at her place then it's safe to it's just that. Now whatever happens at dinner is soley based on how they act toward one another. Their first outing was pretty innocent. So who knows how this dinner will go? Thanks so much for reading and reviewing JFJD.
CG
Reviewer: JFJD Signed [Report This]Date: November 05 2014 01:25 pm
Those shoes are sinful and this story is magically delicious!!!!
Author's Response:
Yeah, those shoes are everything. So happy you're enjoying it thus far! Thanks for reading and reviewing HumorMe.
CG
Reviewer: HumorMe Signed [Report This]Date: November 05 2014 01:26 am
Elle is making my left eye twitch!! She likes a Dean so why is she treating him shady? Love her parents! !
Author's Response:
Sorry for making your eye twitch lol. Elle is and has always been lost when it comes to men. That's her weak point. As the story progresses, why she acts the way she does towards Dean will be revealed. Thanks for reading and reviewing pmgayles.
CG
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: November 05 2014 12:50 am
Elle needs to see someone else interested in Dean. Then maybe she'll act right.
Author's Response:
Yeah, she definitely needs a reality check---and she'll get one soon. Regardless, she's got to do better. Thanks for reading and reviewing Khamalani.
CG
Reviewer: Khamalani Signed [Report This]Date: November 05 2014 12:21 am
Loveee it
Author's Response:
Glad you love it! Thanks for reading and reviewing keluboo
CG
Reviewer: keluboo Signed [Report This]Date: November 04 2014 11:59 pm
Good chapter. Please tell me where to find that dress.
Author's Response:
I swear, as soon as I lost my reviews yesterday, yours was the first one I thought about lol. Glad you liked the chapter and the dress is from Necessary Clothing. Thanks for reading and reviewing traccie.
CG
Reviewer: traccie Signed [Report This]Date: November 03 2014 09:26 pm