There is just something about Diya and Brandon that I can't put my finger on that makes me root for them. These two have so much history and baggage that it amazes me that they can find what they need in each other and trust it. With that said I love how one minute they try so hard to not say what they feel and I. The next can't help but to say it. These two are so trying hard for this relationship to work that they make it harder on themselves because they are afraid to loose it.
Im glad that Brandon seems to be very much in tune with Diya just about as much as she is with him. Marisol what can one say about her? It's not that I don't like her nor can I say I don't trust her, I think it's I don't know her. I mean she seems to really care about Brandon but not so much about her own self safety. Because it's dark and Brandon tells her to wait for someone to walk with her and she thinks just because it's around the block walking by herself is smart? Hmmm not so much. But she is grown. And Brandon feels responsible for her and now that this has happened I think even more so. I won't assume to know if he will blame himself for not checking to make sure someone went with her. I won't assume to say he would have walked with her if Diya wasn't there but what I do know is you Joelle left me hanging... So hopefully we find out soon how this plays into Diya and Brandon's relationship.
yet again you had me laughing at the conspiracy theory sister Chandi and Brandon not being real. That whole family is nuts in some way which makes them even more entertaining.
Looking forward to the rocky road ahead because it will either make or break this couple. And I hope both Brandon and Diya begin to heal. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Your assessment of the characters is spot on. Fear of lossing one another drives both Brandon's and Diya's reticence and their candor. Marisol and her intentions are still a bit of a mystery. You'll get to know both better as the story progresses. Brandon's reaction to the entire incident may be a bit of a surprise. We'll soon see, along with more from Diya's crazy clan. Update posted. Thanks JovanBleu26!
Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed
[Report This]Date: September 18 2015 02:06 am
Yeah, that Marisol is making me kind of stabby. Sure, he can have female friends, but it sure seems that she wants something more. And yeah, they kissed when they were 17, but I bet ole girl is holding that near and dear to her heart. I really don't trust this chick.
Ya know, Brandon needs to take care of his "relationship" with Marisol. It is quite clear that he's not oblvious to the vibes when the two ladies in his life are in the vicinity of each other. Has he made it clear to Marisol that Di is his boo and a serious boo at that? If not, he needs to.
Yeah, a bit bumpy is prolly an understatement. :)
Author's Response:
Like any female in close proximity to a man who isn't theirs, Marisol bears watching--which Diya is doing. Brandon has made it clear to Marisol how serious things are between him and Diya. More importantly, Marisol knows Brandon well enough to read the signs. What that means to her, remains to be seen.
This chapter was bumpy. But it gets so much worse. Stay tuned...
Thanks BellaChica!
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]Date: September 18 2015 12:44 am
Wow! 😱 WTH?! All kinds of twists and turns in this one. I am on pins and needles for the next!
Yeah, we would have to have a long talk abt 'ol girl and the nature of their relationship. As Diya said, I wouldn't want to be that 'jealous' girlfriend, but damn ... seems they were throwing their little 'date' or whatever it is in her face! Nnnaaahhlll B@!tch !!! Some thangs would need to change! Can't wait for the next update to get some clarification on WTH is goinz on! LOL. Love it!
Author's Response:
Lol! Marisol is very chummy with Brandon. Question is, is it the familiarity of longtime friends or something more? Diya's in the process of trying to figure that out, though her leanings are pretty clear. Brandon and Marisol have been friends for over tens years, so who knows. Well, I do, but I'm not tell ; ) Thanks Musicluva! Update posted.
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]Date: September 18 2015 12:41 am
Ok, I maybe wrong but I don't feel an ounce of pity for Marisol. She KNEW the risk because she had been to the shop over some years. She knows Diya is a threat to her imaginary relationship with Bran. It is just away for her to pull Brandon out his relationship. Next, Diya needs to grow up. She is coming off immature by her actions. She needs to give Brandon the full disclosure why she is really protecting him from her family. He may not like it, but at least he will have the full picture. Then I can find out the scoop w Brandon's family. Finally Brandon, he needs to open his eyes. Marisol is trying to get w him. She has been waiting around for him to finally see her. She knew the others were fly by night chicks, but Diya is something more an actual threat. So Bran needs to realize what's going on and put Marisol in her place.
Author's Response:
In Marisol's mind, the walk wasn't much of a risk. It was a short one in a normally safe neighborhood. No one anticipated what went down. In insisting she not walk alone, Brandon was just being his normal protective self. Diya will eventually explain to Brandon all the secrecy surrounding her family. How and when is the only question. And you might be right about Marisol. We'll definitely see. Thanks Dallas5star!
Reviewer: Dallas5star Signed [Report This]Date: September 17 2015 11:07 pm
At first I was not feeling Marisol, to be honest I didn't trust her around Brandon. I thought Diya asked Brandon did he and Marisol had any type of physical contact before and he said no. I get that Diya wants to be the trusting girlfriend and everything, but some women you just have to keep your eye on. I thinks Marisol is a little shy around people she just meet and now I see Brandon as her bodygraud or protector. Men can be so dense at times when it comes to women, but a woman knows another womans game. I don't know how Diya is going to handle this situation. Thanks for the update.
Author's Response:
The verdict is still out on Marisol. She seems fairly innocent, but one never knows. Diya definitely has her doubts. Several chapters back, she asked Brandon had he and Marisol ever had sex. Kissing was never discussed. Now that the secret's out, we'll see how she copes. Thanks Jacqua43!
Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed [Report This]Date: September 17 2015 10:52 pm
I really don't like Marisol so I am working on feeling bad for her impeding assault. It is her own damn fault, Brandon told your dumb ass to have Jesse walk you back. Brandon your so called friend Marisol wants you bad and you refuse to see it. Diya piss or get off the pot, if you love Brandon tell him why you don't want him to meet your family. You need to find another job and quit your father's firm, Otherwise you will never have peace. Brandon deserves more from you! ! Thank you Joelle!!
Author's Response:
LOL @ you working on feeling bed for Marisol. Hilarious. As for Diya telling Brandon what the deal is with her family, she was sort of trying to work her way there when everything went left. Now... Well, you'll see.
Update posted. Thanks Pmgayles!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: September 17 2015 10:09 pm
umm. so, this whole incident at the end with marisol.
when brandon runs in to save the day, she'll probably cling onto him even more.
soooo, we'll see what happens between those 3.
Author's Response:
Yes, we will. Thanks Soledad.
Reviewer: Soledad Signed [Report This]Date: September 17 2015 09:50 pm
Um...yeah. So Diva's issues with her dad are only there because she gives him full reign to continue to create them. How old is she and why doesn't she just move to another office? And this thing with her dad having exes followed and what not, I would never speak to him again if he pulled that. That would be a stipulation in our father-daughter relationship, "If you do something this intrusive again, i will continue to date this person but never speak to you again." What is going on with Diya? And Brandon is not innocent in this either. He's hiding something...and it's big. Hope Diya stops playing this game with her father, she has a lot to loose if she doesn't.
P.S. I haven't been this excited for an update since ICE
Author's Response:
Okay, so to answer your questions, Diya's thirty, she did move to another floor but William's all about an elevator ride, and what's going on with her is that she's never met a guy worth risking her relationship with her father over...until now?
There are some yet-to-be-discussed family dynamics that'll explain Diya's willingness to forgive her father's behavoir. Those are coming several chapters down the line.
As for Brandon, he is far from innocent. No one is. More on that to come.
P.P.S. I've seen several people mention ICE here on The Chamber and they've had nothing but great things to say, so I'll take that as a compliment.
Thanks GreenRoots!!!
Reviewer: GreenRoots Signed [Report This]Date: September 17 2015 07:36 pm
These two are entirely too much, gotta love them.
Author's Response:
Lol. Thanks Lajack.
Reviewer: lajack1 Signed
[Report This]Date: September 17 2015 04:45 am
So it is looking like it was his brother who impregnated the girl he was in love with and the way Tyler acted, it appears it was done maliciously and intentionally. What kind of family does he belong to. Whew girl you about to take us on a bumpy road, you can't deny it, I already called Ms. Cleo and she told me I better take my heart medicine for this one.
Author's Response:
Lol! Brandon's burdened by some very interesting family dynamics. They are...let's just say Ms. Cleo didn't steer you wrong. Thanks Lajack1!
Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]Date: September 17 2015 04:32 am
I don't know where I have been and why I haven't read this so far but I have to say I think Brandon was unfair to ask Diya about Marisol calling him at that time of night. You are in a relationship and understand you wouldn't want a man regardless of friend to call her during a time that's reserved for you two. So hell yeah, tell Marisol to stop calling and break that chain she is attempting to wrap you up in. She can go to the store and purchase some Melatonin, benadryl to get her behind to sleep. Hell go the aromatherapy route with some lavender, chamomile, bish you can even do sleepytime tea...you do not need to hear the sound of his voice to get your ass to sleep. That is done for and she should have known better and been respectful of the relationship. Obviously from the previous chapter, she is aware he really likes her if he introducing her as his Girlfriend....the former hit it and quit it king.
Now who is this woman that is still causing him so much anguish and if I was Diya, we gonna need some counseling b/c I don't have time to put effort into this relationship and this chick reappears then you waltzing away with her. That much anguish still present, feels like strong feelings are still involved. I understand the reticence in speaking about it to her this early in the relationship but the voice. Hmmmm.
Author's Response:
Lol @ your extensive list of insomnia remedies. Brandon wasn't asking for Diya's permission to continue the late night calls so much as he was "asking" Diya to trust him. Now, whether Marisol is an innocent just doing the same thing as she and Brandon have always done remains to be seen. And yes, Brandon's feelings are still very much affected by what happened with his ex. Whether that's the extent of it will become clearer as the story progress. Thanks Lajack1!
Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]Date: September 17 2015 04:15 am
First of all thanks for responding to my review.
Second, like I said, my intent wasn't to provide negative criticism because, as i mentioned in my review I do like your style of writing and I've read several other of your stories and enjoyed them greatly. I, in fact love this one, including most of the characters. Therefore, NO i don't think that your writing is subpar or anything less than awesome. Especially because you write for FUN not as a profession. I LOVE reading, I even attempted to write once but determined I wasn't thorough or creative enough. With that said, I admire your courage to write and share this with the world and for exposing yourself to criticism even when, like you said, you have a life that does not revolve around this.
Thirdly, I was simply giving you my opinion on this one character since his personality was so dominant in this chapter. I now understand that my opinion was unsolicited and will save my criticism, good or bad, to myself.
Lastly, just like I finished my previous message, I look forward to your update. It wasn't my intent to stop reading because of a character I don't like. If that were the case then I'm definitely not a "proper" reader. No need to say IF i stick with the story.
Once again, I apologize if I hurt your writer-feelings by expressing my opinion. Even though I said more positive things in my review than negative. It definitely wasn't my intent. Also, I don't write reviews only when they're negative. I'm an avid believer of Tough Love. The very few times I leave reviews is for people with great potential that I offer what I thought was constructive criticism.
Thanks for willingly sharing your talent with us. Know that I will continue to read your stories because I seriously like them but I've learned my lesson when it comes to reviews!
Have a good day!
Author's Response:
It appears we're now both in our feelings, which is fine. We both have a right to whatever we feel. I think there may be some confusion about what that is on my end, so I'd like to clarify. I don't consider your, or any other reader's, opinion unsolicited or unwelcomed. By posting the story, I've invited just that. I want to hear from readers. Otherwise, as I stated in my response, I feel like I'm wasting my time editing and posting. What I don't want is for me or my work to be disrespected. Fair reviews, not positive ones, is all I ask. And I actually thought your criticism of my characterization was pretty fair, hence me partially agreeing with you. But that doesn't change the fact that it wasn't a fun read for me, interspersed praise or not. I don't think that makes me overly sensitive. I don't have "writer feelings." I have feelings. Period. Just like every other human being, especially when it comes to the things for which they're passionate. Writing is that for me. Your feelings seemed to have been affected by me sharing mine with regard to critism (in general, not just yours), so I'm sure you can understand.
I don't think it makes you an "improper" reader to stop reading a story because you don't like a character. People like what they like and my stuff definitely isn't always it. You're not fond of William's characterization, so I just thought I'd give you a head's up in case he was a reading deal-breaker for you.
And I never accused you of writing nothing but negative reviews. That comment was a part of a general statement about how I respond to criticism (though your review criticizing William's characterization is the only one you've left on any of my stories with the exception of one other). A statement I felt free to make because of your concerns about how I took your criticism. Not commenting on my stories is certainly your right, but that's your decision. That's not at all what my comment was about. Just like you did then and now, I was simply expressing how I feel.
Reviewer: Mariposa-12 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2015 07:48 pm
Ok, I LOVE Brandon and Diya and I can't wait to read how their relationship will develop with all the issues that surround them. BUT Diya's overbearing and ridiculuous dad is too much. I know there are so many different personalities out there but I think the way he's portrayed is way too exaggerated and waaay too inmature for such a successful lawyer and old man. I feel like those interactions could cause a disconnect between the reader and the story. This is MY opinion and maybe it's because of my tastes but the last 1800 words in this chapter could've been saved and it still would've been a good chapter. I've read several of your stories and I love your writing style. I hope you don't take my criticism the wrong way. I do like how this story is going but this is just a matter or characters i guess. I'm sure you have a very good idea of how they will develop but I really hope that it includes Diya "growing a pair" and standing up for herself and Brandon as opposed to manipulating her way/Daddy around everything. Believe it or not, I'm still looking forward to the next update! Thanks for posting this!
Author's Response:
*Sigh* Okay, I know I’m supposed to be thick-skinned and gracious about criticism because I do, after all, appreciate it. But I’d like to, for just one moment, say exactly what I feel in response to it, come what may. But first, let me address William’s characterization. I agree that William is an exaggerated personality with immature tendencies. Where I think we disagree is on the “too.” I’ve worked with and befriended both lawyers and doctors, and I know from experience that they can be some of the most socially inept people on the planet. Probably because while the rest of the BSes and BAs of the world were having gobs of interpersonal interactions, they had their noses buried in a book (some, not all). So behaving contrary to what the average person sees as normal behavior for their academic and professional achievements in personal interactions isn’t all that uncommon among legal professionals, especially those who don’t come from money. We just know how to turn it on and off, and so does William. Diya even mentions in this chapter how he assumes his professional posture and tone when questioning her about the flowers. And you’ll see more of that as the story continues if you chose to stick around. Because love him or hate him, William is here to stay. The other thing at work here is a phenomenon I’m sure you’ve seen firsthand. I’m speaking of people who carry on perfectly normal adult interactions but turn into baby-talking, nose-tweaking, belly-poking buffoons when it comes to little children. Especially fathers with their daughters. Such is the case with William. His developmental view of Diya is severely stunted. She’s a thirty year old home-owning professional who’s had two careers and multiple sexual partners. But to him, she’s his innocent little girl, and he approaches her as such, i.e., immaturely. And there-in lies many of Diya’s relationship problems. Lastly, this is a comedy. I’m mucking it up if it seems completely unrealistic. But moments of improbability is sort of the name of the game. Now, to my reaction to criticism. Since I expounded so much above, I’ll keep this brief-ish. I’m not a professional writer or thick-skinned when it comes to it. Writing is a hobby—one I’ve only been at for three years. I don’t write with plans to publish or post for feedback to aid in that process. I write for myself. I post for readers. And posting said writing is a sacrifice. I have a career change to execute, a language to learn, and relationships to nourish in addition to all the other day-to-day tasks normal life requires. I take a lot of time away from all that to edit my stories for posting with zero monetary pay-off and a not-so-insignificant emotional risk (because reviews, or the lack thereof, do affect me). Reviews are my compensation. When people bother to write them and they’re fair (not necessarily positive), I feel my time was well spent. When they don’t or they’re not, I feel the need to devote my time to other activities and keep my apparently subpar writing to myself. Especially when a reviewer doesn’t bother to comment unless they have a complaint. I don’t know if that’s taking criticism the wrong way, but that is how I feel. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Marisopa-12. I really do appreciate it, but I can’t help at all how it makes me feel.
Reviewer: Mariposa-12 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2015 01:03 pm
I had to work very hard not to bust out laughing at work while I read this. I swear Diya's father is so god-damn crazy that it's hilarious for words. I mean here Diya is trying to hold on to her relationship with Brandon because her father will do and say anything to get his little girl married off to the man of his choosing. And he is seeking "outsourcing" help from the great beyond to find said man and wanting to drop 7 grande like it's cump change to make it happen and I can do not to wet myself is giggle. Diya your chi is messed up because you have allowed your father to have so much control over your life and who you can love that it is ass backwards.
When her father fins out about Brandon I am going to need to be in the privacy of my own home where I can be free to bust out into laughter because either the man will have a heart attack or he is going to loose his shit and be committed.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
William is a fool. He has the mistaken belief that Diya is an innocent who needs his protection and help in finding a mate, and he's willing to do anything to ensure she gets it. That poses a huge problem for Diya and Brandon. But it's so fun to write.
Diya doesn't really give her father control over her life. Just the illusion of it. She pretty much does what she wants. She just hides it from him. Not the most productive, healthy behavoir, but I think you'll appreciated why she thinks it's necessary as the story progresses.
The next couple chapters are light on the NSFW content. After that, I can make no promises ; )
Thanks for reading and reviewing, JovanBleu!
Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed
[Report This]Date: September 16 2015 12:18 pm
Daddy Dearest is up there with Brandon - love him! his level of craziness is hilarious and he cracks me up. i know that his craziness will most likely cause some major (!) problems later on but at least Diya was smart enough to bargain for a little favour ;) i was just wondering about one thing - did Diya sleep with Emory who was dating Taj or Taj wasn't dating him? she was just in love while he slept with Diya?
other than that Brandon is just...so sexy and everything! after read previous ch and now this *fan face* i know i'm in love *starry eyes*
i get Diya wants to keep her and brandon's relationship safe but adding more fictional characters - brandonetta, branley, brianna, hahahaha! - and pox is not helping her case...! even though her stories are LMAO moments!
great great GREAT update! other then that i hope you're good and thank you :)
Author's Response:
You are so right to assume William's special brand of crazy will create major problems for Brandon and Diya, hence her habit of creating elaborate works of fiction. Because the moment Demolition Daddy finds out about Brandon, an entire septic tank of full of shit will hit the fan.
Emory dated Taj and repeatedly tried to sleep with Diya with zero success. Even if Diya were the type to betray a sister, she'd never do that to Taj. Diya's probably closest to Chandi, but Taj is the sister she most loves and respects for reason that will be discussed later.
As for your beloved Brandon, his face-flushing antics shall continue ; )
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Yuukiyanagi! I've been doing okay. Hope all is well with you.
Reviewer: Yuukiyanagi Signed [Report This]Date: September 16 2015 07:50 am
Wow...funny!!! Brandon is so sweet, let's hope Diya' s daddy doesn't ruin everything.
Author's Response:
Brandon is sweet. But there's another side to him. More on that next chapter. Thanks Michmom!
Reviewer: Michmom2 Signed [Report This]Date: September 16 2015 07:06 am
I'm so happy that you updated! Thank you for contiuning to bless us with your talents! This chapter was too funny! Talk about a meddling father that is desperate to get his daughter a husband...what's up with that and how does Diya tolerate it...I wouldn't/couldn't but that's just me...that kind of behavior from parents is only a disaster waiting to happen...her father has lived his life and should let his daughter live hers...I think Brandon wanting to meet Diya's parents is about having her reveal to him where her heart and commitment to him really lay...I don't think he cares about how her parents will view him as long as Diya is with him but he knows she loves her parents so hiding him from them is a barrier to her love for him...he wants to know that she will choose him because that seems to be a possible issue for him...his first love chose someone else (maybe his brother) over Brandon...but that's just my view...Diya should be honest with Brandon to let him know that her parents may not be so accepting of their relationship...but has she really considered what that means to her...and Brandon has issues...I am wondering what they are but I still think his insistence that he meet her family and the problems with his first love are about his being accepted in her life...I can't wait to see if I am wrong because speculating is fun! This story is my favorite!
Author's Response:
Thanks Jahchannah!!! You really did make my day with this.
First off, fabulous character insight! William goes way overboard with his meddling. Diya puts up with it because, as dysfunctional as it is, it comes from a place of deep love--something she lacks in her other relationships. More on that later. As for Brandon's reasoning behind wanting to meet her parents, you did such a superb job dissecting it, I have absolutely nothing useful to add (nor do I want to inadvertently drop a spoiler). Their issues, unfortunately, don't end there. More on that coming up, as well.
Thanks again for the awesome review, Jahchannah! I truly do appreciate it and look forward to reading you comments as the story unfolds.
Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]Date: September 16 2015 03:53 am
I really hate Diya's father he's an manipulative asshole. She will never be happy if she doesn't shut her daddy down. Growe a back bone Diya!!
Author's Response:
"Growing a backbone" comes with it's own special set of risks. More on that later. Thanks Pmgayles!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: September 16 2015 02:18 am
This whole skating around Daddy Dearest is getting kinda old. Either she asks like an adult or she loses a great man because right now she doesn't deserve B. Great story can't wait for the next installment!
Author's Response:
Well, the risk of losing a great man is precisely why Diya's skating the issue of who she's involved with. She could "act like an adult" and tell her father about Brandon, but she runs the risk of losing Brandon to her father's scheming, or so she thinks. Soon enough, we'll see if she's right. Thanks for commenting, LovenFaith!
Reviewer: LovenFaith Signed [Report This]Date: September 16 2015 01:34 am
Daddy is a trip!!! a psychic! I done heard it all. Thanks for the update JJ
Author's Response:
YW. Thanks for reading and reviewing, jacqua43!
Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed [Report This]Date: September 15 2015 10:21 pm
Curious as to what Brandon wants to talk about?
Author's Response:
Your curiosity will be satisfied next chapter...and then some. Thanks Musicluva!
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]Date: September 15 2015 08:05 pm
Brandon has an n in the middle of his name and two vowels, also. This chapter was pretty funny and well done and I was expecting Whoopi to jump in and call the carnival actor a nut and daddy a sucker. I think the 'issues' that will cause problems will be the sister-in-law and her kids.
This was pretty good and I think she needs to tell Brandon about some of the shenangians her dad has pulled--she is not embarrass by Branny (wish she would stop calling him that), but afraid of what her Dad will put him through.
Author's Response:
The verdict is still out on the psychic's predictions. And you're exactly right: Diya's not at all embarassed of Brandon, but afraid of the lengths her father will go through to break them up. Explaining that to Brandon is probably a good idea, but won't be easy for her. As far "Branny," you might want to X this story off your reading list if the nickname is a real impediment, because no matteer how infrequently it maybe used as the relationship eases out of the honeymoon phase, "Branny" is here to stay. It may not be sexy, but it's so Diya.
Thanks Penelope!
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: September 15 2015 07:35 pm
LOL! Diya is hilarious! Wow, I can tell that her issues with the 'fam' are no joke! Given how intense Brandon seems to be, I think he can handle it (not saying it'll be easy), but as long as they're honest with each other and firm in what they want, I think they should be able to pull through.
Thanks for the update!
Author's Response:
My pleasure : )
Brandon does possess a considerable about of grit. However, he has NEVER come across the likes of William "Daughter Defender" "By Any Means Necessary" De la Roy. More on that in upcoming chapters. Thanks Musicluva!
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]Date: September 15 2015 07:01 pm
Her father is an idiot. And gullible. This had me cackling.
But on the serious tip, maybe it's not time for Branny to meet the parental units. They might need to be more stable before the onslaught of that crew. Especially Daddy Dearest. Would she give up Branny? I'm thinking yes at this juncture.
Author's Response:
William is certifiable.
I'm cosigning your suggestion that Diya wait before unleashing the De la Roy beast. Unfortunately for her, Brandon's not trying to hear it. Her giving him up is a definite possibility. The question is, would it be for his benefit or hers?
Thanks BellaChica!
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]Date: September 15 2015 06:27 pm
I am havng a problem leaving a comment on my laptop, so I'm trying it at work. The last chapter I read Diya had made Brandon one of her girlfriends, so daddy could still have the delusion that his baby girl was pure as the driven snow...WOW .. I know dad knows that ship has sailed. Brandon is so cool. The mystery and aloofness is so intriguing. I just want to know who he really is. How long is two months in writer's time? I have a feeling that once he hits it, Diya's mind is gonna be gone. Tell her to leave some notes in the car and around her house with her name and address and other important facts about her life to help her get her memory back after he gives her mind blowing sex. I say this because it seems he has no inhibitions. I mean... the dude just looked over shoulder and continuesd to pleasure himself... and the fact he caught her watching made it even better for him....Oh my god. You know in real life,a woman who is sexually active would not have let that opportunity slip by.
Author's Response:
I would and my BFF of several years back did--resist the temptation, that is. She was VERY sexually active, but decided to abstain when she started dating this one particular guy (who is now her husband) for basically the same reasons as Diya. I get that it's not what some, or even most, women in the same situation would do. However, it's certainly not impossible nor, IMO, unrealistic. You do what you have to for what's important. For Diya, her relationship with Brandon is extremely important, and remaining celibate is what she's decided she has to do to preserve it, not to mention the personal strides she's made in the last year.
As for Diya's need to protect the high opinion her father has of her, and lying to do it, it is what it is. It's not my MO, then again, I don't operate within the same family dynamic as she does. Nor do I face the same challenges as she'll face when her father catches wind of who Brianna really is. More on both of those underlying issues, Brandon's lack of inhibition, and Diya's response coming up in future chapters.
Thanks for commenting, VeMo.
Reviewer: VeMo Anonymous [Report This]Date: September 04 2015 01:45 pm