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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 335]
Summary:

 

You have had life mapped out at a young age. Get into a performance arts college. Own your own dance studio and stay away from boys.... But what happens when you meet the love of your life?  Then come to find out he has a girlfriend? But, he has eyes for only you...

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Friendship, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 30
Completed:No
Word count: 181242
Read Count: 80216
Published: April 05 2011
Updated: December 24 2017


Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 You're Loosing It J

A bit confused with this timeline...all of interactions Justine and Jelena are having with each other are occuring in the same day? If so this is one long first day of school for Jalena...eventful too.



Author's Response:

Yes, it's still the same day I went back and put in the author notes where we are in the story and I will continue to do that for each chapter putting a lil recap of whats going on hope that helps... And yes its the longest school day ever and yes it is very eventful for Jalena and Justin too.. ;)

 

Reviewer: XxSKYxLARKxX Signed
Date: May 10 2011

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 359]
Summary:

  

 

Lila James knows that her friendship with seventeen year old Chase Almeida is extremely inappropriate, but she still isn't prepared when his older brother Jack decides to tell her just how inappropriate it actually is-- inadvertently igniting a fire that had been burning quietly inside of them for years.

*****Lila's Thunder has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:Yes
Word count: 670
Read Count: 65030
Published: October 07 2011
Updated: September 09 2014


Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Okay...I'm truly disgusted with Lila. From the get go I did not like this character at all. I feel like she's the block that prevents these brothers from really sitting down and confronting their feelings surrounding their parent’s death and really mending their fractured relationship. Family matters and Lila is heartless and selfish if she continues to pit these brothers against each other. 

Oh she may not have done it intentionally but make no mistake she pitted them against each other, especially Chase against Jack. The constant tension and arguments between her and Jack concerning how Chase should be taken care off would have made the brothers disagree even more (and I'm pretty sure kids can pick up signs when adults are in conflicts with each other). In the beginning sure she may have felt she needed to comfort Chase and she did, inappropriately too, but completely opening her home (giving him a key...I'm pretty sure there's something wrong with that ethically since she's his teacher) so that Chase could have ran to her alone and away from his brother. She became is solace, a refuge to Chase and so he started developing inappropriate feelings for her which she knew was occurring. By allowing Chase a "place" to shut out his brother he could have avoided any means for Jack to have an input in his life, when Jack really wanted to have a relationship with his brother. Jack is made out to be the villain, trying to take away/destroy Chase's solace by preventing him from staying by (spending time with) Lila when he just wanted his brother home for dinner...get where I'm coming from? 

She should have sit Chase down and explained to him that what he was feeling for her was not okay, especially if she knew "she was always belonged to Jack" (really? He treated her like a dog!). But noo she ignored it like an astringe sticking its head in the sand. How could she not see disaster written all over this situation! Was she somehow compensating her unresolved issues concerning her sister's death by having Chase dependent on her? If so, she is being unfair to him.

I feel like she used Chase as her trump card against Jack because he treated her so horrible. By having his brother in her corner she had one up against him. In the beginning Chase was young and she felt like he needed someone to be there for him constantly, he was hurting and struggling to cope with his parents death. To her Jack was not filling that comforting, supportive system to Chase. But Lila needs to excuse the hell out of Jack if he wasn't what she wanted him to be for Chase at that exact moment. He had just lost his parents just like Chase and was hurting too. He needed to heal too, so obviously his coping with Chase and himself at the same time would not have been the best. Oh and Jack buddy you did not help matters by being so damn aggressive and mean to Lila, grow a pair buddy. The only one is see faultless in this is Chase, Lila and Jack were adults...they should have handled it better.

How did Lila help the situation really? How did she open the lines of communication between these brothers? How could she think it would be okay to screw one brother who loves her and ignore the other brother who loves her too? Really Lila?

She completely replaced Jack in Chase's affection and became everything to him, and then completely ignores him instead or of sorting it out like an adult. And then she goes and acts like a jealous woman when she sees Chase with another woman because he's a 'man' now. Well if that isn’t mixed signals I don’t know what is...smh. What she needs to do is figure out what she wants instead of trifling with these men emotions! Stay away from them and let them resolve their issues and heal their family before you damage it further Lila.

You are by far one of the more talented writer's I've read on this forum, you can tell by how much you have me invested in these characters. Continue the good work.

Reviewer: XxSKYxLARKxX Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: March 18 2012

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