Mozzerella sticks in London? Where?  I lived there for 4 years and never remember seeing Mozzerella sticks, none of my friends even knew what it was.  It was when I came home to Harlem I'd eat it...huh, times have changed.

I just want to say that I love the girl you chose as the fae.  From the moment I saw her face I screamed CUTENESS!!!  I just think she's adorable beyond belief and I can totally picture her a fae.   And she's hooking up with an Ancient.   Dominic Hunter II is like super older than Cameron Duboise making him super strong and super powerful.  Wow.   This story is cool just on visual stuff.

Another point.  I haven't even started reading the story but I will say this....I am already a shipper for Cameron Duboise and Jennifer Von Claude.  Can I say super power couple?!   Wow.  I would have preferred playing Ryan Gosling's love interest in Drive.   Whatever....I will begin the story now.  Your cast is perfectly chosen and long live Camifer----Ooh that sounds horrid together.  Cameron/Jennifer.

I won't rate this chapter but will do the next.

I love that you love this challenge because it can be seen in your writing. I myself was going to write an amputee story but I've been engrossed in reading them here and elsewhere.  This is a great story.  Penelope seems like a shy sweetheart and I already adore her.  You got to love the girls who just don't even see their own sex appeal.  Brady is super hot and he's in swat.  Win.  I do get the feeling though that Brady will not be making the first move.  Three chance meetings is always the key and I think Penelope is gonna take the helm on this one and make a move.  Great chapter and I'm excited to read the following chapter.

On a side note I don't know any law which states Nikki is for girls and Nicky is for boys.  I've seen both spellings and for either boy or girl.   I think people are making gender claims that are unnecessary and silly.   I'm if we take the name Samantha and Samuel---that sammie or sammy is not gender specific.   I prefer the spellings as is.  I do agree with some of the other reviewers who found the first chapter too short.  However I do disagree that the other boys in high school are assholes.  They're horny, teenage boys.  That's what they do.  Nothing surprising or horrifying here.  However my initial review stands...I'm hoping against hope that Sam is smart and can read people.

Oh I wanted to clarify my statement.  I said, "more often than not voluptuous" that was in regards to models.  They are not average in way shape or form and if he is to get a Black girl, real or otherwise the normal Black woman is voluptuous.  Which is why I mentioned Toccara.  The most infamous Black full-figured model who's definitely all woman and all Black.  She's hard core and I idolize her.   She's basically you're every day Black woman.  I don't see her as a gorgeous woman but she's as beautiful as any other Black girl I've seen on the street.  The thing is though that is she has a personality that shines through and a body to match that makes her breathtaking. 

Anyway I have yet to read a story with a BBW model that would be fun to watch a model like Toccara she doesn't take shit although she's uber sweet.  I don't think she will be kind to Adam and I wonder what they will do to talk her into agreeing to this.  If it is Toccara---cause that girl has principles.

Anyway it's a great chapter and you're a great writer.  I just wanted to clarify my initial statement because it was written incorrectly and without proper punctuation.

A response to "apathetic_smileyface" and "ladake79" ---maybe I should clarify my point.  A normal woman - average is actually a size 12/14 and up,  Black or otherwise.   Majority of women are not a size 5 or 00 (like my cousin).  Hence the point of the statement.  Which as not only made by me but I felt needed to be pointed out.   I think if he's to be given a 'real' woman or in this case Black woman; she would have be in the 12 and up sizes if you get my meaning.   The fashion plates and we're talking the usual suspect models are size 2's or 0's but it's not often you see a supermodel who's in the 12 or 14 or even 16/18.     I believe Toccara is a 14 or 16 herself.    I will send a personal message to these two posters since both seemed to mention confusion as to the statements made by me and other posters.

I hope Brent lives.  I was a bit surprised that Brent has Colin's number but Colin doesn't know Brent. Anyway, it would be great if they were friends and it seemed to me that Colin knew enough to suspect Carmen's subterfuge with the "twin" comment.    I'm sure Colin knows that Carmen is selfish enough that he sincerely doubts that she cares enough about said sister to be hurt by anything by her.  I hope both Colin and Brent get girls.  Colin should hook up with a Police Officer lady.  Brent maybe hooks up with Josef Manteri's wifes cousin. I am totally randomly throwing that out there since these guys sound gorgeous.   I can't wait until you bring in Josef Manteri...I saw the pick of his wife...she's gonna go Beyonce in Obsessed on Carmen.  Not to mention that I think Josef's wife probably keeps him plenty happy.   This is gonna be brilliant.   I think Roman lost his chance...Richard seems the most untainted by Carmen and the only guy that has NEVER in any way touched Carmen (shocker).   I think Roman needs a girl too, but accept that Nichole has moved on. Having sex with Carmen will always be a black mark against him for Nichole.   But he needs a nice girl to keep him happy.   And someone who can stand up to Carmen.    

By the way...I had the strangest thought that Carmen killed Lillian.  I don't know why that keeps crossing my mind. I think it's the amount of hate that Carmen exudes regularly and how she is willing to have Nichole killed...I figured she probably had other people killed if she didn't do it herself.  Keep it coming, great read.

I hope there is a scene where Keisha shaves her head and actually embraces being bald.   I think her head is absolutely cute without a wig so she has no need to want to wear one.  I understand the insecurity but I'd hope that Benjamin would help her accept that part of her.  instead of having the patches she can just keep it clean shaven.   Additionally I can see her jazzing that up with some fierce eye make up and loud earings.  This was from when America's Next Top Model was good: 

Hope that might inspire Sasha and can I push for some more one on one time with Benjamin or at least bring in Bennie's best friend into their world.  Not all Black girls are about penis and I am sorry 8 inches is plentiful if not a bit much.  Is that flacid or erect?

I really like the chapter.  I was wondering where Teagun would fall to be honest.  She is someone who is vapid and I realize a friend of Sasha's but I was unsure if she would be supportive of the relationship between Dmitri and Sasha or not.   At this moment I can't be positive but she is a good friend so far.  Things can change especially if things get a bit more complicated between Sasha and Dmitri.   I actually hope that Sasha does end up in a uncommitted relationship with Dmitri.   I hope all those things happen where he is reluctant to go out with her or say endearing things but his actions say otherwise.  Secretly I was hoping that Teagun would flip out so that Sasha would end up staying with Dmitri.  I realize a bit cliched but I really want to see more of Dina and I could see her crashing at Dina's for a bit until she was convinced to move in with Dmitri.   But that's the instant gratification of a netizen.   

I can't wait for more Slade, I hope that means more Dina too.

I have to wonder about the massive support for Sasha.  Sasha was out of line from the beginning.   If you love yoru man you support your man.  But lying to his sister to get her to a location that would end up heated.  Acting like your high and mighty with the "he would never let you hurt me."  Or the "I'm what's best for him." Just will not fly.  You might have your own opinions about his sister but it's not your place to try to control it.  I thought most people here would see that.

Then having the sister get hurt because of your lying and manipulation is a problem.  Had Sasha not interfered none of this would have happened and I am sure Dmitri would want her around.  However, he does have a sick sister and Sasha created the environment in which she was hurt.   Sasha definitely has to get in her own skin but she has major faults.  

I don't care about her upbringing what Sasha did was WRONG.  There is no right to what she did and it went to hell.  I also understand why Dmitri lashed out.  He got the whole picture.  He had told her not to interfere, and she does.  He knows his sister is sick already and Sasha created the environment that could really hurt his sister.  What if she had a concussion and went into a coma or died?!  Would people still be as supportive of Sasha?  This situation was created by her misplaced sense of importance in Dmitri's life.  

I am not saying that Dmitri doesn't find her important.  It's obvious that he does considering he wanted to listen to her reasoning before he went on her about his sister and he protected her from his father.   But Dmitri doesn't want a pep talk.  He needs to solve a problem and what he wanted was support not what you think is best.   I also thought Dmitri's actions were normal in the hospital.  I don't think he has aything to apologize for because I would be the same.  Especially when I told you to back off and you create the perfect recipe of disaster to await my family member.  I would be livid.  

Anyway I am commenting because I see more support of Sasha than there was seeing all the bad she did.  Dmitri is definitely not a bad guy here.

I have absolutely no dislike and actually liked him before.  Personally for me it's a bit unusual that he was so quick to change.   He was adamant and most people are not willing to just flip because of sound reasoning of a friend.  This is to fast, too soon.  There has to have been a reason why he was like that.  I was waiting for that to come out a few chapters later while he slowly wormed himself into her life.  

Actually I'm surprised people dislike him.  He was up front with her.  He was honest, and maybe if she was a tad bit more introspective she might wonder if he had some issues himself.  The thing with Sasha, even though I like her, is that she is self-pitying.  It's a flaw but we all have flaws...if people don't like him so what really because he's not a hero.  He's a reflection of a man with no ties or tries not to have any. 

As a piece of advice and I am not criticizing you...many fans will be out to help destroy a story because they don't like anything.  While others would prefer to help you grow a story from your base onwards.  I felt the original direction was built for a really lengthy and well rounded story and this chapter derailed a lot of what you intended.  Thanks for including the Dina aspect that I had thought but that is something you could have added anywhere down the line or not at all since it is your story.  

Dmitri appears a bit superficial to me because he's so quick to change, as though he's using this tactic to get into her pants.  While the original route would have made Sasha wary but it would lead to some deeper self-discovery later on.

I adore Dina.  I realize that you have not introduced Sasha's friends much but to be honest I found them to be as vapid as Dmitri, but also self-absorbed.  I even wondered how they were friends with Sasha or vice versa, considering Sasha's personality--which is super sweet, considerate, and insecure.  Additionally Jaelynn turned me off immediately and Faye has turned me off now.  I had thought Teagun was a bit more down to earth based on the first chapter, but I also found her slightly irritating and whiny by this chapter but it began in chapter 2.   However, Dina seems sweet so far.   She's only had a tiny intro---but she's sassy but seems down to earth with her shooting down Slade's pick up line.  I have high hopes for Slade and Dina.   Actually at the end of this chapter, I was actually hoping it was Dina who would be driving Sasha home to build that friendship a bit.     I look forward to reading more.   By the way is Dmitri biracial with East Asian.  I only ask because Dina mentions that she noticed Dmitri shared in that trait with Slade.   It could explain they're relationship too.

Yes, and I think you need to bring in a boy.  I have no clue what boy.  White or Black...or Hispanic...but Nadia needs a distraction.  I say a camping trip is in order.  Get the whole family together, I would bring in my other power couple.  Although I am not shipping Dominic and Teagan (but get the feeling they might be paired).  Dominic can do better.  Ever since the crack mother statement by Teagan I've been critical and probably always will be.  I say though have Teagan along for the ride in order to get the girl outside and dealing with reality.  Nothing refreshes the mind than 1) cohabitation, 2) forced to eat because of over exertion.   Nadia starts walking and eating she'll forget about the condition.  Seriously.  Plus she needs her own guy to distract her.  Someone unexpected.  

Dina must have a hot brother or friend or something to come on the trip.   I'm saying this too because I just love group activities. 

I love the love making scene. Wow, talk about hot.