The story of Laila Boswell and Mark Crayton.
Interesting start ! Can't wait for the next update !
Updated! I hope you like it
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I really like how you structured your story. It perfectly depicts one of the multiple evolutions of a relationship. From butterflies and excitement to detachment and loneliness in the presence of the loved one. Great job !
Thank you soooooo much!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed J & J's encounter will be really interesting. I hope to see two very spirited minds speaking. I already love Jaz's big mouth !! Update soon please !
Reviewer: Peanut Signed I never said I was the good guy. I'm nobody's hero.
Their story is developing faster than expected. But it's not bad because I think knowing someone is a never ending discovery, not matter how long we have known that person. And we can really feel their attraction. Morgan seems to be possessive and obsessive, I like that. I love how he sometimes dives himself into his own world. He isn't like the other guys. I think that Alicia will balance him perfectly. Their relationship will be a roller-coaster I can't wait to read ! Great update !
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“We understand how dangerous a mask can be. We all become what we pretend to be.”
Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind
Yeah, it definitely makes me want to read more !
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Benjamin Cunningham III decided to finally open the box that his adopted parents had given him which would reveal his past. Little did he know that its contents would change his life forever.
How awful ! Poor Ophelia, she was happy only for a short moment. I cried and cried for her and sympasized with Raymond. Am I the only one to notice how Bennie is not particularly touched by Ophemia's death ? He seems affected as a mere relative, and not as a son who lost his biological mother. How sad...
Bennie is holding it in. With Raymond falling apart and his mother sick, he's trying to be the strong one. However everyone has their breaking point even Bennie. More is coming!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed This chapter was so touching that it left me crying all over my computer (poor keyboard !). Now that Raymond got his sanity back, Bennie is losing his. I hope he'll realize that they need each other. Thanx for sharing!
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No matter what happens, there's no crying in baseball. On the field that is. Skylar Rose Lansing tries her best not too anyway.
I really like this beginning, I just hope that Skylar is not a weakling whose going to forgive her so called best friend. I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Excellent chapter ! But I can't keep the feeling of being suffocated by all those coworkers, between the hoes, the jocks, the adulterers and the obsessed security guard... they are too many and uselessly complicated. I hope Brian is the old character to be reintroduced, and not Brianna, it'll be too much to handle ! Is Brenden implying that Eric is screwing around ? Anyway, if he is, she'll always have option B (Brian) and option P (Phoenix). It'll be so exciting to see them interacting more often, that is, if he is bond to play a major role in Sky's life! I can't wait to read more !Thanx for sharing !
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Quitting love is never easy; no matter the situation. That saying seems to follow Jake Ryder in the once vibrant form of Sierra Lewis. The cycle doesn't seem to stop, or maybe he just doesn't want it to.
Wow, I totally like this Maksim, Viktor is too greedy to realize that he runs nothing but his personal court, not even himself! If Viktor thinks that Kazimar doesn't let his offspring slip away easily, I suspect that Maksim is in New York for a purpose and that he never really quit the family business....mhm, I definitely like Maksim the butcher! I hope Sierra will be safe and doesn't go after Jake yet, but live for herself a little bit, she deserves to rest. And in the meantime, Jake will miss her....mwahahahaaa!! (creepy laugh!). Great job!
LOL at that creepy laugh, and yay! I'm happy that your liking Maksim. You're right about Viktor he is greedy and also very short sightened. Thanks for reading and reviewing Peanut! :)
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Oh, I'm sad in advance knowing there are only 2 chapters left....When it's good you want it to last, but the journey's fantastic so...
Am I in the twilight zone or what?! Why is everybody judging Jake for not using protection during sex? Am I the only one who read the contrary?! Let's quote the previous chapter: " Jake reached for the condom in the nightstand table. She snatch it out of his hand tearing it open with her teeth. She rolled the latex over his cock." And "He groaned releasing himself into the condom before falling, spent on top of her and rolling away." He did, so there's no big deal...
Finch, Finch, Finch...You traitor! How could this so called friend do that?! Indeed, objectively, Jake was wrong cheating on his girlfriend and contemplating not to tell her to make things easier. BUT, a real good friend, whether he has the hots for his friend's girl or not, should have advised him otherwise or given him time to do the right things with an ultimatum. Here, Finch acted like a simple douch, clouded by his desire for Monica. He was wrong and just deserves the loss of their friendship (I hope he'll come to realize later because now he isn't apologetic at all!) and Monica's cold shoulder (let's just hope...). To sum up, let's just hope that he'll realize that his betrayal cost him everything, ah ah ah (hyena laugh).I'm not worried about Monica, she saw it coming, tried to last, but lost. Like Jake said, he has never really been into that relationship to the point that he hesitate to call it a relationship! She has been treated like crap, but she'll be fine.
Maksim must stop Sienna before she does something stupid. She knows that Viktor hurt Neema to get to Maksim, she just had to trust him for the revenge, she's not strong enough!! The idea of her and Neema moving is not bad at all. They need fresh air. I can't wait toread about Viktor's downfall, yac! yac !yac! (hyena's chuckle).
Great job!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Yes! Yes! Yes! My heart literally thumped when I saw the update!!! I missed your story sooooo much! But its quality quenched my thirst..
But I must confess that I'm really torn now. I reasonably thought that Sierra needed to collect herself by herself to overcome her drug addiction. That's logical since Jake is so important in her life that a mere word or facial expression from him(I know, I'm exaggerating...but hey, it's on point!) which upset her, could have the "power" to make her relapse. Or at least be the triggering factor. But now, seeing that she just wanted to end her life to make it better for her family/firends....I can't help but think that she on the contrary needs his support....
Even if Jake is indeed cheating on Monica with Sierra, this last scene was so sweet, he loves her so much. I think he doesn't even realize the depth of his love for her. Since he always shrugs off Finch/Monica's accusations and get all definsive. Now, he owe her excuses. I'm eager to see her reaction..I mean, if he ever plan to tell her...
I can't wait to see Maksim in action. I don't know how to picture him but think of Christian Bale (in Out of the Furnace or Batman). Wiil you post a photo of him! I have yet to know his connection with Sierra's family....But, Viktor is in deep sh..t now! eh..eh..eh..I hope he'll make justice for Neema. Her being in hospital is heartbreaking, Sierra must stay at her side and not to something stupid.
Thanx so much for sharing, I can't wait to read what happens next!
Thanks so much for reading! I swear I'm smiling so hard reading your review. Sometimes reviews reveal things that the author doesn't even see. Don't worry, Maksim's connection with Sierra's fam will be revealed soon.
As far as who I see as Maksim, I was kinda leaning toward Nikolaj Coster-Waldau, but you can choose whatever face you want as the character.
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Hello there
I agree with many reviewers, it's damn good that your characters are raw like that, no place for hypocrisy. Jake was courageous by confronting the woman he loves and pointing out her cowardice. But unlike many, I like Sierra, because even if she abuses drugs, I think it's a state of turmoil where you fight against yourself, but end up choosing the easiest way, that is the drug. I like her because if Jake loves her, it means she is worth our interest, and makes me want to know more about their past, to see her fight against her addiction (if she is bond to). Like we see him rushing to beat Viktor, Jake will never abandon her, even if we hurt, it takes a very hard blow to abaandon our loved ones. So I understand his weakness towards her. This moment melted my already too soft heart ! Your cast is perfect, Cilian Murphy is too sexy for his own good, how can I hate such a Viktor (for now...) ! Thanx so much for sharing and update soon please !
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Peanut. Everything you said is spot on with how Jake feels for Sierra. It's tough to just give up on a loved one and he'll be battling with himself about what to do when it comes to her/their situation. When the character of Viktor popped into my mind I automatically thought of Cillian, lol. His face is amazing!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Oh no!! I wonder what Viktor will do to Neema, he's always up to no good!! Though, I wonder about Maksim's past, what does it have to do with Sierra's parents and Neema?! Monica is in big big trouble, she should have learned not to appraoch Sierra. Jake's reaction is so sweet...I just love Finch's advise for a threesome!! He's so into Monica, nobody noticed it. It's been a while, I hope everything's fine. Thanx for sharing this extra good story!!!
Thank you for reading it Peanut! Everything is fine and the next chapter is coming soon! Maksim's past will be touched on soon enough.
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Yeah!! You updated!!!My guts tell me Jake called Sierra's name in his sleep but Monica refuses to admit it, you desperate girl! Just like Viktor, she is in denial of the reality, she's just a pause in Jake's life (him, move on?! Don't make me laugh!).
I don't specifically like her, but the other girl doesn't necessarily need to be hateful. I think you managed that part by giving us her inner thoughts, her feelings for Jake are real. You know I love your story through & through (righ?), but please, resist the call of cliché by not making Monica the obvious jealous desperately conniving villain who will tell on Sierra to Viktor to get rid of her.... (hopeful intake of breath!).
Considering the Sierra/Viktor background case, I confess to find her innocent in this mess. But, in the meantime, she let herself sink in her sorrow. She was so caught up in her self drug pity that she's now in denial about how much she hurt Jake and lead him on. I think that for her full recovery, she needs to face the reality of her past as a junkie, and that means listening to what she drove her entourage through, meaning a closure of this period by discussing with Jake.
I love how Deena is a true friend for her and genuinely wants to help Sierra. Call me ungrateful, but I can't stand friends who push you too hard to do something they think is good for you (even if they're right) when you to told them you don't want to or want to take it slow. Sierra is still fragile, pushing her might have a counter effect, she needs to find her own rythm...
Ahhh.......in two words, great job as usual, can't wait to read more!
Peanut! [gasp] I wasn't even thinking about going that route with Monica/Viktor. I dislike stories that go that route. And Monica is most definitely not that vindictive. And I've had associates who pushed and pushed me and it wound up becoming a mess in the long run even if they did have good intentions.
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It was a great story. Even if in my opinion Jake forgave Finch too easily... I can't wait to read Maksim's story, I hope it will contain the continuation of Jake/Sierra 's journey, I can't get enough of them !! Great job !!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed When Sandra Taliaferro is left dead from a street rivalry, she leaves behind her teenage daughter Aubrey, and a box of secrets leading her to figure out a missing part to her life story.
Oh my dear, if you can't stop your brain, just let it run, I'll be more than pleased to avidly read the result ! (creepy selfish smile lol). More seriously, I love how their encounter occured, so unconventionaly interesting ! Aubrey and Natalia are so feisty, hot blooded women is sure a family's character ! Her tears called mine... Definitely eager to read more, so don't stop the epicurean in you and let your brain run wild... just saying...
Reviewer: Peanut Signed AJ is your your average teenager living in this day and age. Little bit of drugs, some drinking, and a whole lot of sex. But waking up one Saturday to someone making a ruckus outside your apartment door, you don't expect to open it and find the one you regret staring back at you. Along with a carseat containing a baby she claims is yours.
This is just too sad. His mother is the devil itself, I only hope she died horribly and suffered a lot. Now Gianna is in good hands. I wonder what ewactly happened to his brother. Great job !
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10 years went by in the blink of an eye. Now eveyone was gathered in a tiny town for there highschool reunion. Sparks will fly as old 'friends' meet again.
Then enters two guys who have come with the intention of wooing the one girl they shouldnt have let go of in the first place. The only problem is there after the same girl.
On this unlevel playing field where hurt, love and jealousy run wild everyone is playing for keeps
And BANG ! Take it up in the ass!! Sorry, it's too good to not to be expressed ! I really love how she seems to be casual about money, how she made them understand that these little rednecks are of no importance, insignificant. This moment was a pure delight ! Mark's parents are now on their knees, and the town will realize they're just jealous and bitter if they dare badmouth her. They thought they were the epitome of sophistication... how laughable! They ruled a small town, well, she just rules the world. I really really really just hope that she's really strong and won't let Mark weaken her by making her feel guilty about her change, ranting about how she used to be sweet, down to earth, caring... blabla... She suffered too much, everybody stomped on her without a second thought or mercy. Well, like we say nowadays : kill them all ! (Spartacus forever !). Though, it's a pity she doesn't have a child of her own, from the man who made her happy for the first time in her life. Great job girl, you rock my avid reader world !
Love Spartacus, rewatching the entire thing. wanted to give her a child of her own but the time line wouldnt fit. Her daughter is a gem though and she will play a major role.
Mark is going to try some petty crap but it wont work. Mel knows who she is.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Peanut Signed An innocent night of fun ruins the lives of two people who realize they are screwed without each other but especially with each other.
"My body is your party"
Michael, this cocky brat with his dougie ! I just love him ! TJ is really interested in Ariana, he's going to drive Tobias through hell... well, I love love triangles ! How come Tobias isn't suprised that she's a virgin? Though they just recently met, I'm really pleased to see that they address each other with such familiarity. Your cast is perfect, both T & TJ are sexy, I wouldn't know what to do surrounded by so much sexiness, there's no saying Ariana is way more strong than my poor weak self ! lol. Thanx for sharing !
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Chester's been having an affair with his student Lina for a year and to top that his wife is one of Lina teachers...what happens when a unplanned pregnancy pops up will chester leave his wife for Lina?
I love the theme of your story, but I think it needs to be more deepened. You can give us more insight of Lina's inner thoughts, this way she'll appear less bratty and superficial to the reader. If we can read more about the character's deeper thoughts, it'll become easier to figure out their nature and give us a valid reason to like, get attached, despise, hate, find them touching... And I think your story needs to have longer chapters and more descriptive parts. This story came from your creativity, so you know the settings... But as a reader, we need details, even the insignificant ones, to imagine every scene, like how the place they're currently in looks like, how they move in the space, the expression on their faces, their outfit if that's important in the action, the weather, their reactions... there are so many to say, and it can be done in few words if you are not into description. I think that this story needs narrative parts, clearly separated from the dialogue parts to avoid any confusion. So yes, I love the theme of your story, I refuse to judge your characters based on this short chapters, but it's hard for me to have an opinion at this moment. I'm not judging you, but just impartially giving you my opinion as a mere reader. I really want to read more, so thanx for sharing.
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Danny Desai & Lacey Porter's missing scene from "Twisted"
Ep. 1x05 "The Fest & the Furious". Dacey
Excellent chapter ! Please, go on. You captured their nature so well. During Scandal's absence, this is my favorite show ! Hopefuly, since she deserves it, Lacey will be more present in your story than in the show... Nice job !
Hi! I'd love to be inspired to write more. I just have to warn about having a pet peeve when writing fanfic that I've discovered: I don't like to write non-canon if the pairing I like is actively coupled. Maybe that's weird, but it's the #1 reason I enjoy delving into "missing scenes". BTW I'm so happy you enjoyed my portrayal of Danny & Lacey's characters, that's what I most worry about, that I don't know the characters well enough to write for them. I re-watched all the episodes & some scenes dozens of time hoping to get it right. For dialogue: I am a sucker. BIGTIME. But I'm so new to this i have yet to write for more than two characters in one scene! Hopefully Twisted is my three-character breakout fic.
Reviewer: Peanut Signed I am currently NOT working on this story and don't know when I will be again. Writing this takes a toll on me and I have kinda been posting other things here. Give them a looksie. :]
Kensington's battered body ached from abuse, each blow recieved slowly tearing her apart. She was drowning in the hell that once used to be her home until a mysterious stranger comes along. Will he be the one restrore Kensington's faith in the world?
Heads up: The beginning (meaning the first few chapters) of this story is a bit DARK. If you are of a faint heart than I fear this story is not going to be appealing to you.
Poor Kenzie, I hope she'll have the strength to fight Camden back. She's right, education is her ticket for freedom and safety. But at this point and at this extent, safety is beyond priority. She could have fled to another city, there's always a shelter for stray children. Poor child. Your story is well written, I can feel the depth of her despair, she can't control what's happening to her and the violence her body is subjected to, but she still has her soul and mind. Great job, I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Can a beauty ever truly love a beast?
Yes, you should definitely go on! In which way is he a monster (description!), is it his physical or his behaviour? Are you going back in time when they met? Does it take place in a remote place that actually exist or did you create an entire society? there's so much to discover, so yes, I must read more. Good Job!
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"Your presence still lingers here and it won't leave me alone
There's just too much that time cannot erase
And I held your hand through all of these years
But you still have all of me
These wounds won't seem to heal this pain is just too real
When you cried, I'd wipe away all of your tears
Who would knew such pain could be held by three simple words could hold such much pain in a simple letter.
Is it on purpose you wrote "you promise me" instead of "you promised me"? It makes me wonder if the man (obviously Michail) is a living creature, ghost or something, stuck in his time and repeating his last words...Great beginning!
No it was intentionally done, your warm on the part of him being stuck in a certain time, but his not a ghost his all flesh and bone.
Reviewer: Peanut Signed Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.