What's a girl to do when there are two after you?
Very good chapter. I like Hayes, he is interesting. I know that his bravado is just a cover.
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Response to the Made to Order challenge!
I feel bad for Alfred. Not liking Selena at all. If she wanted a cover then she should have picked someone that doesn't care about her, Thomas may cause problems. Selena's character to me is getting worse each chapter, not liking her at all but....
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I am enjoying the mystery. I sure hope that whatever Thomas' plan is that it works and allows Alfred some form of humanity without changing who he is of course. I love Alfred. Since you have put my mind at ease about Thomas/Selena sex, I know that Alfred is wrong about the baby thing, I am so curios about what it is. This is turning into a fun mystery. I hope that Thomas can get it done before his death. As far as Anne there are no words but I don't wish death on her.....anyway.
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Author's Response:
Selena and Alfred are committed to each other and Thomas is going to play a big part in both of their lives. Let me just say that Alfred is not all wrong in his estimation of Thomas, but it's not like he thinks. More is coming!
Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed
Oh no. Save Alfred!! Hurry with the next update, I can't wait to read it.
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Thank God it wasn't a threesome. See I knew that Selena wasn't going to fight her attraction for Thomas for Alfred's sake, I knew it, most women can when "committed" to someone else but some do not and cheat. Oh well, I skipped over anything about them 3 but I had to read to try and understand what Thomas' home wrecking behind has planned. So if I am understanding this. Thomas knows that he is dying so he wants to somehow fuse the good parts and the mind/consciousness of Alfred to his body, this way Alfred can use his body and be with Selena as a human? Is that right? Well that is interesting so Alfred will look like Thomas and not Alfred but I love Alfred :(?
Brenda!! What are you doing to me, my feelings are all over the place, definitely the signature of a good writer. Like a train wreck I can't turn away so I am on this ride to the end even if Selena and Thomas get together, just let me know so that I can go and comfort Alfred.
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Author's Response:
Now, now. If Alfred decides to go human, he will of course lose his physcial features and take on those of his host. That's the cost of going human. However, Thomas immediate concern is NOT extending his life, but to free the androids. More is coming!
Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed I don't like Selena at all. I feel so bad for Alfred sometimes I wonder why she created him in the first place if she knew she would want a "real" man in the end. I could be viewing this all wrong probably because I really like Alfred, and hate that he is being used. I wish he could make a choice and date other women, then Selena would know how it feels. Why save him if she wants to be with Thomas? I do not like Thomas and he came across really smug when talking to Alfred. It seems as if he said that Alfred could never really be Selena's number one because Alfred can not give her everything that she needs as a human.
I'm still reading because I find this story interesting and different. I normally am fine with a threesome story but not for this story, all I like right now is Alfred and if Alfred is truly an alpha that could not work long term. I feel like a plane crash is about to happen and I can't stop watching lol
If you decide that Thomas and Selena should have sex, can you put a warning up so that I can skip it. I hope that doesn't happen though but with Selena's character I could see it happening. She could always adapt a child, not all human men can give you a child.
I just love Alfred, I feel so bad for him :(
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Author's Response:
OK, I can see that the readers feel that Alfred is getting a raw deal, but that's not the case. Thomas does NOT want to take Alfred from Selena. Selena is NOT planning to cheat on Alfred with Thomas. There's something else going on and I don't want to give it away. Thomas is attracted to Selena but he's holding back out of respect for Alfred. Selena does think Thomas is cute, but she's committed to Alfred. Women look but that doesn't mean that they cross the line. A woman can admire a man and be attracted tohim but she doesn't have to act on it.
I will give a few clues because it's going to take several chapters for you to understand what's going on. Thomas is driven to this because of his life with his father and Charles. The loss of his father was traumatic for him. His father was a brilliant man who created androids to help people. Thomas wants to follow in his father's footsteps and he wants to help the androids achieve their hearts greatest desire. (Hint hint) and he thinks he's found a way to do it.
Thats all for now. Stay with me and stay turned.
Reviewer: Kaye2008 SignedDenise is a young woman who is on the verge of giving up on love. Never having love in her life she is wondering what is wrong until she meets Issac. Issac has been avoiding relationships for the past few years to support himself but is ashamed of telling someone what he does for a living. Will he tell her his secret? But will she tell him hers?
I hope that they do not have sex right away. Sex isn't everything, he can rebuild her trust by showing her the man that she fell in love with.
I am sure that whatever you decide will be lovely or maybe you have more drama in mind lol I look forward to reading the next chapter.
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I have skipped this story numerous times because I dislike the picture chosen for the female lead but, I am happy that I ignored her pic and read it anyway.
I love Denise. She handled the situation way better than I would have. I would not want to date a prostitute and he did not give her the option to decide for herself.
Denise is a very strong woman and I know that she loves him, so she needs to decide if his excuses for telling so many lies is worth it. None of this would have been a issue if he was honest from the start. Now she will wonder about what else he may have lied about and it can turn into a horrible cycle. He needs to gain her trust back because if I was her all the trust I had for him would be gone.
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Author's Response:
I'm glad that you looked over the picture and decided to read. Both of them have issues and Issac needs to gain her trust back.
Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed
Simone Alexander was not adventurous by nature but she was a go-getter. When an unbelievable opportunity comes her way, she does not hesitate to seize it. Now, she finds herself half way around the world immersed in a culture completely different from her own. Here she faces challenges that push her grow in every aspect of her life; the most unexpected of them all......love.
Great chapters. I love the cast pics. Loving it already.
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Thanks to LadySade for the awesome banner! :)
Landon Baxter was the perfect guy. He had everything any man or woman would kill for. He had his dream job, a beautiful family, the world at his feet. He was loved by any and everyone. His life was perfect, that was until he lost his mother.
Now he has a problem with that little white rock and he can't put down the pipe. Landon lost his way and he can't seem to find his way back to reality.
Would he ever be able to find his way back? or Would he be forever losing his way?
You truly have a gift with words. I could literally see everything that you had written. Your words are so precise and filled with just the right amount of emotion without exaggeration. Truly talented. I have been fortunate to not have to deal with this issue in my personal life but, I look forward to going on this ride with you, Ryan, and Landon.
Please continue and I look forward to reading more.
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Author's Response:
Thank you so much. You just don't know how much you review means to me. I really needed that boost of confidence. Readers like you are the reason why I still write. So thank you so much.
And YES I will be continuing with this story. I will be update as soon as I can. ツ
Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed She's a mess he can't help wanting to fix.
I am really enjoying the characters so far. Brody is great and I can't wait to find out what poor Alexa has been through. I wonder who/what she is running from? I already want to just wrap her in cotton and keep her safe. Perfect cast pic for her as well.
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I am really enjoying the characters so far. Brody is great and I can't wait to find out what poor Alexa has been through. I wonder who/what she is running from? I already want to just wrap her in cotton and keep her safe. Perfect cast pic for her as well.
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Poor Alex. I wonder what has her so scared. Can't wait to see what else happens.
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How far will you go when you're lonely?
Please do whatever you want. I do not mind a long fic but I do feel that nothing has happened since chapter 1..... I haven't reviewed because I haven't had much to say because I do not care about the fate of any of the characters because they are all, especially Jodi, so unlikeable however, you are a GREAT WRITER but I do think that your pacing is off. I have actually skipped and/or skimmed through chapters that just feel like smut without a plot. Just a critique not a bashing so please do whatever is best for you and your muse.
If you want to take the story somewhere else I am sure that some will follow you, if you want to stay...... stay and take the negative reviews with a grain of salt but not everyone is going to like the story and not all dislike is a bashing just a critique.
If you leave I would like to read the finished product and if you stay I would just wait until the story is completed to read the ending.
Best.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review Kaye2008.
I usually take all of the reviews seriously unless they are completely off. I might add that in my quest to develop Jodi I may have made some mistakes.
Many of the decisions that I have made regarding her actions are things that I feel she would definitely do. They may not always make sense and yes, they may be over the top, but so is Jodi.
Again thanks for your review and I will be making just a few changes because I like for the reader to read every word. ;)
Thanks again
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All Camryn Clifford wanted to do was live out her dream. She had made it out of her dead end town but her old life wanted to pull her back in.
Richard Hammonds wanted Camryn and he would have her. He has skeletons in his closet that he needs to keep from her to win her.
Excellent ending to a great story.
:)
Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed Elise is a struggling college student that can barely pay tuition. With a lousy job and is on the verge of getting kicked out of med school she has to find a way to pay. So with no only choice she looks in the personals and looks for a sugar daddy.
Jameson is a successful man that does not have time to date. With the pressure of his family to wed and women using him he just wants to experience a relationship without the drama. So he makes an ad to find a sugar baby.
What happens when both of these two get together?
This is going to be fun. I could see this coming back to bite Jameson in the butt though, he may catch feelings for her before she catches them for him........
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Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed
Neymar Jr was used to getting everything he wanted and he had everything...except Jourdan Morris
I think you had a good concept but something is lacking in the delivery.
Jourdan is not a heroine that I am able to get behind. In order to appreciate her journey I have to like her in her triumphs and her failures. Something in her character is off which is putting me off this story. I like the premise so I keep trying with every update but 13 chapters in and nothing has changed. Jourdan in particular is not growing and the 19 years old crap is becoming tiring. You know right from wrong around 4 years old so the 19 crap is getting old.
Neymar makes me feel like "eh" I don't understand why he likes her so much her personality and actions leave much to be desired. This conflict does seem unneccesary and Jourdan is coming across as a user and someone unable to tell the truth......ever.
IDK these characters are just not likeable. I wish you the best of luck on this story though.
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Lydia Michaels is an excited young new intern heading off to build her resume working for Okada Trading Corp. She's eager to learn all she can from the international business world.
Toshiko Okada and Yaunlong Cheung are best friends that met their freshman year attending UCLA in the States. Now they both work for Toshiko's not so eccentric uncle, Rin Okada in Japan.
Neither young men are prepared for their OTC new intern. while Toshiko believes a woman's place is in the home, Yuan believes Lydia's is in his dungeon.
Two problems exist, one, Lydia is not hearing it... and two, both men are as equally determined to put her in her place.
Amid obsession, lust, conniving, deceitfulness... Could love possibly emerge?
I am loving it. Can't wait to see where this goes. I love a good D/s story.
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Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed
When Caleb, heir of the four and alpha of his pack, attends a party celebrating his twin deltas’ birthday, he doesn't anticipate finding Luna’s greatest gift: his mate, Ava-Rain. Immediately consumed with curiosity and undeniable interest, he manages to make his presence known to her, but their introduction is kept brief. To reject one’s mate is to reject Luna herself, and that is exactly what Caleb intends to do. Not because he wants to but because he has to. But will he be able to stay away in order to ensure both her and his pack’s safety, or will their unbreakable connection lure him back and add even more trouble into the mix?
Great as always. Just got back from vacation, I had a lot to catch back on.
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Thank you so very much, Kaye2008!! So glad you're enjoying Alpha!!
Aww, lucky you! Hope you had an awesome vacation. I'm sure it ended far too soon, as they always do!
Thanks for reading & for taking the time to review! It means a lot to me! :)
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Chance Gyllenborgh seems to have it all. A pregnant, loving girlfriend, a close knit family, and great life.
Angelina Walker is running. She's a top chef and restaurantuer and a workaholic. She throws herself into work to avoid her personal life. Needing a break, she settles down in a town and meet a variety of different people, including Chance.
Things seem great at first glance but Below The Surface is where monsters lie and sociopaths dwell.
Ummm..... is that one of my husband's (Michael Fassbender) pic chosen as Chance. I may need that back lol
Loving the start. I need more.
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ROFL!!
Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed Now see, I have only ever loved me some vanilla....my husband and all of my previous boyfriends can attest to that lol
But........... I don't know Alexandria Glass, I just might have dipped myself in some chocolate if a Harris Luther came along first, your description of him was too delicious.
Chance went all crazy alpha on Angie, which would have been supper hot if he wasn't committed to another woman who is pregnant. Loving this story because I have no idea where it's going. Fantastic!!!!
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Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed I am so intrigued. I can't wait to know more about these characters.
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Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed DAMN!!! I was not ready!!!! That was a very hot sex scene!! Chance is a beast in the bedroom.
I don't think Angelina cheated.... Harris and Angie are not bf/gf they are just dating right, but yeah I think Harris is going to flip. What is up with him anyway? He likes perfection and he never asks her for oppinion and he snaps at little things. She needs to run not walk, but run from him because his true self is starting to show and all of it is red flags.
I have no words for Jen but idk I have no words.
Fantastic update!!!! I need more!!!
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Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed Nathaniel Hendricks lived alone in his lakehouse on Lake Michigan spending his days remebering the young son he tracgically lost and the wife who left him when he needed her the most. The only thing that kept him remotely happy was the lake he lived by boating and fishing. He already failed as a father and a husband so why would God give him another chance?
Eden Wilson spent most of her life running from abuse and now as a young adult she finds herself running from an obsessive abusive ex-boyfriend. Not wanting the child she's carrying to be in danger she spends most of her pregancy running until she tries to get in contact with her uncle for help. Eden finds herself with her uncle's friend a lonely handsome man Nathaniel who gives her shelter in a snowstorm.
Little did either of them know how close the baby would bring them together or how much this little bundle of joy would help them learn about secound chances.
Where have I BEEN???!!!
This story is awesome. I read it all in one setting. I can't wait for their Nathaniel and Eden to spend some time alone, they both deserve some happiness. I know the drama isn't over with his ex and her crazy husband still on the stroll..... but I can't wait for them to become even closer.
Baby Sol is too cute.
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Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed Renay is one of the hottest music performer's rght now. With her ex famous-boyfried out of the picture she is newly single. She has a unique opportunity to find love on her own dating show. The catch is she is in a remote location and her family members get to have their own picks of men for Renay to choose from.
Will Renay find real love or real drama?
Great idea. I decided to pick between the answers that the ladies gave below me as maybe a tie breaker of some sort lol
Roman Reigns (This is not his real name but this name is better :))
Chris Hemsworth
Daniel Henney
Adam Rodriguez
Lance Gross
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Reviewer: Kaye2008 SignedDisclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.